Tuesday, August 31, 2010

stinking fish & bullets

i ate a stack of flapjacks,
just tall enough to see over,
maple syrup smother,
butter dripping, reading
headlines, online
when i saw what he said
& thank goodness
i got no tv
or they woulda turned
to shoe leather in my mouth,
as i watched,
trying to choke down your
demo(hypo)cracy,
cause if you gonna be a leader
you gotta learn to take a bullet...

click clack
draw the hammer back
(hope its not a head shot)

...cause you know they're coming,
but instead you hide behind
some bureaucratic flunky, (& lies)
letting him fall on his sword
for you, flip flopping like a fish,
we all know stinks
from the head, anyway
& they'll give you a medal
call you hero instead yellow,
spineless, better mind this;
jellyfish is on the menu
and they eating you alive...

click clack
draw the hammer back...

This is for One Shot Wednesday. Write a poem & come join us. It begins at 5pm.

Is it just me or do some leaders seem to spend more time dodging bullets than giving straight answers? and is that really leading? hmm....

108 comments:

Cinner said...

Wow, you are amazing with words. I understand this as I watch things around the world including ours and see leaders hiding behind red tape.Alot of them are all the same, on the other hand I would not want their jobs for anything.....I think right and wrong becomes such a grey area that soon nobody knows or remembers what they really believe. very powerful post Brian.

Susan Deborah said...

Let's publish this in all newspapers! Would love to see the reactions!

Joy always,
Susan

jake said...

Nice use of words here! I can't imagine what it would be like if politicians and even religious leaders lived out genuine accountability and even vulnerability...

emily wierenga said...

wow. amen.

Tracy said...

You sound a little angry today, Brian. I get that way when I read or watch the news, too. LOL. Liked how you described your sweet breakfast yet I left with a sour taste in my mouth.

Daniel said...

Welcome to politics. Spin, spin, spin. Bob and weave. Don't let them pin you down on what you "believe". What do I have to say to get re-elected?

Loved your take on it man.

Travel & Dive Girl said...

Regardless of the leader - they are all the same.

JStar said...

Oh so true...Thats why I dont keep up...When voting you pick the lesser of two evils...Politics are not interesting...I am not a fan of liars

adeeyoyo said...

Great one Brian. A lot of 'leaders' react instead of 'act'. This post could be written with our country in mind too - the demo(hypo)cracy bit! BTW I luuurve flapjacks - think I must make some tomorrow, lol.

One Stop - The Place For Poets, Writers & Artists said...

i think it is more disappointment at times than anger...we get fooled into having high hopes for something different only to have the ice cream taste like the same crap when it gets in your mouth...

One Stop - The Place For Poets, Writers & Artists said...

woops, that is me...brian...i am over at One Shot getting things set up for tonight...

DJan said...

Amen. The hopes dashed, again and again. I keep taking news fasts so I can keep my head above water. You sure know how to write, Brian. Sometimes I am a little astounded at your amazing ability.

Anya said...

LOL
You make everyone SMILE :))
Fantastic words !!
Stinking fish
hahaha.....

Mama Zen said...

This has a fabulous edge to it.

Becky said...

Its started out so nice and sweet with the syrup and all and ended up sadly with the truth lol.Very interesting post Brain.

TALON said...

I thought that bullet proof vests were standard issue for politicians...but then again why carry that extra weight when you can simply duck and dodge...

signed...bkm said...

the news blah is more an i can handled on the day in and day out...try to take only that which i need..at times that is difficult..so i write...bkm

Baino said...

Hmmm actually liked this despite my poetry phobia. I swear Politicians go to 'bullet dodging'school long before they are elected. No such thing as a straight shooter.

Claudia said...

sometimes i feel just like that when i listen to the news - but could've never said it so well

CatLadyLarew said...

Flip, flop! Yeah, that's what so many politicians do! Stinkin' fish!

anthonynorth said...

This is powerful and edgy stuff.
Excellent.

J. said...

I'm witcha brotha. In fact, just watching television sends me into a full on bad mood. That's why I haven't had television programming for 8 years and the more I go without, the more I hate that it exists. Great post, as usual:)

Dulce said...

Well- I keep away from that as much as I can... but you have expressed it so wisely- witty words!

Eric Alder said...

I think maybe you shoulda been eating WAFFLES instead?
(Hope you used REAl maple syrup!)

A great poke at politics, Brian!

Beachanny said...

Excellent images pulling your everyday together with the world that bombards us with hypocrisy so thinly veiled, so obvious so disappointing. Thank you for this work, Brian.

blueviolet said...

There is not one single politician I trust from any party!

natalee said...

I swear I feel like that with NJs Governor... Hes an idiot!!!!! Everymorning I read something else I loose my appetite ....

Cor said...

Fantastic poem! It's funny because most leaders are the same. It is the people underneath that take the fall. I will always keep this at the forefront of ny mind when I am (hopefully) a leader within the organization I work at.

senderupwords said...

Great One Shot... I'd love to see the look on some politicians (and their backers) faces after reading this. Love and Light, Sender

Tina said...

See, this is why I hate politics, and don't watch the news. Our world is totally messed up. But you wrote about it very well :-) Power and passion in that piece.

Neva Flores said...

Brian, I could not even begin to tell you how much I enjoyed this one.......Awesome!

Patty Sherry said...

Brian,

Love how you call the politician out on being a coward... better mind this, jellyfish is on the menu
well that's what's being served. :)

Great poem, I really enjoyed it.

william said...

a bittersweet tale friend, loved it :)

Monkey Man said...

Sometimes displacing a bit of anger is good for the soul. Great piece, B.

lovelyannie79 said...

jellyfish is on the menu
and they eating you alive...

click clack
draw the hammer back...



I dig the way this sounds and the way it feels when I read it out loud! I felt anger in the words, to the point that my stomach gripped in a ball for a moment...like a kid when someone is going to get in trouble.
Your skills are stellar!

PattiKen said...

Whoa. This is a whole new Brian. That headline must have been a doozey. Excellent, my friend.

SuziCate said...

Great and truthful poem!

Sam Liu said...

A striking piece, Brian. The power and force of your words is wonderful, and the poem itself is a delight to read. In truth, this is the way of politics - it always has and, I fear, always will be.

Candie Bracci said...

Sweet and sour reality..great poem Brian!

Brian Miller said...

sam i fear the same...
patti...i break it out every once in a while...smiles.

n. davis rosback said...

headlines online
i like that


a one shot bullet

lakeviewer said...

Politics in the air, stink so hot and putrid, it travels to all our noses at once.

What's up with us that we can't sweep away this mess?

5thsister said...

It's all rotten and stinky as palms get greased and citizens get taken for a ride!

Loved the tone of this piece!

Prayer Girl said...

TOO BAD!!!
TOO SAD!!!
It seems you have hit the nail right on its head.
TOO BAD!!!
TOO SAD!!!

PG

Wild Rose said...

Wow Brian first you made me hungry for flapjacks then you got me feeling all patriotic about the bureaucratic hypocrisy, loved how you weaved your words and made me feel like i was in Glen Beck's rally haha...can't stand him, great oneshot :)

Bill Cook said...

Great to read some pointed social commentary! Thanks. - Bill

G-Man said...

Great Change of pace Son...

Bonnie said...

Leading ... but right on, as usual. Daniel pretty much sums up my thoughts on the matter.

Jill said...

Dodging bullets does not equate to LEADERSHIP. Nope...definitely NOT.

UGH! Politics! THEY STINK!

Lori said...

Amen! I love this Brian. Your words are powerful. XX

KB said...

I hear ya...well said.

Desert Rose said...

WELL..i m not so much into politics Brian..but i extremely enjoyed your writing! way too good..excellent one shot!

Steven Anthony said...

Dude, seriously is there nothing you cant right? awesome

Alexandra Macias said...

awesome Brian
and whats your favorite song???
):)(:(

Glynn said...

They don't dodge bullets;
They slither away or
float in effervescent
images of themselves.

Liked this, Brian.

ninotaziz said...

Around the world, we feel this keenly. Trying to understand, past understanding their failure to understand.

Thank you for putting it straight up!

Brian Miller said...

oh please dont lump me with glenn beck...ack. smiles.

Brian Miller said...

alexandra...probably Black by Pearl Jam...also love the Once soundtrack currently...and always fall back on U2 songs...have a pretty eclectic taste in music from heavy to classic...

R. Burnett Baker said...

OOOH I like it I like it! Yes, you pull the hammer back to the head! They're all crooks, criminals, and con artists in my estimation.
Rick

Chris G. said...

Fabulous! God, if only our leaders could see and understand this. So true, Brian. Angry words, but true and powerful.

Happy One Shot!

Jen said...

Maybe we should limit every president to just one term so they would use their time to lead instead of campaign for the next election.

Marla said...

When you're a rich and famous writer...you're buying dinner.
:-)

Cloudia said...

Powerful!




Warm Aloha from Waikiki

Comfort Spiral

Janice said...

Right you are! So sad, but so true.

buttercup said...

Bittersweet but oh so true Brian...you have outdone yourself with this one! Needs to be published!! Much love x

Christina said...

If their lips are moving, their definitely lying. Nice one Brian.

Dianne said...

best one I've heard so far.
jellyfish, ha.
Dianne

Zuzana said...

You have combined two dangerous things in such a beautiful marriage of words.;)
Congratulation on your POTW mention with one of your former post, that was well deserved.;)
xoxo

Rinkly Rimes said...

You caught the feeling, grabbed it by the throat, actually. Politics! Even Downunder!

Crystal Jigsaw said...

Great poem, absolutely love the click clack
draw the hammer back

bit!

CJ xx

Stafford Ray said...

Strong writing about a vexed question. How do you please all the people all the time? I'm with cinner. 'I would not want their jobs for anything!'

Steve said...

Graceful outrage, with good flow. Excellent work. :)

Pete Marshall said...

a different style but it worked so well for you...great job..i am woken to the news that Blair has said in his memoirs that Brown would have been a disaster as the PM...and yet he gave him the job, unvoted....i think Blair should be charged with treason if he knew brown couldnt do it..yep i am rambling but that what a good strong poem does..it encourages a rant of thought and emotion..and you certainly achieved that..cheers pete

sheila said...

Yes, I agree with Diva Girl. THey are all the same. Some do more than others. Some do things that aren't appealing. Like start wars based on lies, while others pass bills that some don't like.

Some will ever be happy.

Tom said...

nope. not just you. i think most politicians are in it for the perks and power...even if it doesn't start out that way.

Vicki Lane said...

Strong stuff ...

Vicki Lane said...

Strong stuff ...

annell said...

Nicely done -- click, clack!

drybottomgirl said...

It comes down to integrity. Few people in the public eye have it, or stand behind it. It's hard to watch my oldest as he's been interested in the political doings ever since the last election. He already knows what a back biting shark fest it is, and openly sees the disallusion people have with their governing bodies....

Suz said...

Now you need to write one
about the uninformed voters who keep
voting their own intersts back in
click clack
great sound

Bossy Betty said...

Powerful piece.

Lorraine said...

It's not you Brian, I used to work for those...As the Wind blows and you know, they call it compromise...I call it weak! the only agenda politicians should ever have is World Peace...Sure they say..(if nothing else works)

Kulio said...

Sooooo much time and money wasted every day. Politics.

Jen Chandler said...

Unfortunately it seems most people in leadership (I won't say leaders) spend the majority of their time dodging and weaving.

You have such a way with words (I know, I've said that a million times, right?). This really should be seen by many, many eyes. I only wish the people who needed to see things like this would "get" them.

This poem has such movement and rhythm. Excellent work.

Cheers,
Jen

Linda said...

Hi Brian, not much into politics and all, but do love the flapjacks, butter and syrup. Hungry now.

Mighty M said...

It's absolutely not just you. Politics is maddening and frustrating and I hardly ever think we get "real" honest answers from any of them!!

Barbara said...

We need a complete turnover, Democrats and Republicans. Term limits is the answer. I am such a dreamer.

Caty said...

this is the third time I read this, but don't think I ever commented. I just love how you use words to paint a picture. Politicians are so frustrating...I don't think there is an honest one out there

John's comments said...

Oh, I tend to blame us the public more. In the UK at the time of the election when ever a party tried to talk about the cuts their polls fall so they fall back to efficiency and waste. Or when a politician changes a line because of listen we say U-turn and weak government. I can say with certainty that Cameron will be as hated as Blair, Major etc when he leaves office because we scapegoat them. On the other hand, I love watching the skilled politician who plays the game with a twinkle in his eye such as Michael Heseltine. Thanks for dropping by to read my poem. Hope your week goes well

tera said...

Awesome. And I totally agree!

Magpie said...

Wow! 90 comments. This one made an impression one way or another on a lot of people. I agree...if you're gonna lead, you better be able to take a little lead. :)

gospelwriter said...

Love the way you juxtapose something as yummy as flapjacks smothered in maple syrup with what follows - the emphasis this adds to what the poem is saying. Also:

demo(hypo)cracy, as well as the rhythm and alliteration of:

click clack
draw the hammer back


A thought-provoking post.

Ed Pilolla said...

i agree with mama zen. the edge to this is makes it pop, or click clack.

Goofball said...

which leader did you have in mind when writing this?

Sandra Heska King said...

Oh, wow. From flapjacks to jellyfish. I need to read this again. So many word twists and flip flops.

Joshua Gray said...

I really liked this poem, the use of music in the lines was well done. If I can be so bold as to say the demo(hypo)cracy word(s) didn't work for me. I know what you were getting at; I myself have wrestled with the same kind of issue, successfully or no only the reader can say, but it was a sudden halt to the music when reading it.

Teresa said...

Excellent poem. I must say it is hard to find a good leader that doesn't hide behind others.

slommler said...

Bob and weave...duck and cover!! That is politics today!! I agree with Susan...let's publish this!!
Good one Brian!
Hugs
SueAnn

kavisionz said...

well said, Brian... In my opinion, the term "political leader" has lost meaning quite a long time back! It's a bunch of people that play the game of War, without lifting a finger themselves.. it's just yackety yack!!!
I hope that changes... but then, "let's be realistic" is what I tell myself!

Loved this poem, B... enjoyed how you blended it all well into yummy flapjacks.. made even the gruesome sound delicious!

The Retired One said...

you really hit a nerve with this one Brian, as I see by the many comments that came your way....you can see why the Tea Party is gaining momentum..not that they won't also be as slippery in being accountable. Sigh.

Donusho said...

WOW WOW WOW, i love the flow and rhyme, wrapped into a thought provoking content of the news! Brilliant.

Oh i responded to your comment btw about the 'crystal glass'.

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Glad I landed up on your blog!

I like what you write.

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moondustwriter said...

Wow you are getting political on us Bri

I read this Tuesday night then got pulled away (quite literally)
and never commented

what a one shot

Moonie smiles

mairmusic said...

A deft insightful portrait-- you are the consummate storyteller Brian!
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Syd said...

Nice one Brian. I think that there is so much confusion everywhere and even more misinformation.

Nessa said...

A politician is a politician.

mama-face said...

wow-saying it like it is...you should run for office.

joesuzz said...

a leader has to be clear, and hold himself responsible for the well being of the people. it is more than protecting his or her position in power.