my girl Grace
cavorts with whores
(and molesters)
her lips a shared kiss
w/ preachers on sunday
n'er asks where i (sin) been
just awaits my repentance
my sentence
sHe loves me
anyway
What can you say in 160 characters? Go tell Monkey Man.
Also accepting the photo prompt challenge of One Shoot Sunday over at One Stop Poetry. The 'Footprints' photo by Iquanyin Moon reminded me of another rather famous Footprints.
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Hmm. Interesting girl.
Indeed Love is the Healing, wow as always Brian
i just want to know what a girl does when she's cavorting with whores? {smile}
i like it.
d
Great poem, Brian!
Funny and sharp edged.
Third stanza transition and rhyme from repentance into sentence is amazing. Tight write and definitely unexpected take on prompt!
just perfect!
simple with impact
It's good to be loved anyway.
ok so the parenthesis are a late addition...and push me over 160...grace please monkey...smiles.
hmmm...what can you say in so few words? enough to inspire questions and capture the imagination! I like the style here Brian. A slight twist in it that pulls me in and leaves me in the piece asking questions of the words surrounding...
Love will wash everything else away.
Beautiful poem! =*
Kind of reminds me of Mary Magdalene. Nice to meet ya, Grace.
metaphoric perhaps?
Thank God for Grace...
Such an evocative piece, beautifully done.
ha - good sHe loves us anyway..that's grace..no?
She loves me anyway....the best!
This is a dark one nevertheless reaching inside one's soul caressing..questioning...
Beautiful as always. What matters at the end of all is that she loves you anyway.
What would I do without Grace. I am surviving because of her. Glad that you love her too.
Joy always,
Susan
Very layered 160. Great angle on personifiying(sp)great spiritual truths.
Quite a bit of persona to this 160...and a curious girl. She certainly gets around. A smile for all, regardless of vocation. Leaves questions, and intrigue...
And I second Dani's question.
Ah, Grace. She and Faith just seem to go hand in hand. Great 160 and thanks for playing along.
Grace, marvelous grace.
And isn't it nice how she always brings Hope along?
=)
PS. Every word counts here, and some of them count twice! Amazing facility you have.
Oh poor Grace lol! Great take very very clever indeed ;)
Just how many is she kissing?
I had to sit with this for a while ...it is just so lovely.
Love the interplay of disparities :o)
oh the joy sHe brings to me when I see her dance, bringing restoration in her wake. Wonderful picture. I love it.
Amazing Grace, how sweet the sound . . .
Love it! Sounds like a life sentence to me!
Oh, wow. That first stanza is a real attention grabber! Wonderful write, Brian.
Sooo good, Brian. I smiled at the capitalization in sHe :)
What would we do without that Grace! I really, like your last line "sHe loves us anyway"...Words we need not forget.
great write my love!
A sharp little piece there Brian. Nicely phrased.
Aww, something to think about and feel in such a short span. Well done!
my kinda girl lol, hope you are well mate :)
I am so thankful for Grace!
Isn't it what we all hope? To be loved anyway.
i love how you went with this...it's fun and full and unexpected like always:) (yes sometimes serious, but always full and unexpected)
Grace is a great sentence to have :) I thought immediately of the famous "Footprints" too, probably cause it's one of my favorites...
I could use a little grace.
Love the opening lines.....and the photo is wonderful!
Edgy piece, interesting take on the opposite sex.
Love the 'over easy' you describe our favorite breakfast places across this country.
joanny
Isn't it amazing the imagery a few precise words can convey? Great poem.
Interesting take on this one... love the references to the other familiar footprints.
Cavorting...great word choice. :)
I don't get it...
The strength and beauty of Grace is that you are always forgiven--sHe will always love you no matter what.
Beautiful...
It's all about grace and love...we all want to be loved inspite of ourselves...I am so thankful I am loved anyway.
As soon as I seen this photo I thought of the footprints poem...great words that blessed me this night Brian. Thank you.
sHe. That made me smile. Wonderfully done.
a perfect write in terms of thought and style. So well done.
Always great to be loved anyway :)
Provocative wording/message. Grace better watch out for you. Awesome work.
That has a nice edge to it. Thanks, jj
Grace is a mighty patient and forgiving gal - always waiting
nice 55 Bri
Love the last two lines and the multiple meaning in it.;)
Have a great Monday dear Brian,
xoxo
It has certain Cohen-esque qualities to it (although Lenny would have taken more than 160 characters!)
Hi! Brian...
What a poem...to reflect on...even after the words have been read once...to reread again, and again.
Oh! yes,after viewing the photograph, I immediately, thought Of the reading...
Footprints in the Sand.
Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-D
Grace is so important in our daily lives, especially growing older. Lovely, but edgy, poem Brian.
You paint a great picture of a very interesting girl!!
CJ
Great poem today!
Great poem...
is it an illusion?
Love love love this! Grace definitely hangs around all kinds of people - even me!
love it!
Thank goodness she does, or I'd hardly ever see her.
I have been reading a lot about grace recently, and just when I think I am beginning to grasp the whole concept, I find myself reaching again.
Good stuff :)
Oh, that amazing Grace!
oohhh.. this cut through!! You have such a WOW way with words, Brian...
I am often left gaping after your poems, wondering!!!
This one really created a grim image..
Grace. Yes, Brian. She loves us.
very brave lover.
trisha
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is Grace He or She?
hmm this seems to have much more sides than I first saw. hmmm....cool
She sounds interesting.
This one punched me. Perfect title, can't help but sing it.
Ohh Grace??I know Him!hehe!Nice :)
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