Tuesday, December 7, 2010

one shot: sing me a lullaby

can you hear the lullaby
dancing through the streets
twirling carefree like
a little girl in a sun
dress pretending she
is a butterfly in spring---
but it is winter now
& snow clings between
blades of grass, glimmering
in a hollow sun
that forgot to throw
another log on the fire
before going to bed
& now knows it's
too cold to touch a toe
to the frosted floor---
it's still there
beneath, this lullaby,
not to lull you to sleep
but awake...AWAKE...
a finger tracing the lips
of flower petals, coaxing
them open---
come out...COME OUT...
lazarus from the blanket
in which you hide & we
shall create a new spring
to that slow love song lullaby
you into me into you into we---
can you hear it, dancing
through the streets?

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108 comments:

Glynn said...

This sings just like a lullaby. And the "Lazarus in the blanket" line is perfect.

David Waters said...

once again your words dance from the page creating a opera before our eyes:)

cheers

Claudia said...

yes i can hear it dancing through the streets...sounds hopeful...awakening what was thought to be dead...love it and think i might join the dance...smiles

Neva Flores said...

Beautiful............

Mona said...

Wah!? another Wednesday gone by?

This does sound like an evening song!

I love this little poem! Its so full of 'innocence'!

Mighty M said...

Very pretty. I love the line "you into me into you into we..". :)

Harnett-Hargrove said...

Yes, I can hear the lullaby you speak of, there between the lines you've written so kindly. -J

annell said...

One of my favorites! Really lovely!

DJan said...

You are so talented, and I always read your poems, but I don't always comment. Just wanted you to know I'm here, reading, appreciating, lurking.

Gabriela Abalo said...

I can hear it, and I'm loving it :)

lovely one shot

:)

Hope said...

love it!

thank you

Mom said...

Like it....a happy lullaby makes me smile.

TALON said...

Lovely and lilting, Brian...just like a lullaby :)

Unknown Mami said...

My favorite part is..."not to lull you to sleep
but awake...AWAKE..."

LadyCat said...

i love the girl twirling, pretending she's a butterfly...feels so free.

Daniel said...

Nice pace to this one my friend.

Katherine said...

Lovely One Shot Brian! It is both innocent & sweet ( little girl pretending she is a butterfly) as well as sensual & wanting ( finger tracing the lips of flower petals, coaxing them out & you into me into you into we! I loved it!
In answer to your question ... Can I hear it, dancing through the streets? I would have to say... with your gifted pen it's hard to ignore it.. it's loud & beautifully clear!

Titanium said...

This one dances to its own music on light, agile feet bringing a ray of sunlight right into the room.

drybottomgirl said...

In bleak December cold, dark, and bare it's hard to think of an awakening, but this one shot poem just might do it....:)

Candie Bracci said...

This is truely beautiful Brian :)

Friko said...

yes, yes, just let me get this advent calendar out of the way.
Probably won't be anywhere near as good as you are, though.

Tina said...

Yes, I hear it. Loud and clear. This was lovely.

sheila said...

Wow, that was spectacular! Very pretty!

repressedsoul said...

Hope the snow's not too bad up in Scotland! I heard it, rolled and flowed Brian. Very vivid.

River said...

A lovely lullaby with beautiful images. I even goofed telling my daughter hold on I'm singing instead of reading. lol:)

Monkey Man said...

Dance your blues away. I so agree. Let's start the bring the spring dance NOW.

mel said...

beautiful, lyrical...it skips along...

gorgeous...and full of hope

hedgewitch said...

A pleasantly alive take on the season--lots of clipped, clear images like an absent minded hollow sun and the lullaby itself, nice and neat and compact and waiting to be opened up..enjoyed it. (and I'm thrilled to get in before the comments hit triple digits.;-) )

M G Reignier said...

The girl you love is always a girl and the joy you express is palpable.
Well written.

Pauline said...

more invigorating than lulling :) I like it!

C.M. Jackson said...

sweet song maestro

Carrie Burtt said...

I love this Brian...it is glorious!
:-)

Jill said...

I could not love, "you into me into you into we---" more. Perfect line.

Jaime said...

nicely done, as usual :)

AmyLK said...

This is beautiful and season appropriate.

PattiKen said...

This just lovely. I do hear it. There are so many wonderful lines, but I really like "...a hollow sun
that forgot to throw another log on the fire before going to bed."

Heidi said...

Burrrr! I want the real butterflies back and warm weather. My floors do feel frosty!

Beautiful writing. I can always 'see' your poems.

Chris G. said...

A poetic flashmob - now there's a way to describe it! Fun for the whole blogosphere...

And for the poem...first thing I noticed: Lazarus makes an appearance in both our works for the One Shot this week. Certainly didn't expect that! Beautiful piece all around, quite the lovely tune and dance - with sensuality as well! Beautiful.

lakeviewer said...

Creating a new love song, through a lullaby. Cool.

poemblaze said...

This carried me right along! Thanks for the One Shot!

June_Butterfly said...

Beautiful one shot,Brian.Gives a feeling of warmth in this cold winter.

*you into me into you into we---
*Love this line!

One Stop - The Place For Poets, Writers and Artists said...

A love song lullaby - just the way it should be. The slow dance of reawakening

Thanks for the One shot my friend

Moonie smiles

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

aww this has gotten me all broody :)

gorgeous, Brian

Teresa said...

I love the poem. You have such great imagery here. Truly does have the feel of a song.

Reggie said...

Very nice...how do you do it? :-)

kkrige said...

You are sweet to share these words, as I think I know who they are truly written for. AWAKE!
You into me into WE
I am hoping and praying for you & this girl. I wish you your new spring.

budh.aaah said...

you into me into you into we---

Oh my God such intensity. so much romance but since am a die hard romantic..no complaints.

signed...bkm said...

sing me awake...that is a beautiful image symbolizing so many different things...bkm

G-Man said...

Great Job Son...
You are a very special gift to us.

ladyfi said...

A gorgeous lullaby!

Syd said...

Spring must seem far away at this point. I am enjoying winter now. But it surely has been cold on the water lately.

Joanna Jenkins said...

Loving this.... and will, once again, ask Santa to bring my sister a guy just like you :-)
Cheers, jj

Nancy said...

Very nice. It does sound like a lullaby.

Stranger said...

Wow, Brian. You rock the poetry and prose like no other. I love the meta play here writing the love song lullaby about a lullaby love song that can be (or should be) heard. And a lullaby to wake to! I'm awake and ready to read of the spring the lullaby paints.

liza said...

Beautiful...just Beautiful...and that is all!

Brock S. Henning said...

Brian, really enjoyed this, and love the imagery. I feel upbeat already! :)

Zuzana said...

What a beuatiful poem reminding us of the fact that in the depths of winter, something is getting ready to awake.;)) Beautiful words full of hope...;)
Have a lovely day dear Brian,
xoxo

gautami tripathy said...

I find there is this underlying sadness here. So beautifully put..

destined wanderings

Sumit Sarkar said...

a pleasant lullaby... :)
I loved reading it :)

theprimate said...

a lightness and a brightness to the poem

the walking man said...

If only winter passed as fast as summer!

Lorraine said...

your breaking my heart, you are so gifted

Cheryl said...

Rhythm is perfect and the lullaby so soothing.

slommler said...

I can hear it and I feel like dancing a nice slow waltz! As a little girl I used to twirl with a long skirt...twirl and twirl...I was a princess in a castle; awaiting the prince to come and rescue me.
What a beautiful memory this evoked for me.
Thanks
Hugs
SueAnn

Just Be Real said...

Brian, beautifully written like a song indeed. Blessings.

Dulce said...

Brillian!
A lullaby to remember

LauraX said...

oh Brian...a lullaby into wakeful, tender love...beautiful, brilliant, shining!

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

I do hear it dancing!

natalee said...

I can hear it... and this Brian is on my favorite list!!!

JStar said...

I am sooo waiting on spring as well...This was refreshing...

Betsy said...

Lovely! Pull out that guitar and set it to music!

deb said...

love this , Brian.
awake
yes!

Magpie said...

This is so a song!!! Put it to music, quick. Beautiful, Brian.

Myrna R. said...

Brian, this is one of your best. It sings to me and touches my heart. So beautiful.

blueviolet said...

I like the hopefulness and anticipation.

Anonymous said...

what a splendid symphony, just like a warm wind in a cold winter night.

trisha
mydomainpvt.wordpress.com

Boom Boom Larew said...

Ah, Brian... each of your poems is like a soothing lullaby! This is one of my favorites!

Emmanuel Ibok said...

It's always refreshing to read from you...Well done, B.

Cheers!

Caribbean Fool said...

Fantastic 1 Shot, especially on a frigid morning where I can see the sun but definitely can't feel it! Always a pleasure to stop by, very much enjoyed the poem. Stay warm.

crb.

Eric Alder said...

Hey, the 2nd One Shot with a Lazarus reference this week!

(Plus another that mentioned Sylvia Plath, who wrote "Lady Lazarus")

Seems you're lamenting the arrival of the snow, Brian - and I don't blame you one bit!

Nice One Shot!

scentofmyheart said...

Beautiful, glad that I've read it! Thanks for visiting my blog!

Mama Abby said...

i love this for so many reasons...i really think it should become a lullaby we can play at my house and I can learn to sing...

The Exception said...

The softness of the winter with the ghost of the sun – all image and no heat… the hope of the future and the lightness of awakening… dancing.
Beautiful – This captures it all Brian with something lying just beneath the surface.

lukepraterswordsalad said...

lazarus from the blanket - great line. Brrrr it is cold.. Spring would be welcome already! Nice piece, Brian. Could've used a line-break or two, but no biggie.

Good stuff

Warmest Salad

Luke @ WordSalad

ps great to finally get to OSW! Rock!

liv2write2day said...

Brian, I'm not sure how to express this but it got me in the gut! Amazing artistry.

Mari Nichols-Haining said...

This poem demonstrates the power of line breaks and punctuation. I read a lullaby, yes, but an urgent (almost frantic) lullaby.

"not to lull you to sleep
but awake...AWAKE."

Yes!

~Mari (@javajnkie)

P.S. Thanks for commenting on my One Shot Wednesday contribution as well.

Rebecca S. said...

Lovely poem. I particulary like the part about the hollow sun forgetting to throw another log on the fire before going to bed.

betweenhearts75 said...

Very beautiful Brian!!! :) Love that feeling like in the warmth of Spring, fun! Then to Winter...and back to that feeling of Spring. Sweet charm!! :)April

Vicki Lane said...

This makes me think of some of e.e. cummings' poems -- very lovely!

Mmm said...

Well, now I feel Really thick, as this is the 2d poem in row, from having read another on another's blog, i did not get. Why I am not sure? It all seems to make sense line by line but I am missing something i think. well, I do love the beautiful bits I actually did get like the Lazarus in blanket conection1 Nice! :)

Fireblossom said...

Sweet indeed, Brian. :-)

(I had to scour the list to find you way down there at #41!)

Helena Malheur said...

"can you hear it, dancing
through the streets?"

Oh yes, I can... through your poem I mean! The images you weave are beautiful and captivating like the "butterfly in spring." Seamless flow as well. A very, very enjoyable read.

Pastor Sharon said...

Full circle. . . you are the best at this!

Yola said...

I LOVE the way you write. Wow.

tera said...

Beautiful. It makes me want to draw a picture to match. Really lovely. :)

Kavita said...

Super dreamy and wonderfully romantic...
May winter NEVER show her harshness, and may Spring always shower her kindness on you and yours...
Such a beautiful poem, Brian..
My fav. line: "you into me into you into we" -- that was just superb !!!
Keep writing, my friend.. you rock!

5thsister said...

"we shall create a new spring" jumped out to me. This is simply beautiful and I am awestruck enough to keep my window open for awhile and read it a few more times.

Goofball said...

I can't figure out if this a happy or sad poem

Steve Isaak said...

Lively despite its wintry backdrop. For a moment, it almost made me like the month of November/December - which, for people like me, is sixty-one days of soul-sucking suckage.

That is, excellent work. :)

CherylK said...

It's beautiful & I think a little bittersweet? (Just underneath the surface.)

Marla said...

"you into me into you into we"


Love this ~

shewriting said...

yes, I feel like lazarus in the blanket many mornings...I love lullaby's...enjoyed yours, too.

Pat said...

I love it; so beautiful, except that I read the last line as "dancing through the sheets". That would work, too! *Wink*

Melissa Campbell said...

I haven't been to visit for a while and was experiencing withdrawal. I'm good now that I got my fix. Your lullaby is nothing to fall asleep to. Wonderful imagery, especially for today. Blessings!

Sophia said...

These lines say it ALL for me...just saying...

"AWAKE...a finger tracing the lips
of flower petals, coaxing
them open---
come out...COME OUT..."

"..lazarus from the blanket
in which you hide & we
shall create a new spring
to that slow love song lullaby"

..."you into me into you into we---"

mairmusic said...

So sweetly sung that the words held a clear melody.

Caty said...

love the flow and the imagery!

Jerry said...

There is nothing more full of hope than a child singing a lullaby...Thanks...I needed that!