Thursday, June 24, 2010

55 - a promise 2 return

1 foot N front of another
eye head 2 where
the asphalt ends
and the dusty trail begins
where the giants stand watch
as i bathe N crystal streams,
drying N the sun's embrace,
letting wood smoke caress my cheek
and birds sing 4 me;
the place eye see
behind closed I'z

c U soon

Tell a story in 55 words. Write your own or just read more, go see g-man.

99 comments:

Steven Anthony said...

Enjoy every second dude! ;)

Little Ms Blogger said...

Have a great trip!

Goofball said...

going on vacation? have fun

Lorenzo said...

Are you going 'sms' on us? Have a great weekend, Brian.

Birdie said...

have a beautiful time Brian! we are leaving too, only not for such a fun adventure :-( hope you'll be full of wonderful stories to share :-))

TechnoBabe said...

Fun place to be. Sounds like camping.

Madame DeFarge said...

Trying to work this out, or am I seeing too many hidden meanings?

Meeko Fabulous said...

I are confused! Is this about a dream? Or are y'all going on vacation? :)

Sam Liu said...
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Sam Liu said...

Brilliantly written, Brian, clever and a joy to read :)

Eva Gallant said...

Have a good one!

ethelmaepotter! said...

This is an enviable talent, writing a story in 55 words. I can't do it at all, and you do it brilliantly.
My father and sister do this, but the old fashioned way - they write out their stories with PEN and PAPER, put them in ENVELOPES, affix STAMPS to them, and send them via US POSTAL SERVICE to each other! What is this world coming to?!

Just Be Real said...

Wonderfully displayed Brian. Enjoy! Blessings.

Bonnie said...

Crafty. You did it in 55!

You deserve THE BEST vacation ever with your family. Enjoy!!!

otin said...

sounds like a weekend in the mountains, or just an imaginary getaway!

blueviolet said...

Have a great time!

Mighty M said...

Enjoy your weekend!

TALON said...

Hope you and your family enjoy every sparkling moment, Brian!

Ronda Laveen said...

You know, the squirrels told me they watch naked two-leggeds bathe in the streams.

Tina said...

I hope you and yours have a great time. I'm longing for some woodsmoke and camping myself.

Monkey Man said...

Happy trails.

5thsister said...

Enjoy! Let that wood smoke caress and may the weather be pleasant!

sheila said...

Fun! Take pics!

lakeviewer said...

Vacation time, yeah! Enjoy.

dirt clustit said...

Have you been drinking?

well

I guess it is fifty five words so I guess it really doesn't matter now does it.

The Thirteenth Crossing said...

I hope u have a gr8 time! Happy Friday.

55 Flash Fiction Friday: DECODE

Alice Audrey said...

Vacation? C U soon.

Prayer Girl said...

God speed!

PG

moondustwriter said...

Have so much fun with your family. Moon *smiles*
don't hurry home

can smell the camp fire

Daniel said...

You've earned it B. Soak it all in.

Marla said...

I need to go there or go crazy. I haven't fully decided yet.

See ya Brian!

g-man said...

Ahhhh...
A Vacation 55!
Enjoy Brother, you deserve it.
Forget Blogging
Forget Blogging
Forget Blogging.......

Have a Kick Ass Week-End!

Mama Zen said...

Sounds like fun!

Caty said...

sounds like a nice place to escape to!

Roxy said...

Geez... I wanna go too! Love the 55 :)

The Retired One said...

have fun Brian and get that much deserved rest my friend!

Pseudonymous High School Teacher said...

This was fun - like code...

CM said...

Have fun camping! Don't forget the bear bag and bug juice!

Syd said...

Hope that you have a good time wherever you are heading.

Tracy said...

Awesome! Enjoy your trip!

sarah said...

Have fun....totally enjoy.

Jill said...

Safe journey!

heartspell said...

I love the way you switched the letters and numbers. Great 55! Eye would love to c, and have the birds sing 4 me 2... sounds like fun. Enjoy. Heartspell

Boonsong said...

This is really clever. Thanks for this.

All the best, Boonsong

Joanna Jenkins said...

Hope you're off having fun!
jj

Magpie said...

Enjoy! Be safe and bring back lots of good memories. Great 55

Magpie said...

Enjoy! Be safe and bring back lots of good memories. Great 55

Zuzana said...

Enjoy where ever you are going.;))
I will be on an extended blog break too and will be gone most of July.
Have a great summer.;))
xoxo

anthonynorth said...

Enjoy your holiday. Nicely done.

Susan Deborah said...

Long read as I had to decipher the words! Fun, nevertheless.

Joy and passion always,
Susan

A Daft Scots Lass said...

Nicely done!

Cinner said...

Have a wonderful trip, enjoy every moment. take care, happy travelling, be safe.

Shadow said...

delightful!!!

Tabor said...

Even when you find ways to keep it short it works out fun! Have fun!

island of peace said...

very beautiful.

Ocean Girl said...

Sounds like a very beautiful place. Did you make your son post a message for us :)

♥ Braja said...

Whereyagoin'whereyagoin'whereyagoin????

:))

Mr. Stupid said...

This was beautiful. Have a great vacation...:)

Lorraine said...

numbers and words, tell stories..you do it so well

John's comments said...

Holiday's such short fair pleasure. Mine is mere demonic temptation in this week's 55!

drybottomgirl said...

Enjoy....I too will have smoke caressing my neck, my husband and oldest son are off to a Brewer's game, and I'm taking the two youngest and heading to the cottage for some r & r......

Jessie said...

sounds like you're off on a camping trip. very innovative way 2 xpress.
i know you'll have a blast with the fam!
till later--
smiles,

buffalodick said...

Have a good vacation!

PattiKen said...

Happy tramping. Have a wonderful time.

Help! Mama Remote... said...

Where ya going? Have fun.

Help! Mama Remote... said...

Where ya going? Have fun.

Nancy said...

Hope you are heading out to a lovely spot. Enjoy!

Tom said...

that's heavenly

She Writes said...

Cleverly done. No surprise here :).

Heartspell said...

Great 55...loved the way you switched the letters and numbers. Hope it's fun

JStar said...

GREAT 55 Brian!

Ed Pilolla said...

wood smoke caress my cheek. so good. enjoy!

Six Feet Under Blog said...

Have a great trip!

Emmanuel Ibok said...

Nice one Brother...You always write interestingly.

natalee said...

have fun!!!!!!!!

Lulda Casadaga said...

Enjoy...Enjoy!

darsden said...

Happy Summer :-)

The Urban Cowboy said...

Gotta be a fun filled camping trip...but where? Maybe Mount Rushmore(giants)? Wherever it is have a great time.

Luisa Doraz said...

Hope you all have a colorful weekend. :)

Eternally Distracted said...

Another great 55 - Have fun whereever you are :0)

Sam!! said...

Nice post :))

Take care

LadyFi said...

Enjoy those crystal streams!

Marinela said...

Nicely written Brian,Enjoy your weekend :)

soundoffreedom said...

uniquely written!

Deidra said...

Enjoy!

And...I hope you see this, way at the bottom of your comment box, but you're a winner over at my place. When you return, please send me your mailing address and I'll drop your plaque in the mailbox.

Peace...

william said...

brilliant post Brian, it amazes me how u can write these shorts with so much meanings :)

Anonymous said...

i llove your poem
i write poems too and post them well not all of them just some!!

Unknown Mami said...

Happy trails!

secret agent woman said...

Somewhere with tall trees?

sakhii•• said...

wow!

Joseph Pulikotil said...

Hello Brian:)

You have really mastered the craft of writing with vivid portraits albeit you use very few carefully selected words. This is an amazing skill.

Best wishes:)
Joseph

Pat said...

Peace out!

Claudia said...

I love short posts - and you managed to tell the most amazing story with less than 55 words - WOW - where the dusty trails begin - like that and wonder who the giants are. So - have fun!

Everyday Goddess said...

love that!

william said...

welcome back mate, hope u had a well deserved vacation :)

moondustwriter said...

Missed ya - hope you had fun
160 not the same without U!!!!!

Dianne said...

You are in the best place for the soul and for renewal

AmyLK said...

I hope you had a wonderful trip!

jake said...

It's like I was reading a well-written text. . . amazing how language and communication are so impacted by technology....