Friday, July 16, 2010

Brotin Tales: Loose Ends; all tied up

Welcome to the twisted mind of Brotin. This time around I got to start the tale and can not wait to see what Otin does with it...

it was never supposed to be this way.

my fingers throb, raw from the effort to free myself, several fingernails torn, leaving red stains, quickly fading toward brown, on the ropes that bind me to the bed. this was supposed to be my honeymoon.

the last several weeks seem like a blur, all the last minute preparations for the wedding, making sure the day was perfect and reflected just who rob and i are, and who we were becoming. seeing him in the tuxedo, standing at the altar, took my breath and left me with dreams come true.

i haven't seen my husband since the taxi ride from the airport. the first day i was here i screamed for him, for them to let me see them until my throat burned from exertion. exhaustion weighs on my chest, even my eyes have run short on tears. not that the two men that check on me care.

the walls are rough cut timber, no windows, just an open doorway with a heavy blanket across opening. the bed is steel framed, to heavy to move. i tried everything i could think of to escape. i keep trying, fearful of what giving up means, hoping that rob is still...

when rob walked through the door, i knew he was the one. not in a superficial way, i think it was the way he carried himself that first attracted me to him my sophomore year at the university. he was with another girl when he came to the party, but he left with me. three years later we would marry.

they have left me clothed for now, the small floral day dress i wore on the plane, it clings to my figure, damp with sweat. periodically the men have given me water or some weak broth, but made no move to harm me other than what it took to secure my arms and legs. i plead with them to release me, but they hardly even notice me.

arriving at the airport, rob secured us one of the many taxis lined along the terminal sidewalk. as we drove through town, he smiled, anxiously pointing out beautiful statues or marvelous architecture. i could barely take my eyes off of him. at a stoplight, men wrestled the doors open, forcing a black bag over my head. that was three days ago, based on the number of times i have been fed.

i hear the men chattering in some language i do not understand, drawing closer. the blanket over the doorway pulls aside as they enter, standing at the foot of the bed, their eyes crawling up my legs to meet my eyes. this is the moment i have dreaded. panic twists in my stomach, forcing my body to thrash against the bonds to escape their gaze.

"where is my husband!", i screech over and over, reality slipping loosely from my grip.

"hey babe!", his voice draws me back, as he steps through the blanket, dressed in a suit, cigar tucked firmly between his fingers, tendrils of smoke slithering toward the ceiling.

the shock addles me, so the first thing that comes to my mind is, rob doesn't smoke. all three men smile at my confusion, sending a shiver running the length of my body.

it was never supposed to be this way.

What happens next? You will have to visit Otin to find out...

68 comments:

otin said...

This one was fun, Brian! It really was my turn to start. I do need to come up with a good one! Great lead in as always!

TechnoBabe said...

Oh, is it the new husband who had her kidnapped? This is like reading one of my mystery books. See ya later have to go read Otin's second part.

otin said...

I really need a new profile pic! lol

CM said...

Get out!!! What a twist, I didn't see it coming this time. Can't wait to see where it goes from here.

Daniel said...

Maybe True Lies Part II. You can play the part of Arnold.

ModernMom said...

I'm almost afraid to see where Otin goes with this one:)

Eva Gallant said...

Wow! That's different! disturbing.

tattytiara said...

...and on my way over to Otin's now, powered by the fuel of intrigue...

The Retired One said...

I'm hooked..can't wait to see what Otin does...
hmmmmm, is this her husband's evil twin brother? Or, is her husband in on the kidnapping???
You guys do this soooooo well!

Dianne said...

ewe, shiver and puke, ok i'm ready to read some more... Oh Ooooo-tiiiiin........?

Bernie said...

Great story, still don't think Jimmy needed to kill him though, it wasn't that he could do anything to anyone.....:-) Hugs

Ocean Girl said...

This is so different. It already has a twist. Before the Otin's twist! Can't wait.

TALON said...

This was great! I love how Otin took what was already a great twisty tale by you, Brian, and twisted it even more. Creepy as all get out, but so well done. :)

sheri said...

this is seriously good but kind of sickening! the older i get the more i realize things like this really happen
:( going to head over to otins while i can still keep my dinner down...

kkrige said...

ok, going to head over to Otin's to check out the rest of the tale.

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Mama Zen said...

I can't wait to see what Otin comes up with!

Kathy's Klothesline said...

Wicked good, off to see what Otin will do with this .......

Joseph Pulikotil said...

Hi Brian:)

You got my adrenalin flowing at the suspense and terror. It is amazing to read your spell binding stories which always has a mystery and surprise ending.

Have a wonderful day Brian:)
Joseph

PattiKen said...

Wow, great job building the suspense, Brian. I'm going over to Otin's now to see where it all goes. Be right back.

PattiKen said...

OK, I'm back. Geez, Otin really tied some knots into the story, didn't he? The whole thing is excellent. But I'm going to paste in what I said and copied over there:

I don't think this tale is done. You guys gotta go back to the drawing board -- um, I mean key board -- and give us some more!

Jannie Funster said...

Holy cow -- did I just step into an episode of 24 here?

Heading to Otin's...

xo

Chocolate Covered Daydreams said...

Loving it...heading over to Otin's.

Susan Deborah said...

Gripping. Life has it's own way of shocking people. But why do we still trust and hope. Perhaps, perhaps . . . Have a fantabulous weekend Brian.

Joy always,
Susan

joanny said...

OMG -- terror gripped my heart, sensitive soul that I am, ... being an incurable romantic. my heart grew faint.

will my dark side win and be curious what Otin has to say,

Joanny

The Empress said...

it's always a surprise when I come here. I really enjoy that.

This one is scary, I knew it was her dang husband. Now, again, I did it to myself. I CANNOT come here right before bed!

adeeyoyo said...

Gee whizz, great start Brian! Can't wait for Otin's contribution... Brotin... where can I find previous stories?

Claudia said...

Brian - once more this is excellent writing - it builds up tenseness and fear of what might happen to the poor girl..
I also like the idea of passing on to someone else to finish.
Must have been exciting for you as well - not knowing how it will end..

Brian Miller said...

it is interesting to turn over a story to someone to finish...esp if have invested yourself into it...you have a trust they will do with it what is best...its always exciting to see what the others come up with...usually i get half the readers on days i do this as well, which i find interesting...

have one coming that am very excited about...doing a he said, she said piece with a blog author that i really admire...

slommler said...

Oh I couldn't stand it...I had to go to Otin's and check it out. OMG!! What twists and turns you both have created. Brilliant!!
Loved it!
Hugs
SueAnn

Zuzana said...

Incredible! If this would be the first chapter of a book I am buying it immediately.;)) I feel all chilly even though I am sitting in a hot afternoon sun reading this.
Now I am off to read the ending.;)
Hope your Saturday is sunny and warm as well,
xoxo

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Alan Burnett said...

Wonderful idea (and a great opening).

Vicki Lane said...

Oh dear -- marriage is always risky but this is terrifying!

Birdie said...

had to jump to Otin first to read the end ... great great start Brian! and the end as well - I can see it as a movie :-)

Lorraine said...

I smell an impostor...

Nancy said...

Can't wait to see how Otin finishes this thriller! Wow - I already hate her husband.

Steven Anthony said...

ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhh this is like a movie, luv it !

Pat said...

Wow! Talk about seeing another whole side of your spouse! This is great and creepy! Can't wait to see how it ends!

mama-face said...

This is my recurring vacation nightmare. twisted.

Magpie said...

Was the direction Otin took where you would have gone? These are such interesting tales. I love them.

Tina said...

This sounds like a fun game...progressive story? This was a very strong lead-in, and I can imagine several directions this could go. I shivered when Rob walked in, totally unexpected twist. Great stuff!

Cheryl said...

Love the lead in. Gotta head over to Otin's to see where he tooks this.

CatLadyLarew said...

Damn... there were so many twists and turns in this one, I'm starting to think maybe I've been kidnapped, myself!

Caty said...

You two do great work together. This was a fun and twisted piece. I love these kinds of twists and intrigues in a story. Great storytelling!

buffalodick said...

I'd better get over there- good start!

natalee said...

Okay.. now i can't wait for the rest...this was great...

Tabor said...

Intriguing. You have made it hard on Otin because three weeks have passed...not three days. Much time to fill and explain.

Mona said...

Cliff hanger!

This is so beautifully written!

ds said...

You sure know how to build suspense. Twisted, twisted...

william said...

brian you are a master story teller, this was really good :)

Life@Cee said...

Great suspense. I loved the twist that the husband was the culprit.
Cee

Joanna Jenkins said...

Whoa! This is a great start. Brotin Tales ROCK!

jj

blueviolet said...

As always, the two of you wrote a sweet story together. You need to leave it up top longer though!

steveroni said...

These stories ARE the "best-of-the-Best! Is it possible to be more...or better...than "stunning"?

Tracy said...

Glad you both are back. Can't wait to see THE END.

Eternally Distracted said...

YAY Brotin are back!! I'm kinda scared to go and see what he's done with it ;0)

gayle said...

Please don't let it be the husband!!! This was great!!!!

The Urban Cowboy said...

Very cool, you and Otin combine to create some highly charged stories!

Liza said...

so this was from her drug induced perspective...very nice!

i love the way it opens, and that first paragraph builds.

"the shock addles me"
Love that!

Ed Pilolla said...

what a read! you are an artist with such technical capabilities, the way you start off with action, fill in the back story and end with a great teaser. damn it! now i have to see how it ends:)

Doraz said...

You do love to keep us all guessing, huh? Have fun this week. :)

Wild Rose said...

Wow great tale Brian quite creepy and and now i have to check out Otin's ending ~

AmyLK said...

So COOL! I had to jump over to Otins before I commented here. I LOVED the ending!

Adoption of Jane said...

this is great heading to Otins now!

Syd said...

That sent a knot in my stomach. What a bad husband this guy appears to be, but I will have to check out the rest of the story.

Marla said...

Ok, are you trying to freak me out?? I may not sleep EVER AGAIN!! or travel to foreign countries ... or trust my husband completely.

Evil Brian. Deliciously evil. :-)

Mighty M said...

A little belated, but I'm hooked, heading over for the rest. :)