Thursday, December 2, 2010

55 - walmart romeo

if asked (or if needed)
i would climb atop the
shelves separating
aisles at walmart
and sing loud a sonnet

& wouldn't even stop
when the rent-a-cops
tackled me, slapping
handcuffs on my wrists

(think they would let me
keep them?)

& juliet, don't drink
the poison
i'll be right back,

or call from jail...

Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more,go see g-man.

Just having a little fun tonight...

90 comments:

Mighty M said...

Hope you have a back up plan because Juliet might be too busy shopping to bail you out! :)

♥ Boomer ♥ said...

BRAVO!!!!!

Smart Mouth Broad said...

I don't know how you did it but I just smiled at a poem about Walmart. :-)

Hilary said...

That's too funny. :)

Walmarting is such sweet sorrow. ;)

joanny said...

Well I will comment on this FF55 even though I am still responding to Imprefect Prose folks I guess I will be early here, and late there?
coming and going?

Anyway your flash is catchy for the modern Romero bandit...

joanny

Claudia said...

ha - this is fun - love it!
usually i sing as well while shopping - no sonnets and not on top of the shelves though...smiles

David Waters said...

dude I thought that was you in walmart yesterday :)

G-Man said...

I can hear you screaming as they are carting you off...." Wait, I've only finished 13 lines of Iambic Pentameter".........
Poor Boy!
You need rest Son...You gettin sort of edgy?
You Rock Bub, have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Sophia said...

LOVE it...I'm not too ashamed to admit that I used to play football in the aisles of Wal-mart with my younger brother....oh, and how about using the intercom paging staff to clean up a mess or two from when I overthrew a toss. HAHAHAHA - Seriously. :D

shewriting said...

a forever romantic...there is no hope for you, Brian! lol...enjoyed this super walmart...er, I mean...super silly 55!

Reggie said...

I'm still laughing Brian...too funny

Jerry said...

A sonnet in wal-mart! That's smart. I pray I witness that someday! Brian...this is fun.

Alice Audrey said...

The modern Romeo has such much more trouble making a statement. Sliding off the pyramid of shovels just doesn't have the same cache.

Myrna R. said...

Not sure I even know why, but your story made me chuckle. So cute.

Mrsupole said...

I have never thought it romantic when I have had to ask men to get me something from the top shelves at a store, but now I will look at it differently. Although if he starts climbing the shelves I might have to check to see if he is a monkey man thinking he is climbing amongst the trees. Oh to be just a few inches taller, but then again my knees hurt when I have to get things from the bottom shelves too.

Shopping online is so much easier, but then I get too lazy to get up and get my credit card, which I have now discovered saves me lots of money.

Now you are making me actually want to go to Walmart and shop for things on the top shelves, oh okay, I fibbed, I am gonna stay home.

God bless.

slommler said...

Now this I would love to see and hear!! I will wait for you Romeo!!
Hugs
SueAnn

Katherine said...

I envisioned how that may actually have looked, if it were indeed to happen and I laughed. You're a crack up Brian. Loved it!
My husband, the nutter that he is, has been known to sing a love song or two in the isles of the supermarket on the odd occasion...even going as far as kneeling down on one knee & sometimes even incorporating fanciful dance moves. He's such a dag! but that is why I love him so!

budh.aaah said...

If you asked them politely enough - they just might let you kep the handcuffs :)
Ok jokes apart, it was touching and sweet

Goofball said...

hahaha I can just picture you doing so. Funny

do you have a layer just in case?

Zuzana said...

To a undying romantic, this would be an experience of a lifetime.;))
Somehow this reminds me of the video to Michael Buble song "Haven't met you yet".;)
Have a great Friday Brian;)
xoxo

Cinner said...

Very creative. have a good day.

Selina Kingston said...

"Just having a little fun tonight..." and I just love the results - you're fab!

A Daft Scots Lass said...

Nice twist.

Sumit Sarkar said...

Nice... :)

Sumit Sarkar
http://myriad-sumit.blogspot.com/

Valerie said...

Although I enjoyed reading this, I was reminded of the times I can NEVER reach anything in Walmart. Grr!!

5thsister said...

Aw...sweet. And what's the harm in standing atop the shelves to serenade your true love? I hope they let you keep the cuffs...

Tabor said...

You mind sometimes seems like a room full of ping pong balls flying off in all directions.

forever lost said...

does walmart make you sooo happy! great place for shopping therapy~ I hadnt heard the "rentacop" in a very long time..
fun 55!

Just Be Real said...

Wooo-hoo! Blessings.

iseeyoulookingatme said...

Oh, that made me laugh, such a twist with the Romeo and Juliet thing. There seems to be a romance theme going on today!

Brian Miller said...

tabor...it think that is the nicest thing any one has said in a while...smiles.

McGillicutty said...

Very cute... and Juliet is still in the home decor aisle btw!! LOL

Lorraine said...

You're my hero lol Love this!

HOOTIN' ANNI said...

Clean up on aisle 15!!! Oh Brian, this is so 'holiday perfect'! Alas, poor Brian...Juliet was last seen filling the cart to the brim. Got Visa?



My 55 is posted!! Here is the link for you.

sage said...

As a rule I don't go to Walmart... However, for that, I'll make an exception.

Lori said...

LOL...I like when you have fun...around these parts, groups of kids will go to Walmart and act all crazy just for something to do...oh life in a small rural town...happy Friday Brian!

ladyfi said...

Great fun!

Birdie said...

aww, but this so cute :-)) I hope your Juliet will be patient and wait :-) happy w-e Brian!!

Daniel said...

Yeah, I could see you doing this ... smiles.

MorningAJ said...

Hope your Juliet waits for you!

annell said...

That was cheery! Don't call me, I'll call you.

DJan said...

By the time I get here everybody has made a zillion comments. That's what happens when you live on the west coast... Walmart? I like what Hilary said. I stay away from the place.

Betsy said...

haha...now we've made each other smile today! ;)

TechnoBabe said...

Ah, what we do for love. Ha.

CM said...

Hahaha! Love it!

PS. They don't carry handcuffs, sorry ;-)

TALON said...

lol! Loved it, Brian!

Anonymous said...

this was cute brian. hope real romeo too would have said juliet to not drink the poison, he will be back from dead.

trisha
mydomainpvt.wordpress.com

natalee said...

id pee my pants laughing so hard if i saw it

Helen said...

Just the kind of 'action' Walmart could use!

AmyLK said...

so when they report about this guy that was arrested for singing in WalMart, we should check to see if you need bail money? lol

Bev said...

attention walmart shoppers...lol!
funny one brian...

Heather said...

oh, he he he. you are funny!

hedgewitch said...

HA! I think this has happened to me--never got the phonecall, though, so I'm just assuming...and the handcuffs were probably for shoplifting some skoal, but hey...romantic.

Eric Alder said...

This begs the question: Would Romeo, a wealthy noble Monague, even shop at Wal-Mart?

Nifty 55, Brian!

Paul C said...

Maybe serenading outside her bedroom window would be safer?

The Empress said...

that one was so sweet that I could see the whole thing happen.

You are a good husband.

A good, good husband.

I'll bet your wife smiled when she read that, like I did..

seriously? that poor woman never stood a chance.

Akelamalu said...

Ah what one will do for love! :)

The Exception said...

A fun little verse
A tale in contemporary pros
A Romeo in Wal-Mart
Lacking only the reddest rose.

The handcuffs made me laugh.
Thanks!

Titanium said...

Only you could finagle 'Walmart' into a poem and arrive with 55 Shakespeare-themed words.

SaWeet!

Friko said...

'think they would let me keep them' ?
must be craziest line in this tale.
Brilliant.

Dulce said...

Seen you there-funny image!
:)

Kitty Moore said...

Very modern take on the story!

lakeviewer said...

Oh, I can see you jumping from aisle to aisle before the rent-a-cup catches and rustles you to the ground. Your Juliet is busy though!

magiceye said...

this is absolutely superb!!!!!

hoiden said...

lols...i'm laughing me head off at the image u paint...interesting take on Romeo n Juliet...
PS they may let u keep the handcuffs if u ask nicely

Fireblossom said...

Do you think the Bard ever foresaw Walmart? :-)

KB said...

Perhaps others would join in and you'd have a walmart flash mob.

naramalone.com said...

I have to see the Youtube video of this one. Fun 55.

The Retired One said...

Only you can work Walmart and handcuffs in a piece and make me smile and wondering all at once, Brian. :0}

nance marie said...

enjoyed your fun.

kkrige said...

oh poor sweet Romeo! Hopefully Juliet will have saved you two bits to throw towards bail after leaving Walmart.

lime said...

hahaha, what a fun scene THAT would be!

Teresa said...

Love this modern version of Romeo and Juliet!

moondustwriter said...

Bri do you need bail out money???
you need to stop climbing the walls

funny 55

have a great weekend my friend

Kathy's Klothesline said...

Trying to get on the "People of WalMart" site? Remember to wear something scandal worthy ....

Vicki Lane said...

Totally love it! (I'd like to see the costuming for this presentation.)

Bernie said...

This is funny, I haven't been in Walmart for a long time - think its time I went and looked for Romeo....Hugs

Joanna Jenkins said...

That gave new meaning to "the people of Walmart"
:-)
Hope your weekend is fun. jj

Cheryl said...

Good to read a light'n'lively post from you! Su-weet!

Susan Deborah said...

"Sweet" was the first thought that passed my mind after this delightful read. But I went on and added "adorable," "lovely," and "wow." Sometimes all these words seem so much clich├ęd but these are all I have today! Maybe tomorrow better words will come (winks) but the post will be different.

Joy always,
Susan

Tracy said...

Boy have I missed reading your blog. Got a lot of catching up to do.

hope said...

And now I'll have to explain why I'm giggling the next time I shop there. :)

Pastor Sharon said...

There is always a rodeo at the Walmart where I live. Always cotton candy and funnel cakes, and someone dressed in something. . . looks like pajamas or left over clothes from years ago.

The best part of the show is after 10pm at night. Where these people come from, I may never know.

amandatdodson said...

so great - I want to try it!

Jill said...

Laughing.

Caty said...

sounds like you were having a lot of fun! This one made me smile :)

Magpie said...

Yes, by all means....don't drink the poison.

Kavita said...

hahahha... Juliet would go running after the coppers :) And then she would lure them enough to steal the keys and free Romeo... and then.. back to singing in the aisles of Walmart!! :)
Creative stuff, Brian... (huge smiles)

Syd said...

I can imagine that Walmart Romeo and Juliet.

Marla said...

I'm gonna see you on cops, aren't I? lol