i ate a plum today.
i say...
i ate a plum
& while this may seem
holy unremarkable to some,
pushing my mouth through
the brief tension of it's skin,
juices coursing down my chin
i sucked the sweet from my teeth
so as not to waste any, and i am
unashamed to say the rag as well,
i used to clean my face.
i ate a plum today
& if you don't see the miracle in that,
then you have never subsisted
for weeks on rotting apples, stolen
from beneath the farmer's tree,
at night, to avoid the kiss of
rock salt on your backside
from his gun, mama mushing
them with her wooden spoon
into apple sauce to hide the spots
so let me say again...
i ate plum today
& i saved the seed,
cause this boy
can still dream
this little bit of povertry was written for Imperfect Prose.
And One Shot Wednesday is still going on, so write a poem and join up.
Wednesday, October 13, 2010
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I always find myself wondering do these writings come from your own true experience....they are always wonderful.
Sometimes, I too, take a step outside of myself as I do the everyday, "normal" activities. When I can view the whole scene, above the fray, that is when I can most enjoy, most appreciate what I am tasting. Sweet.
so, what's a plum taste like?
i stole a nibble off a feral crabapple yesterday...tart, and oh yeah, miraculous
I can relate to stealing apples as a child and then getting a belly ache from eating too many.
mama's are resourceful to make apple sauce to hide the spots
sounds diving mate, great post :)
There is sublime magic in the little things, the awakening of the senses, the reminder and perspective this piece brings.
The first thing I thought of when you talked of stealing apples was this scene from The Wizard Of Oz:
Scarecrow: Come along, Dorothy. You don't want any of *those* apples.
Apple Tree: Are you hinting my apples aren't what they ought to be?
Scarecrow: Oh, no. It's just that she doesn't like little green worms!
:) I love plums...this is cute
as always an enjoyable read. there is more depth to this than some realize--in my opinion... :-)
smiles,
Only those who have been without can appreciate the simple goodness of life.
i want a plum now...but have only figs in the kitchen..but i guess there's a fig miracle as well
love this one brian. it has that sensual touch, expresses gratefulness and links to memories of the past - nice!
You just seem to have an endless supply of ideas and vivid images in the brain of yours!
I thought this was a published piece--it is SO good. you are so talented Brian. Such a way with words and love how you tie all this together. I want to go eat a plum now too! :)
Finally the term "getting your rocks off" makes sense to me.
Haha! Great poem. I know just what you mean, I love biting through a plum's skin. Sometimes it's tough to find a good plum but when you do... man oh man!
The old farmer near my elementary school never got me with his shotgun of rock salt - but he got my friend. Back then the sheriff just laughed and my friend took a week of from school. I wonder what would happen nowadays...
Breath-taking, Brian!
The part about mama hiding the apple spots -- brill!
I'ts all a miracle indeed.
xo
This was so cute.I loved it!
It's awesome to sit back and savor the little things in life that we are fortunate to have. I remember stealing peaches off the neighbors tree and they were the sweetest peaches ever. :) Oh to be young and carefree again.
Plums...... yummy!
It is good to remember things like that. I remember a glut of pears.
Maggie X
Nuts in May
good of you to point out the unseen that can sometimes be seen, depending...
thanks
plum kisses from me
The plum in itself is a miracle and that it was eaten by someone who needs is an even bigger miracle. The seed can bring more life into his world.
Wonderful experience that you have shared.
Thank you
SueAnn
Oh, it's sad to think that this is reality for some people. You did a good job of making me believe the poem.
amazing post...when did we become so deserving?? what a beautiful reminder of how lucky we are for the ability to eat - whatever the dish and taste - but not to feel hungry. Little and daily miracles indeed!!
this is based loosely on an interaction i had with a boy that had never had much and was in awe of some of the most simple things...he was 12...and never had ice cream
Brian:
Beautiful,,,Yes I wonder too -- is this from your own or someone close to you experience???
I can sort of relate, for in the summer months away from the city life at the tiny cottage , we would walk on to the neighboring farms, and pick fruit and some times we would get chased by this nasty farmer and his son with their shot guns, they never did shot or aim to catch us -- looking back it was more a game of scaring the kids but it never worked, for we always came back again...
Cheers,
Joanny
mmm plums. We take the little things for granted don't we?
So true!
lovely poem, brian. i really enjoy the imagery. intense, but beautiful.
this was awesome :) Not everyone can put themselves in someone's shoes like that.
I love the gratitude involved in this writing...thankfulness for something we would too easily eat without even paying attention to the miracle.
Thanks for your kind encouragement over at my place.
That was plum good! And, yes, I like the Kindle though I can understand the romance of actual books. I have many friends who want to read words written on real paper and hold a real book in their hands.
Plant the seed and some day you may have a hundred juicy plums to savour the sweetness of. This was wonderful & light Brian ... things are a little heavy today in Blog land, even at my place! So this was much needed. Loved it!
Anyone who has never sucked the sweet from the rag, raise your hand? Nice touch there.
I have some aging bananas that are going into a fruit smoothie and some over-ripe tomatoes that will become tomato juice tomorrow. I understand your poem today. I saw the miracle.
♥namaste♥
It looks as if there are a few miracles still happening around the world. We have hope for this planet yet!
Your plum pit is going to yield you some nice juicy gnats so you might want to rethink saving that.
I love the imperfection of this. It flowed
We have to go without for awhile to truly appreciate the blessings in life.
Thanks for putting this experience into verse Brian--it carries a powerful message.
a beautiful write - it is a miracle, isn't everything?
It would be a miracle if I ate a plum.
you are a very good writer. I look forward to reading your posts every week! THank you for painting such good pictures in my imagination!
Wonderful words! Is there anything as delicious as a newly-picked plum?
my little miracle is buying toiletries that we could never afford, hairspray and sweet scented body spray, those make it on my grocery list, those are things i enjoy giving to my little girls, so they may go out into the world with their pretty hair brushed and smelling nice after a morning bath.
those were things i didn't get as a child, and i marvel in today.
Wonderful piece, vivid details about such a simple pleasure.
Plums are fantastic that way -- the seeming firm hard skin breaking to reveal such juicy soft fruit. Delicious. Thanks for the reminder of the little pleasures we take for granted.
I loved the seed being linked with a dream...and future. Great writing, Brian!
I hope you saved some for us.
That was endearing and precious. To want to even suck the juice from the rag...what a visual picture!
A lovely way to express gratitude. It's simply amazing to feel that we can relish something so much!
Joy always and many tastes to you :)
~ Susan
You find so much beauty and meaning in the simple moments, as they bring back meaning of moments that were less than simple.
Always a joy to see what your poetic mind is contemplating.;)
Have a lovely day dear Brian,
xo
I loved this, Brian! Everything on this earth is a miracle and it is such a shame that we take most of it for granted. You often open my eyes - thank you!
smiling I'm ... if we all could take a joy in everyday unseen miracles the world could be a different place I believe ... happy day Brian!
Excellent,Brian. Count your blessings comes to mind.
Thich Nhat Hahn describes eating a tangerine much the same way, being fully in the moment and aware of the gift of it. I'd say, having lived through his country at war, he knows.
Hi Brian. Nothing pithy to say. Just hi.
Superb !! :) I love the end !!! it's beautiful.
Wonderful!!And we take plum for granted too often.
For me, I have a heart for not wasting what nature provides, so the apples picked up and made into applesauce is what I like about this. Well, I like lots more but that is the blessing.
You just put so much in every words...I'm always awed
This reminds me of William Carlos Williams and Langston Hughes. Sometimes the smallest unexpected happenings can bring us equally unexpected delights. I'm off to find a plum now......
I do, I do Brian...indeed a miraculous experience when one is fully present! Beautiful poem...one of my favorites of yours!
Oh, this is beautiful!
We take so many things for granted. We forget to appreciate what we get to eat every day when some get nothing or eat of a garbage can. Thank you for reminding me of this Brian. XX
Gratitude is sacred. Your poem says it all.
Thanks as always for your comments to me. (Calling me a poet - what a compliment!)
So true.
People don't see the blessings they have, that others would think that they had died and gone to heaven if they had them.
That's the world...you just don't know what you have, that others would give everything to have.
Everything is a miracle, if you are in the moment.
I never had to subsist on stolen, rotting apples, but I still appreciate the miracle of eating a plum. Life is full of miracles.
I ate a plum yesterday and although I've never had to subsist on rotten apples, I was still grateful.
i always feel triumphant after reading your prose, brian... and this, with you saving the seed: my heart said, "hoorah!" and i knew some small part of life had been redeemed. so well written. as always. e.
Sucking the sweetness out of the rag?! Wow, that's taking it to a whole new level! Yes, I do know the feeling you captured so beautifully. But I also enjoy the fun of taking neglected things like stolen rotten apples, and making them into something fun like apple sauce.
As long as you didn't eat the last of the plums from the fridge. A plum, a little miracle all by itself.
hahaha. the only comment I can come up with is that I hate plums ever since overdosing on them as a little kid. :)
ah my gosh... if we all only knew what a gift it is to eat a plum!! love this, brian!
this is really, really beautiful and touching brian.
a thing which is nothing for a person is miracle for another.
very true.
trisha
mydomainpvt.wordpress.com
Well, I've never known poverty like this, but I've known extreme food deprivation due to years-long illness. And believe me, I would appreciate that plum! You've captured well the essence of delicious delight in simple things restored to one who has none.
And did I catch just a whiff of William Carlos Williams in there? Just a breath of homage?
I swear I could taste that plum,Brian.....I figured you wrote this from the perspective of seeing someone you knew who did not have a good life finally tasting the sweetness of life (and the plum). What I love about being a grandma is that I can watch my grandkids see and try new things for the first time and all of the wonder that goes into those experiences.
I just bought some plums at a farmer friend's. You brought them to life. Thank you for this poem! Keep writing, and dreaming. Blessings, M.
So. I claim to not really dig poetry. But whenever I come here, I like.
We had a crotchety old neighbor who had a plum tree. He liked me and would offer me one when I walked past. I remember the juicy delicious.
Now? Plums make my mouth itch. Really.
OK. Now I want some plums. Very effective.
I enjoyed this. It reminds me of a poem about a plums by William Carlos Williams. I think I may g home and eat one. - bill
Really makes you think about what we have to be thankful for...wonderful prose Brian! :-)
Hi! Brian...
I liked this poem a lot and the fact, that you described the exact feeling that a person experience while eating a plum. Wow! what a childhood remembrance too!
I always find myself wondering do these writings come from your own true experience..."
Like the very first commenter I wonder about that too!
Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-D
"the brief tension of its skin" - what a great description! You are the KING of words!
I see a big miracle in this poem...This was heart felt...wonderfully done!
Cheers!
It's always hard to appreciate even the little things when life seems filled with negative and downward spiraling things. Your words really encouraged me to try to take a step aside each day and find that one small thing that IS a miracle in my life, regardless of the curent struggles. Hugs!
unbelievable tone and lesson, both so matter-of-factly stated, that I feel like they hit me right between the eyes. awesome, write, dude!
amazing...you are so gifted.
I can't write to save my life... I'm so in awe of your wonderful gift. That was beautiful! :)
I love this. It's real and raw.
The simple miracles that are everyday moments...like stopping to smell the roses. You put forth the plight of the down and out very compassionately.
such a simple and pure act has vivid words! great poem!
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