young man, blue jeans and green shirt, dock shoes, elbow on his knees, leans in, waving his hand accentuating each word for his lover, eye lids fill with the weight of the conversation, ready to spill desperation, leaking down his cheek.
"it's more than the sex..." the line moves.
a middle aged couple, lost in their own conversation, slip between me and the scene unfolding. she leans into him, lips parting at his ear, her words a breath, he smiles, hand sliding from her shoulder down, pausing lightly at her elbow.
"good morning, what can i get for you today?" the line moves.
kicked back, relaxed, white shirt & gym shirt, in deference to the cold outside, he sits passive to his lover's plea. the line moves.
tap. tap. tap. cane's rap across the floor, eyes ringed in creases, they settle in comfortable seats, he into his book as she sips. cup to lip, stolen looks like letters to each other. the line moves.
my fingers find the warm walls of my cup of coffee & play at the seam, where the cardboard comes together. bells rattle on the door announcing another coming, another going & the line keeps moving.
& the line keeps moving.
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Love your little "slice of life" observations. And now I need some coffee...smiles.
I'm first? Really? Isn't that like yahtzee or something ;-)
styolen looks like letters to each other....that line ROCKS!
Cheers dude
...the line does keep moving...an ode to life!
Lovely! I really need to slow down and watch the world around me, there is so much to see!
Our lives are filled with snapshots like this. You bring them to life.
Where you look on and listen in I turn away fearful of intrusion. The voyeur in me gets to peek in when I visit you. Some of these descriptions are perfect.
Lovely...my favorite thing to do too...people watching and ALL the details that go into each and EVERY story.
you're a good observer - i have much potential for improvement at this point..
and you paint such a colorful picture that i think i can see and hear the people (i love the elderly couple..)
my fav lines:
eye lids fill with the weight of the conversation and the stolen looks like letters
& the line moves.....You have such a way with bringing peoples stories to life and reminding us that everyone has a story....happy or sad....good or bad. The way you listen and observe opens my eyes to seeing the world around me through the eyes of others. A gift...thank you.
Brain writes "Snippets"! I love it.
You are such a great observer of humanity. xo
Well I think you got all the nuances just right! but the dyslexic part of me just has to ask: is the observer in line, or watching it ? love your piece here.thanks.
Great atmospheric writing - life observations are great!
I love the way you describe playing with the coffee cup.
People watching, I dig it.
Happy holidays to you and yours Brian.
I think we're at the point where the canes are tapping....
Well, not quite, but love grows even as the body decays a bit.
It does, indeed!
I love the way you see, Brian. Makes me crave a people-watching day!
It sure does. You remind me to pay attention to the world around me more.
Brian, your stories keep me riveted.....
Happy holidays!
Finally back in Casa and able to blog again.
Enjoy rest of the year.... :)
yes, and the sun will still rise and the sun will still set...and live goes on. Great write, I love the different ages you use...
Fantastic write..
"and the line moves"..
You have used this line so well..
love it :)
Good morning my friend, hope you had a wonderful Christmas, "I think today's post is called evesdropping - no, okay observation".....":) Hugs
people slip in and out of our lives as the line moves, leaving us with tidbits of their life stories. . .
It does indeed, bringing us new sights and sounds and glimpses into other worlds. Very nice!
Your poetry always goes straight to the heart in recognition of life.
I've caught up reading all your posts. (Have been away.) It's nice to be back and read your insights.
keep moving the line Brian
Fun being a people watcher and like the fact that you can draw with words.
i like the older couple...still in love! xo
I don't think the lines ever stop moving.
I hope you had a great Christmas Brian! :D
CAPTURING LIFE IS NEVER EASY, WELL WRITTEN :)
nice to read about a lovely couple admiring each other amid the hustle and bustle.
Wonderful Brian. Blessings.
People watching. Ain't it fun.
I like this
Quite fitting for this last, reflective week of the year!
Brilliant as usual Son.
Great Job!
Celebrate the hustle and bustle, the comings and goings of ordinary folks in their own worlds. Lovely.
Another nice slice of life, Brian!
Thank you. Brought a little spark into my life that was gravely wanting at the time I read your piece.
masterymistery at cosmic rapture
it's the little things, isn't it? I love to do this. Sometimes I'm overwhelmed with what's on my own mind, but usually I take in all the people around me. Fun.
Beautiful Brian! How I have missed your writings! Cheers to the New Year!
I love the older couple. Love watching people and how they interact with each other. Wish I had more time to do it.
People watching and bird watching. both need keen eyes, good observation and lots of patience, I'm sure!
Thanks for sharing Brian, and Happy Holidays!
that's a line I want to be in. :)
Brian! Again with the word/idea magic... and the line moves again
you have a keen eye for everyday happenings.
....and the line moves!
love the imagery with the eye lids filling with the weight of the conversation
great write!
Happy New Year!
Wonderful, as always. I can smell the coffee and hear the hum of conversation.
Nice observation. I hope for such a sweet picture in my grey days.
We move in different ways towards the same destination. A good one, Brian.
nothing ever stands still, does it. love the take on this here.
This one is a classic, Brian. I loved it.
An artist is an observer of people, situations, life...and you are a good observer Brian
You forgot to add the middle aged grumpy guy to the coffee house line! :)
Merry Christmas and Happy new Year!
you can take us to the scene :)
trisha
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Brian, Here is a sweet dedication for you.. I Celebrate 150
Wish you a very happy New Year 2011...
--Someone is Special--
I love people watching at the coffee shop! You see the most interesting scenes unfold. The way this is penned brought me right to my favorite seat at my local Starbucks! And I must admit to doing a little eavesdropping myself.
I like this very much...slice of life waiting in line
Wonderful observations!
Wonderfully interesting post...and it moves perfectly with the line that is moving. Really like it! Thanks!
very nice work. i loved the scenes you peiced together here
just came back to read it again :)
Really beautiful
I really enjoyed this one Brian, well done!
A panoramic slice of humanity! I really loved this poem!
Hugs
SueAnn
JP and I have been people watchers forever. He gets so lost in their lives he forgets where he is and who he is with. We make up stories, give them vocations...
Loved this post.
Congrats on POTW
Little vignettes of life...frozen in time by your words.
what cool scene. great rhythm.
Just wonderful, as usual. I love watching people, too.
I love people watching and eves dropping in public. Sometimes it gives me great insight into myself.
Amazing Brian. Such amazing snapshots of life.
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