Thursday, August 12, 2010

55 - passionate nature

plunging deep the shadows
of her gaping maw,
raucous echoes ring
our every step...

her walls smooth,
her moss damp,
she leaves us slick
with glistening sweat...

bodies trembling,
her apex reached,
where rivers gush,
we join her torrent...

until she spits us,
breathless on her shore,
above her throaty roar
we cry, "once more!"

Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.

and in case you thought i would let them have all the fun sliding down the waterfalls...

123 comments:

Bonnie said...

Wow! I'm next. Lovely, if deceptive, description Brian! :-)

Daniel said...

Looks awesome, and no, I didn't think you'd let them have all the fun. I know of you too well.

J. said...

Looks like fun! Reads well too!!

Eva Gallant said...

Awesome--poem and photos!

Becky said...

Fun! I should move where that waterfall is its to hot,lol.

Mighty M said...

Wheeeeeeeeeee!

Cheryl said...

Fun stuff! I really thought y'all were white water rafting until I saw the photos. Where's the mohawk?

Monkey Man said...

Woo hoo. Great fun. My 55 is HERE .
Thanks again for covering me last week.

moondustwriter said...

natural water slides are the best

looks like fun Bri

was that you flinging water???

smiles from the Moon -

Tom said...

quit having so much fun!

Christina said...

How fun. I'm jealous.

G-Man said...

Brian...
Where was this at?
It looks like GREAT family fun.
And it went into a Perfect 55!
Great Job Son!!
Have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Stan Ski said...

Who could resist it...? Great 55.

emily wierenga said...

oh, this is fun! well written! i would love if you linked up with imperfect prose next week, writer-friend.

Buzzard said...

Miserably hot weather; this looks like the remedy..

Good summer fun

Steven Anthony said...

I must admitt water falls were not what I thought when I first read this...well done.

Steven Anthony
http://manndish.blogspot.com/

Sam Liu said...

Brilliant, Brian, that looks like such fun - and the photographs are wonderful :D Your poem beautifully captures joy and the wonderment of nature.

Brian Miller said...

its roaring run...about 2 hours away...there are larger falls at th top...but just down from it there are two that you can ride...one about 45 feet...the other about 25...the boys had a blast...me included...smiles.

ds said...

Wicked cool! In every sense. But there are definitely three boys in this story...

Mona said...

To go down stream "that way" sounds fun :)

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CM said...

Woo Hoo! So much fun!

And you can't beat a poem AND pics!

I bet your boys thought that was awesome!

kkrige said...

That looks awesome fun Brian! Did C inspire you to post a pic of yourself today? Woohoo!

California Girl said...

I'm with Bonnie and some of your other commentors (I still haven't looked that up to see if the proper word or not). Anyway, I thought you were writing about sex.

Boonsong said...

A rattling good read. Thanks for this.

All the best, Boonsong

Jannie Funster said...

So LOVE the pix of you, Brian!! Always fun to see more of a favorite blogger.

xo

Ladyulia said...

hi brian
actually we have different time
when I popped up in ur blog actually its still in the morning in my country:D
I heart the poem
and those pict looks super fun :D
is that ur son?

Lori said...

What a blast! Your sons will never forget doing these things with you Brian. What wonderful memories your making together! :)

Bernie said...

Good for you, join in the fun with your beds.......:-) Hugs

magiceye said...

must have been real fun!

lovely 55er!

The Retired One said...

Loved the pix, Brian...all I could think of is: OUCH ...thinking of hitting my butt on the rocks.

Brian Miller said...

cheryl, i will hook you up with a mohawk pic in the next couple days...let me give it a fresh shave...

Liza said...

AWESOME!!!

TechnoBabe said...

Did you have like rug burns on your backside?

Vicki Lane said...

Good thing you posted the pics to cool us off after that HOT piece, you sly devil you!

lime said...

so much fun! such fantastic words to describe playing like an otter :)

C.M. Jackson said...

oh that mama nature always has some fun up her sleeve!! Looks like a great time was had by all! c

Brian Miller said...

techno...i almost woke the house up laughing between you and vicki...um, no rug burns from this one...

the rocks were actually worn very smooth from the flow of the river...we cleared any rocks of size out of the pool area wher it drops you in as well so that no ankles got bitten...

on the large waterfall slide there is a hump that tossed the little ones in the air a bit which was kinda cool...

Life with Kaishon said...

Now that looks like a very fun day

: )

Did I ever tell you that you are a great Dad? I sure do think you are.

~ Tabitha ~ said...

That was hot.Then I saw the pictures and was left feeling like a bit of .. perv.lol.

The water slide looks fun too though ;)

Yvonne Osborne said...

Looks like fun. Without the pictures, my mind was taking me in more erotic places. I mean all that trembling....

Beautiful 55!

Marla said...

Holy Cow! I want to do this. That looks like a blast, B.

Hey wait, what am I doing reading this already? Only one comment. I must be out of ammo. :-)

Alexis Hallum said...

Ahhhh! I loved the pictures. You know, I've always wanted to try this!
Your words gave me chills and
I loved the imagry in these lines:
"until she spits us,
breathless on her shore"

She Writes said...

BEAUTIFULLY written. This could have meant many things, and I have a feeling it did.

Dianne said...

Oh oh oh you are right on with this one. This is a keeper. The assonance and consonance are fabulous. This sounds great read aloud.
I wanna write that poem......(whine)
I'll be there also, and fly fishing to boot, so I'm hoofing it for awhile.

happy weekend, later, Dianne

Susan Deborah said...

Stories, adventures and fun: Life seems more active in your home!

Joy and more adventures,
Susan

Joanna Jenkins said...

I wish I was young enough to do that again! What a blast!
Cheers, jj

TALON said...

That looks awesome! Fun and fabulous 55, Brian!

Selina Kingston said...

You're so naughty.....or is it just me !!!

Matty said...

Well doesn't that look like fun. Where is that at?

Birdie said...

yay! that looks like a great fun :-)
what a beautiful natural playground :-) and the poem always pleasure to read!

mrsnesbitt said...

Awesome! Water is so evocative - yet right now here, looking out onto the bouncing rain on the patio it is just plain inconvenient! I have to take the recycle boxes out for collection! lol!

Great stuff!

MorningAJ said...

What an amazing waterfall - and amazing words to describe the experience!

anthonynorth said...

That looks fun, fun, fun.

A Daft Scots Lass said...

the fun things in life are always the silly stuff we did as a kid.

Stay silly. Great 55.

Mine's up too.

Thom said...

OMG how fun and the photos are just wonderful. Excellent 55 my friend. Have a wonderful and watery Friday :)

RNSANE said...

I hope you gave the kids some time to play and didn't hog the place. It does, indeed, look like great fun, Brian!

Mine is at:
http://rnsane.blogspot.com/2010/08/sony-holland-all-that-jazz-flash-55.html#links

Valerie said...

Like this, Brian. It must be nice to have sons so you can let your hair down as well....smiles

adeeyoyo said...

You sure are having fun! *giggles*

Cindy said...

erm ... I started reading and thought it was an erotic poem *blush*
Excellent Brian :)

Claudia said...

oh - la - la - kind of sensual waterfalls you have over there...looks like lots of fun!

God Whispers said...

Wow, and you did not call me to come out and play with ya all? Blessings!

Austin said...

Nice job, can't believe i've never been there!

John's comments said...

We just to do this with a plastic sheet, a steep hill and a bucket of water! To hear or read my non-PC illustrated Friday 55 click here. Warning you may have to read the footnote after to make sense of it!

slommler said...

I want to play with you guys!!
Hugs
SueAnn

sage said...

Nice story and beautiful photos--looks like fun. There is a place like this in Western NC... When I was in my 20s, I went down and hit a rock and had a sore butt for a long time.

5thsister said...

We often hike to a waterfall very much like this and the kids (including the big one) enjoy doing the very same thing!

Goofball said...

I wish we had such falls in Belgium....we don't :(

(3 new words found for me ;) )

joanny said...

Way to go there Brian. that is one awesome 55er and you are one awesome Dad.

Cheers,
Joanny

If I can ever get my 55er edited down from 200 words ---sigh, I think I will go to the beach.

Nessa said...

That is the best water slide ever.

And your love song to Mother Earth is quite sexy.

Carolina said...

you look like you are having a blast...and the piece ain't to shabby either

Monique@Mommyhood Exposed said...
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Monique@Mommyhood Exposed said...

We have waterfalls around where we live as well, and it's a blast to slide down them! The only thing that isn't so much fun is getting bitten by the no-see-um's and black flies. Totally worth it though!

You guys look like you're having a ton of fun!

the walking man said...

That water slide must have taken a lot of work to build.

drybottomgirl said...

Your 55 is just what I need in this gross heat! Glad you got in the action too, it would be hard to resist! Great 55 and have a cool weekend!

BLOGitse said...

Adults who can play like that are healthy! :)

Tracy said...

I want to go next time!

izzy said...

Thanks! haven't done a slide in far too long ! We used a lot of ropes and dropping into water-very different
jolt- gains a grin or two!

Lorraine said...

LOL that's just fantastic!!!

clean and crazy said...

excellent!!!

The Empress said...

I would be too scared for that...my husband wouldn't.

Which is why it is so important I stay with the guy (I kid!)

adorable pictures, B.

Vodka Logic said...

you described it beautifully... almost sexually.

Thanks for the pictures too.

Doctor FTSE said...

Good to see that Dads can still be boys.

Captain Dumbass said...

Wish I had a waterfall to slide down. : (

Meeko Fabulous said...

That looks like SO much fun! :)

naramalone.com said...

What a rush. I've done that. I think my waterfall was bigger than yours, but I was little then so maybe not. :)

Magpie said...

Oh, you naughty boys!
Had me going there for a minute or two or three. :)
Have a wonderful weekend!

The Urban Cowboy said...

Dang it, Brian...this has me 'reading between' the lines, so to speak. Don't know if you meant it that way, but this could easily go in a very different direction. I'm calling it a Y poem...

Maggie said...

ha ha! This was the best poem ever, and the pictures were even better! :D

Alice Audrey said...

What a great waterfall! Better than the slides at the local water park.

Jessie said...

looks like great fun!

smiles,

Candie Bracci said...

Lovely!Have a nice weekend :)

artist60164 said...

YES DEFINATLY A DECEPTIVE DESCRIPTION. I WAS AT FIRST THINKING ABOUT ...................... CAVES. LOLOL

Pat said...

You are just a kid at heart!

Oh, yeah, and you love to play with your readers with your choice of words, don't you? :)

sarah said...

woo hoo. .I wanna do that too..

Francisca said...

Very, very clever, Brian. And the water slide... I'd be all over it. :-)

Francisca said...

Very, very clever, Brian. And the water slide... I'd be all over it. :-)

dulce said...

it's so very hot in here.. i'd love to join the fun...
:)

Maggie May said...

That was a great fun picture.
Maggie

Nuts in May

Madame DeFarge said...

I wasn't entirely sure what you were on about for a while. My imagination went somewhere completely inappropriate. But it looks tremendous fun.

Prayer Girl said...

Looks like lots of fun on a wonderful sunny day.

PG

william said...

FUN HAD BY ALL, TERRIFIC, LOL :)

Mama Zen said...

How fun!

Menina said...

Amazing descriptive skills here, unraveling nicely into the conclusion of a waterfall. I am very pleased you had fun on them too, although it looks kinda scary!

Baino said...

Haha saw these on Facebook looks like great fun. I'd love to see the seat of your pants after that lot!

otin said...

Now that looks fun!!! LOL

blueviolet said...

LOL, you were screaming there!

KB said...

Mother nature is a force to be reckoned with for sure. Love the pics too.

Teresa said...

What a thrill! As hot as we've been, that looks like so much fun!

sheila said...

WONDERFUL! I love these pics! A true father - son moment that will last a lifetime!

Kavita said...

Wooowww..that sounded like a lot of fun, Brian!!! So who screamed more??? The kids or you? heheheh
Coooool refreshing 55!!
Enjoy the weekend!!!

LadyFi said...

What great fun! And very well described...

Raven said...

Loved it! And the waterfall sliding looks fun too.

hope said...

You're braver than me but that does look like fun!

Bubbie said...

Love what everyone else said! Nessa summed it up nicely. Pics were WONDERFUL. Usually your words are enough - but this was great storytelling. Thank you.

chiccoreal said...

Dear Brian: What fun! I guess the slimy slickness of the rock would precipitate any rough surface, cause that could be like sandpaper! Love the innuedo in your poem, referencing something I was embarassed for thinking about when I got to the last line of the stanza and realized; I am a dirty thinka! It's a water slide! haha! I knew that!(no I didnt!). Great poem!

lettuce said...

woaaah

exhilarating and sensuous
looks like excellent fun

Scott said...

oh man what a great bit of writing Brian! I love that! The sliding looks like a blast as well!

secret agent woman said...

Man, that looks like fun!

Syd said...

Nice. I knew it had to be something with water but thought maybe a water slide. Glad it was natural.

Mmm said...

Umm...where is this river? :)

Gary said...

first, hello from GJK and thanks for your comment on my poem on my wordpress poetry-blog. the imagery in this poem-story is deep and rich. i enjoy the extended metaphor. very nice work...

MomsJournal said...

Woo! Sounds and looks like a ton of fun! ;-)

Love this 55!