Monday, August 9, 2010

movements in poetry

on otherwise grey days,
when my muse takes vacation &
i am in need of a poem
i like to check the walls of
fast food restaurant bathroom stalls,
where people leave love letters &
phone numbers...

(sometimes i am tempted
to call, just to see if they
really are having a good time)

and some are quite witty,
their word choice quite...

(i was going to use the word
etched three inches to the
left of the toilet paper holder
but thought it might offend
your tender sensibility)

...relieving, but that is poetry,
unloading all the extra weight
you have been carrying,
most times only good enough
to flush, though just getting
it out, you can't help but sigh.

(just be sure to wash your hands
when you are done writing...
and perhaps once you finish reading.)

This poem is dedicated to Daniel, who commented on my post about being sick, asking "whats next a poem about using the bathroom." This one is just for you my friend.

On another note, T has gone back to work after 8 years of being home with the boys. I am proud and humbled to be married to one that is willing to sacrifice. Our schedules are all jacked up so I will try to be around as I can.

79 comments:

sagirl said...

Bwhahaha, what a great sense of humour you have! Teeheehee!!!

Nessa said...

I have a recipe for a good colonic.

It is always good to know that you know you have an excellent wife.

Austin said...

Nice write, tell T i'll pray for her and ya'll. See ya buddy

Mama Zen said...

Wishing T the best of luck!

Becky said...

LoL To funny.

Congrats to your wife too.I bet the house is in a tizzy hahah.


Have a good one Brian!

Sam Liu said...

Finding poetry everywhere, Brian, truly a noble cause! This was a fun and delightful poem, very inventive. I wish T all the best at work :)

DJan said...

You are definitely clever with words, and poems about movements in the can are even more clever. I think you are very fortunate to have T.

Boonsong said...

I enjoyed this.
T sounds great. You and I are lucky men. We each have great wives.

Have a good day my friend, Boonsong

Tracy said...

Wow, this poem went all over. LOL. You are so creative. Good luck to your wife and her new job!

Travel & Dive Girl said...

Ha Ha Ha! You are a genius!

Alan Burnett said...

Beauty and creativity in the most remarkable places. It just takes a very clever man to find it.

Lori said...

Too funny! Thanks for the morning smile. :) Good luck to your wife on her new adventure. It's awesome that you appreciate her. Happy Monday!

Goofball said...

I think you should call some of those numbers. Hehe

I like the concept that your readers suggest poem topics to you. Hmm I'm getting tempted :p

Eva Gallant said...

You undying humor shines through here! Good one. Good luck with the job!

Susan Deborah said...

Wash room adventures can't get any better. I wish T all the best. And all of you.

Joy and peace,
Susan

Brian Miller said...

thanks for putting up with my silliness that last couple days as well...just having fun and enjoying the journey...smiles.

thanks for the warm wishes for T as well...

and goofball...send it, i am always game to give it a try...there is a poem in everything...

Claudia said...

LOL - like this one - quite down to earth...

i went back to work after staying at home 13 years with the kids and hubby was taking over at home and working (unpaid) in the church - so that was a challenging time and we both learned a lot...so all the best for you and T.

TALON said...

lol! Poetry in motion, Brian. :)

sage said...

Thanks for the smiles and giggles...

slommler said...

Good luck and congrats to T. I am sure she is nervous and excited all at the same time.
I too have always been fascinated by what is written on bathroom walls and stalls. Makes for good reading as you are otherwise occupied.
Hugs
SueAnn

Everyday Goddess said...

now that's an interesting perspective! pretty funny!

Daniel said...

Love it! The title especially. I will attempt to be more careful about my comments in the future, so as not to give you any more wayward ideas for poetry. Smiles.

Bonnie said...

Good one Brian. What a crafty guy you are with your craft!

That will be a big change for your wife, entailing many adjustments for her and the family. Take care of yourselves.

JStar said...

Brian, you are soo creative...I like this :) I do read whats written in bathrooms...I once used to write as well...In Bens Chilli Bowl they even provided chalk :)

Shannon Tucker Photography said...

Good stuff...'inspiring' to say the least.

I wish T the best with her new job and you with the adjustment. Just remember to take time for each other.


S

Suldog said...

I think this is a wonderful poem! I, too, have been tempted to call a number or two, to find out about the supposed good times, but never have :-)

drybottomgirl said...

I love to read in the bathroom. I think places like Target should have magazines in their stalls:) Good for T. I was able to be at home when my kids were babies. It's a wonderful privledge. My hubby and I have always been on opposite schedules. I work 8-5 and he's on second shift. It works as long as we respect what each can contribute. And you learn who has what strengths. Have a great day......

Magpie said...

This was very funny, but so witty. Such a nice play on words you managed.

kkrige said...

Ew, off to wash my hands indeed! Good luck with the transition. Congrats T!!

xoxo
Katherine

Monkey Man said...

Bathroom walls can be a hoot. One of my favs was a "post" and "comment" in a downtown meat market - Post: I "effed" your mother. Comment: Go home, Dad, you're drunk.

Loved that.

Tabor said...

You NEVER disappoint no matter how inane the direction you seem to be going.

TechnoBabe said...

It is tough going back to work but how cool is that my friend that you appreciate your wife's willingness to help out. This post is great. Leave it to you to show us how to write about the act of bathroom chores in a delicate manner and still get the picture across. Ha.

william said...

brilliant mate good sense of humor, thanks for sticking by me with my story :) I have a new blog called billys rants lol,

www.williamm52.blogspot.com

you are always welcome mate :)

Meeko Fabulous said...

You know . . . We were all sitting around my house the other night after a couple of drinks . . . And we dialed 867-5309 and in our area code it was to a DJ company! LoL :) Good luck with the schedule adjustments now that T is back at work!

Cloudia said...

I love your words as usual,

but T is my hero too today!



Aloha from Waikiki :)

Comfort Spiral

Cloudia said...

I love your words as usual,

but T is my hero too today!



Aloha from Waikiki :)

Comfort Spiral

Baino said...

Sensibilities? What sensibilities. Well if you're not gonna chain her to the kitchen sink, you might as well send her out to work. Hahaha!

BLOGitse said...

LOL!
I have to wash my hands now.

Donnetta Lee said...

Nothing like a bit of bathroom frivolity! Good luck to T going back to work. Did the same when I was younger. And now retired. Things go in circles. D

Donnetta Lee said...

PS, Brian: And was this "Movement Number One" or "Movement Number Two?" D

PattiKen said...

Nice. I've seen amazing things on bathroom walls. Best of luck to T on her return to the world of adult conversation. That's how I viewed it when I went back.

And good luck to you too. Hey, you can cook, can't you?

lakeviewer said...

Who knew? Inspiration can come from anyplace.
Learn to cook, Brian, as T will need you to jump in and do just that now that her time is so constrained.

The Urban Cowboy said...

Right on Brian, you had me laughing when I read who this is dedicated to and why.

Best wishes to T!

secret agent woman said...

I love bathroom graffiti.

Good luck in the new job.

CM said...

Good luck to T on the new job. It will be hard at first, but she might actually like having something that is all her own. Tell her to read my blog if she needs support! :-)

Me said...

As always, i'm in awe of your ability to find poetry EVERYWHERE. :)

Also - good luck to you & your family in this transition time...it will probably take a bit of work to figure out how things will work, but I'm sure you'll all do just fine.

T should treasure the time that she had at home with your boys, but also look forward to a brand new adventure as someone other than "mommy"...

Mighty M said...

I always wonder who takes the time to etch those carvings on the stalls (or pen them, but a lot of time it looks like they are carved to me). Makes for an entertaining minute or two.

Teresa said...

I love it! Working in a junior high, I am exposed to all kinds of quirky bathroom comments!

Maggie said...

Haha awesome entry!

And I hope it all goes well for your wife! I bet she is really excited about going back to work but also missing home!

ds said...

"Movements" indeed! Tee hee...

All best to T with her new work adventure; it's a tough adjustment at first...

LadyFi said...

This is brilliant! Very funny. Good luck to T back at work... it's never easy juggling work and kids - tiring, but can be fun too.

The Silver Fox said...

Very... umm... moving. I felt somewhat relieved after reading it.

Birdie said...

lol there are many surprising things to be find on the bathroom doors ...
wishing that all the Miller family adjust well to the working mom and good wishes to T on her new job!

Madame DeFarge said...

Love it. I'm impressed that you can write about practically anything. Sort of a vowel movement thing. Hope T enjoys going back to work and that the family weathers the changes it brings.

Valerie said...

Surprisingly funny considering where you found that which inspired you to write. I'm glad Daniel liked it!

Just Be Real said...

:) Thanks dear one for sharing always what is such a good read. Blessings.

natalee said...

lol..... its lik 867-5309....

congrats to your wife!!!!

Rob said...

Good luck to T. Good shout out to Daniel C.

Lorraine said...

This is wonderful Brian I love it, you are so classy even in the washroom lol
ps really did T get THE job?

G-Man said...

(This ones my favorite)

"I'll be right back"...Godot

Brian Miller said...

lol g!

Syd said...

I too am fascinated by bathroom wall writing. There is a restaurant near here that encourages graffiti everywhere--inside the restaurant, in the bathrooms, etc. It is a tradition.

the walking man said...

Do I need to wash my hands after reading or writing poetry because it's all shit? No wonder the keyboard once white is now nearly brown ...and I thought it was use and age. Maybe I should sanitize before reading but that stuff really burns the eyes.


There is, as they say, "poetry in everything," even the outhouse walls.

Vicki Lane said...

Wonderfully witty! (I've often thought of writing as similar to the digestive process -- can't be hurried, sometimes gets constipated.)

blueviolet said...

You do have a way of making me feel unclean. ;)

I hope the transition back to work for your wife goes well.

Pat said...

Love your sense of humor! I, too, enjoy the "writings on the wall", as you say. One rest stop had a long sheet of paper taped to each stall. Then when it was full, they'd just rip it down and tape up a clean sheet. Cool idea!

Luisa Doraz said...

I hope all is going well with the new job. The kids will miss having you around...for sure. It is one of those adjustment times, huh? I hope you keep having fun with your great writing. Hope your summer is going well. :)

Liza said...

does your muse ever take vacation? it sure doesn't seem that way!
do what you need to with your lovely family. can't wait to read the words that will be conjured up from the changes?

Jennifer said...

Love this - you're a fine example of a writer being able to find a story everywhere. :-)

AmyLK said...

LOL. Going to wash my hands now. :)

The Thirteenth Crossing said...

I just wrote something for the first time in over a month about how my muse kind of went on vacation. I love how you find inspiration in the mundane and ordinary. You are a watcher of life. As always I love your work.

Becky said...

hhaha to funny Brian.I love it!

Cheryl said...

This one was pure giggle-fest for me.

Daniel, I thank you for leading Brian down the road less traveled.

sheila said...

LOL on being tempted to call....that's funny.
And as a big ol germaphobe? Thanks for the washing insertion, lol.
Congrats to your wife on going back to work. That's very hard. Lots happens in 8 years. I know...I went on maturnity leave 20 yrs ago and never went back. But I work athome.

Candie Bracci said...

Lol,yeah well..well written :)

Sophia said...

Clever - clever! You're such a brilliant writer. I was just telling someone that you really should be published. Seriously!

Have a good day!

Marla said...

Love it, B.

Tell T, I am proud of her. She's a good wife and mommy. You guys make such a great template.

amritaghosh said...

LOVE this, and the 'dirty old man'...adding you to my blog roll now!

luisydomonique said...

lol this totally classifies as "urban" poetry yeah at school the tend to have some really good stuff written general criticism about human cynicism and junk like that =p