Thursday, October 28, 2010

55 - human, no superhero

stuffed shirt hollow
cornfield scarecrow
lashed to this pole
i hang in effigy
insane with pain
in my chest
right below the S
you paint on me
it's daunting
like kryptonite
choking tight
around my neck
weighin' me down
& i'm cryin' out
"please lois lane
come & save my day."

i am
no superman.

Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.

100 comments:

Whitesnake said...

Yes ya butt looks big!

Brian Miller said...

haha whitesnake...yeah i actually know the answer to that one...which is why there is no picture...smiles.

Steven Anthony said...

some days are mor super hero like than others;)

Monkey Man said...

We are no Superman. Great 55, Bri. Mine 55 will be HERE at 5PM Pacific.

Mighty M said...

Aren't we all? :)

CM said...

Way cool poem. Very fitting for this time of year with the scarecrow and Superman.

Wait....aren't all men supposed to be Superman? ;-) Just kidding.

Daniel said...

I used to think I was him. Those days are long gone.

Sophia said...

What?! You're not a superhero?!? :D

Jen said...

Sorry, she's not coming. Neither is Prince Charming...

william said...

brilliant poem Brian :0 I cannot believe you guessed my movie, thats not a familiar movie, well done mate :) I am impressed..

Bonnie said...

yes, but you act on your compassion more than most ... let's say not a superman, but a damn fine example.

Myrna R. said...

This was really cute. I hate to think the scarecrow is in pain, considering there's no real superman.

It's amazing what you can say in so few words!

The Silver Fox said...

Very impressed. You struck the ol' comic fan inside of me with that one.

Eva Gallant said...

Poor scarecrow/superman...a stake through his heart.

She Writes said...

Ah, too bad! So many hoping for a superhero somewhere!

Tracy said...

The words make me think of the Train song "Save the Day". One of my favorites.

Vodka Logic said...

You are superman to me.. your writing amazes me daily.

I've got a 55 this week.

Vodka Mom said...

hundreds of comments each DAY?

oh yeah. You ARE superman.



and the writing rocks, as well.

Jannie Funster said...

Oh no.

Am I off the mark this week with you all in Halloween bloody Murder Mode.

I ain't no Superman, Dave Matthews, right?

xo

Eric Alder said...

Have you been watching re-runs of "Scrubs" Brian?

(My favorite TV show of all time!)

For those of you who don't know, the show's theme song is "(I'm no) Superman" by Lazlo Bane.

(I hate having to explain my jokes!)

Boom Boom Larew said...

We've all got our kryptonite!

G-Man said...

Every Seinfeld episode had a reference to Superman.
You may not be Superman, but you could be the Flash!
Excellent 55 Son...
You Rock The Planet...
The Daily Planet....(sorry)
Have a Kick Ass Week-End

Fireblossom said...

Superman had blue hair. What's up with that?

Teresa said...

I love this one! I'll never look at a scarecrow the same way. Poor guy.

Kat_RN said...

I was going to make a silly comment about "Scrubs" but I see I am not the only one. Now I have that song stuck in my head.
Happy Halloween,
Kat

Velvet Over Steel said...

Well, another very interesting and original poem, Brian!! :-)

Have a wonderful Friday!!
Hug,
Coreen

Sara @ Domestically Challenged said...

well, it's cool. I am superwoman, on tuesdays and fridays. That was a great one!

OJ Gonzalez-Cazares said...

I believe an honest human recognizing its own vulnerability, sensibility, honesty is indeed braver, wiser and way stronger than a superhero!

tim said...

this is cool man.. i gotta try to do it..

Magpie said...

Did your Lois Lane expect too much of you? It's always better when we share our super hero chores with others. :)

Linda said...

We are, none of us, superheroes! You say remarkable things in just those few words Brian.

moondustwriter said...

wow there is a message there Super Bri

nice 55


thanks always for the One Shot partnership

moonie smiles

kkrige said...

pretty mighty burden to bear
I don't blame you for not wanting that "S"

Alice Audrey said...

I save my Superman frequently. The fact he doesn't mind is part of his appeal.

Yvonne Osborne said...

You make good use of every naked word. And maybe this is comic but something rings painful, like a clown with painted smile in place.

Cloudia said...

Aloha from Honolulu

Comfort Spiral

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Beedeebabee said...

Well...Superman couldn't write like this! ;)

sage said...

Nicely done, I had a chuckle and thought about a colleague of mine from India who was here for halloween and someone had a superman costume for him...

Lu Ann said...

:) great 55.
No superman... but maybe a writer ;)

Captain Dumbass said...

We all need our Lois Lane.

secret agent woman said...

"f I go crazy then will you still
call me Superman?" (Three Doors Down)

Bernie said...

Happy Halloween my friend....:-)Hugs

TALON said...

What a great 55! Poor Superman...he had so much to take care of!

ladyfi said...

Great poem! Guess we can't be superheroes every day...

magiceye said...

intriguing...!

Help! Mama Remote... said...

Your hoking me. lol

Marla said...

Really great, Brian.

Matty said...

Poor scarecrow. Just like Rodney, he gets no respect.

Bimbimbie said...

Lois is busy. You shouldn't have worn those red undies over your blue tights Superpen ;)

Kulio said...

I'd really like to try this. I would so love to read what you wrote before you counted the words...and is the end result better from chopping off the extras? curious.

Belinda said...

What's wrong with living up to a wife's expectations that get higher and higher with each passing year? Great 55.

anthonynorth said...

I've always thought there was something strange about people who wear their underpants on the outside.
Nice one.

MorningAJ said...

You don't have to be Superman as long as I don't have to be Lois Lane.....
:)

slommler said...

I can imagine it feels like that with some men...like everyone is looking to them to save the day!! Such big shoes to wear! Not to mention, tripping over that cape!
Hugs
SueAnn

C.M. Jackson said...

ah lois lane saving superman;-) sweet--great 55! gave a wonderfgule weekend

tony said...

To Infinity & Beyond!

Austin said...

This one was good Brian . . . and I do hope you have that Superman suit, bring it over!

Scott said...

dang, with all of that stuff rattling 'round inside, I dunno if the scarecrow really ought to get a brain, wow!

neat piece B

Zuzana said...

I feel this is a very intimate poem. But then everyone I guess takes anything they want from words.;)
In any case, your writing is always thought provoking and stirs emotions.;)
Have a great Friday dear Brian,
xoxo

forever lost said...

ohhh that is goood!

mine is up too!
http://jennasboots.blogspot.com/2010/10/friday-55_29.html

Lorraine said...

Very cool, and yet you're so high above me...

Just Be Real said...

Awwwww, there are days when our strength is much more than others. Great poem Brian.

Hope said...

okay, fine! I'll be superwoman and save all those scarecrows. :)
great read!
thank you

Hilary said...

Poor scarecrow.. no wonder he's crying.. his S looks so big in that outfit. ;)

drybottomgirl said...

We used to make scarecrows all the time but when our last when fell apart nobody wanted to make a new one. Great 55 and I hope you and yours have a superb weekend....

Travel & Dive Girl said...

Great 55. We all need a hero sometime...

the walking man said...

Just curious but would Penny Lane be able to save you seeing as you aren't Superman?

lime said...

well now i feel very sorry for the scarecrows of the world!

BLOGitse said...

autch! insane with pain...

Madeleine said...

I like the torment idea in this one it could be a metaphor for writing even. :O)

JStar said...

I love this Halloween 55 Brian :)

Lori said...

Great words Brian! You really are a superhero with words!

Happy weekend to you and yours...and of course Happy Halloween!

Mona said...

Lois lane told me to tell you that she heard you, but she said she couldn't make it since she has an important appointment with her manicurist!

And yes, she also told me to tell you This : :P

deb said...

who could take the pressure.

and I am quite certain you are a hero to many

Akelamalu said...

You may not be superman Brian but you sure write super 55s!

Jill said...

You may be NO superman but you certainly dash out those "55's" in a superhuman way.

Claudia said...

..and i bet she saved his day..and well..for the wife who loves, he's always superman, even if he isn't..

Friko said...

but then superman wouldn't have been as erudite about asking for help, would he?

Jessie said...

i'll never look at a scarecrow the same way again!!!

lol

warm smiles,

Vicki Lane said...

Love it!

Tina said...

I'm suspecting there are more layers here than I found...well done!

Dulce said...

Yes you are! ;)
Superman I mean, well Superbrian to me!

PattiKen said...

Ah, we have a scarecrow and a tin man. I think I'll go look for a lion and maybe even a wizard.

Clever, Brian. I hear echoes of a backstory here...

blueviolet said...

None of us are. :(

sarah said...

great 55....in some ways...I think you are a superhero of sorts...your writing so often shows the love and compassion you have in your soul...

Carmi said...

I had another in an endless series of superhero-themed discussions with our youngest - 10 years-old - last weekend. We concluded that superheroes are overrated, and that true heroes live among us, only a lot more anonymously than the comics would have us believe.

You are a phenomenally gifted writer.

RNSANE said...

You are something else - 86 comments. People must wait breathlessly for your posts. No wonder, they are always so good and today is no exception!!

Mama Zen said...

Excellent!

masterymistery said...

cool, enjoyed it thoroughly. though it's more poetry than fiction.

masterymistery at cosmic rapture

Betsy said...

really, really nice!

I try to be superwoman! :)

joanny said...

Brian:

You may not be a "superman" but you are a super kind and compassionate man, so glad I got to know you through this media and your written words.

Nice 55er, have a warm and loving week end with your family and friends.

Cheers,
Joanny

Candie Bracci said...

Really nice Brian as usual!:)

Lulda Casadaga said...

I'll be your Lois Lane! ;)

Who Is Afraid of Alfred Hitchcock? said...

Brian-What a great use of 55 words...
Human, but no Superhero...We all are
human(s), even though we sometimes think we are Superheroes, but in the end life let us know that we are all just...human-beings.
Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-D

Katherine said...

Oh but I bet your wife and kids think so!!!
Poor Super scarecrow ... where's Lois when you need her! Loved this lighthearted fun 55

Anonymous said...

good one. :)

trisha
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hope said...

That scarecrow has more guts than the one I took the photo of last week...the weeds won and were growing over him! Nice one.

Paul C said...

Yes, we vulnerable sojourners need help from the antiheroes of life.

Mmm said...

I love the last few lines in particular. Amazing words from you as always. you have this knackfro saying so much with so little, Brian. Cheers! :)

Goofball said...

cute