Wednesday, September 8, 2010

the world keeps spinning

there is an indian woman
walking down the side of the road
full flowing gown and head dress
but i can see her eyes,
that's how i know, and
she's talking on the phone,
animated, giving it to the other party
and i wonder what she will do
when she sees the dead dog
in the ditch, head turned
over his shoulder, looking back,
perhaps to see who hit him
but that unsuspecting woman is
home, embroiled in strife
for taking a life, already in distress
for putting her kids on the bus
this morning, but they will be okay,
their teacher is playing games
so they can learn each others names
when johnny stands up and asks
in his loud outside voice to go to
the bathroom, but he really just
wants to get out of class and sneak
a peek at whats for lunch
on the pink flier taped on the wall
by the door to the cafeteria
and maybe get a smile from Mrs Morris
the lunch lady, but she is outside
on the stoop sucking in the last
little bit of her cigarette,
before the rush and
laughing at the custodian trying
to get off the phone with his wife
an indian lady walking down the
side of the road, surprised to see
a dead dog and i am still stuck in
traffic, trying to get home,
when she turns, looks me right
in the eyes and smiles, for
no apparent reason, at all,
other than we are all human.

Written for Imperfect Prose and Theme Thursday.

119 comments:

Bonnie said...

I do love how you can create a poem out of any situation. Genius!

Just Be Real said...

Thank you Brian for sharing. Blessings.

Kulio said...

Wow, hidden stories inside everything - we never know how things connect.

Sam Liu said...

So many lives, all happening at once across cities and countries and the world. So much life and activity, we are all wrapped up in our own stories, all complex in our own way...but throughout everything, we are untied as one, we share our common humanity.

Your poem is beautiful, Brian. Not only just rhythm, pace and wonder of the words, but the enduring message weaved within them. Stunning piece.

Tina said...

I love little slices of life like this. Really nice.

CM said...

Stream of consciousness story telling! You are an observer of the world!

Steven Anthony said...

Because we are all human...love it, everyone needs to think that way;) brilliant as always friend.

william said...

highly packed in imagery mate, brilliant :)

Kim A. said...

We have 10 rescue dogs. I pray for animals that are hit in the road. I hit a dog once and still feel the loss. You put it into words well today.

♥namaste♥

TechnoBabe said...

Your post shows how we are all connected and we each have our part to live. Even the dog.

Kathy's Klothesline said...

Love it. A smile costs nothing and gives so much. I will try to remember that today.

n. davis rosback said...

around

otin said...

You writing songs for Bob Dylan now? hehe

June_Butterfly said...

It is so amazing how a beautiful poem can be created from everyday occurences and emotions.

Love your works.Hope someday I can write as well as you do.

Kate Hanley said...

That was just great. A wonderful snapshot and great use of Reason.

Cindybrown said...

Very nice, well said. Life in the truest form..

Tracy said...

Really nice, Brian. Except the dead dog makes me sad. :-( Oh, and CURSES ON TT this week. LOL

Lesley said...

Life is a continuous spiral that ends in a circle.
Love the stream of consciousness story-telling.

Everyday Goddess said...

best reason ever!

great storytelling and themeing!

steveroni said...

Brian there is no way for me to let w how much I appreciate your stories, so unworthy am I to partake in the wisdom in your blogs:

with each
you teach
You know
you show
you set
you let
you break
you make
you try
we cry
we guess
you bless
and on and on, it goes
which way the wind blows

i cannot thank you enough here
for all your written stuff here

--steve

Nancy said...

Vivid. Real. Haunting. Surprising. Well done.

KB said...

We miss out on so much when we are wrapped up in our own little world. Love this!

Kris said...

Two thumbs up.

elizabeth said...

I love the circle of this...love it! Love the beautiful ordinariness of the people you describe.

lakeviewer said...

Wow, the constant is the Indian Woman in a head dress and the narrator who sees her. The rest, minutes in school on opening day. Wow! The world is at your beck and call, Brian!

Lori said...

Love this...you are so good with your words Brian...I loved when I read..."other than we are all human"...very nice. :)

Myrna R. said...

How generous you are to share your talent here. I love this poem, it was sad, yet so true, we are all human.

You have an uncanny ability to observe life. How awesome.

Caty said...

this reminds me of the movie "crash"...everyone intertwined. Nice :)

Deborah Carr said...

What a beautiful crosscut of life. Busy moments, frozen in words.

Julie said...

Good circularity to this, Brian. Reminiscent of the Blanchette-Pitt film, 'Babel'.

Melissa said...

oh, such a great ending. i'm so glad she looked at you! isn't it nice to be reminded every once in a while that we're connected? that we're not all just silos in a field somewhere. i love that one smile and look can remind us of that. thanks for painting such a beautiful picture through your words. fun to stumble upon your blog tonight.

adeeyoyo said...

Yes, everything is circles, circles... links in a chain. Lovely one, Brian.

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

I love how this gets started...I can see her walking..and the story just fans out, in this human sort of relay race..just beautiful

and I'm not saying this to be trite or tacky but...
I would love to see this on video

Rene

Teri said...

ooohhhhh....that head over the shoulder, looking back to see who hit him. Love that! And, it looks as though you have inspired Steveroni too!!! Good job, Brian. You inspire others. That's what a good teacher does.

TALON said...

Loved it, Brian. The flow, the characters so clearly and cleanly depicted, the ordinary moments in people's lives made special..just wonderful.

Slamdunk said...

Well done Brian. Life in full-circle--things are connected if we take the time to realize it.

Susan Deborah said...

That is what matters at the end of the day: "we are all human." As Sam mentioned, it is wonderful how different lives and actions are connected in this piece.

A weaver of magic, I must say!!!

Happy Happy Thursday!

Joy always,
Susan

She Writes said...

A smile in traffic always helps!

Little Ms Blogger said...

I love how you creatively showed us truly a small world we live in.

If I had read these 5 years ago, I might not have gotten it. However, after negotiating with someone in Texas, whose bf from college was dating a gf of mine, I get it.

heartspell said...

A full circle piece cleverly written. Reminded me of the movies, Crash and Babel. :) Heartspell

she said...

very real, very touching. We are all connected in some way, even if it takes being stuck in traffic to slow us down enough to realize it. Checking out some imperfect prose this week before I give it a whirl.

Boonie S said...

Another great piece of work Brian. Thanks for this.

All the best, Boonie

Zuzana said...

I love to see the world through your eyes; the things, images and subjects you pay attention to, creating a story with eloquence of words.
Beautiful and so sincere, always...
xo

Valerie said...

Honestly, this is quite remarkable.

Goofball said...

wow I usually don't observe that much when stuck in traffic

i'm busy singing along with the radio at such moments or phoning friends (or pitying myself for being stuck in traffic)

slommler said...

Those brief connections can be so powerful! And we are all intertwined in this game we call life!! Very intriguing poem Brian!
Loved it!
Hugs
SueAnn

Scott said...

brian, wonderful wow! What a circular tale!

Nessa said...

I hope people remember we are all human as Saturday approaches.

Emmanuel Ibok said...

After reading this,I called a couple of friends to come read. They were as amazed as me. You are one of the very few writers that inspire me.

Super Cheers!

JStar said...

Oh Brian...This is brilliant...Details so vivid that I felt like I was there...

Kim Hyland said...

What an intricate circle! And to think that God sees all of this . . wow. People are so intriguing. Thanks for seeing.

Kim Hyland said...

What an intricate circle! And to think that God sees all of this . . wow. People are so intriguing. Thanks for seeing.

Stacy (the Random Cool Chick) said...

More brilliant prose from you, Brian! I'm with Bonnie - you can create a poem out of any situation. You truly are a genius! :)

Daniel said...

I think this is a run-on sentence. Smiles. Love this, very Brian-esque, post.

Gaston Studio said...

Six degrees of separation. Very good one Brian!

Vicki Lane said...

I really love this -- the interconnectedness of all things and how brilliantly you illumine a moment with a few well-chosen words.

Six Feet Under Blog said...

I almost forgot that it was a poem. Sounds like a story!

Pauline said...

oh the lovely circular progression/digression!

Francisca said...

"..smiles for no apparent reason, at all, other than we are all human" works for me, Brian.

natalee said...

What a circle!! Loved this.. just a reminder everyone and everything is somehow connected

Alan Burnett said...

I keep reading and re-reading it and finding new levels of meaning.

Tabor said...

I do not know how you do it but this is well woven.

Gabriela Abalo said...

amazing Brian... beautifully written :)

happy TT

Prayer Girl said...

How grateful I was for that Indian woman's smile. Loved this Theme Thursday.

PG

AmyLK said...

So lovely! I love how you can wrap 2 themes into one post. Maybe that woman was me, smiling at you for no reason! I've been smiling at peeps a lot lately! :)

Jill said...

You weaved that one together brilliantly.

Lorraine said...

You break my heart Brian

Mama Zen said...

This flows like a river and carries you along. I love it!

Bossy Betty said...

Lovely! What wonderful observations.

emily wierenga said...

love love love this, the way it flows seamless, the way you make me see it all unfolding and keep me guessing until the punch-line: "we all are human." and suddenly, everyone and everything connects, and life makes sense. well done.

Pat said...

Great story. I love how it builds.

Help! Mama Remote... said...

I'm sure the person on the phone wish she was smiling.

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

A day in the life. Beautifully imperfect prose!

Bing (PinkLady) said...

this was a fun read, brian... i am impressed at how you made a mundane day sound poetic.=)

annell said...

Nice post, and it is all a circle....

Who Is Afraid of Alfred Hitchcock? said...

Hi! Brian...
What a very descriptive, well-written
poem. I also like the way you have one situation connect to another situation...I alway wonder what the conclusion will...not be, but bring to your readers in order for us to take away.
Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-D

BLOGitse said...

I can't say anything new.
So.
I smile... :)

5thsister said...

What can I say that hasn't already been said? I adored the free form of this piece that captured a slice of life and our interconnectedness. Bravo!

Jodi said...

Oh my, I like this very much! Thank you.

Claudia said...

it feels almost as if i would sit in that car with you - so vivid is your description of the things that happen, which you can see - and the things that happen, which you can't see - but know it could be like this - the world keeps spinning - and some things just never change...

Leslie said...

I like the way this flows so effortlessly (and recognize the craft that went into this flow.)

I do this, too, this "watching while waiting" thing. Do we all? Wondering about, imagining, the stories of the people we watch. Seeing them as a part of the great whole of humanity, yet seeing them as unique souls.

You rendered this so well, here.

AngelMay said...

Sometimes being human isn't enough. Sadly.

Sunshine in London said...

Beautiful. You reeled me in from word one ... quite haunting, really. Thanks.

Jen said...

I like those people that make eye contact and smile...I'm going to try harder to be that person every day.

Farmgirl Paints said...

Well look at that perfect circle you made. Just awesome. We are all human...threads of us are the same.

Shauna said...

fantastic! i love the linking of stories, true to life, that we are all connected and yet may not know the stories that are taking place all around us. beautiful.

Jessie said...

i love the connectivity you have going on here. because after all, we are all human, we are all connected.

patty said...

oh.my.gosh. i love this! 6 degrees, right? sometimes 3, sometimes 2.... sometimes none at all except, as you say, because we are all human.

love it.

{thanks for visiting!}

Bev said...

oh, how we are all connected...reminds me of the movie "crash"...
great writing brian..
thanks for your comment on my blog, and yes, there are always more prickly places!

gospelwriter said...

love it - I was worried about the lady and about the dog and... but somehow when it came back full circle, my mind eased - how'd you do that? Ah, maybe it was the smile, given "for no apparent reason" - I know the feeling, love when that happens.

The Retired One said...

Loved how you wrapped this around to connect us all in one big huggable circle!

ethelmaepotter! said...

I had no idea where you were going with this one...full circle, a poignant glimpse into a brief encounter with another person on this planet Earth.

blueviolet said...

That is one cockamamie tale!

C.M. Jackson said...

as always great story and characters--happy tt! c

Alexis Hallum said...

Brian,
I just loved this! The ending was awesome.
I really love writing(and reading) about the people I see.

Jaime said...

well done, brian. as always.

sarah said...

your writing...awesome.

kkrige said...

I love the circle you weave. I know that I caught eyes with a father standing waiting for a bus on Tuesday and he smiled at me knowingly. I steered my vehicle around the corner, but even behind my sunglasses he saw our kinship and smiled with mental hugs. That is what your lady did too. Nice Brian

Marla said...

Oh man, I just love this one!!

julie said...

I love the cyclic feel of this. Felt like I was watching a film.

Hillary said...

Amazing perspective...you have written about all of us.
Thank you for stopping by my blog and introducing me to your own!

Subby said...

I especially like tha' last part :)

And thanks!

J said...

Loved the rhythm and mood of your prose, Brian! Amazing! And each situation....very different indeed...each is described so uniquely, yet weave together so perfectly. Thank you for the richness. I really enjoyed Johnny. I was an elementary teacher before we started a family. I had lots of Johnny's. :o)

deb said...

okay. I completely love loved this.
again.
completely.

Ed Pilolla said...

it is a little profound moment when we're watching someone and they turn and look at us like they've know all along. my favorite thing is watching the people watchers. i enjoyed following this and seeing where it was leading.

Liza said...

"when johnny stands up and asks
in his loud outside voice to go to
the bathroom"

I love this style of yours.
fantastic imagery!

PattiKen said...

The round-robin flow of this piece works so well. I had to chuckle a bit at the image of the Indian woman in "full flowing gown and head dress...talking on the phone,
animated, giving it to the other party." We are all human indeed.

secret agent woman said...

I like how that came back around.

secret agent woman said...

I like how that came back around.

lettuce said...

this is so good Brian, a really "felt" snippet of life. I'm just posting this and then going to read it again

lettuce said...

this is so good Brian, a really "felt" snippet of life. I'm just posting this and then going to read it again

lettuce said...

this is so good Brian, a really "felt" snippet of life. I'm just posting this and then going to read it again

A.Decker said...

Hey! You gotta do something when you're stuck in traffic, right?

Very good, I must say.

Syd said...

The world does keep spinning, no matter how much mess we seem to make of it.

On My Side Of The Corner said...

"no apparent reason, at all,
other than we are all human." Something to remind me of. Thanks for this great poetry.

Arbitraryprairie said...

Very lovely. I've got to remember to smile more!

Birdie said...

a sincere smile from a stranger, yes we're all connected and lucky are those who are aware of it :-) I cannot wait to catch up with all your wonderful posts!!

Lorenzo said...

You bring this around full circle so strikingly well. All of humanity in that unbroken circle.

oliviasbiopiclog said...

A slice of Life.. a bit of everything!!