Saturday, January 29, 2011

over easy, we

we the people
gather on stools & at tables,
in corners, in order
to create a more perfect union,
potatoes, regular, sweet, &
carmelized onion, over easy and runny,
thickening between
carved fruit, raw & juiced
bacon, fried, we the people
are all colors, flavors, lapped
up with toast & smiling with
crumbs on our lips, where java sips
wake us to the dream of
if only we could order take out &
carryout these brief moments
beyond the jangling doors of this
breakfast nook, coffee shop

67 comments:

Barbara said...

There is absolutely nothing better than a good old fashioned diner. Hope you have one near you....we do!

DJan said...

I am dieting, and I realize this morning as I read this that I am hungry and ready for breakfast! Everything you describe here made me just a wee bit hungrier than the line before! Yum...

TechnoBabe said...

I believe it is possible for we the people to carry with us throughout the day the lasting moments if not the food.

Vicki Lane said...

Oh, that's nice -- and now I need some breakfast.

Liza Ursu said...

when I went home recently, my sister and I went to the a local fav greasy spoon for breakfast.
my favourite meal to go out for,
absolutely.
Fun piece Brian,
thanks for sharing.

Daniel said...

Hey, a great thought to start my day. Of course, it didn't hurt that you mentioned bacon and I have not had breakfast yet!

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

I am so there! Give me a wave when I come in so I know where you're sitting :)

Pauline said...

You sir, are a word wizard.

Vodka Logic said...

Another good one. (sorry same 'ole comment but it's true)

Love the imagery.

Cheryl said...

There's nothing quite like my other home, Cafe Espresso. It sounds fancy and they do serve asparagus in season but it's really just a good down-home eatery where we gather together.

Kathy's Klothesline said...

nostalgic ....... magic words from the word master

Pastor Sharon said...

You continue to turn simple things into art. I love the way you did this. . . and now I am hungry for breakfast and coffee!

Jerry said...

Carry out might be good...no, it would never work. I am hungry now.
Delicious post.

ladyfi said...

Wonderful and inspiring writing!

Hope said...

Time to eat! every word I tasted.
Awesome write

Jinksy said...

A far cry from a bowl of porridge in my own kitchen!LOL

annell said...

I like this. Puts me in the mood for breakfast out, break my routine of breakfast alone. Early, dark, quiet, flip on TV, to see the disaster that befell over night! Instead let's go out!

CM said...

There's a greasy spoon in my city that old timers, cops, yuppies, and homeless all gather together for eggs, hashbrowns, and black coffee. This reminded me of it.

I just wish I could write such an poetic description like you did!

Mairi said...

I'm always hearing that rhyme doesn't work anymore but I think it's just that people aren't clever enough with it. This one is very clever - as is the previous one, and the rhyme adds a lot to the feeling of both, in different ways, as they're very different in feeling - which must be part of the cleverness of it.

Joseph Pulikotil said...

Hello Brian,

Your marvelous description of various foods makes me feel hungry.I never realised that food items can be so deliciously described.

Best wishes,
Joseph

Laura said...

loved this:

flavors, lapped
up with toast & smiling with
crumbs on our lips, where java sips
wake us to the dream of
if only we could order take out &
carryout these brief moments
beyond the jangling doors

carrying the colors out into the world...

Brian Miller said...

funny you should say that mairi...my poems never rhymed up until a month or so ago...i have been reading a book on hip hop poetics that is really challenging me in this regard and i am trying to focus on off beat internal rhyme to build flow in my poetry...thanks for noticing..

Claudia said...

ha - i can feel the crumbs on my lips - but wait, i have crumbs on my lips cause i'm just having dinner .. but i can also smell the bacon and there's no bacon far and wide... so must be your writing... smiles

Sue said...

You are fast becoming one of my favorite poets, Brian.

Your work is stunning AND accessible...a lovely and hard-to-find combination.

=)

rosaria said...

The picture is perfect.
The beginning is awesome.
The rythm is stunning.
The message, precious and evocative of what is going on all over the world.


You're a fricking,living, natural national treasure, Mr. B.M. I want to read everything.....

Mrsupole said...

Hi Brian,
I see you have a dream and it is a wonderful dream. MLK would be proud to read this, and someday it will come true.

We the people will enjoy a great meal to start our day and carry out with us that we the people are "one". That we are more alike than different and we the people can get along and love each other as we are. Yup, that was some great poetry and we the people loved it.

God bless.

Mona said...

That sounds like the Preamble of the Constitution of Gluttonoland :D

Brian! How are you?

(Hugs)

TALON said...

Hopefully the good mood is "take out". I really enjoyed this, Brian. Now I want to head to my favorite diner :)

Tom said...

oh man...i want to be people too.

The Bug said...

I guess if you have a large family you could MAYBE recreate the feeling of a diner at home - but then again, that would require that you only sort of know your family members :)

Friko said...

we the people come in all sorts of shapes and sizes, flavours, colours and creeds.

Long live the people!

Baino said...

Hmm prefer my breakfast al fresco with a view but whatever floats yer boat. Ha, hungry now

otin said...

I'm on board for the Java!

Maggie May said...

I'd sooner breakfast at home and pore over a crossword!
Maggie X

Nuts in May

kaleidoscope said...

I love this new voice my friend...brilliant:)

Steve E said...

Experiential observations, Brian. And you render them priceless with you word-magic.

Christina said...

Everyday things into poetry... well done Brian.

Now, what's for dinner?

Kate Hanley said...

I hope you submit this somewhere, it's so good. I love diners. Everyone loves diners. And the way you merged it with the consitution...priceless.

SY said...

Very cool Brian.. Almost seems satirical... The people say what they need.. we need Cofee...:)

BeMistified said...

Great now I am an hungry ;) Awesomeness on the describing aspect!

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tattytiara said...

That is a very cool looking coffee shop!

Jill said...

You just wrapped up one of my favorite things in this one Brian..."breakfast in a joint." MY favorite meal to eat out of the house...the food, atmosphere and PEOPLE.

You nailed it.

Magpie said...

We the people...yes...order up!

Nikki Rules said...

Mmmm, you had me at caramelized onions! Oh and the bacon... now I'm hungry!

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Heather said...

mmmm, of course, being from NJ...I love diners, egg and cheese..yum! ... xo

Mama Zen said...

This made me smile!

Everyday Goddess said...

i love finding a homey spot for meal time, it's so fun to meet people that way!
passing the ketchup or sugar to a stranger can lead to wondrous new friendships!

moondustwriter said...

I heard another aspect - that we are diverse as the foods we serve. Each person is a different flavor , different color and texture

A gastronomical delight Bri

Life with Kaishon said...

Oh Brian. I love this. Absolutely love it. Wishing that we could truly have this peace and cohesiveness in every area of our lives...not just breakfast joints : )

Raven said...

Wow...that is just...amazing. The flow, the picture...you packed a lot of punch into 55 words. Great job!

♥ Braja said...

Yeah but is it vegetarian?

:))

nance marie said...

we the people
ordered a more
perfect onion

Hilary said...

A greasy breakfast joint. Who can resist. We do all have that in common.

Nancy said...

What is it about going out to breakfast that is just so fulfilling??

Zuzana said...

The atmosphere and the scents, the well being and satisfaction of a cosy diner - yes indeed if we could only make the world outside feel that way...
I hope you get to enjoy a great, comfy, Sunday breakfast dear Brian.;)
xoxo

Valerie said...

After reading that my special breakfast biscuits seem a bit of a waste of time.....

the walking man said...

Scrambled with hot sauce is good.

secret agent woman said...

I need to make breakfast - suddenly hungry for eggs.

Pat said...

I just ate supper, yet somehow I have a craving for a fried egg and toast. Hmmm....

Lori said...

I love breakfast foods and these kinds of places are the best kind...I love laid back places that invite us to come as we are.

Birdie said...

I love "we the people come in all shapes, colors, flavours" ... so true ... all of us on the same boat so different yet so same ... happy day Brian!

JRM said...

Love it!

deb colarossi said...

okay, I won't lie, I'm not much for diner food.

but this was delicious.

Marla said...

I got a smile from this remembering my aunt working the counter at our little town's diner. Thanks for reminding me, B.

Anonymous said...

very irresistable temptation.

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Goofball said...

so what stop's us from ordering take-out???

Syd said...

I think that we can all forget our differences when we eat together. Nice one. I also have said that if civil unrest occurs, tell everyone that a football game is on and most will stop. Food may do the same thing.