Welcome to the twisted mind of Brotin. This time around I got to start the tale and can not wait to see what Otin does with it...
it was never supposed to be this way.
my fingers throb, raw from the effort to free myself, several fingernails torn, leaving red stains, quickly fading toward brown, on the ropes that bind me to the bed. this was supposed to be my honeymoon.
the last several weeks seem like a blur, all the last minute preparations for the wedding, making sure the day was perfect and reflected just who rob and i are, and who we were becoming. seeing him in the tuxedo, standing at the altar, took my breath and left me with dreams come true.
i haven't seen my husband since the taxi ride from the airport. the first day i was here i screamed for him, for them to let me see them until my throat burned from exertion. exhaustion weighs on my chest, even my eyes have run short on tears. not that the two men that check on me care.
the walls are rough cut timber, no windows, just an open doorway with a heavy blanket across opening. the bed is steel framed, to heavy to move. i tried everything i could think of to escape. i keep trying, fearful of what giving up means, hoping that rob is still...
when rob walked through the door, i knew he was the one. not in a superficial way, i think it was the way he carried himself that first attracted me to him my sophomore year at the university. he was with another girl when he came to the party, but he left with me. three years later we would marry.
they have left me clothed for now, the small floral day dress i wore on the plane, it clings to my figure, damp with sweat. periodically the men have given me water or some weak broth, but made no move to harm me other than what it took to secure my arms and legs. i plead with them to release me, but they hardly even notice me.
arriving at the airport, rob secured us one of the many taxis lined along the terminal sidewalk. as we drove through town, he smiled, anxiously pointing out beautiful statues or marvelous architecture. i could barely take my eyes off of him. at a stoplight, men wrestled the doors open, forcing a black bag over my head. that was three days ago, based on the number of times i have been fed.
i hear the men chattering in some language i do not understand, drawing closer. the blanket over the doorway pulls aside as they enter, standing at the foot of the bed, their eyes crawling up my legs to meet my eyes. this is the moment i have dreaded. panic twists in my stomach, forcing my body to thrash against the bonds to escape their gaze.
"where is my husband!", i screech over and over, reality slipping loosely from my grip.
"hey babe!", his voice draws me back, as he steps through the blanket, dressed in a suit, cigar tucked firmly between his fingers, tendrils of smoke slithering toward the ceiling.
the shock addles me, so the first thing that comes to my mind is, rob doesn't smoke. all three men smile at my confusion, sending a shiver running the length of my body.
it was never supposed to be this way.
What happens next? You will have to visit Otin to find out...
Friday, July 16, 2010
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This one was fun, Brian! It really was my turn to start. I do need to come up with a good one! Great lead in as always!
Oh, is it the new husband who had her kidnapped? This is like reading one of my mystery books. See ya later have to go read Otin's second part.
I really need a new profile pic! lol
Get out!!! What a twist, I didn't see it coming this time. Can't wait to see where it goes from here.
Maybe True Lies Part II. You can play the part of Arnold.
I'm almost afraid to see where Otin goes with this one:)
Wow! That's different! disturbing.
...and on my way over to Otin's now, powered by the fuel of intrigue...
I'm hooked..can't wait to see what Otin does...
hmmmmm, is this her husband's evil twin brother? Or, is her husband in on the kidnapping???
You guys do this soooooo well!
ewe, shiver and puke, ok i'm ready to read some more... Oh Ooooo-tiiiiin........?
Great story, still don't think Jimmy needed to kill him though, it wasn't that he could do anything to anyone.....:-) Hugs
This is so different. It already has a twist. Before the Otin's twist! Can't wait.
This was great! I love how Otin took what was already a great twisty tale by you, Brian, and twisted it even more. Creepy as all get out, but so well done. :)
this is seriously good but kind of sickening! the older i get the more i realize things like this really happen
:( going to head over to otins while i can still keep my dinner down...
ok, going to head over to Otin's to check out the rest of the tale.
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I can't wait to see what Otin comes up with!
Wicked good, off to see what Otin will do with this .......
Hi Brian:)
You got my adrenalin flowing at the suspense and terror. It is amazing to read your spell binding stories which always has a mystery and surprise ending.
Have a wonderful day Brian:)
Joseph
Wow, great job building the suspense, Brian. I'm going over to Otin's now to see where it all goes. Be right back.
OK, I'm back. Geez, Otin really tied some knots into the story, didn't he? The whole thing is excellent. But I'm going to paste in what I said and copied over there:
I don't think this tale is done. You guys gotta go back to the drawing board -- um, I mean key board -- and give us some more!
Holy cow -- did I just step into an episode of 24 here?
Heading to Otin's...
xo
Loving it...heading over to Otin's.
Gripping. Life has it's own way of shocking people. But why do we still trust and hope. Perhaps, perhaps . . . Have a fantabulous weekend Brian.
Joy always,
Susan
OMG -- terror gripped my heart, sensitive soul that I am, ... being an incurable romantic. my heart grew faint.
will my dark side win and be curious what Otin has to say,
Joanny
it's always a surprise when I come here. I really enjoy that.
This one is scary, I knew it was her dang husband. Now, again, I did it to myself. I CANNOT come here right before bed!
Gee whizz, great start Brian! Can't wait for Otin's contribution... Brotin... where can I find previous stories?
Brian - once more this is excellent writing - it builds up tenseness and fear of what might happen to the poor girl..
I also like the idea of passing on to someone else to finish.
Must have been exciting for you as well - not knowing how it will end..
it is interesting to turn over a story to someone to finish...esp if have invested yourself into it...you have a trust they will do with it what is best...its always exciting to see what the others come up with...usually i get half the readers on days i do this as well, which i find interesting...
have one coming that am very excited about...doing a he said, she said piece with a blog author that i really admire...
Oh I couldn't stand it...I had to go to Otin's and check it out. OMG!! What twists and turns you both have created. Brilliant!!
Loved it!
Hugs
SueAnn
Incredible! If this would be the first chapter of a book I am buying it immediately.;)) I feel all chilly even though I am sitting in a hot afternoon sun reading this.
Now I am off to read the ending.;)
Hope your Saturday is sunny and warm as well,
xoxo
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Wonderful idea (and a great opening).
Oh dear -- marriage is always risky but this is terrifying!
had to jump to Otin first to read the end ... great great start Brian! and the end as well - I can see it as a movie :-)
I smell an impostor...
Can't wait to see how Otin finishes this thriller! Wow - I already hate her husband.
ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhh this is like a movie, luv it !
Wow! Talk about seeing another whole side of your spouse! This is great and creepy! Can't wait to see how it ends!
This is my recurring vacation nightmare. twisted.
Was the direction Otin took where you would have gone? These are such interesting tales. I love them.
This sounds like a fun game...progressive story? This was a very strong lead-in, and I can imagine several directions this could go. I shivered when Rob walked in, totally unexpected twist. Great stuff!
Love the lead in. Gotta head over to Otin's to see where he tooks this.
Damn... there were so many twists and turns in this one, I'm starting to think maybe I've been kidnapped, myself!
You two do great work together. This was a fun and twisted piece. I love these kinds of twists and intrigues in a story. Great storytelling!
I'd better get over there- good start!
Okay.. now i can't wait for the rest...this was great...
Intriguing. You have made it hard on Otin because three weeks have passed...not three days. Much time to fill and explain.
Cliff hanger!
This is so beautifully written!
You sure know how to build suspense. Twisted, twisted...
brian you are a master story teller, this was really good :)
Great suspense. I loved the twist that the husband was the culprit.
Cee
Whoa! This is a great start. Brotin Tales ROCK!
jj
As always, the two of you wrote a sweet story together. You need to leave it up top longer though!
These stories ARE the "best-of-the-Best! Is it possible to be more...or better...than "stunning"?
Glad you both are back. Can't wait to see THE END.
YAY Brotin are back!! I'm kinda scared to go and see what he's done with it ;0)
Please don't let it be the husband!!! This was great!!!!
Very cool, you and Otin combine to create some highly charged stories!
so this was from her drug induced perspective...very nice!
i love the way it opens, and that first paragraph builds.
"the shock addles me"
Love that!
what a read! you are an artist with such technical capabilities, the way you start off with action, fill in the back story and end with a great teaser. damn it! now i have to see how it ends:)
You do love to keep us all guessing, huh? Have fun this week. :)
Wow great tale Brian quite creepy and and now i have to check out Otin's ending ~
So COOL! I had to jump over to Otins before I commented here. I LOVED the ending!
this is great heading to Otins now!
That sent a knot in my stomach. What a bad husband this guy appears to be, but I will have to check out the rest of the story.
Ok, are you trying to freak me out?? I may not sleep EVER AGAIN!! or travel to foreign countries ... or trust my husband completely.
Evil Brian. Deliciously evil. :-)
A little belated, but I'm hooked, heading over for the rest. :)
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