Wednesday, April 14, 2010

wiener stand wonders (lunch)

through hazy
wiener stand windows...

her floral dress blows
in the asphalt breeze
little hand nestled in her mom's
as they giggle their way across
the downtown crosswalk
his eyes follow them the whole way
from his beat up Chevrolet
and i imagine he's thinking
about his wife and
making up tonight.

...a man in line taps his feet and...

two dark suits
at the concrete street corner
flap their lips between
puffs of smoke while
their hands describe
the arches of their secretary
in the wavering air
laughing, just carrying on
and i imagine they're deciding
which dress to buy her
as a surprise.

...a woman complains at the counter and...

his hand snakes
out of deep pockets
fingers brushing hers for a moment
her dirty yellow dress
brightening from where she's
crouched against the red brick
wall, waiting on compassion
and i imagine her looking
into the eyes and seeing
her prince charming.

...now it's my turn in line and...

i'm not denying
my reality but creating it
with lunch time dreams
as my thoughts become
actions and actions create
my reality...

two dogs all the way?

yeah, that's me. can you
wrap them to go.


This is a Theme Thursday post.

101 comments:

william said...

lol, brilliant mate, could almost imagine being there, good one :)

Luisa Doraz said...

I really got into your words and my brain got silly. :) Have fun!

TechnoBabe said...

Lots to see and sense and morph into some kind of life all while waiting for the hot dog. Nice writing.

Me said...

That was fabulous!

anthonynorth said...

Definitely one of your best. Excellent.

Kulio said...

I love people-watching! Love little vignettes like this :-)

wordwand said...

the vivid description and the careful choice and use of words inter alia make of this poem a masterpiece.well done Brian.

Lorenzo — Alchemist's Pillow said...

As always, you have an impeccable eye for the telling detail and such a steady hand on the tiller ...

Monkey Man said...

You are an amazing observer.

Cop Mama said...

Wow, the way your mind works...just amazing! All these stories just floating around waiting to be told...good thing you have a blog, my friend! You never cease to surprise me with the variety and complexity of your writing.

Leslie said...

nicely done Brian
quite the talented poet (oh but we knew that)

Leslie

Marla said...

Love this. I felt as if I were there.

Julie said...

I appreciate your work here very much, Brian. I am a newbie, but I am quickly getting hooked.

I like the observations and the sensual detail. But I also like the lines on the 'page' - the very structure is detailed and conveys a rare beauty.

Bravo!

The Retired One said...

Lovin' how you describe all the details for us, Brian...wonderful! I was there with you!

Pseudonymous High School Teacher said...

It's like Mo's observations told through poetry. brilliant.

Eva Gallant said...

Interesting observations--but I wanted to smell the fried onions and mustard! lol

slommler said...

I was observing the observers!! So cool! Nice journey
Hugs
SueAnn

Tom said...

nicely done...and who was watching you as you watched who you were watching?

Katherine said...

This is like a script written for a scene in a movie. So wonderfully written Brian. I am always inspired after reading what you write. Your a master of the craft to be sure!
Was it 2 Dogs with the lot?
I love my hot dogs Chilean style..with avacodo, tomato, lettuce, mayo, sweet chilli sauce Ooo & of course cheese...Mmm...Now I am salivating & it's only 10 in the morn here in Oz.

~ Tabitha ~ said...

This was a fabulous read! :)

secret agent woman said...

I have always wondered and made up stories in my head about the people I see.

Ocean Girl said...

I guess we blog everywhere, all the time. Even in our sleep?

Kathy said...

I could feel the emotion in this poem! I loved the yellow dress brightening where she leaned against the brick. That rolls off the tongue just right.

Ji said...

perfect job!
thanks a million for everything!

Christina said...

Thanks for taking us along. Terrific as usual, Brian!

Harnett-Hargrove said...

We are all a part of it... -J

Magpie said...

Don't you just love people watching...trying to guess who they are, what they're thinking, where they're going? Great job, Brian!

Daniel said...

A slice of life. Each person has their own world that we can only lightly sense and never really experience.

oinky said...

a cool poem.. nicely done :) i like it!

Cloudia said...

Wonderful poetic journey!



Aloha from Waikiki


Comfort Spiral

Jaime said...

i tried to order a hot dog for lunch yesterday. it took 30 minutes to bring a dog and a soda back to my seat... but damn it was good.

i love opening day!

Tracy said...

When I start reading one of your blog entries I never know where it's going to lead me but I'm always pleasantly surprised once I get there.

Maggie said...

Just by reading it, it's like if I were there observing. Nice Brian.

Maggie said...
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Jingle said...

http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/04/14/come-what-may-trisha-happy-new-year/

gifts from Trisha,
I pass to you in case you want them.
Sorry that I am late,
super busy today!
I know you have visited fresh poets already, superb job!

Will see you tomorrow.

Yousei Hime said...

Wonderful storytelling of multiple lives. Really like the images and bits left to my imagination. Thanks for visiting today. Glad you liked it. The secret code was a challenging prompt for me, and I'm not sure I understood the concept. But . . . as far behind as I am, I stepped out on the floor and gave it a whirl.

Susan said...

Another great observation piece. Nicely told!

Theme Thursday: Lunch

Green-Eyed Momster said...
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Green-Eyed Momster said...

You really should be getting paid for your work. You have a wonderful talent. You paint a picture with words and I always love coming here to read your pieces of art.

Thank you!

P.S. Sorry for the typo in the first comment. I'm tired!

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

Very cool post, Brian.
You never fail to amaze me.
Bravo.
Happy Thursday!

hugs
shakira

Jingle said...

From your words, I imagine that the inner you desire at least three things: you want to buy a gift to surprise your wife, you want to make up for her, and you want to be happy with your efforts...

May all your wish coming true!
I could not get you when I first reading it, I printed out a copy, stared at the words, then when I was doing my dishes, I started smiling...

I smile because you are trying hard to be perfect husband, perfect father, and perfect friend...and You are Indeed perfect in many ways in my eyes.
I am sure your wife and your kids
get YOU.

Have A Fabulous Evening With Your Family Tonight!

I admire your wife,
she is the one who is available to you whenever you need her, and she is the one you shall cherish and love for good on behalf of your kids...

Happy Wednesday!
you and Your Wife Rock!

Jen said...

That's some fancy wiener stand, with windows and all.

Great job as always. I wish I had your talent for poetry.

Bridgette said...

Nice story. I could actually see myself there. :)

Vodka Logic said...

I do love to people watch

Matty said...

Sidewalk dogs can be the best.

faery of the wilds said...

imagination has but no ends...

Ronda Laveen said...

Oh, I want to be there in that scene. Oh, and I'll take mine with relish.

Ronda Laveen said...

Oh, I want to be there in that scene. Oh, and I'll take mine with relish.

mo.stoneskin said...

Saw Psuedo's comment, which is very encouraging! Two dark suits, concrete street corners, very apt my friend.

Tabor said...

I am going to try to see the world through your eyes. Each day is a tale.

Zuzana said...

What an amusing post, observing people around you, wondering about their lives and their problems, dreams and thoughts.;) And all over a lunch break.;)
Great as always, have a lovely lunch today.;)
xo

Baino said...

You sound like me 'people watching' in the sandwich shop and making up scenarios about their oh so exciting lives. I bet they're just there buying lunch. I am definitely going to try an American Hot Dog with the lot one of these days and I don't care if they're made out of lips and arseholes!

the walking man said...

sometimes the reality we imagine while in line is the one that is taking place. I sometimes like to imagine only the good but then...even I know that never happens.

Well done Brian.

LadyFi said...

Oh, I was standing in line with you... Such wonderfully vivid description!

Felicitas said...

There's a big, vibrant world out there but most of the time it seems we get too caught up in our own stuff to notice it. And that's too bad.

A wonderful piece, Brian!

Goofball said...

it's fun to sometimes try to crawl into the minds of the people that cross our paths and wonder what their story is

suzicate said...

What a visual, felt like I was in line waiting! Nice flow.

suryagni said...

you are a master story teller.

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Mrsupole said...

I am not sure why but when we go to Costco we always seem to end up in the line to get a hot dog. Just something about eating them out somewhere, makes them taste better.

Happy TT, loved the story.

God bless.

willow said...

Stellar bit of writing, Brian. I love "flap their lips between
puffs of smoke".

California Girl said...

I was there too. You manage to put your readers into your world.

mouse (aka kimy) said...

hot diggity dog! great poem!!

i can imagine myself behind you in line!


happy theme thursday

impendwa said...

i love this! i'll admit, as a vegetarian i was skeptical at first of the title, silly i know-- but your use of words and imagery is fantastic!

sheila said...

Oh this is great! I don't go downtown much, but when I do, I can't resist the hot dog cart! I know I shouldn't....eat one I mean...but...can't help myself.

Lynn said...

I was in line behind you and watching you imagine. :)

Jill said...

I love "people watching" stories...I think the made up tales are better than the real thing.

JStar said...

Brian, you can write about the wind blowing and it will be beautiful...Your style is amazing! Can wait for my next addition...

Alix said...

Waiting on compassion.

You sure know how to get my attention with only a few well chosen words. And look! I'm comment 69. That's quite amazing. Wow.

buffalodick said...

My earliest happy memory is our family going to an A&W root beer/hot dog stand, and eating off wax paper in the car from a car window tray...

Betsy said...

I loved this...so fun...and we've all done it...people can be so entertaining.

I'll have what you're having, too...I'm starved after reading 40 posts about lunch!

Mama Zen said...

This is really well done. I love the "arches of their secretaries." Fabulous!

Lorraine said...

Excellent as always Brian, I see what you see, and wonder....

Valerie said...

I had a feeling it was you in the queue.......... Brian, what's another word for FABULOUS, Hmmm excellent, yes; fantastic, maybe; exciting, definitely.

ishabellemanalo said...

you never fail to write brilliant and thought-provoking poems... :)

Shoeless said...

Way to tell a story two thumbs up :)

Dreamhaven said...

You have a wonderful outlook on this theme. Happy TT

Luisa Doraz said...

o you ever rest? :) Nice one!

Rebecca said...

What vivid imagery here...Wonderful as always!


...I'll take mine with chili and mustard:)...Wait a minute.... after the Sunday feast at my blog I'd better grab a rice cake instead:)

Happy TT!

VE said...

Did I tell you I was the one that picked your wallet while you were so intently watching that scene. Next time...keep more cash on you...

Kate Hanley said...

Wonderful. I could really see each person. I've just discovered the "cart" outside the Arden theater. Greatest grease ever!

Kate Hanley said...

Wonderful. I could really see each person. I've just discovered the "cart" outside the Arden theater. Greatest grease ever!

Janice said...

That poem was so alive I could almost taste the mustard!

ModernMom said...

Oh I so love this one. I often wonder what people are thinking when they are standing in line! :)

Diana (Diane) Maria said...

It is this writing that made me go out and buy an iPad. I take your work everywhere I go and say, "You have got to read this!"

Gillian said...

you describe the people so vividly

Ji said...

http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/04/15/waiting-for-the-splash-theme-thursday/

I got you now,
I linked my magpie tale to theme Thursday...oops.
sorry.
I appreciate your thoughtfulness in telling me...

Hope that you have a Fantastic Thursday!
The Miller Family Rocks!

mairmusic said...

Always love to read you. This one was fun, but the one for your son really touched my heart, having a son who is grown and far away...

Mighty M said...

I'll pay more attention next time I'm in line for a hot dog.

Or two.

:)

laurenmichelleotheim said...

I love this because I do that all the time!!! It was wonderful and colorful :)

Joanna Jenkins said...

And this is why I read every single one of your posts. LOVE the images your paint.
jj

C.M. Jackson said...

two all the way--Mr Jackson's favorite--loved the writer's mind standing in line ---you created at least three different characters while you were trying not to think about dogs--great post--one more question ---what about the root beer? Happy TT

Gladys said...

Once again Brian, wonderful.

Pat said...

I love feeling part of the crowd, and another blog writing about hot dogs! Now I have a craving for one! Well written!

Ms. Gibson said...

Brian,
When are you going to publish your Poems?????
Happy Theme Thursday!

Jingle said...

Do you know the difference between a horse and a zebra?

I feel funny because solution to my question today for #1 is Zebra,
and
the solution for #3 is
get toad,

Well, I guess you have enough of me,
I will have to do some chores.
smiles!
I love your kindness!

Gerardine Baugh said...

Wonderful! Your words flowed. I was so connected to your poem that I couldn't stop reading and wondering.
The way you pulled me in and kept me reading:
"...a man in line taps his feet and..."
Love this
Gerardine

Jingle said...

Well,
I guess I will see you tomorrow.
Thank you for the fun.

I do not expect ordinary folks or general friends to do math, the question is for a few who are interested, no big deal, I myself am very shallow on everything, I am open to learn from you, from other friends...

I simply do not want to discourage people who do not do math...ignore it if you are not interested.

I admired your blogging integrity in commenting, respect people's personal preferences, and more...

Happy Sunday Evening!

xx

Jingle said...

f(x)=3-2x,

f(0)=3-2(0)=3-0=3,
f(1)=3-2(1)=3-2=1,
f(2)=3-2(2)=3-4=-1.

it is a pattern to follow,
the formula is 3-2x,
every time, replace x with value inside f(x), compute, then it is done...

never mind if it is too abstract!

Ji said...

Good Evening, Brian:

Hope that you have a fruitful evening!
I was up at 5am today, but only stayed for 15 minutes...
A spam comment has made me feel sick, it is simply not my fashion.
I am a married woman, but I loathe those who come in with a link that filled with unrated photos...It may be my own fault to click on it...
In general, I click on the link and see healthy AD, which is okay, this one is totally unexpected...

Hope that you are okay with everything, I will always comment for your post, I do it after I am ready...

Best wishes!
You Rock!

JML said...

A brief intersection of lives. It's always amazing wondering how her yellow dress got dirty or where they're going, isn't it?