inserting the floss between two teeth, he moves it up and down, careful not to damage the gums. again he works his way around the mouth, ensuring meticulously that stray food particles and plaque are removed from the recesses.
perfection takes time, and as each minute goes by, another tooth complete, he feels his anticipation building. heart fluttering, he is nearly panting when with a great sigh he carefully removes the floss, discarding it into a disposable bag.
"you really should take better care of your teeth, my dear. the one small cavity is still in your mandibular molar. if only you had kept your appointment to get it fixed, your smile would be perfect."
pushing his thumbs into the soft flesh of her cheeks, he forces her mouth into a wide lopsided smile, before gently kissing her. pushing his tongue passed her thick lips, he traces the now smooth even surface of her teeth. a moan escapes from him as his excitement reaches a crescendo.
this is a new boldness that will ultimately lead them to him, but he anticipates that. honestly he desires it more than anything. removing a fresh new toothbrush from his bag, he places it in the hollow between his victims already cooling breasts; his calling card.
"yes. soon they will no longer call me Tooth Fairy, the moniker that the imbecile reporter gave me, but my given name, Dr. Henry Malice, DDS", he muses, "Or maybe just Dr. Malice."
catching the light switch with his latex covered finger on the way out of the door, he heads home to get some rest, before early appointments with patients. perhaps they will keep their appointments, so he would not have to do this again.
This is Magpie Tale.

Author's Note: This is obviously fiction, except that my dentist, growing up, was named Dr. Malice, which always seemed an ironic name for a dentist. Dentists have to be about the scariest thing in the world. Or maybe that's just me. Make sure you brush those teeth...smiles.
119 comments:
Message received. I would not like Dr. M showing up at my place.
Teeth being brushed right now. Don't want to be visited, even if he looked like Steve Martin (who did play my favourite dentist).
I know a dentist named Dr. Toothaker. He insists it's pronounced Tooth - ack - er, but I know better.
lol great p,have known a few butcher dentists in my time lol put hannibal lectre to shame hehe :)ost mate
What a creepy perv! I actually do hate going to the dentist. I clench my fists the whole time. That scraping sound is the worst!
Ugh I had a feeling you were going to go dark on this one. Very spooky. I had a dentist called Michael Pain!
At the age of sixty, I finally found the most wonderful dentist, Dr. Quach in San Francisco. He and his wife, Dr. Chen are incredible. I told him, at the beginning, that I had a lifetime of hating dentists and avoiding them like the plague. I was so amazed at my experience with him, I wrote a glowing review on Yelp. He acquired several new patients from that and, each time, my next visit was reduced by $25.00.
If I didn't hate the dentist before, I surely do now - lol!
Great tale, Brian. Creepy as all get out, but good :)
Hmmm...that's a pretty nifty tooth brush holder you, I mean, Dr. Malice designed.
well, that's one way to get your patients to keep appointments haha
excellent!
Ooh, creepy and original. I don't think I'll look on a toothbrush the same...
If that's an example of the tooth fairy, I'm glad I'm past the age when I might expect a visit from him!
This was so terrifyingly chilling, Brian! Reading it, your words sent shivers down my spine, the atmosphere and the tension were simply sublime. Plus, I hate, hate, hate the dentist and definitely agree with you; they are some of the world's scariest people. So this had an extra haunting element to it, which was a frightening joy :)
I love these Magpie tales that you do. I also love the creepy stories, but then what would you expect from me?? LOL
Reminds me of that creepy movie where Steve Martin was a creepy dentist (I do not like dentists) .....bkm
OHHHHHHHh great I have a cleaning in the morning...lol
love this one, as always brilliant.
baino, i was already leaning that way and think i may have overdosed on stephen king over vacay...lol.
for now on i'm putting a false address on my dental forms!
I guess I am too old because all I thought was Eeewww! Keep your stuff out of my stuff!
aauugghh!! you've made me think twice about every skipping an appointment!! brian, this was awesome in a sickening sort of way :) looks like a few days off has truly sharpened your skills...any pics??
Brilliant ~ and chilling at the same time! I wonder if dentists have to pass a course in managing rejection during school. 99 out of 100 people must hate them.
wow! That was really great! At first I thought he was a perv getting it on with a patient....but he was REALLY a perv! Like I said. You have a gift, Brian. I love reading your posts.
My surgeon who performed my lumpectomy and put in my chemo port - his name is Dr. Grief. He's awesome.
Eeeuuuww. This was deliciously malicious. The kiss was really creepy. Good job, Brian.
I love how you add this chilling element to simple stuff. Great Magpie!
smiles
Aloha from Waikiki
Comfort Spiral
Love the story-an excellent piece of flash fiction!
I have only nice stories about my dentist of 20 years. :) Have a fun week. :)
Creepy. It is really good writing Brian. I mean the words and the storyline and the end message. A great Magpie Tale.
Oh my! I'll never take my dental hygiene for granted again!
Would you be interested in a real life dental horror story? I vouch for the truth of this as he was our family dentist. Go
HERE
Wonderful!
This is only the second time I've read a story where the evil lead is a dentist. The first was in a short story by Cornell Woolrich, the name of the story I've forgotten. I remember making a copy of it for my dentist because he lamented that dentists never showed up in stories. He never said that again.
Dear Brian: First read I didn't catch on, but anyone this obsessed; yah, it's got to be a dentist or Jack Nicholson in The Little Shop of Horrors! It almost sounded sexy! Didn't it? I am not at all like Jack Nicholson in LSOH's! A very studied and enjoyably descriptive mag! Are you a dentist?
Whoa ... creepy scary!!!
Anyone who considers stalking you should think twice. Someone who can invent such scary fiction could resort to ... well ... who knows ... all it takes is imagination ... I will certainly mind my Ps and Qs with you Brian.
Whoa ... creepy scary!!!
How ironic..tomorrow i have to get dental work done in the A.m.....LOL!!!!!...On a side note my fathers urologist is named Dr.Seamen (i swear)
Terrifying for a woman that has many dental issues.
I'll think twice about ever cancelling a dentist appt again!! And I don't think I would go see a Dr Malice :)
OK, I'm keeping that appointment I have with my dentist next week. Yup.
I think I'm going to go floss once more.
After a bout with a few root canals, I floss about 3 times a day. But Dr. Malice is creepier than my dentist, lol.
Oh my,...I was NOT expecting this when I started reading. ...making mental not to avoid dentist from now on. ha.
OK ok - I'll make that appointment to get my cavity taken care of! I've been putting it off for two weeks - honest!
Seriously? Dr. Malice?
I will brush and floss and rinse with hydrogen peroxide!!!!!
Thank you for your supportive comments, Brian. I'm sorry I've been a bad bloggy friend....I hope you understand?
Smiles!!
I once had a dentist with yellow teeth.
The taste of novacaine is awful. And the scraping...makes me want to pull my hair out.
At first, I thought he was brushing/flossing his own teeth. Then, the "pushing his thumbs into her soft flesh" made me go back and read it again...SPOOKY, seriously, where DO you come up with this stuff???
Oh wait, I just read your comment about Steven King...that explains it!
Yikes, Brian...this one creeped me out for sure...and I was JUST getting okay with going to the dentist without white-knuckling it....(she says sighing and smiling at the same time).
Good thriller...but for goodness sake, don't do one on my gynecologist now okay???
your writing is so gripping.. this was fun!!
What a satisfying quick read. From fastidious fellow to meticulous murderer.
Thank you!
Too creeped out to say more... I'll just keep my mouth shut. Heartspell
As someone who is TERRIFIED of dentists, this story gave me the shivers. Well done!
Whew--that is a scary tale. I don't think that I will view my dentist quite the same way again.
Jeez, between you and Otin, I'm realllly sleeping with the lights on tonight.
Nice job,
jj
My hubby wanted the question of the week to be Do you like going to the dentist? I told him no because I don't know a soul who does.
Your magpie tale proves my theory.
Dr. Malice was really your dentist's name? That is a bit creepy.
No! If I were that Dr., the first thing I'd do when I had a spare 300 bucks is CHANGE that name....
You are all sweetness and light, until we see the full scope of your talent. The reporters are so wrong.
Ha, I won't forget the dark park piece, you should be working in the film industry in Calif.
thanks for following. keep your edge. you need it now.
and camp in the wilderness close to the earth. and let those boys explore, no ghost stories at the campfire from YOU!
Dianne
I'm pretty sure I've been to his office! Dang. Good piece!
As many other have said, creepy is the word for this one. A very well-written and riveting creepy.
I have a post coming up soon about some of the crazy names I see on the mail. (I work at the post office.) Like Dr. Paine, Dr. Aiken, and Dr. Schott. And, I kid you not, Dr. Bush, the gynecologist.
Wow, Brian...loved this story, very creepy indeed!
Dentists, I am not a big fan as you know. lol. take care.
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah so creepy....I'm gonna brush my teeth now
Oh my! My dentist has been calling me for the last two weeks because I missed an appointment... blogging will need to stop for now as I will HAVE to call him back!
Wonderful start - now write the book. I would buy it without hesitation.
You fed into all my dentist fears, great piece, atmospheric and clever.
Nice story.. :))
Take care
You really need a "Don't read this first thing in the morning" warning. I haven't even had my coffee yet.
Oh how creepy!! I was already nervous about dentists...now I will be downright paranoid!! And my cleaning appointment is just around the corner!! Ha!
Well done Brian
Hugs
SueAnn
Remember the movie,"Malice", a few years back? Quite apt.
Now I'll never go back..thanks for the chills..
(divorced mine!)
"perfection takes time" and how long did it take for you for conjure this post. I must tell you something: I have never been to a dentist so I read the piece without any first-hand experience. So much so.
But I agree, brushing teeth does lot of good!
Nice to have you back!
Smiles and joy,
Susan
I have hated all my dentists. Dr. Malice sounds like a suspicious name.
Nice post, Brian...:)
geesh Brian, why didn't you have the 'dentist malice' dressed as a clown? scary...good boy!
Sending this link to my dentist right now. Shiver.
ahhh, yes...brush my teeth! I still get nervous/anxious about the dentist...and he is a dear, dear friend! ACK!
Hope you had a nice visit!
Creepy!
Yikes! I'll never break another appointment! I promise!
A Dental Tale eh?
You make even toothy stuff seem interesting...My FB Friend!!
wow creepy dentist protrayal
LOL about no longer calling him the Tooth Fairy, I just watched that film with my kids yesterday. Somehow, he was a nicer character than your Dr Malice - he's one dentist I'll avoid me thinks.
Creepy and creative! You never disappoint!
Off to brush my teeth! I agree, Dentists are sooooo scary!
Great story, interesting to read a story from the mind of the perp! You kept it interesting.
freaky!!!
I don't think I will ever miss an appointment with the dentist again! Of course, I am not scared of the dentist. Its no big deal to go!
Omgosh if my dentist was Mr Malice I wouldn't go to see him!
Christine
This is just creepy enough to make me a better tooth flosser! I read once where dentists were the most hated Dr.'s and they held the highest suicide rate of Dr.'s. My children have a great dentist but I had a mean orthodontist whom I could see as "Dr. Malice". I enjoy the "magpie tales" as they usually hold mystery and intrigue. Hope you had a better time camping than I did at the cottage!
Yowzer! I just made a dentist appointment the other day! Luckily I like my dentist or I'd be freaking out about now.
This was downright creepy, though. You got a dark side there, Brian. :)
For a minute there I thought you had my dental files. Strangely I love to floss my teeth.
Do not like DDS. I wait to the absolute end, where I am in such pain or close to being septic. Both which have happened to me. I am bad when it comes to self care. Blessings Brian.
Okay, now I look at dentists a different way! lol
slightly mental dental...and we already don't like going to the dentist! Good magpie!
Ooooh that was creepy but good. My dentist was a Dr Pain...
haha! i think this is the real life story of my dentist, the imbecile who charged me thousands for something he was incapable of fixing.
i did not see this ending coming at all. nice job.
why are dentists kinda creepy?
and named inappropriately? or is it obviously?
That is a brilliant take on the prompt Brian! Dr. Malice, that's funny!!
Yee Gads!! This had a creepola Red Dragon feel to it. Shivers!!
Lovely story, Brian. You haven't lost your touch!
Interesting Magpie. I love the different swing this magpie tales went this week. I read quite a few and this just made the final call...Nice one Brian...Stay cool...cheers!
Sick and wrong, Brian. Sick and wrong. :-)
Hehe. Good stuff. The setup and payoff is wonderful. Third-to-last and second-to-last paragraphs have some issues, but overall... this is where your mind should live!
Okay, figuratively should live... not literally, of course.
omgoodness, what an interpretation. Trust you, Brian, to be creative hre again.
Brian,
dentistry in the twilight zone.
Rod serling would love this.
rel
jeez - just when you think it's safe to go back to the dentist...
you have a marvelous pacing to all your writing
Totally creepy! Still, nice writing. Oh, and just for the record, my dentist is terrific, and my hygienist is absolutely the best.
That's just great. I won't be sleeping tonight. You scare the plaque out of me sometimes, Brian.
i will- promise :)
good one.
I am dutifully warned.
Totally sucked me in. Great writing and great concept.
Brilliant!!
Yikes! I swear I'm going to make my appointment! I swear it!
I have to say that I actually like my dentist. He was a customer of mine at the body shop and he always brought in muffins (he had a bad spell of luck one year). Gotta like a dentist toting food :) Yours on the other hand, is one I would make a point of keeping an appt with. EEEeee!
note to self...this is why i've always been afraid of a dentist! well done..!
Brian---Do you read all these comments? All 109 of them??? Wow! Anyway, I will be 110 and reading this about "Dr. Malice" makes me think of my friend, who is a hygenist, who works for Dr. Muff! Beat that! Funny, eh?
Dr. Malice is an awesome name! when I was a kid my family doc's last name was Pain. You'd think he might change his name or something, but he prob. thought it was funny. Loved your magpie as always, you've got a nice collection of short horror. Have you heard of www.ralan.com? It has a list of some great sites that pay for flash horror.
When I was little we went to army dentists and they drilled without Novocaine. I have ISSUES with dentists. I always think of the movie Running Man with Dustin Hoffman. I'm shivering in fear just thinking about it.
Your story was equally scary.
My husband said your a brave man, stopping over at Lady bloggers. I told him you're just that kind of a nice guy...thank you.
How you do it, with over 100 comments...I mean, even Pioneer Woman can't do what you do.
Cue the scary music....I think you are on to the next great Halloween horror flick!
As if dentists are not scary enough. Yours sure had an apropos name.
Okay, so you scared me with this one. Great writing...and creepy. Creepy in a good way though. I'm flossing as we speak. :)
Scary, dude. Really creepy, but the attention you paid to detail is incredible.
and I have an appointment for a cavity next week, I will be freaking out in the dentist office ... why did I read this one ... lol
This ROCKED!!! OH my GOSH! :) The dark side of you should write much more often.
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