Monday, January 10, 2011

peanut butter pie

mama usta make
peanut butter pie
on sundays fo' da
preacher man, come
visit to watch basket-
ball and wrap his
lips roun'at creamy
goodness

later in the pulpit
he be teachin on'a
sweet lure o' sin but
i, all distracted, watchin'
see when he's gonna
lick his lips n' git that
last little bit stuck n'a
corner o' his mouth.

81 comments:

Alan Burnett said...

You really are the best. Mot a word wasted, not an image avoided.

signed...bkm said...

love it Brian, can hear the child talking in this one, waiting for that peanut butter sermon....bkm

5thsister said...

be careful of that sweet lure o' sin, Preacher Man!

Myrna R. said...

Your writing, so vividly, takes me to places I've never been. I've never had peanut butter pie. Sounds heavenly, and who would know more about that than the preacher.

BLOGitse said...

Peanut butter pie...never heard, had, will.
I like butter without peanut as well as pie. :)

Tina said...

Love the voice you gave this narrator. Nicely vivid, too. As usual ;-)

Daniel said...

I kind of read this one on several different levels. Maybe preacher man ain't practicing what he's pushing on us. It was cool how with just a few words from you, my mind was flooded with so many thoughts.

Joanie said...

Now I'm hungry for peanut butter pie!

Great one!

Bev said...

yea, that sweet lure o' sin is sticky, hard to get rid of and it escapes no one...

David Allen Waters said...

sometimes, sin, like pie just can't be resisted... well done my friend

dthaase said...

oh, well done - fabulous poem

Sue said...

So deftly written. Loved it.

=)

Heather said...

excellent. lovin 'da way it's written! hee hee hee.
also, yes, glad you like calling it "the bux" too, that's what my husband calls it too - he says i waste all my money there, sorry i missed your sketch yesterday still getting back into swing of things. i will be around though! xxoo

... Paige said...

nutty bit o' peanut pie

or should that be Naugty bit o'pie

Jill said...

I am with this kid! I could NOT hear a WORD the preacher man would say 'cause I would be WAITIN' for him to lick that pudding pie off!!

EXCELLENT! Best read out loud!

Tom said...

pb pie? yuck

Mama Zen said...

This cracked me up!

Tabor said...

I do not know how you combined the ability to see the detail of the world and its people and that little bit of feeling and then be able to put it into words...but you are wonderful at it! You sad posts are striking in their pain...but I do love your light posts.

Valerie said...

Great, Brian. I'd love a taste of peanut butter right now. Never had it in a pie though.

Barbara said...

That peanut butter pie...sinful for sure.

ladyfi said...

Wonderfully evocative... I can almost taste that creamy goodness!

Eva Gallant said...

Peanut butter pie--an occasion of sin for sure!

Marla said...

This made me smile. Good one, B

drybottomgirl said...

Excellent vernacular, and I LOVE peanut butter anything.....

Christina said...

Very nice... and now I want peanut butter pie.

California Girl said...

yum! and I don't even like peanut butter :)

kkrige said...

haha, you are droll today. Funny one Brian

izzy said...

" sweet lure o'sin' sure fits with the rest ! good one- I love the taste and
lingering creamy sense- good one thanks!

Amy said...

Nice! Now, please excuse me while I go find me some peanut butter pie! YUM!!!

Betsy said...

Oh yeah...I'd be totally distracted myself! haha..this was great!

DJan said...

You are AMAZING! And in no time at all, I'm the 31st commenter, I am not the only one to appreciate your incredible abilities. :-)

Goofball said...

hahahahaha (after I had to read it three times to understand what was there :) )

Betty said...

Nice! :) Loved the voice.

secret agent woman said...

Peanut butter pie? Really?

william said...

very cool mate, loved the narrator part.

Friko said...

Ha, don't we all know somebody who'll 'keep something for later' in the corner of his mouth.

Great little poem.

Zouxzoux said...

Your child's point of view is perfectly communicated here. Love this.

Arts web show said...

Ha ha, i really like the way you accented this
Brilliant

blueviolet said...

That peanut butter will stick!

Grand Pooba said...

Oh this one made me laugh. Laugh and start craving reeses!

Loved it!

PattiKen said...

I don't blame that preacher man one bit. I'm rather fond of peanut butter myself.

Travel & Dive Girl said...

LOVE it! Now, I want peanut butter...

Mom said...

Are you writing about my pie and Barry Webster's visits??? LOL Enjoyed the writing.

Sandi McBride said...

Took me back in time to the first time I ever read Little Orphant Annie and discovered at the age of 9 that I loved poetry of every description. You are a jewel, and that's a fact
Sandi

Lori said...

I love peanut butter...now I'm hungry for peanut butter pie...lol

Deb said...

I shared this one with my husband and we both chuckled. Peanut butter pie is his favorite! I could totally visualize your words !

Teri said...

I have the best recipe for peanut butter pie. If you want it, let me know! Did the preacher have a beard or a mustache? I thought you were going to go someplace else when you spoke of him visiting on Sunday.

ds said...

Brilliant. Preacher man should be careful whose house he goes ta visit...

Hilary said...

I love this!

Vicki Lane said...

Great finish!

Magpie said...

It's amazing how different slang or local accents can paint different pictures in our minds. Can you say the same things in a different voice to see what it does to our mental pictures?

Pastor Sharon said...

Okay, there is a voice that goes with that man. He lived down the road, "a piece", from us when I was growing up!

I can see him reciting for you!

Great work Brian!

emily wierenga said...

ha! so great! i can see it... (hope the mountains rested you brian. if you were able to write a post for me, i'm excited! otherwise, no worries. blessings.)

A Fistful Of Moonbeams™ said...

rhythm to beat...

Captain Dumbass said...

Mmm, peanut buttah

Zuzana said...

Peanut butter pie, now that makes my mouth water.;)
As always, you manage to me me feel and see, just with words.;)
Have a great day Brian,
xoxo

TOY COUTURE said...

Love Love Love it!!!! Very beautiful and eloquently wriiten :)

Shadow said...

hey! you're supposed to be listening...

sheila said...

Never heard of peanut butter pie. If you are going to describe something so delish, you need to include a recipe. *smiles*

TechnoBabe said...

Great fun watching for that last lick from the pulpit.

Just Be Real said...

Could not have said it any better Brian. Love it. Blessings.

Who Is Afraid of Alfred Hitchcock? said...

Hi! Brian...
Unfortunately, I'am not familiar with "Peanut Butter Pie."
Thanks, for sharing a very "short" descriptive poem...very visual.
DeeDee ;-D

Lorraine said...

wow oh Brian, you never disappoint lol

adeeyoyo said...

Wow, I can see I have my work cut out playing catch-up! As brilliant as ever, Brian!

Cheryl said...

Sweet visuals.

annell said...

Look at you! What a delightful piece!

annell said...

Look at you! What a delightful piece!

kaykuala said...

It depicts a somewhat light hearted happening of a Big Mama girl's observation! Excellent!

TALON said...

lol! Thank you for the smiles today, Brian!

Janice said...

Oh, yum...gimme some!

Hope said...

love it! awesome!

the walking man said...

Dat preacher dere better not come to the table wi'out bring some a his own foodly fare. Cuz I just might stand up in his church and ask dat ol fat man why he drank all my daddy's beer.

Ross said...

As a partaker of both the "peanut butter pie" and those grand sermons planned during halftime of UNC ballgames I loved this post as I did the pie, the games, and the sermons. Thank you for this reminder of those wonderful Sunday afternoons!

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

I have a new testament written in Gullah dialect. Sounds a bit like this :)

mama-face said...

I was thinking that would be awful difficult to swallow. :)

Joanna Jenkins said...

Nice job Brian.
Congrats on your POTW from Hilary.
Cheers, jj

slommler said...

Beautiful poem...made me smile!
Hugs
SueAnn

dopey said...

Good times...great words!!

Anonymous said...

cute one brian.

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Syd said...

Ha--I would like some of that.

ethelmaepotter! said...

I am reminded of Ira Levin - in Rosemary's Baby, Rosemary is distracted by the advice of her doctor, because he has a bit of something caught in his beard.
Great read - you are the master of these shorts.