Thursday, September 2, 2010

55 - butterflies causing tornados

plip plip plop
we skip
rocks
plip plip plip plop
across the
smooth surface
plip plip plop
sending ripples
of our
kisses
plip plip plip plop
ever reaching
d
o
w
n
stream
plip plip plop
on the
gentle roll
plip plip plip plop
touching banks
plip plip plop
we may never
know
plip plip plip plip plop.



Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.

96 comments:

Daniel said...

After reading this delightful piece, I had to go back and read it out loud for some reason. That gave it a whole different feeling. Cool.

blueviolet said...

I used to be able to do that as a child quite well. Now I just sink them. :(

Monkey Man said...

You write with such great visuals. Now I want to go skip a rock. My 55 is HERE .

Tom said...

somewhere someone is running from your tsunami!

moondustwriter said...

aww - those are the sweetest kisses

I think Gman opened up a minute or two early or his clock is off cuz I went on at a few minutes to the hour

my gain
your loss

Moon smiles

"Batter Up" wrong sport

Bonnie said...

Just found a new rock and ripple in our creek. Wow!

Caty said...

skipping rocks was always a fun past time...nice post :)

Stranger said...

Fantastic visual - the contrast of kisses and skipping rocks on streams.

G-Man said...

What can I say?
Your usual brilliant self!
We may never know what banks our ripples reach Son, so make them as big and strong and meaningful as you can..
Great 55 Brian...Have a Kick Ass Holiday Week-End...G

Pauline said...

you're too cool

Eva Gallant said...

Nice...it brought back memories of rock skipping!

clean and crazy said...

those kisses down the stream, they can be steamy.. you never know but i love this 55

CM said...

You never know what ripple affects you will cause!

I like the rhythm of this one!

sarah said...

I too had to read this outloud. Funny but when I did...it flowed and skipped like a plip plip plop should.☺

California Girl said...

I'm with Monkey Man. Your visuals are great.

Thom said...

LOL...I use to be able to do this...it was fun. Funny thing about your story that Daniel said. I went back and read it out loud...I was going through the motions and it was a whole different feeling Very well done. Have a wonderful Weekend :)

THE BEATY said...

Ironicly I was never able to do that...some people can some can't

Sandi McBride said...

Just goes to show that every ripple on the water affects every other ripple that glides through it and around it and above it. Great thought, this poem,
Sandi

Prayer Girl said...

What a beautiful feel and sound this 55 carries - down stream.

PG

Lori said...

How is it that you can take something so simple as skipping rocks and make it sound so beautiful. :)

TALON said...

This had me laughing and then thinking of all the rock skipping I've done - perhaps causing some major damage! Really neat, Brian. I love the whole cause/effect idea.

lakeviewer said...

How, a skipping love story!

Mighty M said...

Mine is more like plip.

That's all.. Just plip. :)

Tracy said...

You know, I never could skip a rock, but I can make a mean tornado. :-) Have a super weekend!

PattiKen said...

I always love your sound effects. Fun 55, Brian.

Magpie said...

So true, Brian. We don't always know whose lives we may touch or how.
Have a safe holiday weekend!

Mama Zen said...

This feels so lovely and innocent!

Bossy Betty said...

Very springy in many ways!

lime said...

what marvelous rhythm to this whimsical yet deep piece. just wonderful.

Alice Audrey said...

And thinking how far those waves can go can have me staring at them for hours.

magiceye said...

done so beautifully....!!!!

adeeyoyo said...

Lovely descriptions. Sometimes you can have such a delicate touch, Brian!

MorningAJ said...

That's gorgeous. Your ripples have certainly reached me today!
My 55 are here.

Baino said...

I never could skip stones. It really annoyed me that the boys were so good and I sucked.

anthonynorth said...

You captured all the senses here. I could see it AND hear it.

ladyfi said...

Ah, my son's favourite pastime!

Zuzana said...

This reminds me of the butterfly effect.;)
Is it just me, or did you try to make a butterfly with your text.;) Then again, I easily see things that are not there.;)
Have a lovely Friday,
xoxo

Jinksy said...

Reminded me of The Butterfly Who Stamped... :)

A Daft Scots Lass said...

I'm crap at this - I throw like a girl. Hey! I am a girl!

Great 55, Brian.

the walking man said...

You do the rocks a great favor by giving them motion and a change of scenery but what is left in the place they formerly occupied?...Joy?

slommler said...

It sounds just like that too! Skipping them to banks we might never see...love it!!
Hugs
SueAnn

Valerie said...

Positively delightful.

5thsister said...

Isn't it a delight when you find the perfect skipping stone?

Just Be Real said...

So simple, so peaceful so beautiful. Plip plip plop plop. Blessings Brian.

joanny said...

Brian:

with each sound of the drop - came a peace, a beauty surrounding it, that the message you were sending was just simply love.

A lovely poem.

Cheers,
Joanny

sheila said...

Love the silence and calm of ripples and skipping rocks. :o)

Love how you wrote
d
o
w
n

Maha said...

Very tenderly beautiful poem. When I read the title for the first time, it reminded of Muse's song "Butterflies and Hurricanes" but the content turned out to be pretty different

Susan Deborah said...

This reminded me also of the "Butterfly effect" like Zuzana. As Daniel said, reading this piece aloud is a lot more fun!

If we (bloggers) can meet sometime, we should arrange for a reading of your poems (esp the delightful ones). It would be great fun!

Poetry is performance!

Joy always,
Susan

Claudia said...

small things matter - yes - and who knows where this word we said to someone or the small something we are doing will end up.
this is a teaser for thinking big! just love it!

JStar said...

This have so much action that reach depths many poems never touch...I agree, it MUST be spoken aloud to get that feeling...

Very clever Brian :)

Scott said...

wow man, that's really brilliant

I love to read things that leave me thinking, wondering, imagining, then finally arriving. Thanks Mr. Miller!

natalee said...

I love skipping rocks!!!!! Great ONE!!!

Larry said...

plip plip plop this was a good poem I like it a lot.plip plip plop
Thanks for sharing Larry.

Vicki Lane said...

Lovely image -- 'touching banks we may never know' is such a good line.

drybottomgirl said...

Delightful sound effects. My oldest is a natural at this. He drives everyone crazy with how many times he can get a rock to skip, I just provide entertainment for everyone. I try to skip a rock and it just plops in the water! Hoping you and your wonderful family have a super great weekend!

Gaston Studio said...

A lovely 55, and one I didn't have to think so hard about!

JStar said...

Oh, my 55 is here

http://msjstar1275.blogspot.com/

annell said...

plip,plip,plop....just right....and do our thoughts also skip water? I think they do.....

Cheryl said...

I love doing this in the ocean. It gets me right-sized. Awesome audio-visual.

Cinner said...

I will be plip,plip, ploppin all day, I liked reading it out loud. have a great weekend with the family. smiles.

Lorraine said...

I would put this in a book with appropriate images and there you have a book, for children and grown-up alike

Kulio said...

Okay plip plip plop is THE sound of stones skipping, how did you do that? :-)

Tony Single said...

They can keep all their fancy jewels and shiny valuables... give me a skipping stone any day. Now that's something worth having, then throwing away. ;)

Eric Alder said...

I love skipping rocks! I'm glad I'm not the only one to notice the philosophical implications of such things. Teriffic 55!

John's comments said...

Lovely day described through the sounds. Thanks for reading my Friday 55. Hope your week goes well

Tina said...

Nice sound effects! Loved the "Touching banks we may never know". Gives the piece just the right touch of melancholy along with the whimsical.

BLOGitse said...

You're so c r e a t i v e!

Joseph Pulikotil said...

Hello Brian:)

Ever since I read your lovely composition I started plip plopping myself.This sounds like a nursery rhyme.

You creativity is awesome.

I was thrilled to see your lengthy comment in my blog.

Best wishes Brian:)
Joseph

Joseph Pulikotil said...

Hello Brian:)

Ever since I read your lovely composition I started plip plopping myself.This sounds like a nursery rhyme.

You creativity is awesome.

I was thrilled to see your lengthy comment in my blog.

Best wishes Brian:)
Joseph

Joseph Pulikotil said...

Hello Brian:)

Ever since I read your lovely composition I started plip plopping myself.This sounds like a nursery rhyme.

You creativity is awesome.

I was thrilled to see your lengthy comment in my blog.

Best wishes Brian:)
Joseph

gospelwriter said...

wow! the poem, and then the title (I seldom read the title first unless it's staring me in the face) - awesome 55!

Jessie said...

i love your writing...

warm smiles,

RNSANE said...

I have, never in my life, been able to skip a rock. I can't even throw one without putting someone's head in jeapordy. That's why I decided I shouldn't own a gun. I might manage to hit a would be assailant with a cast iron skillet but never a Glock.

RNSANE said...

I have, never in my life, been able to skip a rock. I can't even throw one without putting someone's head in jeapordy. That's why I decided I shouldn't own a gun. I might manage to hit a would be assailant with a cast iron skillet but never a Glock.

Sam Liu said...

Daniel is so right - this poem deserves to be read aloud! Delightful word sounds and alliteration, great poem, Brian.

Someone Is Special said...

very sweet 55.. I loved it...

Do stop by An apple a day keeps the doctor away

--Someone Is Special--

sage said...

Nice--I didn't know what to expect with the title.

Jannie Funster said...

My rocks ussally go plip, plunk. :)

Another fine offering indeed. Love your closeness to nature.

xo

Arts Web Show said...

I really like the sounds in this poem.
Nice job

L.L. Barkat said...

:)

I liked the ripples of kisses. Stormy ones though, eh? :)

william said...

the imagery in this piece mate is superb, u never let us down, in many ways, happy weekend friend :)

Paul C said...

Enchanting onomatopoeia.

AmyLK said...

So pretty! Such description in so little words!

n. davis rosback said...

i do wonder
where our kisses go
and
do we ever run out of them?

she said...

how quaint and delightfully visual. great one, brian!

Teresa said...

I love the way it starts out very chipper and upbeat about rocks skipping, and when you read the kisses, it just seems to slow down and become so romantic.

secret agent woman said...

Daniel is right, this one really does need to be read aloud.

Dulce said...

Love the sound those b.flies make!
:::)))

Syd said...

I can't skip them anymore either. Lost the knack.

hope said...

I love how much fun your 55s always are!

Have a great holiday weekend!

Nessa said...

So small. So delicate. So powerful.

JamieDedes said...

How sweet and playful. I love it. Really fine 55. Thanks for the fun.

keymus23 said...

Butterfly effect?
is this the cause of your tornados

Marla said...

Love this....

Goofball said...

oops I just coughed....sorry if it starts to rain on your side of the globe

kavisionz said...

You are a master of wordplay, Brian! Honestly!
You make the reader really imagine! Loved this one!
I love butterflies, and everything of or related to them!! :D Plip plip plop... I do that even now! Just to watch those ripples :)