Tuesday, April 6, 2010

sleeping bag (if you want me)

when did our bed
become so big?

so unlike
our first
one
so small
we practically
had to lay on top
each other, all
tangled up
in love.

let's sell all
we own and move
into a sleeping bag
somewhere the
sun will rise
and set
around us.

if you want me.
(like i want you.)

93 comments:

Bonnie, Original Art Studio said...

I think we all know how she will reply!! Great work - as always.

Me said...

I am insanely jealous that there are women in this world who have men who write them things like this... :)

william said...

very nice Brian, lots of brownie points comin YOUR way lol :)

Lorenzo — Alchemist's Pillow said...

I love the suggestion of selling everything you own to move into a sleeping bag ringed by the sun's movements, even as I ponder how such an idea would go over in my household ;)

Joanie M said...

I love this, Brian!

CottageGirl said...

Whew-hoo! You go, Brian!
I think that you just got some extra points for this!

Luisa Doraz said...

Something to think about .... :)

Mmm said...

Beautiful. Whistful. Love it, Brian.

lakeviewer said...

It must be spring up where you are, thoughts of love and sleeping out, and watching the sun rise and set. SWEEEEET!

I am envious.

Cloudia said...

You'd LOVE living on a boat!



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Tom said...

love is good and all that, but hey, everyone needs a little space.

Dianne said...

Smaller beds=longer marraiges, so the research said.
I grew tired of yanking the comforter back onto my back, so I bought my own!

backache, pain in the neck, I've been called worse!......but not a wet blanket.

Sandi McBride said...

Sounds like a winning proposition....lucky girl you have there...
Sandi

Fragrant Liar said...

Oooooh, I love that.

Not The Rockefellers said...

there are times when less than is definitely greater than :)

Peace ~ Rene

slommler said...

Awww! That is so sweet! I love it and I am sure she will too. But I still have to give props to my king size bed! LOL!!
Hugs
SueAnn

Beth said...

So sweet! My husband and I still have a double bed. I can't imagine a bigger one. :)

Katherine said...

Oh that is great Brian! Life in a sleeping bag sounds delicious! Her answer will most surely be yes...but maybe just maybe she will want separate sleeping bags for the children.

Ronda Laveen said...

You had me at sleeping bag.

otin said...

I think that you need to book a camping trip real fast! :)

Nancy said...

You need to do a workshop, Brian.

Cop Mama said...

Yay, that was awesome!

Ok, so I've decided two things:
1. Your wife needs to do a guest post.

2. You need to start doing a weekly writing prompt for the rest of us novices!

Totally just teasing...only if you want!

Eva Gallant said...

Awwwwwww! : )

TechnoBabe said...

Funny how the years go by and the bed gets bigger because all the kidlings want to share in the bed hugs! Great writing.

An Open Heart said...

Ahhhhhh....so sweet....Mrs. Brian is a lucky lady!

AngelMay said...

"all tangled up in love" - I love that.

Scarlett said...

I think I might need to ask my husband this question as well.

Jingle said...

I am slow thinking person,
But I feel the tensity in you.
Have fun with love...

Bernadine said...

Such a wonderful post, and idea. I think that the stores may all wonder why camping gear is selling so early this spring now. :)
Your creativity is amazing.

Mama Zen said...

You are such a romantic!

Tracy said...

Dang it, Brian. You are such a tease. *smiles* I bet your wife is really special.

Cabo said...

QUIT HITTING ON ME. WE'RE RELATED, YOU PERVERT!

Jill said...

Sweet, sweet, sweet!
I love cuddling up to my sweet man EVERY SINGLE NIGHT! BUT, maybe NOT in a sleeping bag!

tori said...

we have always had a "little bed" and love it, except when all 4 kids would want to sleep with us, then I still loved it. :)

Green-Eyed Momster said...

We're officially in a King. Our sleeping bag days are over for comfort's sake.

You're such a romantic! T is very lucky!
:)

Pearl said...

Ah, Brian, this one kind of made me sad.

We all bring different things to the table, don't we?

Incredible writing, as usual. Thank you.

Pearl

Magpie said...

Simplicity is best, isn't it? Life, houses and beds can become too big for comfort or closeness.
I'm sure she'll want you - she's a smart girl.

Richard @ The Bewildered Brit said...

Fantastic! It also says so much about how we (I mean "people in general" here, obviously) always seem to get lost in "stuff" and we lose sight of what's important in a relationship.

Excellent poem!

Marla said...

Brian, this one made me cry...and want to sell everything and move into a sleeping bag with Bob.

Beautiful...

LadyFi said...

So romantic!

cinner said...

I think that is one of the most beautiful things I have ever read. Brought a tear to my eye, such love.Take care.

järnebrand said...

let's sell all
we own and move
into a sleeping bag

That is so beautiful. I loved that. All you need is love. Love is all you need... :)

liza said...

HELLO!!!!! I skimmed through some of the comments and "sweet" "whistful" and "tears to my eyes" is not what first come mind. So, i'll just say what many left out.

THAT was HOT! So, is the for sale sign up, yet?

mo.stoneskin said...

Great stuff, I've never moved into a sleeping bag but, weather permitting, it sounds like a great idea.

Protege said...

Oh. I am lost for words.
Your wife is one lucky woman.
;)
Zuzana

Goofball said...

My husband's a restless sleeper so I really love our big bed :D

Alan Burnett said...

Ah I love the sentiments in the poem Brian, but the practicalities of returning to that small bed of youth are beyond my ageing body which demands space and an acceptable level of comfort. As for sleeping bags : I slept in one recently for the first time in 40 years and was permanently scarred by the experience.

tony said...

Size Matters!

Alyssa said...

Love this! I actually stopped by to tell you I've posted your comment in "Commenters Say The Darndest Things" and I'm hoping you won't mind...
also, I'm hoping you'll vote!

Baino said...

Haha Tom's FB comment is now making sense. There's just not enough room for the both of us! Hey but aint it fun trying?

Alix said...

There you go again, making all the other people in the world wish we were you.

the walking man said...

But then what happens when the kids & dog need to crawl in during a thunderstorm?

Betty said...

Beautiful, just beautiful!
(from someone who is contemplating buying 2 sleeping bags so we can camp at a festival - but they do zip together)

Daniel said...

I missed the point of this one until I read some of the comments posted. All I kept think was how uncomfortable your sleep would be if you gave up you big comfy bed for a cramped sleeping bag.

only a movie said...

This is so cool! :-)

Jessie said...

first of all, i agree with the comment made by "Me"

second, i have no doubt she will say...let's just sell the bed and get a sleeping bag. remember the kids!! lol

this was really sweet Brian.

thanks for the smile!

Valerie said...

The closer the better. Make that a small sleeping bag...

Nessa said...

At first I thought you were calling me a bag because I was napping again.

A very sweet poem. We do tend to drift away from each other with all of our wonderful comforts.

5thsister said...

Awwwww!

clean and crazy said...

can i borrow this?!? it is awesome i want to make my honey a card and put this in there. i would send you the example. i did one of shadows poem and dulces. you guys are so talented you should open a shop for sweetheart cards, i could design them!!

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PattiKen said...

You are indeed a romantic! You've left a lot of women sighing wistfully out here.

Jannie Funster said...

Okay, Brian, I totally think you're chanelling my current wavelength or something!! My "Drink Up The Stars" song has lines about a sleeping bag for two and sleeping under the stars. & Such. That cooincidence is weird, but synergistic!

And this poem of yours is ABSOLUTELY WONDERFUL!!

xo

buffalodick said...

While snowing in Sept. my wife and I in a tent, shared the same sleeping bag for warmth and survival!

suzicate said...

Sweet and awesome. I know a couple who sold most of what they owned and stored the rest to go on a year travel around the world before they settled down and had kids. I thought it was quite exciting and romantic of them.

ModernMom said...

Oh this is beautiful! Love it.

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Happy Wednesday!

Snowbrush said...

I too have small bed memories. In fact, our small bed was in a small trailer bedroom that was itself so small, that you were either in the bed or you were out of the room.

tom said...

Well done! Concise yet emotionally powerful...

Alienation gives way to longing for closeness in view of what really matters in this world--love.

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Robin said...

I like the idea...its never too close for comfort...or comforting...Lovely, and cozy too..!

ilovepink said...

very inspiring posts

Anya said...

Sounds very romantic ;)

doubtfulpoet said...

Wow Bri! Who knew!! Lol loved it as always. Just breezed by to say hello before I go back and study <3 you man!

Pauline said...

reading here is, every time, like picking up a good book and wishing it didn't have to end.

dusty said...

I mean I LIKE you Brian, I really do, but you'll have to throw in a couple of those thick foam pads if You want me to use the other L word
(l.o.v.e) :)

~ Tabitha ~ said...

omg.you can have so much fun on a big bed though! turn it into a picnic spot some night or a little tent and only use a flashlight.hehehehe beds are wonderful playgrounds for couples..
enjoy the space - but still share a sleeping bag :)

dusty said...

uh oh. Now I'm embarrassed. I guess I talk other peoples blogs a little too personal.

Taking a second look it seems that question may not have been directed at me.

imbeingheldhostage said...

Wow. Beautiful.
I can't imagine a sleeping bag-- we're still in the large bed that for some reason keeps filling up with kids in the middle of the night stage.

The girl with the flour in her hair said...

I remember those days...sigh. :)

Another great poem!

wordwand said...

well done Brian;intelligently delivered; and funny in a way.

Mom said...

Good job, Brian.

T said...

I'll meet you there my love...sans les enfants... :)

Forever & Always

T

(they can come a few days later!)

Joanna Jenkins said...

I know the answer to that one :-)

Nice job.

gayle said...

Love this!! Reminds me that my husband and I use to sleep in a double bed for years and years..every one got queens and finally we did and then we got a king but we held out for as long as we could. Now even in the king I sleep cuddled up to him.

June_Butterfly said...

I bet every lady is jealous of your wife.I think it's very manly of you to write something like this.

Wish all men can read this.^-^

suryagni said...

just adored the cuteness of this poem. :)

secret agent woman said...

Reminds of that country song "Love grows best in little houses."

Matty said...

Nothing wrong with that scenario.

evalinn said...

That´s so cute!

Pat said...

Wow - this one hit close to home for me. Very moving. You are one big romantic teddy bear.

sherri said...

fantastic.

Tamarind~ said...

:)