Tuesday, April 27, 2010

finding serenity

beneath a rusty railroad bridge,
that spans the great brown
serpent of the james river,
where the footpath
curves the contours of the cliff,
hundreds of feet above the valley,
we lay on a nose of rock,
jutting out into the cool air.

birds float lazy circles,
an ant finds the peek of our rock,
ascending from below,
a lady bug curtsies before flitting away
and the weight of nothingness
whistles around us, as we
dangle our feet over eternity.

a great steel beast roars,
taking the bridge, shaking
the day with its thunderous clamor,
its echoes chasing it
out of sight, once more.

morning dew paints our shoes
dark & grey, as i jot this note
on a dried bamboo leaf,
found along the way,
releasing it to the wind,
an invitation to join us,
here on the edge of creation.

107 comments:

Kathy's Klothesline said...

"morning dew paints our shoes".... just as you paint wonderful pictures in my head with your words!

Titanium said...

You more than found serenity, you wrapped her in your beautiful words and gave her to the world, with this one.

Meeko Fabulous said...

Aaaahhh nature... Gotta love the way man comes in an interrupts, right?

Joanna Jenkins said...

That could be lyrics to a song! Fabulous as always Brian.
Thanks,
jj

jinksy said...

I think blogland posts are a little like your leaf - they scatter around the world without the need of air currents...

Wings said...

Nice... Ode to Nature.

Mighty M said...

Such a pretty way to describe a special moment...I totally feel like I was there too.

Rob said...

Nice.

TechnoBabe said...

Sounds like a great place to contemplate life and watch the tiny critters. Very nice writing. I especially like the visual of a sweet ladybug curtsying.

Jingle said...

morning dew paints our shoes
dark & grey, as i jot this note
on a dried bamboo leaf,
found along the way,
releasing it to the wind,
an invitation to join us,
here on the edge of creation.

magical ending!
loved the peace and beauty in it...

Jingle said...

Finding and getting serenity is finding love and balance in life,
thank you for adding favors, colors, sounds, and music to this journey.
Glad to see you rested, refreshed, and restored with growing energy.

Jingle said...

your poem is constructive, well-rounded, and profound...
I am running out of words to praise you. simply put, everything is perfect...

Cinner said...

Beautifully said Brian, I love how you describe your surroundings, always do. have a great day, take care. serenity and peace.

wordwand said...

tremendous imagery and sound effects, great , minute descriptions.well done Brian.Awesome stuff.

Bonnie, Original Art Studio said...

This one had me transfixed! How many of these do you pop out in a day???!!!

Ronda Laveen said...

I love making offerings to the wind to take wherever they were destined to go, to whoever they were destined to find. I could feel the power of the cliff and the pure space.

Baino said...

Loving your new approach Brian, it makes sense, is beautifully lyrical and I don't have to read it twice! We have a 'cliff' edge in the mountains that feels just like this, miles above the dairy land below. Hang gliders use it for a launch pad but it's hauntingly beautiful and peaceful. Must go and take some pics one of these days.

California Girl said...

An elegant image, that ladybug.

Birdie said...

in nature we do find the serenity we need no doubt about that :-) I'm still blown away by the beauty of the tale you did post yesterday. one big thanks for sharing your incredible talent with the world. have a lovely and serene day :-)
ps: ants starting to march into our living room - a little less poetic :-)

Eva Gallant said...

I love the lady bug curtsy before she flew away. Such pictures you weave with words.

william said...

very nice, was just like a fine painting, artisitc to the last word :)

Magpie said...

"and the weight of nothingness whistles around us..."
Beautiful, Brian. You brought all our senses into play with this one.

slommler said...

What a wonderful image you have painted in my mind! And the "dangling in eternity" has touched my soul.
Thank you
Hugs
SueAnn

mama-face said...

"our feet dangling over eternity". I want to bottle that very feeling for eternity.

Stacy (the Random Cool Chick) said...

Your artistry with words never ceases to amaze me! :)

Maggie May said...

Beautiful! Serene! Love it!

Nuts in May

Cop Mama said...

One question...How do I get there?

Wonderful, as always.

Madame DeFarge said...

Wonderful words and images as always. Makes me think of scenes from 'Stand by Me'.

Short Poems said...

Really nice way to describe a special moment,have fun writing Brian :)

marinela xxx

Prayer Girl said...

I'm still looking for your book.

I'm afraid my fear of heights would ruin this beautiful setting you describe if I were there. Too bad! Too sad!

PG

justsomethoughts... said...

polar of kundera perhaps
great stuff

Bernie said...

There is no one whose poetry I enjoy more than yours my friend, I consider it an honor to be able to read it.....love your post so very much........:-) Hugs

She Writes said...

Lovely, Brian. I like that last line.

Not The Rockefellers said...

heh, and you thought it was going to be "quiet" up there :)

thanks for always coming by with an encouraging word or three...I really appreciate your thoughts, Brian.

Peace ~ Rene

Book Dilettante said...

i loved this. I was there with you, your words were so convincing!

Green-Eyed Momster said...

Wow, Brian, this one is wonderful! I felt relaxed for a moment. Thanks for that!
:)

Cloudia said...

Nice to be with you at the edge.



Aloha from Waikiki


Comfort Spiral

SandyCarlson said...

Edges are frontiers where EVERYTHING is possible. Beuatiful. Oh, to lay on that rock, though. What a moment.

ds said...

Lovely parallels between the birds the lady bug, the 'great steel beast' and your bamboo leaf. Lovely poem. Thanks.

Tracy said...

Brian, this was fantastic. So lyrical and descriptive, echoing of some of the truly great poets.

Tracie said...

Beautiful. *sigh*

rxBambi said...

I'm with tracie and totally sighing. I love the 'nose of the rock' and the ladybug curtsying :)

The Girl From Cherry Blossom Street said...

Oh I love the lady bug that curtsies! How courteous! And how elegant =)

THE BEATY said...

great job brian and the first of us to get published you're on a roll man

Dorraine said...

The nose of rock and morning dew painting our shoes-vivid colors in that word paintbrush of yours.

Jingle said...

Happy Wednesday Ahead!
I feel peace and joy when I land in this land...
;)

TALON said...

Lovely! And as I'm reading this, a train whistle (always more active in our city at night) is sounding in the distance...serendipity :)

JML said...

It sounds like a nice place to be.

steveroni said...

I love poems which relate a scene, or tell a story, true or not.
Thanks. I sure identify sitting on a rock high above, feet dangling in eternity.

Naples, huh? I moved here in 1965 I was a bartender then. Any chance we could have met? --grin!

Terresa said...

"morning dew paints our shoes
dark & grey,"

Love that entire last stanza, the attention to detail, divine...

PS: I'm hosting a poetry contest on my blog this week, stop by and check it out!!

LadyFi said...

Lovely description.. I can feel and smell 'the edge of creation'.

mo.stoneskin said...

I've said this before, but I love the way you right. Prose, poetry, whatever, the weaving of words is superb.

"birds float lazy circles" is simply sublime. Captures the scene so perfectly.

Zuzana said...

As always, you captured beautifully a moment in time, a fleeting instance when things were simple. And serene.
Lovely as usual, a perfect place to start my day.;)
xo

♥ Braja said...

I'm over here, on the other edge of creation....:))

C said...

I think that lady bugs should always curtsy. :)

otin said...

I like the poetic style and the image that it creates. I grew up around old abandoned railroads and can just imagine the train roaring by!

Lord said...

The picture painted was too perfect as I could imagine the poem clearly well. I like the invitation at the end. You rock Brian.

Tabor said...

These posts do get better and better and sincee the subject is one of my favorites I do like this post very much.

Lorraine said...

finding serenity, just when I think YOu can't possibly make me feel better...you do!

sheila said...

Ooooo, this is very nice! I found myself at first picturing that new walkway they have that juts out of the grand canyon.

Daniel said...

Better to be out there experiencing life than hiding away inside and simply writing about it. Thanks for the reminder.

little hat said...

Nice one Brian. Great set of lines leading me through the scene.

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

sigh, that just gave me this deep cleansing breath...

Tess @ Six Feet Under Blog said...

Oh I loved reading this today. Being sick for the last couple of days, this made me feel like I was outside!

Midday Escapades said...

That is incredible! Thanks for this amazing poem and for your comment about Eva at my place. Happy day.

the walking man said...

Where is this place? I could use a place to dangle the dogs for awhile.

sweetmango said...

sigh i love that. i love those days, those moments.
Beautifully captured cousin B
xxme

Robin said...

I feel serene just reading and imagining..thanks I needed this today...!!

AmyLK said...

sounds SO peaceful. Like a place I was wishing for last night after Legos. Lovely!

Goofball said...

oh I wish I could be laying down there, in the nature, dangling my feet and finding serenity. I need it.

wonderful images, I can totally picture the place and I feel slightly jealous :)

ilovepink said...

Great Post, Brian! There's something to ponder.

buffalodick said...

Sometimes you need silence, other times- noise...

natalee said...

my favorite line.... a lady bug curtsies.... great tribute to nature

Valerie said...

The weight of nothingness whistles about us ... shaking the day ... the edge of creation ...

Brian, your descriptions are exceptional and definitely unique.

suryagni said...

fantastic. you reminded me of my childhood, it is closely attached with trains.

Jill said...

Not too many find true, pure serenity.

Beautiful words.

Jingle said...

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thank you!

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thank you.
make sure to nominate one poet for week 16. thanks a million!

take good care.
Enjoy A Productive Wednesday!
;)

Crystal Jigsaw said...

I love the image of birds floating in lazy circles.

CJ xx

Alan Burnett said...

Lovely, nothing more to sat than that. Just lovely.

http://cadence4life.wordpress.com said...

I so enjoyed the imagery. And just when I thought, "ahhhh," the train came by. But you let me settle back in. Thank you!

JStar said...

Thanks for the journey back into my childhood :) Eventhough I was in a rush to grow up, now I am reflecting back...

Jingle said...

ant, lady bug,...
wow,
thank you for the unbeatable reminder of childhood memories..
these little creatures are like your young and curious spirits...it is simply energizing to think, read, or image about it...

Jingle said...

Brian:

your poem is so much in depth and I could not digest everything at the same time or at once, I reread it, and new meanings emerges, every time I revisit your work, I find something new and exciting...
I have been lazy in recent two days, but now I find your poem very precious and enjoyable!

Hope that you enjoy what you do
and continue spreading sunshine and wisdom so that, when people need inspirations or some mental food to enjoy, they can always think of YOU, and visit you for a pleasure.

Happy Wednesday!
Happy Everyday!

Mmm said...

dreamy, languid and divine. love this, Brian.

thanks btw for your continued encouragements with my doodles. I so love to get them.

Kitty Moore said...

'and the weight of nothingness
whistles around us, as we
dangle our feet over eternity'

Beautiful.

tera said...

Absolutely fabulous!
Have you published any of these?
You should. :)

Nancy said...

Excellent writing! Loved it.

sheri... said...

really, how warm and romantic...what a wonderful place to be, or at least envision within my heart! thanks for breathing a smile into me today, i needed it!!

Dr. Heckle said...

My serenity usually only comes when I'm in the bathroom with the door locked...

Yours is good too...

shoelessboywonder said...

I will admit to my rare comments on your blog, is kinda rude for you always seem to swing by mine, which is a honor btw so thank you, You always have so many words of praise that i can never write something that is already written so normally i just move on and enjoy your works in silence, 90 comments already sir, that is something i dream of, just goes to show how good you really are :) keep doing your thing and i'll keep reading till next time good luck and have a great life.

CottageGirl said...

I'm right there on that rock, Brian! Your wonderful words take me there.

Leslie said...

Love all the places where you point us to serenity

serene moon smiles

suzicate said...

Love the vision of the morning dew painting shoes....I remember many a morning like that...sounds lovely and peaceful communing with nature.

hopepoh said...

very beautiful imagery :)

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

You are so OBSERVANT and again,
you PAINT beautiful pictures!
hugs
shakira

Mr. Stupid said...

Beautifully written. I loved it. Fabulous as always!
Have a good day...:)

Syd said...

So you are from the same area of Virginia that I am from. Nice to be here and follow your blog. Great stuff Brian.

mairmusic said...

Your powers of observation are finely tuned, and your power to create the images in words really sets you apart. nicely done.
http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/

Unknown Mami said...

"the weight of nothingness", might be my new favorite phrase. The Unbearable Lightness of Being is one of my favorite books.

The Night Writer said...

Love the detail and the imagery in this poem! Wow!

Wanted to say thank you for stopping by my blog and leaving a comment. I really appreciate it :)

Sarah Joyce Bryant

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Katherine said...

How did I miss this post Brian! How beautiful!! I absolutely love how you write Brian ... A Magician with words!!

deb said...

Brian,
um. wow.


every line equisite

deb said...

oops exquisite

Marla said...

a lady bug curtsies

Love this. I can see it.

Jingle said...

Good Evening:

About that poem, "he is a poet",
6 or more voted Brian=YOU, 2 or 3 voted William, so, I guess I trust
other poets' judgment! And they are correct!

Thanks A Million!
Happy Tuesday!
I could not make it on the magpie yet.