Tuesday, June 15, 2010

i love doUghnuts

between my thumb and forefinger, the glaze slides down the doughnut, gripping my fingertips in a fierce attempt to save itself from my indulgence, my other hand warm around a mug of rich dark roast.

across the coffee shop, framed in the sunlight streaming through the bay window store front, two lovers sit. her fingers brush his wrist, inadvertent in their wanderings, as words float, from her pink lips, across the table to his ears, a whisper on the wind created in their passing. his gaze so intent and relaxed, he swims in her eyes. their ankles touch beneath the table, a quick caress of familiarity.

mid-sentence, he darts across the table taking her lips in his. roses bloom on her cheeks, rendering her speechless, as he draws away. face breaking into a smile, she considers her hands, shy now at his forwardness. their eyes find each other again and he rises, retrieving their canes from the corner. shuffling to the door, he opens it for her, sun catching their silver hair in a brilliant halo, before they are gone.

sucking the remnants of sweetness from each finger, i take the final pull of acidic coffee in my mouth to wash it down. ready, finally, to face the day.

99 comments:

Titanium said...

An excellent way to start the day!

Prayer Girl said...

Love doughnuts, love coffee, love 'love' that lasts this long.

Beautiful.

PG

The Bug said...

This made me cry - so sweet! Reminds me of a song on a Marc Cohn album - True Companion.

Travel & Dive Girl said...

Sounds like perfect way to start the day. I love honey glazed donuts.

drybottomgirl said...

Clever..by using adjectives like "pink lips" you create the atmosphere of a young couple. Even the action of kissing across the table makes you not notice "their ankles "and their familiar touch". I love the fact that this is an older couple, why we always think love is for the young, I do not know....song tip: "The Edge of Desire" from John Mayer's "Battlefield Studies"...very good!

Eternally Distracted said...

Argh, I love nothing better than seeing older people still so in love. Great way to start the day... although I'm a little jealous about the donut ;0)

Daniel said...

Up until the mention of canes, my mind had drawn a picture of young love. Your surprise made this one all the more sweeter.

sheri... said...

you brought tears to my eyes with your story...it may never happen that way in my life but a girls gotta dream! i often ask myself why would people stay together for so long and not be exactly like your coffeeshop lovers? simply beautiful, brian!

Tina said...

Great, sweet piece. I, too, was expecting young love. "Grow Old With Me" by Mary Chapin Carpenter comes to mind. Nice.

AmyLK said...

Lovely morning coffee break!

Sam Liu said...

Beautiful...coffee and a delicious glazed doughnut, sounds heavenly. And it is true, coffee houses truly are wonderful places to quietly observe the magic of the world.

JStar said...

I am a big coffe and donut fan...but this love story is so beautifully portrayed... :)

TechnoBabe said...

Yes, senior love is sweet and inspiring. I like the way you are kind to seniors in your writing, not writing them off like some younger people.

Hilary said...

I've seen a few memorable couples like this. You rarely fail to produce a surprise ending. And you never fail to produce either a smile or a tear. Sometimes both.

Monkey Man said...

Everlasting love. That's my dream. I use the metaphor '80/66' with Mrs. MM. When I'm 80 I will be married to the hottest 66 year old on the planet. Great post, B.

Baino said...

Sounds like my parents in law without the canes. So, you're burning pizza and eating donuts while the cat's away you naughty mouse!

william said...

awe how romantic mate, great post :)

Six Feet Under Blog said...

now im hungry for a donut!!!

She Writes said...

I LOVE to watch people like that. As good as a donut! I liked this one.

Syd said...

I hope that will be me and my love as we age. I find this a happy story.

Life with Kaishon said...

that was sweet. so, so sweet!

Eva Gallant said...

I totally loved that! So sweet!

G-Man said...

Drama amongst the grounds...

Tabor said...

I have actually seen this sometime. It is a nice reminder of possibilities.

Just Be Real said...

Ironic that you post this. In a couple of days my brother will be visiting, and the only time I have doughnuts is when he comes as I am the go getter at Dunkin Doughnuts.

This post was super and touching thank you.

Vodka Logic said...

great piece... I see hanging out in a Bux was inspirational. :)

Unknown Mami said...

Who needs doughnuts when there is love in the air?

Jingle said...

This post is a gem.
Maybe you shall call your kids and their mom to come home...
I like the twist in the end.

Nessa said...

So ironically visual.

Caty said...

mmm..now I really want a donut! What a site to see first thing in the morning. I love the elderly =)

TALON said...

Gorgeous writing, Brian. Gives me a whole new appreciation for donuts and romance :)

fancypants said...

That is my dream for my 'olden days'- I love to see elderly couples still in love after all the years they have spent together. But now I want to go to Krispy Kreme's!

Kat_RN said...

All is as it should be in the world. I think "young love" is entirely over rated. Dark roast and donuts mmm.
Kat

The Retired One said...

Awwwww, totally sweet, Brian..and I am not just talking about the donuts...
that was beautiful.
I hope that's me in a few years!
;0}

Little Ms Blogger said...

I love doughnuts! Who doesn't?

Did you not want to scream out - Get a Room? to the lovers.

Cinner said...

Brian, this is just beautiful....they sound so wonderful,
and not the doughnuts although I would be all over them too. I want that to be my husband and I when we are old. take care, wonderful post.

Me said...

That was very well-done. I too am amused at myself for immediately assuming young love. Although, you've got to admit, it must be a rare but precious thing, to keep such love and passion burning for so long...

beth said...

you're a beautiful writer....

Pat said...

Love never dies....no matter how old we get. Thanks for that lovely story.

The Urban Cowboy said...

Such a 'sweet' post. Very visual, especially liked, "roses bloom on her cheeks" nice.

Emmanuel Ibok said...

I felt like the cameraman videoing this.

only a movie said...

perfect vignette -

Ronda Laveen said...

I think that some of your best work is describing such scenes as these. Two thumbs up!:-D

Jen said...

You fooled me. I thought they were younger. I want to be that way when I'm old...and still running marathons...

Betsy said...

Doughnuts...one thing I have never been able to resist. :)

Bernie said...

What a wonderful thing to view first thing in the morning and then to enjoy your coffee and doughnut is a bonus........:-) Hugs

lakeviewer said...

Those lovers are on a sugar high! Just complaining, since no donuts are around to make me dream as you are dreaming.

Felicitas said...

Now that was sweet! If I were reading this in the a.m. it would have gone down so perfectly with a cup of dark roast. LOVED it!

Magpie said...

Oh, you're so sneaky!! Leading us to believe one thing and surprising us with another. I too had been imagining young love. I like this much better.

The Girl from Cherry Blossom Street said...

Ugh is right! Clever!

After all these years, he still opens the door for her...

Wow.

steveroni said...

If I viewed what you witnessed, I'd be ready to take on ANY kind of day--and maybe even tomorrow!

Thank you, for a neat-o story.

Joanie M said...

You just described John and me, I swear! He opens doors for me, opens the car door for me... always, helps me with my coat, holds my chair, will rise if I leave the table and then return. He holds my hand always. He's the most romantic man I've ever met. And he loves me like mad! How lucky am I?

LadyFi said...

What a lovely touching story! I saw an old couple like that yesterday... a rare love indeed.

Joanna Jenkins said...

Now that is a fabulous way to start the day!
Great job Brian.
jj

Matty said...

Forget the kiss. Give me the donuts.

Zuzana said...

Congrats on the POTW mention Brian.;)) And as always, so well deserved.;)
Now I want me some doughnut(s).;)
xoxo

tony said...

Young Love!

slommler said...

Such a sweet surprise ending!!! And it gives us all hope!!
Congrats on your POTW!!
Hugs
SueAnn

Lorraine said...

You make me fall in love with life with your words, what more can I say? always always a lovely surprise

Goofball said...

oh love is in the air...doesn't that make us all happy :)

blueviolet said...

It's so wonderful to hear about love at that age.

Birdie said...

until I read about the canes I thought they were young and I did dream about that time I was sitting like that with my husband ... now I'm hoping that we will always sit together this way when we will be old, I for sure will be blushing if he will kiss me like that :-) and I did like the way you describe the observer ... beautiful story Brian

Rob said...

The question is was it a Krispy Kreme Doughnut?

Cheryl said...

This was truly lovely. Someday I hope we are them.

Cricket said...

Great post with a nice twist. Congratulations on the potw. I was going to read the top choice but I had to stop here first... I love doughnuts, too.

An evil but oh-so-tasty way to start the day: split plain doughnuts like bagels and toast 'em. Butter, and eat. Mmmmmm.

Hot, buttered, deep-fried cake. Yum.

Mr. Stupid said...

This was very beautiful. I love doughnuts.

Lori said...

So beautiful. I hope that in my late years of life that I have a companion such as this.

Anonymous said...

another smart writing , well done brian.
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Land of shimp said...

This was a lot of fun, Brian. I think of doughnuts often, but haven't had one in years at this point. My son's a type 1 diabetic, so we're a no doughnut household (he does get to eat some sweets, but first thing in the morning is a big no-no).

Anyway, young love and fried cake, how could you possibly go wrong with that? Thanks for the morning doughnut and congrats on the post of the week mention over at Hilary's blog.

Bonnie said...

Sweet!

Alix said...

Hey buddy.... Congrats on your POTW mention. Hils obviously knows what she's doing!

XO

Daryl said...

Good one and congrats on the POTW mention!

kkrige said...

That was beautiful. Oh, love like that, that is not crushed by time. Makes for heartwarmth. Swallow my last bit of java as well. Ready to face the day myself. Thanks

Ms. Gibson said...

You Incurable Romantic You!

natalee said...

donuts and old people love.... what could be better????

June_Butterfly said...

I bet the lovey dovey gave the doughnut a run for its money!What a sweet way to start a day!

I'm totally envious!!As ,always!

Valerie said...

I absolutely love the twist at the end.... lovely scene, no wonder you decided to write about it.

The Thirteenth Crossing said...

I wish I could say I love donuts as this is a delightful piece. Unfortunately I'm a dinner gal. I like food, not sweets. *gasp* I know. I don't even like chocolate. *double gasp* LOL

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Meeko Fabulous said...

That was beautiful. At first I was like "awwww... young love"... but then you said canes and it was just downright adorable! :)

buffalodick said...

I avoid donuts, cause one doesn't get it- I need two!

Vicki Lane said...

Lovely piece -- with a lovely twist!

Adoption of Jane said...

ummmmmmm donuts!!!

Snappy Di said...

Love knows no age. I only hope to have someone kiss me in that way one day when I am walking with a cane.

Fabulously written..

Congratulations on POTW.

Di

Ed Pilolla said...

something magical about seeing two people in love, so that the rest of the world doesn't even exist to them. dig the sweet you taste in the moment.

The Crooked Tongue said...

I love doughnuts, I love coffee and I love, love. Nice way to start the hours!

Mama Zen said...

I find this so touching. Love it!

Joanna Jenkins said...

PS Congrats on your POTW mention!
jj

sheila said...

You had me at donuts, lol. That first paragraph....yum!

Then the part about the silver hair and my heart melted. But I still have a taste for donuts. :)

PattiKen said...

Hey! I thought they were on the beach in Key Largo!

BusyBees42 said...

Wow, this is stunning! The imagery is powerful and the moment sweet!

Jill said...

ABSOLUTELY CHARMING!!! CHARMING!!!!

Selma said...

You have such a talent for making an ordinary situation extraordinary. Doughnuts and true love. Could there be anything better?

Stacey Dawn said...

Beautiful and sweet!
Congrats on the POTW!

Mighty M said...

oh yum am I ever hungry!

Heartspell said...

Such a lovely example of how timeless love can be...I loved this and doughnuts, too! Heartspell

jake said...

Brian, old people are gross ;)

Lovely story. I really wasn't picturing that at all, I believe we all anticipated a younger couple.

Angie Muresan said...

Oh, this makes me crave a doughnut with my coffee, right now.

Marla said...

So sweet! I want this to be Bob and I always. Whenever we go out, we point out old, happy couples and always say that's us in a few more years. :-)

Wonderful Brian!

J. said...

Never without a vivid image after your writing. Well done!