in the back of the coffee shop
on the comfy brown chairs
they sit,
she rocking slowly,
caught in an unseen breeze,
he stroking his beard,
rarely speaking, but
every once in a while
her hand sneaks across
to squeeze his leg,
leathered lips curling,
as he takes another sip
of their gentle kinda love.
Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.
I see this couple all the time in the back of the coffee shop. Maybe, I am catching a small glimpse of the future, or maybe i just hope so. Happy Friday everyone!
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Lovely observation of a small thing that means a big and deep thing.
it is so very quiet,
I guess it is happy time for you,
dinner time?
kidding!
Cool 55.
Here's to longetivity- for them, and for us all.
I wish that type of love what the norm instead of the exception these days! If I were to dare to love again, this is the type of love I would want...the quiet and beauty in the small moments type of love.
Bravo!
Brian:
It seems like you are in loving mood no matter where you are, nobody knows
the true relation between the two,
but you portrayed them as dreaming lovers...
I wish everyone is as positive as you are.
I enjoyed your 55 tremendously.
Cheers!
Admirable of everything!
A man with long beard seems like a true gentleman...
Silent,
Excellent,
One small place,
Full of Grace!
loved the images your writing paints.
Aw, that is very sweet. Sometimes it seems like love like that doesn't exist anymore but I also have seen people like that and hope to see more and give me hope.
Beautiful, sometimes life's simplest observations make for the most wonderful poetry.
Ahh, to be that familiar. And I love the title too. But really... who can afford Starbuck's on a fixed income??
This reminds me of the love I watched pass between my mother and father even once she was lost to us in her Alzheimer's disease. His hand would rest gently around her shoulders as they sat in front of the television.
Beautiful yet sad. Their love never died.
PG
How sweet!
Oh, so beautiful! I love watching older couples. Gives us all hope that even in the struggles, marriage can survive!
let's hope to the future, Brian. We should all be so fortunate.
Wow, you portray unspoken comfort and contentment in 55! Excellent piece, Brian.
"gentle kinda love". Love it.
A beautiful thought, a beautiful image in this story. Thanks, Brian.
I think that he's wearing Old Spice Cologne...
For years I spent every Friday night at Border's...
Observing the very same thing.
Excellent 55 Brian.
Thank you very much.
Thanks for visiting, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G
Gentle and sweet, Brian.
Good couple to be.
That was lovely. I adore seeing older folks in love...it warms the heart.
That sounds wonderful. A great combo...true love, a good cup of coffee, throw in a good book and a homemade pastry and its a small slice of heaven!
cute poem :) really sweet :D
It's like you saw Tony and me on the garden bench this evening! Were you peaking? ;->
Oh yes! That gentle love makes the comfortable with each other and within themselves.
I loved this...so simple; yet serene.
Hugs
SueAnn
This reminds me of the coffee shop I frequent. Same couple! Perhaps coffee shops use this image as a marketing tool. haha Love your poetry.
Great one, Brian. I see elderly couples in the supermarket, walking hand in hand as they shop. That's the future I want too.
My 55 is Perceptions Colored
Wow, that is great and in 55 words! I could so picture them in my head just now! :-) ~ Coreen
I hope we all have a future like that. I love to read your lyrical and descriptive observations of everyday things.
Aww!
This is sweet.
Peaceful and meaningful.
I like it. :)
I love this such a love is rare, and if we find it we are truly blessed. and I know we are. take care, have a great friday.
Oh, I love to watch folks and imagine a life for them. My dad remarried after my mom died and seeing him and my new mama holding hands makes me so happy.
I think we all want to grow old with moments like this.
Sounds nice, but a long way off for me.
Isn't the thought of that what makes it all worth while? I am lucky to have someone I am enjoying growing older with.
Kat
That is very sweet. You paint such a picture. My 55 is HERE.
It has been jumpy and rushy for me tonight..
Hope that you have fun!
I will take off and will read 55 of others tomorrow.
A moment of peace here!
Good Night!
Rest yourself as needed!
I treasured your kindness and encouragement!
xxx
Ahhh, sweet. I know coffee makes me feel all quivery inside too!
A really wonderful, fully packed, 55 words.
Good for you for observing and being touched.
Such a tender observation... gives me hope about the future!
I love the lines "leathered lips curling as he takes another sip of their gentle kinda love."
Oh. I love it.
Love it so much.
You should print this and leave it there for them to find one day.
I think they would love it too.
Maybe you would have to take the leathered part out : ) Who wants to be called leathered? : )
That makes me want to cry. If allowed, love can lead to this harmony. Beautiful, Brian! :))
It is a gift you have to see and tell of everyday things that are far from everyday things. :)
Adorable. my heart is melting right along with their warm cuppa. Man, you are good! :)
Funny I thought you were writing about your possible future and then you say it is a real couple and maybe a hint of your future. You have a wonderful chance of this happening. Love will make it happen.
God bless.
Sounds like you might very well be catching a small glimpse of the future there... :) A beautiful, inspiring and sweet 55! /Jo.
So sweet,romantic and tender!
I love it!
Mine is here
I have three 55 to offer.
Hope you like them.
Have you a blessed weekend!
hugs
shakira
You are just so sweet :0)
Your eyes and heart are wide open Brian :-) I used to meet one very old couple few years back, in a different town then. They were holding their hands and walking together in the street, then they had a place where they rested for a while. In the fast city pace with people all over and the noisy cars, they were almost grotesque but to me they were the beauty of love, life... sigh ... I don't live there anymore but I will not forget them ... beautiful post. again. have a great w-e.
how sweet..... i wish to have the kind of comfortable silence in a relationship...
Good on them. A lovely story.
This little beauty was so descriptively rich that I was convinced you had cheated and checked the word count. You didn't. Well written, well done.
how lovely, brian! your 55 convinces me that there is no fear in the absence of words, something this woman still struggles with!
Brian this was so sweet. I will never grow old with my true love. Plans of mice and men. My parents in law are like that. Amazing.
so sweeeeeet
I loved this, I am wishing for something like this in my future indeed.;)
Always love your romantic posts. Have a great Friday,
xoxo
I can completely picture them. Love this.
You and T are so happy together that it could happen that you end up like that in a coffee shop!
I hope that they have a good comfortable love like the brown chairs on which they sit.
oops wrong link posted, Powerful issues here. Also Gone for a poem this week based on the Etheree form created about twenty years ago by an Arkansas poet named Etheree Taylor Armstrong It normally consists of ten lines of unmetered and unrhymed verse, the first line having one syllable, each succeeding line adding a syllable. I added an extra row for the word count and the punch line. See what I mean here.
leathered lips curling....don't know if I'd like that or not. LOL
Excellent, and filled with the intrigue of a Mickey Spillane romance scene I think.
Mine this week if DOUBLE STANDARD As always, scroll down a bit, below my Friday's Show n Tell.
Have a super weekend fellow 55'r!!
amazing how so few words can draw such a complete picture
My husband & I have been married now for 23 years. We do talk a lot but there are times when no words a needed and we can convey what we want through a look or a touch.
I love to watch people in the way you do too Brian. There is so much love to be seen..if you're looking in the right places & at the right time. Small gestures, gentle touches, loving smiles ... they surely do tug at the heart strings, especially when you know they have stood the test of time, such as the couple in your coffee shop.
You are a tender heart Mr Brian & this shines through like a diamond in the sky in this post! Never change my friend..stay just as you are!!
Seeing older couples in love always makes me smile!
What a comforting scenario. You portrayed them beautifully, Brian.
This is a heart warming 55 Brian, Thanks for checkin mine out! See, this is the kinda love I want...No words needed, that life lasting type of undying love...I imagined this to be an elderly couple even before the "Leather lips" was mentioned...I want that someone to grow old with, and change my Depends LOL...
Great title -- lovely close. Long life and continued happiness to them!
Yeah right! til they get home. Those are exactly the type who have a box full of chain, whips, and those ball head sets that gag your mouth type things.
Nice 55 Brian
Nice snapshot of a couple in love across the ages. You are a poet because you observe things like this. My favorite line is "she rocking slowly, caught in an unseen breeze"
oh perhaps love does not have to be expressed in words, esp for them. It reminds me, I once sat near a couple doing ho-hum in Starbucks. Thankfully, they got kicked out.☺
have a great spring weekend!
Very sweet!
Sounds like John and me, except he would never be drinking coffee. Tea maybe. :) That was lovely! Made me smile.
RE: CottageGirl:
your comment is funny,
It is good to see you shine like this.
loving couples are everywhere,
Brian is the ONLY guy who crafted it in poetic form in this case.
Stupendous Achievement,
Brian Miller!
i love watching couples like that, i imagine, the romantic that i am, that they are living happily ever after...
at least on the outside looking in. great 55 thanks for stopping by
alking...Italian! :) lol Have fun today. I am happy because my Mom is feeling better now. :)
It's the small moments that count.
Only a kind and loving man like you would view an older couple in such a sweet manner. This is wonderful.
Have you been spying on MWM and I? LOL
Lovely 55 Brian, I like it very much. :)
Awwww! That's so sweet! I bet you and your wife will be that couple one day... ;)
Oh my, you had me at coffee...I love this, I love this love that never ages, I love what you did here, bravo bravo Brian
Such nice thoughts, Brian. I never had love lasting like that - except from friends...and I am not really complaining. It would be nice to grow old with someone but I cherish friendships as well.
I love the title "Venti longevity". Those venti's keep me coming back (and also keep me awake!) You too? Brian, we you see things like this that spark a poem, do you write down certain words or phrases right at that moment to help you remember or is it just serendipity that brings them to mind again? A certain prompt, a certain thought?? Just curious! Thanks for you comments by the way. I'm surprised you ever have time to write anything with all that you do. You have so many people here to read, you have a job, a family, a hobby or two. How do you manage? I suppose you don't watch much TV? That is probably my down-fall. I get "hooked" on certain mind-numbing shows. Entertainment, relaxation, just vegging time!
pretty
You are so observant. I love how you find inspiration in the smallest of gestures. :)
Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh! May they be this close forever.
lovely!
that's it, that's what i long for
Great story!!
Very good!
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/04/30/family-fridays-who-is-she/
Good Afternoon, Brian:
How do you do?
some gifts from Trisha, posted, passing to friends, 4 from her,
plus 2 from me...
have fun!
Thank you for the support.
comments for this post is fun to read...you rock!
;)
How romantic my friend. The small things in life. I love it :)
Nice one. Thanks. Mine's up as well at http://bit.ly/8dt963. Have a great weekend!
love this. It is profound.
Thank you for participating in Wordy Wednesday. The first full story is posted at http://taramillerwrites.wordpress.com/2010/04/30/wordy-wednesdays-first-full-story/
I adore those couples!
Oh, I love this! I hope it's a glimpse of the future for all of us.
Me got awards, tribute and nominations for you? Happy Weekend! hugs shakira
love that last through the ages
wonderful poem
I'll say it in one word...love it (ok it's two)!
Take care
xoxo
venti wonderful!
Brien dear,
you always amaze me...
thanks for coming by
you are great!
;)
Nicely recorded, these images will stay with me. Coffee to die for!
I am catching a small glimpse of the future, or maybe i just hope so. Happy Friday everyone!
In your own words,
keeping hope alive is cool!
I am catching a small glimpse of the future, or maybe i just hope so. Happy Friday everyone!
In your own words,
keeping hope alive is cool!
What a beautiful picture of love that endures.
yes, small things can have deep meanings brilliant mate, have a great weekend :)
Brian, this is really lovely! I look forward to being a part of just such a couple one day too.
Lovely little glimpse of a 55!
I still say LARGE when I go into starbucks! :D
Brian, that is beautiful. So many people would look at them, and not see the lifetime of communication passing between them.
Bravo. Now I want coffee....and a comfy chair......and to squeeze someone's leg. :-)
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/05/01/week-16-the-perfect-poet-award-announcement/
Good Evening:
I got the perfect poet award posted.
Other awards will be done tomorrow night or Sunday...
I won't be around until tomorrow afternoon.
Happy Friday Evening!
Happy Saturday!
When you get to the point that you no longer feel the need to fill every silence...when you're comfortable just sitting together...that's when you know it's real...
simple yet beautiful!!creates a nice atmosphere!!
leathered lips asuch a great discription Brian I liked this one as all of yours. Thanks Larry
Very Beautiful. Wonderfully written...:)
Have an awesome day!
Yeah...I know this place.
a great poem about what seems a trivial situation for the common men , well done Brian.
that is a perfect moment :)
beautiful expression of love...yes, such small things speak volumes.
Happy weekend Brian.
very lovely. :) simply beautiful.
I imagine a history for people I see, too.
We do that. See older couples and say, "That's us pretty soon."
I had people that made out in my coffee shop. It all started with a squeeze, too I would imagine. They were old. It was awful. ;)
great one.
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