stuffed shirt hollow
cornfield scarecrow
lashed to this pole
i hang in effigy
insane with pain
in my chest
right below the S
you paint on me
it's daunting
like kryptonite
choking tight
around my neck
weighin' me down
& i'm cryin' out
"please lois lane
come & save my day."
i am
no superman.
Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.
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Yes ya butt looks big!
haha whitesnake...yeah i actually know the answer to that one...which is why there is no picture...smiles.
some days are mor super hero like than others;)
We are no Superman. Great 55, Bri. Mine 55 will be HERE at 5PM Pacific.
Aren't we all? :)
Way cool poem. Very fitting for this time of year with the scarecrow and Superman.
Wait....aren't all men supposed to be Superman? ;-) Just kidding.
I used to think I was him. Those days are long gone.
What?! You're not a superhero?!? :D
Sorry, she's not coming. Neither is Prince Charming...
brilliant poem Brian :0 I cannot believe you guessed my movie, thats not a familiar movie, well done mate :) I am impressed..
yes, but you act on your compassion more than most ... let's say not a superman, but a damn fine example.
This was really cute. I hate to think the scarecrow is in pain, considering there's no real superman.
It's amazing what you can say in so few words!
Very impressed. You struck the ol' comic fan inside of me with that one.
Poor scarecrow/superman...a stake through his heart.
Ah, too bad! So many hoping for a superhero somewhere!
The words make me think of the Train song "Save the Day". One of my favorites.
You are superman to me.. your writing amazes me daily.
I've got a 55 this week.
hundreds of comments each DAY?
oh yeah. You ARE superman.
and the writing rocks, as well.
Oh no.
Am I off the mark this week with you all in Halloween bloody Murder Mode.
I ain't no Superman, Dave Matthews, right?
xo
Have you been watching re-runs of "Scrubs" Brian?
(My favorite TV show of all time!)
For those of you who don't know, the show's theme song is "(I'm no) Superman" by Lazlo Bane.
(I hate having to explain my jokes!)
We've all got our kryptonite!
Every Seinfeld episode had a reference to Superman.
You may not be Superman, but you could be the Flash!
Excellent 55 Son...
You Rock The Planet...
The Daily Planet....(sorry)
Have a Kick Ass Week-End
Superman had blue hair. What's up with that?
I love this one! I'll never look at a scarecrow the same way. Poor guy.
I was going to make a silly comment about "Scrubs" but I see I am not the only one. Now I have that song stuck in my head.
Happy Halloween,
Kat
Well, another very interesting and original poem, Brian!! :-)
Have a wonderful Friday!!
Hug,
Coreen
well, it's cool. I am superwoman, on tuesdays and fridays. That was a great one!
I believe an honest human recognizing its own vulnerability, sensibility, honesty is indeed braver, wiser and way stronger than a superhero!
this is cool man.. i gotta try to do it..
Did your Lois Lane expect too much of you? It's always better when we share our super hero chores with others. :)
We are, none of us, superheroes! You say remarkable things in just those few words Brian.
wow there is a message there Super Bri
nice 55
thanks always for the One Shot partnership
moonie smiles
pretty mighty burden to bear
I don't blame you for not wanting that "S"
I save my Superman frequently. The fact he doesn't mind is part of his appeal.
You make good use of every naked word. And maybe this is comic but something rings painful, like a clown with painted smile in place.
Aloha from Honolulu
Comfort Spiral
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Well...Superman couldn't write like this! ;)
Nicely done, I had a chuckle and thought about a colleague of mine from India who was here for halloween and someone had a superman costume for him...
:) great 55.
No superman... but maybe a writer ;)
We all need our Lois Lane.
"f I go crazy then will you still
call me Superman?" (Three Doors Down)
Happy Halloween my friend....:-)Hugs
What a great 55! Poor Superman...he had so much to take care of!
Great poem! Guess we can't be superheroes every day...
intriguing...!
Your hoking me. lol
Really great, Brian.
Poor scarecrow. Just like Rodney, he gets no respect.
Lois is busy. You shouldn't have worn those red undies over your blue tights Superpen ;)
I'd really like to try this. I would so love to read what you wrote before you counted the words...and is the end result better from chopping off the extras? curious.
What's wrong with living up to a wife's expectations that get higher and higher with each passing year? Great 55.
I've always thought there was something strange about people who wear their underpants on the outside.
Nice one.
You don't have to be Superman as long as I don't have to be Lois Lane.....
:)
I can imagine it feels like that with some men...like everyone is looking to them to save the day!! Such big shoes to wear! Not to mention, tripping over that cape!
Hugs
SueAnn
ah lois lane saving superman;-) sweet--great 55! gave a wonderfgule weekend
To Infinity & Beyond!
This one was good Brian . . . and I do hope you have that Superman suit, bring it over!
dang, with all of that stuff rattling 'round inside, I dunno if the scarecrow really ought to get a brain, wow!
neat piece B
I feel this is a very intimate poem. But then everyone I guess takes anything they want from words.;)
In any case, your writing is always thought provoking and stirs emotions.;)
Have a great Friday dear Brian,
xoxo
ohhh that is goood!
mine is up too!
http://jennasboots.blogspot.com/2010/10/friday-55_29.html
Very cool, and yet you're so high above me...
Awwwww, there are days when our strength is much more than others. Great poem Brian.
okay, fine! I'll be superwoman and save all those scarecrows. :)
great read!
thank you
Poor scarecrow.. no wonder he's crying.. his S looks so big in that outfit. ;)
We used to make scarecrows all the time but when our last when fell apart nobody wanted to make a new one. Great 55 and I hope you and yours have a superb weekend....
Great 55. We all need a hero sometime...
Just curious but would Penny Lane be able to save you seeing as you aren't Superman?
well now i feel very sorry for the scarecrows of the world!
autch! insane with pain...
I like the torment idea in this one it could be a metaphor for writing even. :O)
I love this Halloween 55 Brian :)
Great words Brian! You really are a superhero with words!
Happy weekend to you and yours...and of course Happy Halloween!
Lois lane told me to tell you that she heard you, but she said she couldn't make it since she has an important appointment with her manicurist!
And yes, she also told me to tell you This : :P
who could take the pressure.
and I am quite certain you are a hero to many
You may not be superman Brian but you sure write super 55s!
You may be NO superman but you certainly dash out those "55's" in a superhuman way.
..and i bet she saved his day..and well..for the wife who loves, he's always superman, even if he isn't..
but then superman wouldn't have been as erudite about asking for help, would he?
i'll never look at a scarecrow the same way again!!!
lol
warm smiles,
Love it!
I'm suspecting there are more layers here than I found...well done!
Yes you are! ;)
Superman I mean, well Superbrian to me!
Ah, we have a scarecrow and a tin man. I think I'll go look for a lion and maybe even a wizard.
Clever, Brian. I hear echoes of a backstory here...
None of us are. :(
great 55....in some ways...I think you are a superhero of sorts...your writing so often shows the love and compassion you have in your soul...
I had another in an endless series of superhero-themed discussions with our youngest - 10 years-old - last weekend. We concluded that superheroes are overrated, and that true heroes live among us, only a lot more anonymously than the comics would have us believe.
You are a phenomenally gifted writer.
You are something else - 86 comments. People must wait breathlessly for your posts. No wonder, they are always so good and today is no exception!!
Excellent!
cool, enjoyed it thoroughly. though it's more poetry than fiction.
masterymistery at cosmic rapture
really, really nice!
I try to be superwoman! :)
Brian:
You may not be a "superman" but you are a super kind and compassionate man, so glad I got to know you through this media and your written words.
Nice 55er, have a warm and loving week end with your family and friends.
Cheers,
Joanny
Really nice Brian as usual!:)
I'll be your Lois Lane! ;)
Brian-What a great use of 55 words...
Human, but no Superhero...We all are
human(s), even though we sometimes think we are Superheroes, but in the end life let us know that we are all just...human-beings.
Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-D
Oh but I bet your wife and kids think so!!!
Poor Super scarecrow ... where's Lois when you need her! Loved this lighthearted fun 55
good one. :)
trisha
mydomainpvt.wordpress.com
That scarecrow has more guts than the one I took the photo of last week...the weeds won and were growing over him! Nice one.
Yes, we vulnerable sojourners need help from the antiheroes of life.
I love the last few lines in particular. Amazing words from you as always. you have this knackfro saying so much with so little, Brian. Cheers! :)
cute
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