can you hear the lullaby
dancing through the streets
twirling carefree like
a little girl in a sun
dress pretending she
is a butterfly in spring---
but it is winter now
& snow clings between
blades of grass, glimmering
in a hollow sun
that forgot to throw
another log on the fire
before going to bed
& now knows it's
too cold to touch a toe
to the frosted floor---
it's still there
beneath, this lullaby,
not to lull you to sleep
but awake...AWAKE...
a finger tracing the lips
of flower petals, coaxing
them open---
come out...COME OUT...
lazarus from the blanket
in which you hide & we
shall create a new spring
to that slow love song lullaby
you into me into you into we---
can you hear it, dancing
through the streets?
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This sings just like a lullaby. And the "Lazarus in the blanket" line is perfect.
once again your words dance from the page creating a opera before our eyes:)
cheers
yes i can hear it dancing through the streets...sounds hopeful...awakening what was thought to be dead...love it and think i might join the dance...smiles
Beautiful............
Wah!? another Wednesday gone by?
This does sound like an evening song!
I love this little poem! Its so full of 'innocence'!
Very pretty. I love the line "you into me into you into we..". :)
Yes, I can hear the lullaby you speak of, there between the lines you've written so kindly. -J
One of my favorites! Really lovely!
You are so talented, and I always read your poems, but I don't always comment. Just wanted you to know I'm here, reading, appreciating, lurking.
I can hear it, and I'm loving it :)
lovely one shot
:)
love it!
thank you
Like it....a happy lullaby makes me smile.
Lovely and lilting, Brian...just like a lullaby :)
My favorite part is..."not to lull you to sleep
but awake...AWAKE..."
i love the girl twirling, pretending she's a butterfly...feels so free.
Nice pace to this one my friend.
Lovely One Shot Brian! It is both innocent & sweet ( little girl pretending she is a butterfly) as well as sensual & wanting ( finger tracing the lips of flower petals, coaxing them out & you into me into you into we! I loved it!
In answer to your question ... Can I hear it, dancing through the streets? I would have to say... with your gifted pen it's hard to ignore it.. it's loud & beautifully clear!
This one dances to its own music on light, agile feet bringing a ray of sunlight right into the room.
In bleak December cold, dark, and bare it's hard to think of an awakening, but this one shot poem just might do it....:)
This is truely beautiful Brian :)
yes, yes, just let me get this advent calendar out of the way.
Probably won't be anywhere near as good as you are, though.
Yes, I hear it. Loud and clear. This was lovely.
Wow, that was spectacular! Very pretty!
Hope the snow's not too bad up in Scotland! I heard it, rolled and flowed Brian. Very vivid.
A lovely lullaby with beautiful images. I even goofed telling my daughter hold on I'm singing instead of reading. lol:)
Dance your blues away. I so agree. Let's start the bring the spring dance NOW.
beautiful, lyrical...it skips along...
gorgeous...and full of hope
A pleasantly alive take on the season--lots of clipped, clear images like an absent minded hollow sun and the lullaby itself, nice and neat and compact and waiting to be opened up..enjoyed it. (and I'm thrilled to get in before the comments hit triple digits.;-) )
The girl you love is always a girl and the joy you express is palpable.
Well written.
more invigorating than lulling :) I like it!
sweet song maestro
I love this Brian...it is glorious!
:-)
I could not love, "you into me into you into we---" more. Perfect line.
nicely done, as usual :)
This is beautiful and season appropriate.
This just lovely. I do hear it. There are so many wonderful lines, but I really like "...a hollow sun
that forgot to throw another log on the fire before going to bed."
Burrrr! I want the real butterflies back and warm weather. My floors do feel frosty!
Beautiful writing. I can always 'see' your poems.
A poetic flashmob - now there's a way to describe it! Fun for the whole blogosphere...
And for the poem...first thing I noticed: Lazarus makes an appearance in both our works for the One Shot this week. Certainly didn't expect that! Beautiful piece all around, quite the lovely tune and dance - with sensuality as well! Beautiful.
Creating a new love song, through a lullaby. Cool.
This carried me right along! Thanks for the One Shot!
Beautiful one shot,Brian.Gives a feeling of warmth in this cold winter.
*you into me into you into we---
*Love this line!
A love song lullaby - just the way it should be. The slow dance of reawakening
Thanks for the One shot my friend
Moonie smiles
aww this has gotten me all broody :)
gorgeous, Brian
I love the poem. You have such great imagery here. Truly does have the feel of a song.
Very nice...how do you do it? :-)
You are sweet to share these words, as I think I know who they are truly written for. AWAKE!
You into me into WE
I am hoping and praying for you & this girl. I wish you your new spring.
you into me into you into we---
Oh my God such intensity. so much romance but since am a die hard romantic..no complaints.
sing me awake...that is a beautiful image symbolizing so many different things...bkm
Great Job Son...
You are a very special gift to us.
A gorgeous lullaby!
Spring must seem far away at this point. I am enjoying winter now. But it surely has been cold on the water lately.
Loving this.... and will, once again, ask Santa to bring my sister a guy just like you :-)
Cheers, jj
Very nice. It does sound like a lullaby.
Wow, Brian. You rock the poetry and prose like no other. I love the meta play here writing the love song lullaby about a lullaby love song that can be (or should be) heard. And a lullaby to wake to! I'm awake and ready to read of the spring the lullaby paints.
Beautiful...just Beautiful...and that is all!
Brian, really enjoyed this, and love the imagery. I feel upbeat already! :)
What a beuatiful poem reminding us of the fact that in the depths of winter, something is getting ready to awake.;)) Beautiful words full of hope...;)
Have a lovely day dear Brian,
xoxo
I find there is this underlying sadness here. So beautifully put..
destined wanderings
a pleasant lullaby... :)
I loved reading it :)
a lightness and a brightness to the poem
If only winter passed as fast as summer!
your breaking my heart, you are so gifted
Rhythm is perfect and the lullaby so soothing.
I can hear it and I feel like dancing a nice slow waltz! As a little girl I used to twirl with a long skirt...twirl and twirl...I was a princess in a castle; awaiting the prince to come and rescue me.
What a beautiful memory this evoked for me.
Thanks
Hugs
SueAnn
Brian, beautifully written like a song indeed. Blessings.
Brillian!
A lullaby to remember
oh Brian...a lullaby into wakeful, tender love...beautiful, brilliant, shining!
I do hear it dancing!
I can hear it... and this Brian is on my favorite list!!!
I am sooo waiting on spring as well...This was refreshing...
Lovely! Pull out that guitar and set it to music!
love this , Brian.
awake
yes!
This is so a song!!! Put it to music, quick. Beautiful, Brian.
Brian, this is one of your best. It sings to me and touches my heart. So beautiful.
I like the hopefulness and anticipation.
what a splendid symphony, just like a warm wind in a cold winter night.
trisha
mydomainpvt.wordpress.com
Ah, Brian... each of your poems is like a soothing lullaby! This is one of my favorites!
It's always refreshing to read from you...Well done, B.
Cheers!
Fantastic 1 Shot, especially on a frigid morning where I can see the sun but definitely can't feel it! Always a pleasure to stop by, very much enjoyed the poem. Stay warm.
crb.
Hey, the 2nd One Shot with a Lazarus reference this week!
(Plus another that mentioned Sylvia Plath, who wrote "Lady Lazarus")
Seems you're lamenting the arrival of the snow, Brian - and I don't blame you one bit!
Nice One Shot!
Beautiful, glad that I've read it! Thanks for visiting my blog!
i love this for so many reasons...i really think it should become a lullaby we can play at my house and I can learn to sing...
The softness of the winter with the ghost of the sun – all image and no heat… the hope of the future and the lightness of awakening… dancing.
Beautiful – This captures it all Brian with something lying just beneath the surface.
lazarus from the blanket - great line. Brrrr it is cold.. Spring would be welcome already! Nice piece, Brian. Could've used a line-break or two, but no biggie.
Good stuff
Warmest Salad
Luke @ WordSalad
ps great to finally get to OSW! Rock!
Brian, I'm not sure how to express this but it got me in the gut! Amazing artistry.
This poem demonstrates the power of line breaks and punctuation. I read a lullaby, yes, but an urgent (almost frantic) lullaby.
"not to lull you to sleep
but awake...AWAKE."
Yes!
~Mari (@javajnkie)
P.S. Thanks for commenting on my One Shot Wednesday contribution as well.
Lovely poem. I particulary like the part about the hollow sun forgetting to throw another log on the fire before going to bed.
Very beautiful Brian!!! :) Love that feeling like in the warmth of Spring, fun! Then to Winter...and back to that feeling of Spring. Sweet charm!! :)April
This makes me think of some of e.e. cummings' poems -- very lovely!
Well, now I feel Really thick, as this is the 2d poem in row, from having read another on another's blog, i did not get. Why I am not sure? It all seems to make sense line by line but I am missing something i think. well, I do love the beautiful bits I actually did get like the Lazarus in blanket conection1 Nice! :)
Sweet indeed, Brian. :-)
(I had to scour the list to find you way down there at #41!)
"can you hear it, dancing
through the streets?"
Oh yes, I can... through your poem I mean! The images you weave are beautiful and captivating like the "butterfly in spring." Seamless flow as well. A very, very enjoyable read.
Full circle. . . you are the best at this!
I LOVE the way you write. Wow.
Beautiful. It makes me want to draw a picture to match. Really lovely. :)
Super dreamy and wonderfully romantic...
May winter NEVER show her harshness, and may Spring always shower her kindness on you and yours...
Such a beautiful poem, Brian..
My fav. line: "you into me into you into we" -- that was just superb !!!
Keep writing, my friend.. you rock!
"we shall create a new spring" jumped out to me. This is simply beautiful and I am awestruck enough to keep my window open for awhile and read it a few more times.
I can't figure out if this a happy or sad poem
Lively despite its wintry backdrop. For a moment, it almost made me like the month of November/December - which, for people like me, is sixty-one days of soul-sucking suckage.
That is, excellent work. :)
It's beautiful & I think a little bittersweet? (Just underneath the surface.)
"you into me into you into we"
Love this ~
yes, I feel like lazarus in the blanket many mornings...I love lullaby's...enjoyed yours, too.
I love it; so beautiful, except that I read the last line as "dancing through the sheets". That would work, too! *Wink*
I haven't been to visit for a while and was experiencing withdrawal. I'm good now that I got my fix. Your lullaby is nothing to fall asleep to. Wonderful imagery, especially for today. Blessings!
These lines say it ALL for me...just saying...
"AWAKE...a finger tracing the lips
of flower petals, coaxing
them open---
come out...COME OUT..."
"..lazarus from the blanket
in which you hide & we
shall create a new spring
to that slow love song lullaby"
..."you into me into you into we---"
So sweetly sung that the words held a clear melody.
love the flow and the imagery!
There is nothing more full of hope than a child singing a lullaby...Thanks...I needed that!
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