Sunday, January 30, 2011

160/1SS - oh how sHe loves me


my girl Grace
cavorts with whores
(and molesters)

her lips a shared kiss
w/ preachers on sunday

n'er asks where i (sin) been
just awaits my repentance

my sentence
sHe loves me
anyway

What can you say in 160 characters? Go tell Monkey Man.

Also accepting the photo prompt challenge of One Shoot Sunday over at One Stop Poetry. The 'Footprints' photo by Iquanyin Moon reminded me of another rather famous Footprints.

76 comments:

Fireblossom said...

Hmm. Interesting girl.

Lorraine said...

Indeed Love is the Healing, wow as always Brian

haikulovesongs said...

i just want to know what a girl does when she's cavorting with whores? {smile}

i like it.
d

Andreas said...

Great poem, Brian!
Funny and sharp edged.

dustus said...

Third stanza transition and rhyme from repentance into sentence is amazing. Tight write and definitely unexpected take on prompt!

Shadow said...

just perfect!

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

simple with impact

secret agent woman said...

It's good to be loved anyway.

Brian Miller said...

ok so the parenthesis are a late addition...and push me over 160...grace please monkey...smiles.

itslovelyannie.com said...

hmmm...what can you say in so few words? enough to inspire questions and capture the imagination! I like the style here Brian. A slight twist in it that pulls me in and leaves me in the piece asking questions of the words surrounding...

Kenia Cris said...

Love will wash everything else away.

Beautiful poem! =*

TechnoBabe said...

Kind of reminds me of Mary Magdalene. Nice to meet ya, Grace.

Vodka Logic said...

metaphoric perhaps?

Steve E said...

Thank God for Grace...

Deborah said...

Such an evocative piece, beautifully done.

Claudia said...

ha - good sHe loves us anyway..that's grace..no?

annell said...

She loves me anyway....the best!

budh.aaah said...

This is a dark one nevertheless reaching inside one's soul caressing..questioning...

Sh@s said...

Beautiful as always. What matters at the end of all is that she loves you anyway.

Susan Deborah said...

What would I do without Grace. I am surviving because of her. Glad that you love her too.

Joy always,
Susan

Jerry said...

Very layered 160. Great angle on personifiying(sp)great spiritual truths.

Chris G. said...

Quite a bit of persona to this 160...and a curious girl. She certainly gets around. A smile for all, regardless of vocation. Leaves questions, and intrigue...

And I second Dani's question.

Monkey Man said...

Ah, Grace. She and Faith just seem to go hand in hand. Great 160 and thanks for playing along.

Daniel said...

Grace, marvelous grace.

Sue said...

And isn't it nice how she always brings Hope along?

=)

PS. Every word counts here, and some of them count twice! Amazing facility you have.

repressedsoul said...

Oh poor Grace lol! Great take very very clever indeed ;)

Alice Audrey said...

Just how many is she kissing?

Possum said...

I had to sit with this for a while ...it is just so lovely.

@farflungstar said...

Love the interplay of disparities :o)

Joybird said...

oh the joy sHe brings to me when I see her dance, bringing restoration in her wake. Wonderful picture. I love it.

jabblog said...

Amazing Grace, how sweet the sound . . .

Eva Gallant said...

Love it! Sounds like a life sentence to me!

Mama Zen said...

Oh, wow. That first stanza is a real attention grabber! Wonderful write, Brian.

TALON said...

Sooo good, Brian. I smiled at the capitalization in sHe :)

Tara Miller said...

What would we do without that Grace! I really, like your last line "sHe loves us anyway"...Words we need not forget.

great write my love!

Madame DeFarge said...

A sharp little piece there Brian. Nicely phrased.

Thoughts Not Lost said...

Aww, something to think about and feel in such a short span. Well done!

william said...

my kinda girl lol, hope you are well mate :)

Pastor Sharon said...

I am so thankful for Grace!

She Writes said...

Isn't it what we all hope? To be loved anyway.

Abby said...

i love how you went with this...it's fun and full and unexpected like always:) (yes sometimes serious, but always full and unexpected)

Caty said...

Grace is a great sentence to have :) I thought immediately of the famous "Footprints" too, probably cause it's one of my favorites...

Jen said...

I could use a little grace.

Pat said...

Love the opening lines.....and the photo is wonderful!

joanny said...

Edgy piece, interesting take on the opposite sex.

Love the 'over easy' you describe our favorite breakfast places across this country.

joanny

Kate Hanley said...

Isn't it amazing the imagery a few precise words can convey? Great poem.

Reflections said...

Interesting take on this one... love the references to the other familiar footprints.

Magpie said...

Cavorting...great word choice. :)

G-Man said...

I don't get it...

bodhirose said...

The strength and beauty of Grace is that you are always forgiven--sHe will always love you no matter what.

Beautiful...

Lori said...

It's all about grace and love...we all want to be loved inspite of ourselves...I am so thankful I am loved anyway.

As soon as I seen this photo I thought of the footprints poem...great words that blessed me this night Brian. Thank you.

Hilary said...

sHe. That made me smile. Wonderfully done.

Celestial Dreamz said...

a perfect write in terms of thought and style. So well done.

Sex, Drugs and Bacon Sandwiches said...

Always great to be loved anyway :)

Zouxzoux said...

Provocative wording/message. Grace better watch out for you. Awesome work.

Joanna Jenkins said...

That has a nice edge to it. Thanks, jj

moondustwriter said...

Grace is a mighty patient and forgiving gal - always waiting

nice 55 Bri

Zuzana said...

Love the last two lines and the multiple meaning in it.;)
Have a great Monday dear Brian,
xoxo

Alan Burnett said...

It has certain Cohen-esque qualities to it (although Lenny would have taken more than 160 characters!)

Who Is Afraid of Alfred Hitchcock? said...

Hi! Brian...
What a poem...to reflect on...even after the words have been read once...to reread again, and again.
Oh! yes,after viewing the photograph, I immediately, thought Of the reading...
Footprints in the Sand.
Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-D

Gaston Studio said...

Grace is so important in our daily lives, especially growing older. Lovely, but edgy, poem Brian.

Crystal Jigsaw said...

You paint a great picture of a very interesting girl!!

CJ

Six Feet Under Blog said...

Great poem today!

gautami tripathy said...

Great poem...

is it an illusion?

The Bug said...

Love love love this! Grace definitely hangs around all kinds of people - even me!

AmyLK said...

love it!

happygirl said...

Thank goodness she does, or I'd hardly ever see her.

lori said...

I have been reading a lot about grace recently, and just when I think I am beginning to grasp the whole concept, I find myself reaching again.

Good stuff :)

Vicki Lane said...

Oh, that amazing Grace!

Kavita said...

oohhh.. this cut through!! You have such a WOW way with words, Brian...
I am often left gaping after your poems, wondering!!!
This one really created a grim image..

Marla said...

Grace. Yes, Brian. She loves us.

Anonymous said...

very brave lover.

trisha
mydomainpvt.wordpress.com

Goofball said...

is Grace He or She?


hmm this seems to have much more sides than I first saw. hmmm....cool

Syd said...

She sounds interesting.

Kevin P. Mahan said...

This one punched me. Perfect title, can't help but sing it.

Candie Bracci said...

Ohh Grace??I know Him!hehe!Nice :)