Thursday, October 7, 2010

55 - what you say when you breathe

when our love was young,
we would talk on the telephone
until we ran out of words &
then just sit and listen
to each other breathe,
as if it was some archaic
language between our hearts...

...beside you tonight i hum
along, as you speak those
same tongues, in your sleep,
savoring every syllable.

Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.

114 comments:

Monkey Man said...

You hang up first. No, YOU hang up, first...............Okay, then let's write a 55 for G-man.
My 55 is HERE .

Liza said...

I soooooo remember telephone breath.

Sometimes I talk from my dream space which my husband finds amusing. He just snores,
I don't laugh.
; )

Katherine said...
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Katherine said...

Brian this was beautiful... I believe there is some archaic unspoken language that occurs between those in love.
Monkey... my hubby & I used to play the Hang up game & then he would say..."Hey Kath..you know what..." and down would go the receiver... he was a bugger like that, but it always made me laugh!!

Dianne said...

Hmmm, the charge from just sharing space and time...
I think we put too little attention on the joy of breathing.
HAKAWE, as gman says,
Dianne

Myrna R. said...

So romantic. Wow, you made me remember things long forgotten. Thanks.

Dianne said...

oh yeah, mine is up, for the bloggers also reading these comments, you of course already know!

Debbie said...

You nailed that period of our lives so well!

G-Man said...

Brian....?
You KNOW don't you?
This was Perfect Son!!!
Right On!
Thank you for always being so supportive...
Have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Me said...

Awww...you know I love it when you write mushy stuff for your wife, right? :)
-C

Alice Audrey said...

Aw. Sweet, sweet. Gives me the warm fuzzies.

Bonnie said...

... and then you start to breathe in sync, and there is but one breath...

Mighty M said...

Oh, this was so pretty. I can remember long phone conversations like that......you just don't want to let the other one go. Now it's "I'm fine, can you get bread on your way home". :) But the love is as strong as ever even we don't talk as much.

OJ Gonzalez-Cazares said...

yeah.. new generations won't get it though... between the TXT,LOL and OMG, they is no room for romanticism anymore!! (ouch, I sound so "mature"!!)

Mama Zen said...

Gorgeous!

CM said...

So sweet.

A very thoughtful poem...beautiful. It reminds me of the early days when my DH and I were dating. We would talk until 2 or 3 in the morning, and then get up to go to work the next day.

I like how you connected that with today. Very touching.

clean and crazy said...

monkey man is too much, it took the romance out of the moment!! i was all wrapped up in the 55 and then... no you first, no you

Jannie Funster said...

Ahhhh. True sweet love living on. Definitely an archaic language that never ends.

So sweet!

xo

lime said...

the more that changes (with much time) the more that stays the same (if you're lucky). just wonderful.

Cindybrown said...

When my husband and I dated we had one phone and it had like a 50 foot cord on it, just enough to get to my bedroom and get the door shut and lay on the floor. This brought back nice memories. Listening to someone breathe is so amazing. Very nice Brian!

AlpHa Buttonpusher said...

That is so amazing. I had tell this one to my BF since the nature of our relationship is (pretty) long distance and this has touched me on so many levels.

moondustwriter said...

are the snores Morse code for something???

Those wordless moments are priceless.

Nice 55 Bri


Moonie smiles

Caty said...

those are great phone calls...nice 55 :)

Teresa said...

How sweet! I just love this.

KB said...

Just knowing he's on the end of the phone makes me grin. He doesn't have to say a word. Love this.

TALON said...

So lovely, Brian. I'm laughing at Monkey Man's reply - I remember those endings to phone conversations so well - lol!

secret agent woman said...

I used to love the late calls just to say good night.

kkrige said...

I too love your romantic side Brian. sweet 55

Sophia said...

Monkey Man's comment made me do a snort-laugh kind of thing. SO embarrased to admit that. LOL NEvertheless, it is so true. I can remember a few moments growing up getting caught up in the "phone" thing and simply just sitting and listening to the silence. Silence CAN be beautiful, huh? :)

remember me said...

i hate it when you have nothing to talk about :)
great 55 :D

Tracy said...

And the phone had a cord AND a ROTARY DIAL. :-) Have a great weekend!

adeeyoyo said...

We did that too AND @Monkey Man!

Kay said...

*sigh* i remember...

sentimental

deb said...

awesome.

and sweet . and vulnerable.

ladyfi said...

Romantic! Lovely.

Cinner said...

I have not thought of this in such a long time. yes just to enjoy the same breath. love is great is it not. take care.

steveroni said...

Then...and NOW! Somehow I don't know which is BETTER!

Your usual tres bien, Brian! Always a true pleasure to read your stuff!

PEACE!

Stranger said...

Monkey Man said it for me.
I remember falling asleep on the phone back in those good old days of young love and the serenade of speechless breathe. I hope he wasn't listening to me snore.
Great 55! Have a fantastic weekend!

PattiKen said...

oh, that's way better than counting sheep! ;-)

quilly said...

My love and I spent almost a year on opposite ends of the country, and many, many wordless phone calls just so we could be close. Sweet. You brought tears to my eyes. Especially since my love is preparing to leave me for a two week business trip and soon we will repeat the scenes.

Joanna Jenkins said...

Ahhhh, nice.
jj

Susan Deborah said...

Monkey man stole my thoughts. Yo, MM! Love inspires so many 55s, One-shots and posts.

Love, love, love . . .

Love and joy always,
Susan

joanny said...

At least you still find her fascinating lol... nice 55er, I am still on Thursday, sigh....I think I lingered on that proverbial limb too long.

Cheers,
Joanny

S said...

Oh, that is just lovely. ♥

Adrenalynn said...

That was lovely! Now I want to call my husband up and breathe a little :)

I came over from Jannie's, thought you'd like to know!

Pseudo said...

Ah, the endless conversations....

anthonynorth said...

I remember those calls. Nice one.

Libby said...

Hi Brian love your poem x

tony said...

Beautiful.Perfect.Complete.Bravo!

slommler said...

Oh sweet love! How tender you have spoken. Softened my heart for sure!
Hugs
SueAnn

Valerie said...

There's no romance in my soul, the only telephone breathing I recall is the heavy kind... OK I'm kidding. I did actually like this very much.

5thsister said...

Oh to go back to that time! What is it that happens to us as we get older and take one another for granted?

Alan Burnett said...

Nice poem, the first two lines just took me back 45 years to when I would talk on the telephone to Issy until the money ran out. Tanks for taking me there.

TechnoBabe said...

You are so right. Sometimes we do the same thing. It is a joy to just listen to each other sleep.

Lorenzo said...

Nice, Brian. You should start a new 55 fiction, based on 55 sighs instead of words ...

Tabor said...

This has to be one of my favorites. How you capture that common beauty in all our lives and put into 55 words, I do not know!

Lorraine said...

your memories live, love...wow

natalee said...

ahhh memories hubby and i would talk on the phone all night till someone fell asleep when we were dating.. even tody we talk at night until someone dozes off.. love this...////

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

:) Love this.

drybottomgirl said...

Very nice, it reminds me of another: "Grow old with me, the best is yet to be" - E.B.B. have a great weekend.....

Prayer Girl said...

You are such a romantic. I just love it.

PG

the walking man said...

Funny thing about my sleep as I age...I get less and have no memory left over from it after waking except pitch black nothingness.


Dianne wrote on my blog that she wants you to do a book. If you want the information on how I do mine you have my email. Be glad to walk you through the ins and outs of the self publishing.

HOOTIN' ANNI said...

OH my lord Brian....this melts my heart!!! I love it...I LOVE every word and breath. Whoa.

izzy said...

true ! and the sea does it too!
Cheers-

BLOGitse said...

ooops, our love is 'old' but we still talk like our love was 'young'... :)

DJan said...

I remember talking on the old rotary phone to some ancient love interest, no idea what we said to each other, a reminder of times past. Now we carry cellphones around in our pockets and we are never far away from each other.

blueviolet said...

This is a real treat for us too since it was a long time in the making.

Anonymous said...

so loving and beautiful. love is just like that.

trisha
mydomainpvt.wordpress.com

Daniel said...

Been there man. Been there.

Brian Miller said...

thanks everyone...completely off topic but is anyone else having a hard time with their reader? all the pics are blown up and there is no scroll bar to see older posts?

Chris G. said...

I like that simple of the breaths, "as if it was some archaic
language between our hearts..."

Such subtle lines, the heart can move in. Such intricacy and intimacy in the most simple things. Beautiful 55, very romantic.

Bossy Betty said...

Gorgeous--loved those days of first love.

Akelamalu said...

...some archaic language between our two hearts...

Wonderful! You're such a romantic. :)

mrsnesbitt said...

yes - I remember the very words Monkey Man wrote! lol!

Wonderfully romantic - and that is just you! lol!

My 55 is up - be it later than normal.

gayle said...

I remember these times! Oh to go back!!

I am having a major problem with the dashboard ......that's where I read my blogs. So I did some research and changed the lanugage to Spanish........parts of are in spanish but the post are in english and it's back the way it was yesterday!!

AngelMay said...

Very nice, Brian.

Otter Thomas said...

Very nice although I don't remember the breathing thing. I think we were just together so much that we didn't need phones.

Claudia said...

how beautiful and how intimate
your love so shines through..and i can almost hear her breathe..

Thom said...

I wonder what they call today's breath...Text Messaging Breath...no emotion no nothing. Boring. I love what we got to experience and how you captured it. Very well done. Have a terrific weekend :)

magiceye said...

delicate and romantic!

Eric Alder said...

Quite a romantic 55, Brian!

Teri said...

Thinking about breathing made me think that I had a dream last week about being able to breathe under water. Someone was with me too. Perhaps...

Jaime said...

very sweet.

too bad to sounds i listen to at night sound more like a buzz saw :P

annell said...

Really nice. It is interesting all the ways we communicate love. It has to be so.

Meeko Fabulous said...

Isn't that an awesome feeling?

Donnetta Lee said...

Ah, the language of love...sigh. D

MorningAJ said...

That's gorgeous!

Fragrant Liar said...

Lovely. I remember doing that too, and I am hoping to do it again soon with somebody extraordinarily special.

Fireblossom said...

Sweet. :-)

william said...

ah fond memories loved this mate :)

Hilary said...

Beautiful. It sounds to me as if your love is still very young in so many ways.

Arts Web Show said...

This is a neat 55, brian

Steven Anthony said...

Dude, no one does it like you...you express brilliantly;)

ds said...

Can't add to what's been said before: what a lucky couple you are! How beautifully you express your feelings. Thank you.

Emmanuel Ibok said...

LOL...who wouldnt remember such memories...you are a wonderful storyteller, B...I respect your abilities.

Cheers.

gospelwriter said...

ah, so beautiful, so romantic - lovely 55!

Susan at Stony River said...

What a lucky, lucky narrator.

(I hope it's a true one)

Marla said...

Love it because I still live it. Wonderful....

Zuzana said...

That was beautiful and touching, your are such an romantic and that is so alluring.;)
xo

Graceful said...

Oooooh, I like this one. Breathy and romantic -- I haven't had a telephone conversation like that in good long while!

RNSANE said...

I remember, when I was a student nurse, talking late into the night, with the resident with whom I was so madly in love...we were both always so weary, we'd fall asleep on the phone, night after night!

hope said...

Ah, a touch of sweetness in a 55...nice! I bet the truth of it is even nicer.

Who Is Afraid of Alfred Hitchcock? said...

Hi! Brian...
This post is very revealing and quite nice too...So many of the previous commenter's have written or expressed my thoughts about your 55 too!
Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-D

Diane T said...

I am impressed. A lot of couples run out of words...then it's peaceful and relaxing. Just breathe lOL.

Unknown Mami said...

I'm a sucker for love.

Tina said...

Oh yes, I remember those days. You nicely captured those moments.

Candie Bracci said...

Truely beautiful!

Eaton Bennett said...

Brian, listen to your love breathe while sleeping, has to be up there with watching the stars. :))

Goofball said...

aaah teh sound of your partner sleeping is so comforting & sweet, I love it...then I love to turn around and doze off myself in that comfort


the late night never-ending never-truly-talking telephone conversations have stopped however. That would be silly if you're both at home right :p

Beedeebabee said...

Hi Brian! This is beautiful! :)

Mary said...

Brian, this is so very sweet!

Shell said...

At 111 comments, I am sure this has already been said, but...this is pure and delicate charm. A memory moment so familiar... I simply could not love this more...Truly:)

Mmm said...

utterly wistful and beautiful. SIGH.....

The Retired One said...

Very touching, Brian..I do that too...I listen to the rise and fall of my husband's breathing in the dark until it lulls me to sleep.