Friday, October 8, 2010

Magpie Tales: Autumn, before the fall

A boy and his dog play in the yard. He must be twelve, maybe thirteen. He is wearing jeans, still clean. The dirt has not found them yet. A white Izod shirt, blue and green stripes. It still smells like the detergent. His smile is all teeth as he runs in the sun.

Brilliant, the colors of the trees. Orange. Red. Yellow. Brown.

The dog is playing, dancing around his legs. Golden fur reflects a healthy shine. The boy dangles a stick in front of him, running. Barking, like laughter as they spin and collapse in a pile, on the grass. Laughing. Barking.

Wind. wind. Trees sway. Leaves fly, nature's confetti.

A thick voice, male. Boy and dog, both raise their heads, looking. A man, khaki pants, blue dress shirt, tucked a the waist. Handsome. His lips move, strong hands help the boy to his feet. Brushing loose grass off the boy. Pulling him into a hug.

Waving, they notice me. Calling me.

World spins, laying on its side. Settling. Focus. Refocus. Leaves falling across a white sky. Black screen. Static.

The glow of the screen pierces the darkness of the room. She clears her throat, running soft fingers across her cheek, capturing the wet line of tears. Her finger stabs the rewind button on the remote, watching the images flow in reverse, back to the beginning. She pushes the play button to watch it, to watch them, again. And again. And again. These images of autumn, so full of life, before the fall.

This is a Magpie Tale.

109 comments:

Marla said...

Really good, Brian. I can feel this one in the pit of my stomach.

ladyfi said...

Beautiful - and oh, so sad!

BeMistified said...

Wow just wow. How sad :(

TALON said...

Too too sad, Brian! You paint so well with words...strong images that linger and hurt!

She Writes said...

ohhhhhh.... You got me.

A Daft Scots Lass said...

Oh my! Brilliant as usual Brian!

She Writes said...

PS Good to see you too :).

OJ Gonzalez-Cazares said...

sooo pretty!!! you have a sensitive heart (don't take me wrong, your scary-dark ones are AWESOME) but this is just brilliant.

joanny said...

Brian

Well written, very sad, difficult for me to read stirs up lots of emotion.

Joanny

adeeyoyo said...

Very good, Brian, and I was sucker-punched again! Lulled and then wham! Nice. I suppose we must never take things for granted...

Zuzana said...

This was so sad and made my heart sad, as I am experiencing a loss right now...
Beautiful sentiment that only you can capture so poetically by words.
Have a beautiful Saturday dear Brian,
xo

Arnab Majumdar said...

I've been away too long from this blog. Far too long. This was the kind of stuff that I had missed out on for so long...

This has got to be one of the most touching things I've ever read for a long time now. Staying at a place that seems to be devoid of human emotion, it's amazing to get to know that side of me again...

Cheers...

Miss Nikki said...

Oh my, talk about an unexpected and captivating slap in the face... wow!

Katherine said...

Oh, melencholy! This was both beautiful & sad but a lovely Magpie!
Well done yet again Brian.

Just Be Real said...

Booo hoooo sad Brian. :(

JeffScape said...

This is a good one. Made even better by that title.

Susannah said...

Wonderful writing!

Anonymous said...

a beautiful story ending with a deep sadness.

have a lovely weekend brian.

trisha
http://mydomainpvt.wordpress.com

Becky said...

Oh so sad.Very emotional Brian.

Jim Swindle said...

Well-done.

Claudia said...

fantastic write brian - i like the use of details - just like you would notice and become familiar with all single details when watching a video again and again after everything fell..and you managed to put all the hurt into this last sentence

5thsister said...

"so full of life, before the fall"

You drew me in and I want to know more! A wonderful write, my friend.

Cheryl said...

This one hurts in its beauty and longing.

Valerie said...

You have the knack of moving me from happy to sad. Brilliant work, Brian.

Eva Gallant said...

That sure was a mood changer. Well done!

Lorraine said...

oh...I can't imagine it..oh Brian

Birdie said...

sad, sad one ... but beautifully written. happy w-e Brian!

Vicki Lane said...

Beautiful--and heartbreaking.

the walking man said...

I no no one that has not had death touch them in the most intimate of places.

Susan Deborah said...

First: the pun in the title is brilliant!

And as always you have told something poignant and true. Sad.

Joy always,
Susan

gayle said...

This is a sad but true tale for many! Beautifully done!!

DJan said...

Oh Lord, Brian. How you do it, I'll never know. But I felt it viscerally. I've been there, too.

Dave King said...

Your Magpie Tale is also a prose poem. Impressive.

annell said...

Such a beautiful write!

CM said...

Sad twist but very well written. I can feel the love between the father, son, and dog.

PS. We always debate getting a dog for the boys. We love golden retrievers and yellow labs, but they are so much work! Maybe when the boys are older and they can help.

Daniel said...

Dang. I know this one.

ellen abbott said...

Damn Brian. I totally did not expect that, a blow to the solar plexus.

Mighty M said...

A heart breaker!!

Mama Wheaton said...

Very sad.

Janice said...

Oh, my! This was wonderfully touching; it's going to stay with me a while.

sage said...

It's a magical time of the year, but so sad because of what's ahead. A Powerful tale you tell!

Myrna R. said...

Lovely Brian, as always. The tender sadness touches the heart deeply.

Hilary said...

That's so beautiful but tugs strongly at the heart.

kathew said...

Heartfelt- poignant- and sad.

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

Brian...agh..you should put warnings on things like this.

Beautiful.

Helen said...

When I read your words 'her finger stabbed' I realized how profoundly sad your Magpie was .. a masterful write!

Baino said...

Bonsoir mon Ami. Ah dogs, boys, leaves, the cool of the evening. I wish I had videos of my life 20 years ago, toddlers and their dad but I don't.

Steven Anthony said...

emotionally brilliant as always my friend ;)

Nancy said...

This was really good. I feel sad, but your words always evoke emotion. You are very good at that. :-)

Lyn said...

You did this so very well... Let memory, without rewind, perhaps serve us best...

Strummed Words said...

What an interesting vignette. Loved the surprise ending!

sheila said...

Ahhhh! I loved this!

btw, your comment at my place gave me a lump in my throat, very sweet!

BLOGitse said...

brrrrrr I'm freezing................

Dulce said...

How do you write these things? YEsterday so beautiful a 55 and now this so sad, yet- yes, so beautiful magpie...

Who Is Afraid of Alfred Hitchcock? said...

Hi! Brian...
Brian said, "She pushes the play button to watch it, to watch them, again. And again. And again. These images of autumn, so full of life, before the fall.

What a great play on words and what a nice Magpie Tales too!

Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-D

Jannie Funster said...

Everybody's posts are putting tears in my eyes today.

Awesome. As usual.

xo

alex :) said...

really good i enjoyed it :)

Catherine said...

This was beautiful. I love the though of barking being a dogs laughter.

Cindybrown said...

Brian, wow!! Need I say more WOW!!

Mama Zen said...

Sad. So sad.

The Bug said...

Sigh. AGAIN - you did it again.

Selma said...

You really know how to tug at my heartstrings. Your descriptive skills are exemplary.

william said...

brian you are a master storyteller this was superb ;)

Prayer Girl said...

You surprised me which is one of the reasons this was so good. Great writing as always.

PG

secret agent woman said...

It is bittersweet to see images of those we have lost.

KB said...

Sad but very well written.

Angie Muresan said...

Oh, how terribly sad, Brian. Tears brimming on this end of the screen.

Unknown Mami said...

I've got a lump in my throat.

gospelwriter said...

Oh my, the story really drew me in with its wonderfulness, then, the fall... so sad in the end. Well done!

steviewren said...

You pulled me right into the scene...I was outside with the boy and at the same time it was me watching the video. Wow! Well done.

Reflections said...

Sad, but pulls the reader in, unknowingly relaxed, playful...then in creeps the pain.

Well written.

Teri said...

Brian--I wrote in a similar vein I think to what you have. And I didn't even know it. I came here after posting mine tonight and felt the same sadness, the same cadence, the same melancholy in both of our Magpies. Bravo I say. To both of us.

tracyhsays.com said...

Fantastic, Brian, a brilliant way of imaging with words.

tracyhsays.com said...

Fantastic, Brian, a brilliant way of imaging with words.

Patience said...

sad but beautiful, autumn means so many different things to people.

Deborah said...

Well that made me cry! ... but brilliantly written :o)

Candie Bracci said...

Really intense Brian

EKSwitaj said...

The structure of this piece seems very haibun-esque.

little hat said...

"Life before the fall" great use of the season Brian. I liked the style you used here. Very direct almost clipped. Maybe it felt like autumn?

Caty said...

very vivid...this was great :)

willow said...

Nice one, Brian. Kinda reminds me of the poignant scene in The Sixth Sense where she's watching her wedding video.

spacedlaw said...

Awww, such longing, such sadness.

signed...bkm said...

replaying memories over and over...and the tears...beautiful and sad...bkm

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

haunting

Lena said...

That was deep. Moving. I didn't well up. Honest.

Kim A. said...

I just started listening to the beginning of "The Shack". Your post today gave me the same feeling..the exact same feeling. That moment when you know what is going to happen and can't stop yourself from reading on. I wish you would continue this one..just maybe a small series? Have an awesome 10-10-10

♥namaste♥

Tracy said...

I always read the beginning of your posts waiting for the other shoe to drop. Smack. xxoo

Karen S said...

I love the warmth of color and "nature's confetti" -- a nice bittersweet write.

THE BEATY said...

nice. Also is that you're art inm the post?

Pat said...

That one punched me right in the heart. Yowzer!

ds said...

Oh, ouch! Right to the solar plexus. Powerful and so sad...

SW said...

nature's confetti....nice magpie. as someone already pointed out, you are the king of the sucker punch...congrats

Goofball said...

what happened to them? :(

Carrie Burtt said...

Brian this is truly perfect for the prompt...griping and sad, beautifully written! :-)

PattiKen said...

This is so sad, all the more so because it speaks of our need to pick and pick, keeping to wound open and bleeding. Good writing, Brian.

Beedeebabee said...

OMG, that one was so good...so sad, but so good. Loved it. :)

Tumblewords: said...

Autumn strikes me the same way - the dying time. You've written it in a lovely readable form!

otin said...

Very sad and beautiful at the same time!

Mary said...

Brian, this was so very good!

Abhilasha-The Desire said...

Awesome once again.... I almost swallowed tears... Terrific work brian

madamebutterfly said...

How sad...

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RNSANE said...

I started off thinking, "What a sweet story of a boy and his dog" -then, whammy. So well done.

kathi harris said...

So bittersweet...so bittersweet.

Mmm said...

Oh whoa. i am left sppechles wiht that last line. Brilliant...as usal. Antohr great piece. Willow msut love your company on magppie Tales. Great interpretation adn imagination there.

Mmm said...

Great imagination and interpretation here Brian. That ending left me speechless. you add so much to magpi tales. love them all.

writersisland said...

Invite you to try the prompts at Writer's Island...

The Retired One said...

Did you do the leaf painting too? It is gorgeous.
This one is so sad Brian...so very sad....but then I want to give her a huge hug and remind her to take the time to celebrate their LIVES as much as she mourns the loss. And to cherish the happy memories so that they do not get lost in the mire of grief.

Lydia said...

Brian, this is so very special. Goosebumps and a tear.
(I am only now getting around to reading Magpie #35 at other blogs. Have been so behind that I won't allow myself to even look at the prompts for #36 and #37 yet....)