gather on stools & at tables,
in corners, in order
to create a more perfect union,
potatoes, regular, sweet, &
carmelized onion, over easy and runny,
thickening between
carved fruit, raw & juiced
bacon, fried, we the people
are all colors, flavors, lapped
up with toast & smiling with
crumbs on our lips, where java sips
wake us to the dream of
if only we could order take out &
carryout these brief moments
beyond the jangling doors of this
breakfast nook, coffee shop
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There is absolutely nothing better than a good old fashioned diner. Hope you have one near you....we do!
I am dieting, and I realize this morning as I read this that I am hungry and ready for breakfast! Everything you describe here made me just a wee bit hungrier than the line before! Yum...
I believe it is possible for we the people to carry with us throughout the day the lasting moments if not the food.
Oh, that's nice -- and now I need some breakfast.
when I went home recently, my sister and I went to the a local fav greasy spoon for breakfast.
my favourite meal to go out for,
absolutely.
Fun piece Brian,
thanks for sharing.
Hey, a great thought to start my day. Of course, it didn't hurt that you mentioned bacon and I have not had breakfast yet!
I am so there! Give me a wave when I come in so I know where you're sitting :)
You sir, are a word wizard.
Another good one. (sorry same 'ole comment but it's true)
Love the imagery.
There's nothing quite like my other home, Cafe Espresso. It sounds fancy and they do serve asparagus in season but it's really just a good down-home eatery where we gather together.
nostalgic ....... magic words from the word master
You continue to turn simple things into art. I love the way you did this. . . and now I am hungry for breakfast and coffee!
Carry out might be good...no, it would never work. I am hungry now.
Delicious post.
Wonderful and inspiring writing!
Time to eat! every word I tasted.
Awesome write
A far cry from a bowl of porridge in my own kitchen!LOL
I like this. Puts me in the mood for breakfast out, break my routine of breakfast alone. Early, dark, quiet, flip on TV, to see the disaster that befell over night! Instead let's go out!
There's a greasy spoon in my city that old timers, cops, yuppies, and homeless all gather together for eggs, hashbrowns, and black coffee. This reminded me of it.
I just wish I could write such an poetic description like you did!
I'm always hearing that rhyme doesn't work anymore but I think it's just that people aren't clever enough with it. This one is very clever - as is the previous one, and the rhyme adds a lot to the feeling of both, in different ways, as they're very different in feeling - which must be part of the cleverness of it.
Hello Brian,
Your marvelous description of various foods makes me feel hungry.I never realised that food items can be so deliciously described.
Best wishes,
Joseph
loved this:
flavors, lapped
up with toast & smiling with
crumbs on our lips, where java sips
wake us to the dream of
if only we could order take out &
carryout these brief moments
beyond the jangling doors
carrying the colors out into the world...
funny you should say that mairi...my poems never rhymed up until a month or so ago...i have been reading a book on hip hop poetics that is really challenging me in this regard and i am trying to focus on off beat internal rhyme to build flow in my poetry...thanks for noticing..
ha - i can feel the crumbs on my lips - but wait, i have crumbs on my lips cause i'm just having dinner .. but i can also smell the bacon and there's no bacon far and wide... so must be your writing... smiles
You are fast becoming one of my favorite poets, Brian.
Your work is stunning AND accessible...a lovely and hard-to-find combination.
=)
The picture is perfect.
The beginning is awesome.
The rythm is stunning.
The message, precious and evocative of what is going on all over the world.
You're a fricking,living, natural national treasure, Mr. B.M. I want to read everything.....
Hi Brian,
I see you have a dream and it is a wonderful dream. MLK would be proud to read this, and someday it will come true.
We the people will enjoy a great meal to start our day and carry out with us that we the people are "one". That we are more alike than different and we the people can get along and love each other as we are. Yup, that was some great poetry and we the people loved it.
God bless.
That sounds like the Preamble of the Constitution of Gluttonoland :D
Brian! How are you?
(Hugs)
Hopefully the good mood is "take out". I really enjoyed this, Brian. Now I want to head to my favorite diner :)
oh man...i want to be people too.
I guess if you have a large family you could MAYBE recreate the feeling of a diner at home - but then again, that would require that you only sort of know your family members :)
we the people come in all sorts of shapes and sizes, flavours, colours and creeds.
Long live the people!
Hmm prefer my breakfast al fresco with a view but whatever floats yer boat. Ha, hungry now
I'm on board for the Java!
I'd sooner breakfast at home and pore over a crossword!
Maggie X
Nuts in May
I love this new voice my friend...brilliant:)
Experiential observations, Brian. And you render them priceless with you word-magic.
Everyday things into poetry... well done Brian.
Now, what's for dinner?
I hope you submit this somewhere, it's so good. I love diners. Everyone loves diners. And the way you merged it with the consitution...priceless.
Very cool Brian.. Almost seems satirical... The people say what they need.. we need Cofee...:)
Great now I am an hungry ;) Awesomeness on the describing aspect!
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That is a very cool looking coffee shop!
You just wrapped up one of my favorite things in this one Brian..."breakfast in a joint." MY favorite meal to eat out of the house...the food, atmosphere and PEOPLE.
You nailed it.
We the people...yes...order up!
Mmmm, you had me at caramelized onions! Oh and the bacon... now I'm hungry!
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mmmm, of course, being from NJ...I love diners, egg and cheese..yum! ... xo
This made me smile!
i love finding a homey spot for meal time, it's so fun to meet people that way!
passing the ketchup or sugar to a stranger can lead to wondrous new friendships!
I heard another aspect - that we are diverse as the foods we serve. Each person is a different flavor , different color and texture
A gastronomical delight Bri
Oh Brian. I love this. Absolutely love it. Wishing that we could truly have this peace and cohesiveness in every area of our lives...not just breakfast joints : )
Wow...that is just...amazing. The flow, the picture...you packed a lot of punch into 55 words. Great job!
Yeah but is it vegetarian?
:))
we the people
ordered a more
perfect onion
A greasy breakfast joint. Who can resist. We do all have that in common.
What is it about going out to breakfast that is just so fulfilling??
The atmosphere and the scents, the well being and satisfaction of a cosy diner - yes indeed if we could only make the world outside feel that way...
I hope you get to enjoy a great, comfy, Sunday breakfast dear Brian.;)
xoxo
After reading that my special breakfast biscuits seem a bit of a waste of time.....
Scrambled with hot sauce is good.
I need to make breakfast - suddenly hungry for eggs.
I just ate supper, yet somehow I have a craving for a fried egg and toast. Hmmm....
I love breakfast foods and these kinds of places are the best kind...I love laid back places that invite us to come as we are.
I love "we the people come in all shapes, colors, flavours" ... so true ... all of us on the same boat so different yet so same ... happy day Brian!
Love it!
okay, I won't lie, I'm not much for diner food.
but this was delicious.
I got a smile from this remembering my aunt working the counter at our little town's diner. Thanks for reminding me, B.
very irresistable temptation.
trisha
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so what stop's us from ordering take-out???
I think that we can all forget our differences when we eat together. Nice one. I also have said that if civil unrest occurs, tell everyone that a football game is on and most will stop. Food may do the same thing.
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