Tuesday, June 8, 2010

the great big picture show

the sunset is brilliant
blazing orange, giving way to
purple, then fading into black
behind the wide white screen
at the end of the field
where we play on the
slides and monkey bars.

as the curtain of night
rolls across the sky, we retire
to the back of the van,
hatch raised to allow
the fireflies to mingle
like ushers finding seats
for everyone before the show.

cuddle up here next to me
so i can feel you startle,
chuckle or giggle with glee
against my chest as
Shrek and Fiona take the screen
(and don't forget Donkey)
leading us Far, Far Away.

and just as he's
about to save the day
the sky tears open
with a might roar
so we watch the end
through the pouring rain
but that's ok....

with a hug and a sigh
you fall asleep in my arms
as i carry you to your car seat
and with a smile think
nothing can take our
happily ever after away...
except me.

116 comments:

Daniel said...

Very sweet. I can picture the scene as I have lived several just like this. Blessings.

Steven Anthony said...

very tender, sweet. beautiful

Titanium said...

Those last two lines just say it all, so perfectly. This is fantastic, Brian. Love it!

TALON said...

Such beautiful, layered writing, Brian. Like a fine painting.

drybottomgirl said...

I like how you capture the human touch...cuddling, feeling upon your chest, carrying to the car seat..and I also like the dose of reality with the pouring rain. Life has it's moments and not letting it spoil a wonderful night is priceless..........

Tracy said...

Great poem, Brian. I love the image you have created. I miss the old drive in picture shows.

blueviolet said...

I love that you have happy drive-in memories. I love the idea in theory. The reality is that I just remember the mosquitoes.

Travel & Dive Girl said...

Ahhh, the drive-in... I remember those days well. When I was younger, I had to wear my pjamas to them. We still go, but no more pjs and no more carrying little ones to the house.

Zuzana said...

So romantic...
I get my dose of romance here on regular bases to compensate for it missing in my life currently.;)
Have a great day,
xo

ModernMom said...

There is still one ol drive in around here....I remember many nights there with my parents! Thanks for the flash back:)

AmyLK said...

So sweet! I can picture your evening like I was there. The kids falling asleep on us is the best feeling in the world!

Wings said...

Nothing like the drive-in with family. Did one of the boys make sure you added Donkey in there? :)

The Girl from Cherry Blossom Street said...

I've never been to a drive-in!

Meeko Fabulous said...

Ya know Brian? I'm usually (most of the time, actually) ok with the fact that I didn't have a dad growing up, but then I read one of these and I totally feel like I missed out. Your kids are so lucky to have a dad like you! :)

TechnoBabe said...

Now that's a show and a night out. We used to take the kids to the drive in movie and have family fun there.

PattiKen said...

Ah, the drive-in. I have many memories of going to drive-ins, from going in PJs with my father to going with car-loads of friends (some of whom were hiding in the trunk) to going with a date, terrified that he would try to kiss me, terrified that he wouldn't.

This is lovely, Brian.

jinksy said...

An alien scenario for a Brit, but the sentiment rings true, never the less.

Jen Chandler said...

I love it. I could "see" everything, even the giggles :)

Tom said...

didn't know they still had drive-ins...i remember the big old metal boxes that you hung from your car window, and half the time the sound barely worked or was nothing but crackles...wow, we've come a long way.

Jingle said...

Thank You for being the best ever father 2 your boys...
Your whole family is blessed!
Cheers!

Caroline said...

awesome piece. You have a gift of capturing the moment

Sam Liu said...

I found myself lost in your magical, beautiful words...such wonderful images and emotions are conjured by this poem, it really is a perfect romance.

dustus said...

Makes me think of a father's unconditional love for his children. A joy to read your work. Thanks

Pearl said...

I miss the drive-ins. And I miss being small enough for my dad to hold.

Poignant I believe is the word that best describes this.

Pearl

Heartspell said...

Just precious. Your heart is made of sweet tenderness.
Your children will be blessed. Heartspell

Eva Gallant said...

Wonderful! I so remember going to the drive-in with my parents and then taking my kids. Now my kids take theirs! Great memory!

Baino said...

I miss that my kids aren't young enough to fall asleep in my arms any more!

Caty said...

aww...what a great memory! We don't have many drive in's around anymore. Nicely written as always :)

Tabor said...

I do love these visits, but you make me regret no longer having little ones.

Birdie said...

such a tenderness, such a love ... that's beautiful Brian :-) I love to have my little one to fall asleep in my arms ... I also love where you say that nobody can take this happily moments away but you ... you are a wise one :-)

Mama Zen said...

I really like this one!

Betsy said...

Awww...fun!

Madame DeFarge said...

This is lovely. But is there some ambiguity in the last line?

Ronda Laveen said...

Sweet moments of angels in your arms. I remember vividly waiting for the show at the drive-in to start. I still think of those times.

Jill said...

LOVE the drive in with the little ones in jammies and packing in the pillows and sleeping bags. (Let's leave OUT the mosquitos PLEASE!)

Maggie May said...

That was lovely!
You have a way with words.
Maggie

Nuts in May

Mighty M said...

Very fun - a drive in? They still exist?? :)

william said...

you painted a fantastic picture here brian, well done, great poem :)

Luisa Doraz said...

Life is good. Smile often. Family is the best. I love your poem. It made me happy. :)

Brian Miller said...

we actually have 2 drive ins within an hour of us...pretty cool. this was our first time at this one. the playground was a nice touch as we were waiting on the movie to start...

Rebecca said...

This brought back such memories! The one closest to where we live just closed not too long ago. So sad!!! They were such fun times. I have not read your writings before, but I am glad I stopped by. Very nice.

Peace.
Rebecca

Brian Miller said...

thanks rebecca, stop through any time...

the last line...rain happens (metaphorically as well) and many times we can let it rob us of an otherwise beautiful moment...thats why i tossed it in there...

Bonnie, Original Art Studio said...

The moments that life is really about ... beautifully told.

Hey Brian - congrats on 500 followers!!!!!

Nessa said...

Drive In Movie or Movies in the Park?

I think I was able to keep the belief in a magical world alive for my daughter. I hope you can do the same.

Little Ms Blogger said...

I'm hoping to go to a drive-in theatre this summer.

We didn't have one in the town I grew up in and it sounds so romantic.

Of course, traveling by train like they did in old movies also sounds romantic to me.

I have a feeling both aren't.

Cheryl said...

So sweet and tenderly written.

Kay said...

an epiphany worth remembering

Just Be Real said...

Very nice Brian, thank you for sharing. Blessings.

McGillicutty said...

and isn't this what it's all about? to hear them catch their breath, then listen as their breathing slows and then strain to stand up and still hold on without waking that precious of all bundles.
*!*!*!*!*

Me said...

I love the bit about the fireflies, Brian. So whimsical, the image goes so well with the Shrek movie.

I imagine you telling your kids stories about the little critters while you wait for the movie to start...

-C

Ed Pilolla said...

captivatingly simple. lovely.

Prayer Girl said...

I can't remember how long ago was the last time I went to a drive-in theater. They're hard to find these days. The one here in Naples closed not too long ago.

This is a beautiful scene you describe.

PG

Green-Eyed Momster said...

Beautifully written, Brian. I miss drive-in theatres. My kids don't even know what they are.

Smiles!!

Magpie said...

Beautiful walk down memory lane. I loved going to the drive-in as a small child. We always went in our pajamas because we would be asleep before we got home.

THE BEATY said...

nice poem. The entire 1890 is up on site

The Urban Cowboy said...

Your words always seem to take me back to my own cherished memories, as a son and a father. Fantastic writing.

sheila said...

Awwwwwwwww that is the sweetest post! Gosh, for my kids that was what seems like eons ago. Thanks for some good memories!

Cinner said...

Very nice Brian, congratulations on 500 followers. you are a thrill to visit, take care.

Hilary said...

I miss drive-ins.. it's been years since there was one around here. My kids have never had that joy. Lovely poem.. it brought back fine memories.

Bernie said...

Brian, we use to do the same, pyjamas, pillows and off we would go only to have each of us carry each one up to bed when we returned home....great memories.
.........:-) Hugs

Luisa Doraz said...

I just wanted to come by and wish you a very happy time blogging. I will be on vacation. I will do my very best to get to a computer.I may have to leave a quick comment, but you will know I have been by. I will also be checking my blog for comments left. So, if you leave a comment....REMEMBER...Make me SMILE. Thanks to you all.

She Writes said...

You big softie, Brian :). That little guy has you wrapped around his finger nicely ;)!

LadyFi said...

Awww... just wonderful! A perfect family outing!

Captain Dumbass said...

Last time I saw a drive in movie Airport '79 was playing. Yikes.

I'd love to see fireflies, but we don't have them on this side of the Rockies.

Christina said...

i remember days like this. love, family time. you have brought such good memories, to my soul.

this is beautiful
xo

Christina said...

I love this one! So sweet. Drive Ins are great... as long as I can stay in the vehicle with the A/C and the windows all the way up away from the bugs.

Pseudonymous High School Teacher said...

beautiful, i loved the curtain of night...

Ace said...

Oh my 500!! Very fun. I will have to see if I can add again?? to make it 501?

Beautiful reflection on your parenting thoughts. The time just flies by. My oldest is now trying to keep an eye on me at 15 years old. He worries about me. Very cute.

Ace said...

Bummer!! No luck. You are stuck at 500! HA!!

Suzanne said...

What a treasure! You create and wonderful experience for your readers. All the love and wonder your expressed, I felt. Thank you.

Peace,
Suzanne

Eternally Distracted said...

You always sum everything up so well Brian.

Valerie said...

Heart wrenching, Brian. Loved it.

Alan Burnett said...

Do I detect a rather nasty sting in the tail there?

Lorraine said...

Wish all the hurt children in the world would have a father like you, then 'hurt' would be redundant. I love this Brian, and I love your writing :)

slommler said...

I sure do miss drive-in movies!! Experiencing them with the kids or your lover is so magical. It was so comfortable and romantic all at the same time. Such a loss!
And the way you wrote of the feel of someone you love close to you while you watch is wonderful!!
Watching the movie and watching the person...fabulous!
Hugs
SueAnn

Pauline said...

"nothing can take our
happily ever after away...
except me."

and you won't so happily ever after is always a possibility

such marvelous word pictures you make!

Brian Miller said...

heading off on a long day of work...wont be back on until tonight so catch up with all of you then!

secret agent woman said...

All of us who are parents have these moments - very touching.

Vicki Lane said...

You brought back memories from almost sixty years ago -- only then it wasn't Shrek but Martin and Lewis and Francis the Talking Mule.

Love those firefly ushers!

Syd said...

Nice Brian. I remember going to drive in movies when I was a kid. Another part of Americana almost gone.

Ocean Girl said...

I am creating our happily ever after now with my two teenage boys. I hope I am not too late.

The Empress said...

Lovely poem, I can feel a 24 hr day's worth of happiness in there.

I thought the ending would say, something like, "but then they grow up."

So, what does it mean??? ( you again have me asking...)

Sounds like a retrospect now, on a child now an adult...

Ms. Gibson said...

*sigh*
Your sons are so lucky to have a sensitive & sentimental Dad...

Tracie said...

Beautiful, Brian.

My parents like to tell about how they took me to the drive in when I was about 3 or 4. I talked the entire time and they couldn't watch the movie.

kkrige said...

Beauty moment Brian. I personally don't like the tone of the last line though. It is a loving moment all through though. We still might get there...

island of peace said...

every thing is ok when you are with loved ones.

buffalodick said...

Nice way to bring up good memories for everyone..

Lorenzo — Alchemist's Pillow said...

Still at the drive-in I see. I know, you didn't want to wake the kids. To celebrate 500 followers you have to invite us all to popcorn.

JStar said...

Aw Brian...I LOVE it!

william said...

brian you never let us down mate, this was brilliant...

Cascia said...

That is beautiful! I took my girls to see that movie and we loved it. Have a wonderful Wednesday!

Goofball said...

oh cool a thunderstorm in a drive in movie theatre. Must give an interesting spectacle!

Barbara said...

That was lovely, Brian. You said it all in the last stanza.

Wordwand said...

amazing imagery with a great final stanza , bravo brian.

soundoffreedom said...

I love happily ever afters! and you have captured one beautifully!

Shoeless said...

What can i say that hasnt already been said, good works as is the norm when it comes to reading your poems. keep up the good work and i as always look forward to your next post

Gillian said...

its all in the last line...
AWESOME!!!

Otter Thomas said...

It took me 5 minutes to scroll to the bottom of yoru comments. You are quite the star. Anyway, I have never been to a drive in. I have never lived anywher that has one. Someday I must remedy this. Nice work.

schererart said...

You paint such a beautiful picture with words. This is difficult to do, and you make it seem so easy.

Nice.

anthonynorth said...

Excellently done. You set the scene perfectly.

artswebshow said...

wow, so many comments.
And i thought i used to do well. lol
I can see why.
You really are that good

signedbkm.com said...

lovely, a blessings young parenthood, enjoy all its blessings.... you will be writing about them for many years to come...bkm

˙·٠•●❤Sh@KiR@ ❤●•٠·˙ said...

very nice....
I truly enjoyed this, Brian..
your scene that you just painted is WAY BETTER than the show!
hugs
shakira

The Crooked Tongue said...

This is awesome as is the reference to Shrek!
Your poem reads gentle and quiet, like love.

Gaurav Sharma said...

Such beautiful, layered writing, Brian. Like a fine painting.
I like the way you brought out the picture...
fantastic Poem, loved it

devoidcreation said...

Beautiful and with many layers

Bing (PinkLady) said...

your poem touched my heart. a very lovely poem, written with so much love. =)

megzone said...

what a brilliant imagery brian :D
simply awesome :D

and such a heartwarming ending too :D
hope you have a happily ever after forever :D

Jannie Funster said...

GORGEOUS, Brian!! Loved the twist that this was in the movies.

xo

suzicate said...

Absolutely beautiful, Brian, from the vivid imagery to the tenderness.

Pat said...

How sweet! I love the drive in! When I was a teenager for completely different reasons than when I had kids! And no - I didn't have kids BECAUSE I went to the drive ins! LOL!

ishabellemanalo said...

i love the sweet moments.... you made such a wonderful out of t\an ordinary things as watching a movie....

Shaky said...

An ordinary part of life described wonderfully. Lots can happen when you combine nature and entertainment together.

joesuzz said...

way to paint a very tender picture. Good job Brian!

petemarshall1 said...

top again...another poem from the mind of a genius..well done

Marla said...

Perfectly true.