Brilliant, the colors of the trees. Orange. Red. Yellow. Brown.
The dog is playing, dancing around his legs. Golden fur reflects a healthy shine. The boy dangles a stick in front of him, running. Barking, like laughter as they spin and collapse in a pile, on the grass. Laughing. Barking.
Wind. wind. Trees sway. Leaves fly, nature's confetti.
A thick voice, male. Boy and dog, both raise their heads, looking. A man, khaki pants, blue dress shirt, tucked a the waist. Handsome. His lips move, strong hands help the boy to his feet. Brushing loose grass off the boy. Pulling him into a hug.
Waving, they notice me. Calling me.
World spins, laying on its side. Settling. Focus. Refocus. Leaves falling across a white sky. Black screen. Static.
The glow of the screen pierces the darkness of the room. She clears her throat, running soft fingers across her cheek, capturing the wet line of tears. Her finger stabs the rewind button on the remote, watching the images flow in reverse, back to the beginning. She pushes the play button to watch it, to watch them, again. And again. And again. These images of autumn, so full of life, before the fall.
This is a Magpie Tale.
109 comments:
Really good, Brian. I can feel this one in the pit of my stomach.
Beautiful - and oh, so sad!
Wow just wow. How sad :(
Too too sad, Brian! You paint so well with words...strong images that linger and hurt!
ohhhhhh.... You got me.
Oh my! Brilliant as usual Brian!
PS Good to see you too :).
sooo pretty!!! you have a sensitive heart (don't take me wrong, your scary-dark ones are AWESOME) but this is just brilliant.
Brian
Well written, very sad, difficult for me to read stirs up lots of emotion.
Joanny
Very good, Brian, and I was sucker-punched again! Lulled and then wham! Nice. I suppose we must never take things for granted...
This was so sad and made my heart sad, as I am experiencing a loss right now...
Beautiful sentiment that only you can capture so poetically by words.
Have a beautiful Saturday dear Brian,
xo
I've been away too long from this blog. Far too long. This was the kind of stuff that I had missed out on for so long...
This has got to be one of the most touching things I've ever read for a long time now. Staying at a place that seems to be devoid of human emotion, it's amazing to get to know that side of me again...
Cheers...
Oh my, talk about an unexpected and captivating slap in the face... wow!
Oh, melencholy! This was both beautiful & sad but a lovely Magpie!
Well done yet again Brian.
Booo hoooo sad Brian. :(
This is a good one. Made even better by that title.
Wonderful writing!
a beautiful story ending with a deep sadness.
have a lovely weekend brian.
trisha
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Oh so sad.Very emotional Brian.
Well-done.
fantastic write brian - i like the use of details - just like you would notice and become familiar with all single details when watching a video again and again after everything fell..and you managed to put all the hurt into this last sentence
"so full of life, before the fall"
You drew me in and I want to know more! A wonderful write, my friend.
This one hurts in its beauty and longing.
You have the knack of moving me from happy to sad. Brilliant work, Brian.
That sure was a mood changer. Well done!
oh...I can't imagine it..oh Brian
sad, sad one ... but beautifully written. happy w-e Brian!
Beautiful--and heartbreaking.
I no no one that has not had death touch them in the most intimate of places.
First: the pun in the title is brilliant!
And as always you have told something poignant and true. Sad.
Joy always,
Susan
This is a sad but true tale for many! Beautifully done!!
Oh Lord, Brian. How you do it, I'll never know. But I felt it viscerally. I've been there, too.
Your Magpie Tale is also a prose poem. Impressive.
Such a beautiful write!
Sad twist but very well written. I can feel the love between the father, son, and dog.
PS. We always debate getting a dog for the boys. We love golden retrievers and yellow labs, but they are so much work! Maybe when the boys are older and they can help.
Dang. I know this one.
Damn Brian. I totally did not expect that, a blow to the solar plexus.
A heart breaker!!
Very sad.
Oh, my! This was wonderfully touching; it's going to stay with me a while.
It's a magical time of the year, but so sad because of what's ahead. A Powerful tale you tell!
Lovely Brian, as always. The tender sadness touches the heart deeply.
That's so beautiful but tugs strongly at the heart.
Heartfelt- poignant- and sad.
Brian...agh..you should put warnings on things like this.
Beautiful.
When I read your words 'her finger stabbed' I realized how profoundly sad your Magpie was .. a masterful write!
Bonsoir mon Ami. Ah dogs, boys, leaves, the cool of the evening. I wish I had videos of my life 20 years ago, toddlers and their dad but I don't.
emotionally brilliant as always my friend ;)
This was really good. I feel sad, but your words always evoke emotion. You are very good at that. :-)
You did this so very well... Let memory, without rewind, perhaps serve us best...
What an interesting vignette. Loved the surprise ending!
Ahhhh! I loved this!
btw, your comment at my place gave me a lump in my throat, very sweet!
brrrrrr I'm freezing................
How do you write these things? YEsterday so beautiful a 55 and now this so sad, yet- yes, so beautiful magpie...
Hi! Brian...
Brian said, "She pushes the play button to watch it, to watch them, again. And again. And again. These images of autumn, so full of life, before the fall.
What a great play on words and what a nice Magpie Tales too!
Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-D
Everybody's posts are putting tears in my eyes today.
Awesome. As usual.
xo
really good i enjoyed it :)
This was beautiful. I love the though of barking being a dogs laughter.
Brian, wow!! Need I say more WOW!!
Sad. So sad.
Sigh. AGAIN - you did it again.
You really know how to tug at my heartstrings. Your descriptive skills are exemplary.
brian you are a master storyteller this was superb ;)
You surprised me which is one of the reasons this was so good. Great writing as always.
PG
It is bittersweet to see images of those we have lost.
Sad but very well written.
Oh, how terribly sad, Brian. Tears brimming on this end of the screen.
I've got a lump in my throat.
Oh my, the story really drew me in with its wonderfulness, then, the fall... so sad in the end. Well done!
You pulled me right into the scene...I was outside with the boy and at the same time it was me watching the video. Wow! Well done.
Sad, but pulls the reader in, unknowingly relaxed, playful...then in creeps the pain.
Well written.
Brian--I wrote in a similar vein I think to what you have. And I didn't even know it. I came here after posting mine tonight and felt the same sadness, the same cadence, the same melancholy in both of our Magpies. Bravo I say. To both of us.
Fantastic, Brian, a brilliant way of imaging with words.
Fantastic, Brian, a brilliant way of imaging with words.
sad but beautiful, autumn means so many different things to people.
Well that made me cry! ... but brilliantly written :o)
Really intense Brian
The structure of this piece seems very haibun-esque.
"Life before the fall" great use of the season Brian. I liked the style you used here. Very direct almost clipped. Maybe it felt like autumn?
very vivid...this was great :)
Nice one, Brian. Kinda reminds me of the poignant scene in The Sixth Sense where she's watching her wedding video.
Awww, such longing, such sadness.
replaying memories over and over...and the tears...beautiful and sad...bkm
haunting
That was deep. Moving. I didn't well up. Honest.
I just started listening to the beginning of "The Shack". Your post today gave me the same feeling..the exact same feeling. That moment when you know what is going to happen and can't stop yourself from reading on. I wish you would continue this one..just maybe a small series? Have an awesome 10-10-10
♥namaste♥
I always read the beginning of your posts waiting for the other shoe to drop. Smack. xxoo
I love the warmth of color and "nature's confetti" -- a nice bittersweet write.
nice. Also is that you're art inm the post?
That one punched me right in the heart. Yowzer!
Oh, ouch! Right to the solar plexus. Powerful and so sad...
nature's confetti....nice magpie. as someone already pointed out, you are the king of the sucker punch...congrats
what happened to them? :(
Brian this is truly perfect for the prompt...griping and sad, beautifully written! :-)
This is so sad, all the more so because it speaks of our need to pick and pick, keeping to wound open and bleeding. Good writing, Brian.
OMG, that one was so good...so sad, but so good. Loved it. :)
Autumn strikes me the same way - the dying time. You've written it in a lovely readable form!
Very sad and beautiful at the same time!
Brian, this was so very good!
Awesome once again.... I almost swallowed tears... Terrific work brian
How sad...
I started off thinking, "What a sweet story of a boy and his dog" -then, whammy. So well done.
So bittersweet...so bittersweet.
Oh whoa. i am left sppechles wiht that last line. Brilliant...as usal. Antohr great piece. Willow msut love your company on magppie Tales. Great interpretation adn imagination there.
Great imagination and interpretation here Brian. That ending left me speechless. you add so much to magpi tales. love them all.
Invite you to try the prompts at Writer's Island...
Did you do the leaf painting too? It is gorgeous.
This one is so sad Brian...so very sad....but then I want to give her a huge hug and remind her to take the time to celebrate their LIVES as much as she mourns the loss. And to cherish the happy memories so that they do not get lost in the mire of grief.
Brian, this is so very special. Goosebumps and a tear.
(I am only now getting around to reading Magpie #35 at other blogs. Have been so behind that I won't allow myself to even look at the prompts for #36 and #37 yet....)
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