Saturday, December 4, 2010

Shooting the Breeze

Honeysuckle in late August, warmed by the sun, sticky sweet; the flavor of Chloe's lips intoxicates Jason, his hand working beneath the back of her shirt. Gun oil and musk; she feels the throbbing pulse of his heart as she nuzzles his neck, hand on his belt.

She bites his shoulder, hard enough to snap his eyes wide. He gasps, taking in a cool breathe, the noise of the city thirty stories below momentarily crashing into his consciousness. Streetlights, traffic, shops, all flow together in a glittering tableau, far brighter than the stars above the rooftop they stand on.

Twenty four hours ago they barely knew each other beyond a name, given to them by someone else. Twenty four hours changes everything.
_____

He catches her with his eyes as she walks through the door of the restaurant. She has a rugged beauty, far from porcelain doll but not junkyard dog either. Someone that can hold there own enough, that it was hard to show up and ask for help. When he got the call this morning, they told him she was in trouble, he could see that as well.

She turns once around, measuring the crowd before finding him. She smiles, faint as if they are old friends, not a name on a piece of paper slipped to her by a housekeeper. Shoulders back portraying confidence, he knows is false, she crosses to his table taking the seat across from him.

"Hello. Are you..."

"Jason. And you are Chloe. "

"Yes. I..."

"You need help."

"Yes."
_____

Dirt and pebbles burst into the air, chaotic clouds born on fierce wind washed by the prop of a helicopter roaring over the edge of the rooftop. A spotlight engulfs the couple entwined in each other, clothes akimbo, washing them white. Jason feels Chloe coil tight into him

"Step away from the girl," a disembodied voice bellows over a loud speaker from within the light.
Her blue eyes bore into his, pleading, then turn to steel as she spins away from him, slipping the gun from its place at the small of his back, swinging it toward the blinding light, pulling the trigger again and again.
_____

Bullets slam the rear panel on the drivers side and when Jason feels the tires regain traction he releases the horses to do their job, accelerating away from the men that had been waiting on them. They knew where Chloe would retreat to for safety, time to get creative. First he needs answers.

"Why do these men want you so bad?" he asks the quivering woman in the passenger seat, slipping quickly over the edge of her sanity, "and I don't believe your story about taking money. These guys are really trying to put us down. Who did you piss off? And how?"

She tells him and everything goes from bad to worse
_____

Chloe looks at the gun raised toward the helicopter, pulling the trigger continuously even though nothing is happening. Looking at Jason, his arms out in an open handed shrug as if to say 'sorry' before retrieving another gun from within his casual sport coat.

"It had to be this way, otherwise you might have hurt..."

"You bastard!" she screams, covering the short distance between them, raking his face with her nails. Droplets of blood patter like raindrops on the roof, collecting dust as the helicopter lands.
_____

"He raped me," she explains, "and when he found out I was pregnant, he sent his men to retrieve me."

"Why?"

"He wants a son, an heir. His wife is unable to," she chokes on the remaining words.

"Ok, we wont last long in the car. They are probably converging on our location as we speak, but I have an idea."
_____


"United States Secret Service, put your hands on your head!" the men scream over the howl of the still spinning blades of the helicopter, as it settles on the roof and they disembark surrounding Jason and Chloe.

"Hey, take it easy. I brought her in like I said I would," Jason barks back at them.

Pain amd anger snarl Chloe's face as she realises the depth of her betrayal by the man who was supposed to be helping her. By the man a few minutes ago with whom she had been making out with, convinced that they might actually get away. She sends spittle across his face as they haul her toward the helicopter.

"Can I get a ride back?" Jason asks the Agent in Charge.

"Sure, since you brought her in," the silver haired man chuckles, "and I will let you be the one that tells the President you were making out with his cousin."

Climbing aboard the helicopter, Jason smirks, "I think we both know she is not his cousin," and hands move quickly toward holstered weapons. Well passed the time for just shooting the breeze.

This is a 10DOM entry.

70 comments:

Lorraine said...

THE FICTION OF naughty love, you gotta love it :)

Mrsupole said...

You always rein us into the story and then leave us wanting more.

Just great, thanks.

God bless.

TechnoBabe said...

Is he going to help her or turn her in, is he friend or foe. Great back and forth writing.

Just Be Real said...

Feel like I am watching a tennis match. Blessings Brian.

liza said...

I had to stop and make myself some popcorn for that one. Great imagery!

sheila said...

Oh my goodness!

the walking man said...

Interesting a gun fight in the confines of a helicopter. Hope He was the last on in line to get in.

Jerry said...

Yikes...the humanity!

Joanie M said...

Great story!!

Tracy said...

This sounds like a great novel, Brian.

Lori said...

Another great snippet of a novel in the making? Happy weekend to you and your family Brian.

Who Is Afraid of Alfred Hitchcock? said...

Hi! Brian...
What a very interesting short story...one word... intriguing.

When I first started to read your story I must admit I didn't know which way your story was going.

Thanks, for sharing your 10Dom entry...
DeeDee ;-D

Daniel said...

Kind of a James Bond-ian feel. Take what you can get when you can get it. Betrayal, intrigue, and cousins that aren't relations. Ooooh.

DJan said...

I hardly know what to say, except WHY HAVEN"T YOU WRITTEN A NOVEL YET????

annell said...

You never fail to amaze me. Your mind travels to unexpected places! Thanks for the post.

Eva Gallant said...

Wow! This sounds like a bit from the movie with Angelina Jolie and Johnny Depp, The Tourist. I haven't seen the movie, but I saw the previews. Well done! You definitely held my attention on that one!

Kat_RN said...

Great read, you put a lot into such a short space. I want more!
Kat

Becky said...

Hmm, I did have to come over for this one,lol.Blushing!ha.

I loved it!Is there a sequel????I need to know;)


Have a great weekend!

Mom said...

Wish you would spend your mornings writing a novel. You have the ability and the stories within you. With Tara working and the boys in school you have uninterrupted time to pursue this dream.

Kim A. said...

Loved it! I need a bit of suspense this morning amidst the holiday overload.

♥namaste♥

Susan Deborah said...

My, my that was quite a terrific write. Is winter the mischief in you?!?!?

Love this one.

Joy always,
Susan

Mama Zen said...

Awesome, Brian!

ModernMom said...

I can't beliece the story you can spin in such a short time!! Brilliant.

♥ Boomer ♥ said...

Breathless here!!!!!

AngelMay said...

Women who spit. Not nice. ;o) There is just something about the word "spittle" that makes me want to go take a shower. (Hi Brian!)

David Waters said...

what a spinner of tales my friend.brilliant

cheers

Myrna R. said...

What a story. It could be a motion picture. The characters have depth and mystery. I love how you are able to conjure up these stories. You have a great imagination - and of course your writing is pretty darn good.

Pastor Sharon said...

I got the visual. . .this is a movie waiting to be made.

You had me from the beginning. This story is intriguing. No real clue of what is actually going on, so I couldn't figure out where you were going with it. That is the kind of story I can get into!

TALON said...

What a fast-paced and fabulous tale you wove from the prompt, Brian. Awesome! Poor guy - those face scratches are really gonna sting!

Claudia said...

this was quite a rollercoaster ride you took us on...amazing how much atmosphere and character painting you can put into such a short story

Madeleine said...

An enjoyable read, great imagery and voice :O)

Jannie Funster said...

Geez, what a way to end a date that seemed to be going so well. :)

xo

PattiKen said...

I agree with the others. This just begs to be built into a novel.

Dulce said...

Yeap! you could be a scripwriter and... of course succeed!
;)
wow you!

Baino said...

It's good, very engaging in the beginning, lost momentum a bit towards the end (By the man a few minutes ago with whom she had been making out with - little clumsy). I'd have loved it to be a little longer to build the intrigue.

Pat said...

You left me wanting more; can I have more please?

Nancy said...

This sounds like the opening page to a great novel, Brian.

JeffScape said...

Ooh, I like. Sort of Spartan mixed with The Way of the Gun.

You're definitely getting better at action-violence.

gayle said...

I would love for you to write more on this story! It's so good!

Chocolate Covered Daydreams said...

You captured my attention in the first paragraph. Lots of emotion in just a few paragraphs...also questions of who, how and why. Good one, Brian.

Jill said...

Come on Brian! IS that IT??? The End?
Intriguing.

Amy said...

I loved it! Full of suspense and betrayal.

Reggie said...

You've got me wanting more...love it!!

ladyfi said...

Thrilling stuff and a twist at the end. Superb!

Joseph Pulikotil said...

Hi Brian,

Suspense,intrigue,mystery and a torrid brief affair all rolled into one short story makes a gripping, wonderful story.

Great imagination, changing scenes rapidly is truly fantastic.

Best wishes,
Joseph

Sumit Sarkar said...

Great story...
I am so glad to read this :)

Valerie said...

I was glued to this, Brian. Enjoyed the seesaw ride through to the end. Agree with everyone else, you really should write that book.

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

These stories always lock me in and keep me moving through... and leave me wanting more :)

Tom said...

pretty good take on the power gone wrong theme...

slommler said...

Oh my! A movie for sure!!
Hugs
SueAnn

♥ Braja said...

OMG you're scaring me....

L(((

... Paige said...

alrighty then

Gaston Studio said...

Good one Brian 'cuz I'm all into thrillers and mysteries and there's always a bit of betrayal in both.

Monkey Man said...

Quite a tale, sir.

budh.aaah said...

Wow!! Great stuff Brian

KB said...

Enjoyed this story Brian. Keep up the great work.

Zuzana said...

I love that your stories are never predictable. They start one way and the ending is always a surprise.;)
Hope you had a great weekend dear Brian,
xoxo

Goofball said...

It leaves so many question marks

Mmm said...

Brian, aw, your travelogue post is gone. It was such a stroke of creative genius, as indeed are you! thank you so much for coming and being the epitome of a good honourable gentleman all round...and very witty, to boot. The Christmas tea this year would not have been the same without your interactions and all your bring to the table. I raise this hot steaming cuppa to you, good man! :)

Joanna Jenkins said...

I'm hoping this is a first installment... With many more chapters to follow.

Nice job, jj

Cloudia said...

I hear the copter blades




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Magpie said...

You bounce us back and forth...slipping us little tidbits of information....allowing us to jump to conclusions....well done.

Flea said...

Love it, well done Brian, you are a master!! I want to buy your first book!!

gautami tripathy said...

Tight, fast paced, filled with suspense. And great ending.

moondustwriter said...

A fast spinning tale my friend

Ackkk


moonie smiles

Anonymous said...

what a rolllercoaster ride. wonderfull piece brian.

trisha
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Mighty M said...

So, so good!

Syd said...

So what is she then? His lover, I suspect.

Marla said...

Geez Louise, my stomach is in knots.

shewriting said...

awesome...glad the politicians were the bad guys...makes your story so believable :)