1 foot N front of another
eye head 2 where
the asphalt ends
and the dusty trail begins
where the giants stand watch
as i bathe N crystal streams,
drying N the sun's embrace,
letting wood smoke caress my cheek
and birds sing 4 me;
the place eye see
behind closed I'z
c U soon
Tell a story in 55 words. Write your own or just read more, go see g-man.
Thursday, June 24, 2010
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Enjoy every second dude! ;)
Have a great trip!
going on vacation? have fun
Are you going 'sms' on us? Have a great weekend, Brian.
have a beautiful time Brian! we are leaving too, only not for such a fun adventure :-( hope you'll be full of wonderful stories to share :-))
Fun place to be. Sounds like camping.
Trying to work this out, or am I seeing too many hidden meanings?
I are confused! Is this about a dream? Or are y'all going on vacation? :)
Brilliantly written, Brian, clever and a joy to read :)
Have a good one!
This is an enviable talent, writing a story in 55 words. I can't do it at all, and you do it brilliantly.
My father and sister do this, but the old fashioned way - they write out their stories with PEN and PAPER, put them in ENVELOPES, affix STAMPS to them, and send them via US POSTAL SERVICE to each other! What is this world coming to?!
Wonderfully displayed Brian. Enjoy! Blessings.
Crafty. You did it in 55!
You deserve THE BEST vacation ever with your family. Enjoy!!!
sounds like a weekend in the mountains, or just an imaginary getaway!
Have a great time!
Enjoy your weekend!
Hope you and your family enjoy every sparkling moment, Brian!
You know, the squirrels told me they watch naked two-leggeds bathe in the streams.
I hope you and yours have a great time. I'm longing for some woodsmoke and camping myself.
Happy trails.
Enjoy! Let that wood smoke caress and may the weather be pleasant!
Fun! Take pics!
Vacation time, yeah! Enjoy.
Have you been drinking?
well
I guess it is fifty five words so I guess it really doesn't matter now does it.
I hope u have a gr8 time! Happy Friday.
55 Flash Fiction Friday: DECODE
Vacation? C U soon.
God speed!
PG
Have so much fun with your family. Moon *smiles*
don't hurry home
can smell the camp fire
You've earned it B. Soak it all in.
I need to go there or go crazy. I haven't fully decided yet.
See ya Brian!
Ahhhh...
A Vacation 55!
Enjoy Brother, you deserve it.
Forget Blogging
Forget Blogging
Forget Blogging.......
Have a Kick Ass Week-End!
Sounds like fun!
sounds like a nice place to escape to!
Geez... I wanna go too! Love the 55 :)
have fun Brian and get that much deserved rest my friend!
This was fun - like code...
Have fun camping! Don't forget the bear bag and bug juice!
Hope that you have a good time wherever you are heading.
Awesome! Enjoy your trip!
Have fun....totally enjoy.
Safe journey!
I love the way you switched the letters and numbers. Great 55! Eye would love to c, and have the birds sing 4 me 2... sounds like fun. Enjoy. Heartspell
This is really clever. Thanks for this.
All the best, Boonsong
Hope you're off having fun!
jj
Enjoy! Be safe and bring back lots of good memories. Great 55
Enjoy! Be safe and bring back lots of good memories. Great 55
Enjoy where ever you are going.;))
I will be on an extended blog break too and will be gone most of July.
Have a great summer.;))
xoxo
Enjoy your holiday. Nicely done.
Long read as I had to decipher the words! Fun, nevertheless.
Joy and passion always,
Susan
Nicely done!
Have a wonderful trip, enjoy every moment. take care, happy travelling, be safe.
delightful!!!
Even when you find ways to keep it short it works out fun! Have fun!
very beautiful.
Sounds like a very beautiful place. Did you make your son post a message for us :)
Whereyagoin'whereyagoin'whereyagoin????
:))
This was beautiful. Have a great vacation...:)
numbers and words, tell stories..you do it so well
Holiday's such short fair pleasure. Mine is mere demonic temptation in this week's 55!
Enjoy....I too will have smoke caressing my neck, my husband and oldest son are off to a Brewer's game, and I'm taking the two youngest and heading to the cottage for some r & r......
sounds like you're off on a camping trip. very innovative way 2 xpress.
i know you'll have a blast with the fam!
till later--
smiles,
Have a good vacation!
Happy tramping. Have a wonderful time.
Where ya going? Have fun.
Where ya going? Have fun.
Hope you are heading out to a lovely spot. Enjoy!
that's heavenly
Cleverly done. No surprise here :).
Great 55...loved the way you switched the letters and numbers. Hope it's fun
GREAT 55 Brian!
wood smoke caress my cheek. so good. enjoy!
Have a great trip!
Nice one Brother...You always write interestingly.
have fun!!!!!!!!
Enjoy...Enjoy!
Happy Summer :-)
Gotta be a fun filled camping trip...but where? Maybe Mount Rushmore(giants)? Wherever it is have a great time.
Hope you all have a colorful weekend. :)
Another great 55 - Have fun whereever you are :0)
Nice post :))
Take care
Enjoy those crystal streams!
Nicely written Brian,Enjoy your weekend :)
uniquely written!
Enjoy!
And...I hope you see this, way at the bottom of your comment box, but you're a winner over at my place. When you return, please send me your mailing address and I'll drop your plaque in the mailbox.
Peace...
brilliant post Brian, it amazes me how u can write these shorts with so much meanings :)
i llove your poem
i write poems too and post them well not all of them just some!!
Happy trails!
Somewhere with tall trees?
wow!
Hello Brian:)
You have really mastered the craft of writing with vivid portraits albeit you use very few carefully selected words. This is an amazing skill.
Best wishes:)
Joseph
Peace out!
I love short posts - and you managed to tell the most amazing story with less than 55 words - WOW - where the dusty trails begin - like that and wonder who the giants are. So - have fun!
love that!
welcome back mate, hope u had a well deserved vacation :)
Missed ya - hope you had fun
160 not the same without U!!!!!
You are in the best place for the soul and for renewal
I hope you had a wonderful trip!
It's like I was reading a well-written text. . . amazing how language and communication are so impacted by technology....
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