Wednesday, December 1, 2010

42nd St in the snow

in the empty lot,
over grown with brush
and discarded stuff,
i am waiting on the snow
to come cover up
the chalk line, drawn
in the shape of my heart,
wrapping it in a crystalline
blanket (shiver, shiver
it's warm in here)
but soon enough
i will wave my arms
making angels
to trade for people's
smiles, as they stroll by
on the sidewalk, forgetting
it was a crime scene.

a Magpie Tale

106 comments:

TechnoBabe said...

Sad that it was a crime scene. Making happy angels will help.

Matty said...

Yikes. I hope the crime scene is metamorphic.

nance marie said...

everything will look better
wrapped in white

Tom said...

blankets of white...here comes old man winter

Caty said...

hopefully the snow will help resurrect your heart; snow angels are always a good start. I almost wished I liked snow :)

Pauline said...

you start out sounding sweet and end up making my breath catch - how do you do that time after time? Must be skill and not luck ;)

Brian Miller said...

smiles. its just real...

the good news is the heart can be redeemed...

Dulce said...

did not expect that end ... brian --smiles

Monkey Man said...

The great cover up. Until the Spring thaw reveals all.

Goofball said...

I hope your heart doesn't hurt too much. If you want I'll throw you some fresh snow to cover up.

Betsy said...

a blanket of fresh snow makes everything look better....and we got one today! About 2 inches so far!

drybottomgirl said...

The promise that all things can be redeemed is hope that shouldn't be questioned....nice :)

Tina said...

Indeed hearts can be redeemed. Lovely piece.

Reggie said...

Surprise ending...but then you are full of surprises.....nice

by the way...pc is the same, but I'm doing better :-)

Grand Pooba said...

Ok THAT hit close to home!

Sophia said...

Awww.....brought tears to my eyes....make as many snow angels as you need to, Brian. Wave those arms!!

Again, brilliant writing. Thank you for inspiring us all.

Stranger said...

Lovely. It's a little known fact that snow angels warm and thaw even the most icy of hearts.

liv2write2day said...

This was a heart-stopper, Brian...the cleansing effect of snow and angels. Absolutely beautiful.

Mom said...

Remember many snow angels made in our yard....they were always happy angels.

Nessa said...

Snow does cover up all manner of things.

Just Be Real said...

Oh my! Snow does wonder. Fresh powder. Blessings.

Boom Boom Larew said...

When life seems overwhelming, make a snow angel... always good advice!

The Retired One said...

Snow angels make EVERYTHING better....

Bonnie said...

Wonderful jumping off point for the imagination Brian.

Janice said...

Hmmm ...crimes of the heart? Intriguing.

CherylK said...

Wow! Not sure what to make of this one but I think I'm glad there's going to be snow.

McGillicutty said...

I love snow.... not crime scenes.

Bernie said...

I happen to love snow and snow angels, and only see the good in all of this....:-)Hugs

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

choirs of angels singing street songs wrapped in crystalline corsets...

Kathy's Klothesline said...

I love a fresh clean "blanket" of snow. Makes everything look peaceful and covers lots of indiscretions ...........

Daniel said...

The new blanket of snow shows that for a time at least, even the most horrible of things can be transformed.

Joanna Jenkins said...

Nice twist on the snow angles.
Cheers, jj

David Waters said...

I too love how snow comes and seemigly makes everything clean.Brilliant friend:)

Helen said...

I enjoyed this Brian ... for some reason this triggered memories of the old TV show Dragnet. It's all good.

hedgewitch said...

Quite the O'Henry touch in the last line. Nice use of the unexpected throughout, actually. personally, I hate snow angels. Snow gets down your neck and inside your boots and its yuck. But that's just me. ;-)

Vicki Lane said...

Nice contrasts!

TALON said...

This was an intriguing write, Brian. A broken heart does feel criminal...

Lori said...

Love making snow angels...love when you make me think with your words. XX

kkrige said...

hugs
snow angels will help

Magpie said...

The snow may come and cover things up, but someone will always remember what happened there. Sad.

Helena Malheur said...

chilling and very powerful.

Tumblewords: said...

Sometimes it takes more than snow angels and happy faces - beautiful piece...

Angie Muresan said...

Even a crime scene looks... well, less of a crime scene, if wrapped in snow. Wonderful. As always.

budh.aaah said...

If the heart can be redeemed then one can wipe the tears off because it did make me feel sad

Zuzana said...

Oh, dear Brian, your 6th and 7th line just reminded me of the man that recently broke my heart... He drew a picture like that for me...
But, c'est la vie, time to move on and hope the snow fall will cover the image and make me forget...
Beautiful poem today dear friend that spoke volumes to me...
xoxo

christine said...

Snow covering up a cime scene, such a contrast.

Lorraine said...

always leaving a prayer, that's beautiful Brian

Cinner said...

it leaves an eerie feeling, angels will help.

Gabriela Abalo said...

unexpected ending... or maybe not at all, coming from you.

Nice Magpie :)

Valerie said...

I hope the snow angels help...

sheila said...

Gosh I hope this isn't based on a real event.
Would be a bit creepy to make snow angels over where someone just died. *wince* :o)

the walking man said...

One never forgets, not even after the chalk lines or the paint they use here is worn away. *sigh* To many snow angels to forget what lay 'neath them.

slommler said...

Snow does cover a host of evils for sure!! Soften and beautify...that is it's job!!
Unfortunately, I am not a snow person. I hate driving in it. People are crazy!!
Hugs
SueAnn

Mrsupole said...

One never forgets, but time does make it easier. Lots and lots of time.

I guess since it rarely snows enough to stick on the ground for more than a few minutes here in So. CA, I seem to have never made a snow angel, but they look like they might be fun if you can get to somewhere that is warm very soon after.

God bless.

Birdie said...

yes the white snow makes everything cover and make it so peaceful but what about when the snow is gone? ... lovely one, Brian!!

izzy said...

Angels and crime scenes! they certainly go together. I'm glad it is warm in your
heart- chalk line interesting choice...
I really like this one, thanks!

Anonymous said...

Yes, the heart can be redeemed.....

Now these three remain: Faith, Hope and Love. But the greatest of these is Love.
....I love you; always - T

blueviolet said...

Geez, you encounter so much sadness in your life.

annell said...

I wait with you for snow, and hope you are not right, there was no crime here. Loved the chalk line, that traced your heart.

Kate Hanley said...

Maybe the snow is like time, taking the edge off the hurt and the angels are the way we try to remember the positive. Or not. : )

Candie Bracci said...

Snow makes things beautiful but unfortunately it's just a cover up.

Tess Kincaid said...

Lots of dichotomy here. It's amazing what snow can do.

Anonymous said...

i so agree with you. human heart is fortunately redeemable.

trisha
mydomainpvt.wordpress.com

ladyfi said...

Bittersweet and oh so lyrical!

Suz said...

you are a master

Myrna R. said...

I had to think about this one. It's meaning hit me slowly after the surprise ending. Hope your hear is not a cold crime scene, being melted by angels.

This was really good Brian.

natalee said...

I have to say.this is sooo true thats the heart of the city in a way... one minute its a crime scene.. the next minute.. snow angels and rope skipping..as a former nyc girl(i lived there 3 years after college..) it happens in a ny minute...

Slamdunk said...

How do you say so much with just a few words Brian?

Laura said...

All of these vivid images of the season you flaunt here! I always enjoy the way you play with words. Even though the poor heart was outlined in chalk--a victim of crime--I can't help but smile at the imagery. Wonderful, Brian!

JStar said...

Sad..but beautiful

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

Makes all kinds of visions come to mind...

:)

So strange to think of how easy it is for the crime to be forgotten in some cases as we are driven by other attentions, worships and desires...

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

Makes all kinds of visions come to mind...

:)

So strange to think of how easy it is for the crime to be forgotten in some cases as we are driven by other attentions, worships and desires...

signed...bkm said...

Well Done Brian, love the serene flow then the punch line...Great Magpie for this prompt....bkm

Ed Pilolla said...

making angels to trade for people's smiles...
now that is poetry.

Glenn Buttkus said...

Wow, this is a bitter sweet
reminder that in the concrete
canyons, crime can flourish
on every corner, even 42nd
St, and to contrast this
with the bliss of the chalk
heart buried in snowflakes
and the joy of snow angels
is masterful.

The Girl Next Door Grows Up said...

Holy crap I didn't expect that. You write the coolest things!!!!

kavisionz said...

(sob .. sniff).. I suppose it was all good till it became a crime scene..
For some reason, a tragic story of heartbreak seems to be wrapped in those lines, Brian..
Very well written!

Strummed Words said...

And the story continues... Great Magpie.

Lyn said...

Was the crime scene a broken heart? Angels to the rescue!!

LauraX said...

heavy Brian, but beautiful as always.

Kristen Haskell said...

The purity of snow and the simple delight of snow angles can cover the foul nature of humanity at least for the time being. I could picture it so perfectly in your writing.

... Paige said...

Dude!

KB said...

Isn't that a christams movie title? Maybe I've just got Christmas on the brain.

Mmm said...

Yes, excellent writing as usual. sAys so much. Here;s to many many happy snow angels from the heart. :)

Mighty M said...

Hopefully not because they are just used to seeing crime scenes.....

AmyLK said...

Crime scenes are erie. But they have to be covered up some how,

Jannie Funster said...

I wish the snow would come and cover things up too. I'm about ready for a snow angel.

xo

amandatdodson said...

snowy and beautiful and real - this was good!

Vodka Mom said...

oh MAN I might HAVE TO JOIN THIS CLUB.


That was incredible. Just amazing.

secret agent woman said...

Have a few of those crime scenes in my recent past.

Teresa said...

Such a sad tale you've told here. Nicely done.

Anya said...

Hi Brain
Here is all covered with snow!!
Nice to be back in blogging world
Thanks for your concern
and sweet words the last months
:-)

Sumit Sarkar said...

This is a great piece of work...
Thank you for the visit.. :)

Sumit Sarkar
http://myriad-sumit.blogspot.com/

Rebecca S. said...

very much liked the wry image of this one.

Brigid said...

Beautifully spun bittersweet tale.

Cheryl said...

Dark, Brian, very dark. For a second you were going to end on a high note. Nothing quite like making snow angels, is there?

mel said...

mmmm...bittersweet -- it strikes me that it's become too easy to forget.

beautifully written -- as always.

:)

JeffScape said...

Heh. I love your twisted side.

chiccoreal said...

Dear Brian: 42st! Broadway! Very layered with meaning as the "New York snow". You got to go to Brooklin for the clean snow ~ natives should know that by now! Loved the cadence and imagery and the fact your a native New Yorker or Ought to be!

nimaruichi said...

Why do I get the feeling no covering up is going to work, that it is a vain hope!?

ds said...

Oooh, you clever one. "shiver shiver it's warm in here." Even your snow angels are not what they seem. Very nice!

Lydia said...

Snow covers the crime scene but not the crime. This was great, from the tutke (that's title when keyed correctly) to the end.

♥ Braja said...

I don't do snow.

:)

But I did link up as # 111 on this Magpie Tales theme....my first for a while. I really hope this is fictional. Or metaphoric. Or just your mind. Which is ok cos I don't have to live with you....

:)))

Carrie Burtt said...

Brian this is truly azazing!! I read this several times to take in the whole picture....a crime scene, yet still a place of hope.

ninotaziz said...

Whoosh, did not expect that.

Cheers Brian!

Marla said...

Interesting. I read it a few times.