Sunday, February 20, 2011

160 - playing with matches

schrachkt!

the match ignites
when put to friction

pinched between your
fingers i am ready
but unlit

strike me again &
i'll burn this house down

what can you say in 160 characters? say it, then go tell Monkey Man.

hmm...is it passion, is it anger...i leave it open and let you decide based on your perspective...

71 comments:

Valerie said...

And it would too, Brian, speaking from painful experience

Just Be Real said...

Ahhh Brian this brought back memories of my girlfriend and I as kids burning part of the woods down near where we lived. Blessings.

joanny said...

Brian

I love this "schrachkt" word, I was trying to image how it would sound ,,, anyway, this 160 was cleverly written. Just love the use of that word....

joanny

Lydia said...

"schrachkt"......but of course that is how the sound is spelled!
I did not view this as anger while reading it the first time, until your question at the end, actually. Now I am not sure!

izzy said...

Oooh yeah remember those big blue kitchen
matches!? I remember someone who used his
long thumb nail, to ignite it-

happygirl said...

If I speak from the place I am right now, I'm going to say "anger." But, I know the house that gets burned down will be my own. This was great. What a well spent 160 characters. Thanks.

natalee said...

just the word "schrachkt" brought back memories of my pops lighting his pipes with long matches...love it!!!

Aishah said...

So meaningful. Grand 160.

Aishah said...

That was me Brian, I'm having trouble managing my multi-personality;)

Ocean Girl said...

I did it again.

annell said...

Very good. You are unbeatable!

Jill said...

It is just. that. easy.
The curiosity is a killer.

JeannetteLS said...

First time here and it won't be the last. One day I will be brave enough to try the 160 words, the 55 words. Not yet. For now I ramble. But, then, there are so many wonderful blogs around of every color and sound. This was my first visit to the unbeatable word "schrachkt." Do you ever look at the scramble words and try to put meaning to them? Never mind.

Wonderful poetry in here.

Cinner said...

Made me shiver, the thought of the house burning down. have a great day Brian smiles.

lori said...

I never saw anger. I saw passion. "Strike me again & I'll burn this house down" - love it!

deb colarossi said...

If I had of read this yesterday, it would have fit my anger.
Today,
passion.

Isn't life a wonder?

moondustwriter said...

ya know what they said about playing with fire - you will get burned ( more ways than one)

Psyched Bri about our trip to NYC for the Shortys - cant wait to meet T and get that award!!!

Moonie

Brian Miller said...

deb i think that is the beauty of writing and poetry...each day it can take a new meaning...if i capped the I AM it would then become spiritual along the lines of "send me"...

Raven said...

Very clever. I like it!

Zuzana said...

Definitely comes across as passion to me.;) And a very fiery passion as well.;)
Hope you are having a lovely Sunday, despite the plummeting temps.;))
xoxo

5thsister said...

Yes, Brian...the subtlety of the many layers makes this a very interesting piece.

Tom said...

temper temper. who likes being backed into a corner?

The Turning Point said...

Great and all from scratch.

Jim

secret agent woman said...

Brian, you often make me think of song lyrics. Here from John Prine: If dreams were thunder and lightning was desire, this old house would have burned down a long time ago."

Ami Mattison said...

You display your strengths in these types of short, tight pieces--your ability to get to the core of a thing. And this piece does just that.

How you managed to use onomatopoeia AND rhyme is amazing!

Really fine writing here!

Lorraine said...

you must not strike that match...

Sue said...

I like it to be passion.

;)

TechnoBabe said...

What a good imagination you have. I would never have looked at a match this way, and I thank you for another eye opener. A new experience.

Eva Gallant said...

Usually I would say Passion, but with this poem, it seems more like anger.

Daniel said...

Or, perhaps, curiosity of an inexperienced mind? Just thinking back to my youth ...

Magpie said...

Nuances...life is all about nuances. My first read through (based on who was doing the writing), saw it as passion. On a second reading, I could see the possibilities.

trisha said...

it was nice of matchstick to give the fair warning.

trisha.

Claudia said...

i'd say it's passion..anger would sound more..."gschrachkt"

nance marie said...

burn the house up
burn the house down
no matter it burns
you're hot

TALON said...

The sun is shining, the winds have calmed so I'm in a "happy place" - I'll take passion :)

Helen said...

After I read the question you posed after your (brilliant) 160, I re-read the poem. I felt passion (the good variety) not anger .. and love the word schrachkt ~ is that a word?

Hilary said...

"schrachkt" That's it exactly!

Goofball said...

anger or passion


it's tense right now for sure

Monkey Man said...

Great Sunday 160, Brian. This one evokes a variety of thoughts and visuals. I love that.

tracy said...

Brian, thanks for stopping by. I don't always have time to comment on your posts but I love them still and read them every day. Gots to get my WaystationOne fix.

Stranger said...

Might it be simple curiosity?
Hm, I'll be thinking about this one.

Thanks for linking me to the 160, Brian. You're the greatest!

Friko said...

just a simple match - and you've made a meaningful poem out of it.
I am learning.

Tara Miller said...

passion....definitely passion. I like this: "pinched between your
fingers i am ready but unlit"

(but please don't burn the house down, love.) ;)

The Empress said...

aaargh..

I go crazy when you go all Alfred Hitchcock on us and leave it to our own interpretation:

I read "backed into a corner." If you make me defend myelf, this is what comes out.

Of course, feeling transference b/c I just quit a PT job 2 wks ago b/c the boss was a yeller...and I wouldn't take it anymore.

Mona said...

its a metaphor of passion & control. In Control , it will be light. out of control it could be anger and therefore damaging.

Maggie May said...

In the wrong hands...... a match has tremendous power.
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Madame DeFarge said...

Bit of menace in the last two lines. rather liked that.

The Retired One said...

Gosh...I must be in a "mood"..I didn't think anger at ALL when I read this through the first time....I was thinking lust or passion. LOL

Arts web show said...

It's a calculated warning, one that in reality a great many of us would pay heed too.
Great statement here Brian

G-Man said...

Of course I still use them...

Teri said...

I agree with Zuzana: it seems very sensual to me. Light my Fire kind of poetry, meaning. Maybe that is just where my mind takes me but I don't see anything literal about the match and burning the house down. To me, they are metaphors for LOVE. Just saying... It looks as if Lori thought the same thing too!

gayle said...

I would say anger!

Possum said...

Hmmm....I'm thinking both passion and anger along the lines of... "barns burnt down now I can see the moon"

Larry, aka The Kid and The Old Goat said...

Brian, I love people using words no one else would think of. That is how language grows, just as a match glows when schrachkt.

Larry

Mama Zen said...

This is really intense!

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tera said...

Very nice! I also like the "schrachkt"...
Snapshot of my day (at work) sort of fits in here. Guy called 911 2x today, saying he was upset because there was some kind of conspiracy and "they" had shut off everything in his apartment (there actually was a power outage we didn't know about yet).
2nd time he called he said if someone didn't stop "them" he was going to burn the place down.
Law enforcement mostly ignored him, did nothing else after he wouldn't answer the door.

2 hours later he set the dumpster next to the building on fire.

Too bad so many people like that go unnoticed, unchecked and untended. Luckily no one was hurt.

Fireblossom said...

Maybe the match is lonely and needs to go to match dot com.

I'm here all week.

Sumit Sarkar said...

very painful...great work in 160 chars... :)

Shadow said...

yip, that's what matches can do...

Brian Miller said...

yikes tera...scary stuff indeed...now he will probably go to lock up instead of get the help he needs....

Gaston Studio said...

Love the schrachkt... could actually hear that match striking. The poem makes me shudder Brian so it must be a good one!

Vicki Lane said...

You are a master of concision (Is that a word? It should be.)

sage said...

I saw anger, but it may be the mood I'm in right now. You're talented, Brian.

Syd said...

It's too hot to touch.

dhitzunako said...

Hi Brian, thanks for leaving a comment on my poem. :) Your 160 is very effective. As for your question, is it anger? Or passion? Well, no matter what it is, in my opinion, your last stanza is like: ready to go out from the comfort zone- to take consequences.

Ténèbres à la lumière... said...

Hi!Brian...
I like your use Of this word too!
schrachkt!
It reminds me Of the red tip Of a match and the light brown stick... meeting the black pad and schrachkt!
Brian, I don't like playing with fire...Because you can get burnt!
Thanks, for sharing your 160 words.
DeeDee ;-D

Paul C said...

You express perfectly the volatility that may reside in someone if crossed or confronted.

mama-face said...

schcrachkt. Best word ever. Can I steal? Borrow?

Boys and matches. *shaking my cuz I'll never understand*

Marla said...

Love this!

Mighty M said...

My first thought was anger.....THEN I saw the passion. After I read your note. :)