Tuesday, June 1, 2010

purge

steaming, wet lumps
of my partially digested breakfast
paint the chipped maroon bricks
in the alley off 4th St.
though it still
clings to me,
in long tendrils reaching
to my lips,
until i swipe them away
with the back of my hand.

feeling better already,
my day seems brighter,
lighter, the world's color
returning with my own.

sometimes it just seems
better to let it out
than to let it roil and bubble,
ruining your day (life)
though why i let it in,
in the first place,
is the better question.

perhaps i should brush my teeth
so the memories don't live on
in the aftertaste...

80 comments:

Tom said...

yuck

McGillicutty said...

Wow... well written but um just a little you know... blecchhh for me!

kkrige said...

Not a good way to start the day. Yuck!

Brian Miller said...

ha, tom. i dont know what came over me this morning but it hit quick and once it was out it was done...and i figured i had never read a poem on vomiting, at least not written by a 3rd grader, so...i know, its all part of my grand sceme to show there is a poem in everything...

RNSANE said...

I suppose there is literary value to even the most basic of bodily functions as you depicted today. Good job but, as an RN, I've seen enough vomit to last a life time so I would have preferred a poem of love or loss or anything but a barf ballad!

Steven Anthony said...

True talent, finding a poem in such a thing ;)

C.M. Jackson said...

life as art and yes, there's a first time for everything--perhaps next some pepto then poetry? glad you are feeling better.

Caty said...

I always feel better if I just let it out...the process isn't too much fun, but relief afterwards is worth it. sorry you were sick this morning...hope you feel better!

sheri... said...

well, if anyone could pull it off, it was you, brian! it's certainly not the style i'm used to when i read your blog but your 'purge' was still so well written...even if it left a bad taste in my mouth :) whew, sure glad that's over with...you didn't share it with anyone, i hope?

willow said...

Love that last line.

Mighty M said...

I have lots of toothpaste if you need any.

And mouthwash. :)

Magpie said...

I agree with Tom..yuck! But as always, very descriptive. :)

She Writes said...

Yes! Brush :)! Floss, as well. haha

TALON said...

It must be a good vomit poem, Brian, because it got my stomach heaving ;)

Unknown Mami said...

Yuckity, yuck, yuck, yuck!

mean_owen said...

very nice! I especially liked the image of "long tendrils reaching
to my lips". Very vivid.

It reminds me of a great expression in Spanish ("llorar a moco tendido"), often translated "to cry ones eyes out", but literally more like "to cry with snot hanging".

Luisa Doraz said...

Such a colorful poem. lol :) Have fun.

Eternally Distracted said...

Arghhhhh Brian... Whyyyyyy?!!!

Bridgette said...

Um..gross! :) Thank you so much for all the kind comments on my blog!!!

Cloudia said...

brave, well done, but still disgusting LOL


Aloha from Waikiki, Brian
Comfort Spiral

Cinnamon said...

Brilliant analogy for the things that fester in our hearts and turn us sour inside :)

Lorenzo — Alchemist's Pillow said...

Hope you feel better. Please send an advance warning the day you write on the "runs" ...

sakhii•• said...

bad begginning:)

LadyFi said...

There is a poem and metaphor in everything.. and just like life, there is vomit as well as beauty.

I liked this!

Katherine said...

Ooohh Brian Yucky, yuk, yuk!!!
And I was actually starting to feel a little bit better & then I read your not-so-delicious poem! Thank you so very much!
You are a clever one Mr Brian... you even managed to find a poem in a puke!!
Very, very good indeed!

Me said...

I've mentioned my vomit phobia, right? ;)

You really do find the poetry in everything...!

Birdie said...

this is the first poem on a vomit I read Brian ... lol. For sure I did love this part ..."sometimes it just seems
better to let it out
than to let it roil and bubble,
ruining your day (life)
though why i let it in,
in the first place,
is the better question" ... liberation ...

Tabor said...

Well, this was not exactly what I wanted to read while sipping my first cup of coffee. Hope it wasn't food poisoning...but sounds like it. Good thing it only reached the stomach.

Tracie said...

Much better to let it out but it's miserable when you can't.

JBR said...

Love this Brian. You could look at it in so many ways, not just food, but bad memories as well. Thank you for sharing dear. Blessings.

Pauline said...

deep thoughts about a rather fluid topic... ;)

mo.stoneskin said...

Nothing like the bad after-taste of puke. But partially-digested breakfast? I've never had problems digesting breakfast.

Daniel said...

So Brian to find beauty in barf! What's next, a paean on going #2? You'll find a way, I'm sure.

Baino said...

Eeeuw . .spew! Just when I was beginning to tolerate poetry too!

Wings said...

Not the most beautiful, but a good sentiment. No pointing keeping it in, right? Just keep it away from us! haha

Lorraine said...

can't read any further, as I am having breakfast, and this natural almond gooey peanut butter is looking a little sickly right now...The power of you

Paul C said...

What else is worth purging and keeping?

Betsy said...

eeeewww...I think I'll skip breakfast this morning....haha

Brian Miller said...

yeah, still feeling under the weather this morning...probably fighting off a bug...

AmyLK said...

ewe! Get some rest after you brush your teeth.

Bonnie, Original Art Studio said...

An unpleasant read Brian! But, of course it was intended to be so.
I have to join in the chorus of "Yuck!".

Mr. Stupid said...

A Yucky thing to think of. But, you always make something out of the most unimaginable things.
Have a good day, Brian...:)

Kay said...

sometimes it is better to just let it all out. horrid description, validly so. Wrapped around an excellent question, why do we even allow it in...

posed around what exactly "it" is. what goes in, will eventually always come back out.. haha okay. 'nough said. :)

Katherine said...

Oh that no good ... feel better soon Brian!!

TechnoBabe said...

Great analogy, Brian! Almost made me puke for some reason. I do like the way you added the question why do we allow some things into our lives. Why indeed. Good writing.

Jen Chandler said...

There's a first time for everything. And this is the first poem about vomitting that I've ever come across!

buffalodick said...

I liked a memory compared to an after taste- unique!

California Girl said...

bulimia?

The Girl from Cherry Blossom Street said...

getting rid of something nasty ain't pretty!

Leah said...

Very Basketball Diaries/Fear and Loathing in Las Vegas...

Since v-ing (i can't even spell out the word) is my biggest fear besides death, well, I could hardly read this. But very effective nonetheless.

Bob Mac said...

Reminds me of my misspent younger days, one good purge and back on the pop.

Valerie said...

Vivid description, Brian. Too vivid in fact.... smiles.

drybottomgirl said...

Many times I have felt relief after "purging". Unfortunately it was because of my own doing (drinking) that I needed relief. I like the part about "letting it in in the first place" there in lies the rub, we need to be careful what we injest in......

Jingle said...

Best poem,
u make everyone feel EXACTLY how u feel,
hope that u get better soon!
rest, rest, come back and still be the best.

Okie said...

that's disturbingly vivid. nice, er...gross...but nice. :)

Harnett-Hargrove said...

Well, you are right, but that's just gross. -J

Harnett-Hargrove said...

Ok, so not so VERY gross... being a parent I should long over that...yes? -j

Meeko Fabulous said...

I felt this way yesterday too. Yuck.

Ed Pilolla said...

i feel better too afterward. after the pain, yeah, big relief.

secret agent woman said...

Oh, my. I get the metaphor and agree, but I have an aversion to the issue.

Six Feet Under Blog said...

lol-interesting topic for a poem. :)

Six Feet Under Blog said...

Oh, and I hope you feel better!!

Zuzana said...

I love your metaphors.
I hate being sick that way, I'll do anything I can to prevent me from being sick that way.;)
xo

Travel & Dive Girl said...

Ewwwww...

slommler said...

Ewwww is right!!! I think I felt my stomach retch while I read this. Excuse me...I have to go!!
Hugs
SueAnn

Goofball said...

I hope you no longer have that sour taste in your mouth...that's so aweful

get better!

Jingle said...

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Hope that you feel better in no time...

Pat said...

This just proves how much talent you have - writing a poem about puking? No problem for Brian! LOL! Thanks for those visuals. Yeah.

william said...

glad I ate before coming here LOL, well it has to come out mate :)

Nessa said...

Well, that was a fun graphic.

Good though.

Good advice, too.

blueviolet said...

Ewwwwww, definitely brush your teeth.

The Retired One said...

Yes..the question always is...how did we let it in in the first place?

Dianne said...

Excellent, Brian.

Thank you for your comments, I have been away for awhile. No time, considering.
I ALWAYS listen to your feedback.

(write what you know, is all I know) and I am so glad it rang true with you.
Keep writing
Dianne

Menina said...

That's how I would feel after drinking milk ;)

island of peace said...

i agree- sometimes thats the best way.

Lisa said...

Of course you know this is gross--but it is so good! We do really feel better once we get it out and move on from the mess :)

mama-face said...

I always feel better after I spew my emotions.

PattiKen said...

Besides, that's what alleys are for.

Syd said...

At first I thought this was a drunk throwing up the left overs. Maybe it was about that.....
Vomiting is a good reason that I never drank a lot. I didn't like the after taste.

Marla said...

"memories that live on
in the aftertaste"

Powerful line...