Thursday, April 15, 2010

55 - traveling circus of idiots

we hitchhiked,
which would make
my mom freak,
kinda like the time
we jumped the train
(oh wait, she doesn't
know that either)
and i skinned my knee
disembarking, though
it looked like
a bike wreck,
as i limped home
in the dusk light.
so, we hitchhiked
and survived
but i know some
that didn't.

Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.

Each of these stories begs for a longer post, so maybe this is just a teaser. One day I will give them their due. They say confession is good for the soul...but I imagine I will be getting a call from mom any minute now...after 20 years, I think I passed the statute of limitations...

128 comments:

Kathy said...

You're so right, they do beg for more! How did we ever survive? And as a mom, I'm so happy my kids have never told me some of the things they did while I thought they were at a friend's house...shudder! :) I loved this.

Bonnie, Original Art Studio said...

Yes, I think your sentence should be commuted. :)

SUN DANCE HILL said...

Marvelous - love it! Youthful innocence, bet mom always knew anyway ;>
Reminds me of a time when I was a young teenager and a girlfriend and I were desperately bored; we hitchiked into town with kitchen table knives in our purses... ha! not sure what we thought we were going to do with them... we were so scared, but 'survived'.

Titanium said...

For your sake, I hope your mom commutes your sentence...

And yes, they do call for more!

Joanna Jenkins said...

I'm not sure, I think Mom's can still ground you no matter how old you are or how long it's been :-)

Another great 55. Thanks Brian.

jj

Maggie said...

As kids and teens some have no fear and if we do have some, that same fear makes us do crazy things. They say moms know even when you think they don't oh they know you've done or been somewhere you're not suppose to but just won't tell ya. :P

In the end I always confess what I've done but way way after it's happened. lol

Cop Mama said...

Ha! You stinker, you are so in trouble!

Boys...I tell ya, is that what I have to look forward to???

Ji said...

Brian:

I love this one,
You have been normal, despite what you did, an innocent secret, Your MOM
may never blame you...

Brilliant Post!

Ji said...

Your boys,
My boys,
Boys of our blogging friends,
they will do that once in a while.
Do you press them for everything when Logan and Cole turn teen? Of Course NOT.
This is another kind of love,
LOVE from a son to his Mom,
precious,
laughable,
and heartfelt!

;)

Ji said...

You never offend Me,
Thus Please Let It Be.
I am humbled
To Be appreciated be YOU,
How Cool!


Smiles!
I will see you next time.

PS: To those who follow Brian:

Ji posts 2 or 3 posts daily, Brian deserves a fair number of comments from Ji so that his friendship and genuine encouragement to Ji and other bloggers are treasured and highlighted.

Thank You!
Happy Friday!
You All Rock!

Eva Gallant said...

Every holiday get together I still hear new stories of escapades my adult sons had when they were teens. No wonder my hair keeps getting grayer!

The Retired One said...

You were (are)such a devil in leaving out the details!!!

Katherine said...

I think many of us would have done 'less than sensible things' when we were young.
I'm glad that nothing happened to you Brian whilst you were hitch hiking cause then we wouldn't have had the pleasure of getting to know you.
I also did something very silly when I was about 15. I was doing work experience in a hospital in Brisbane. Over the period of a week I got to know one of the patients. A nice enough sort of fellow (I thought) but in hindsight I really didn't know him enough to accept a lift from him. The day he was discharged he offered me a lift home, which I accepted.
The conversation turned rather personal about half way through the trip, which made me feel very uncomfortable. Questions about relationships & comments of a sexual nature were made. I felt very uneasy & started telling him that my I had rang my mum from the hospital to let her know who was giving me a lift home & where to pick me up, which I hadn't.
All I can remember is praying very hard. Fortunately he took me there & I was safe but I realized the stupidity in my decision. Things could have ended up very differently. I never did tell my mum what I did but I never ever placed myself in that kind of position again.

TechnoBabe said...

Hitchhiking was not a big deal when I was a pre-teen and teen. And when I started driving I would give people rides sometimes. Not anymore though. I know you have more to tell about some of your stories. This will be fun to hear more about your escapades.

Monkey Man said...

Many times it was the stories I didn't tell that made me the "Golden Child". Great 55. My 55 will be HERE after midnight Pacific time.

G-Man said...

I've done both! I concur 100%..
Excellent 55 as always Brian.
I love the thought and effort that you put into your work.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Not The Rockefellers said...

way to go, Brian

now I'm just gonna sit here and wait until you give them there stories their due :)

Peace ~ Rene

Mona said...

You were darn lucky to get away just with an abrasion!

Joseph Pulikotil said...

Hi Brian:)

You have said it all very beautifully and vividly in 55 words.

All of us have done some mischief or the other when we were small. I used to go shopping for my mother and buy less so that I can save some money for the movies. You know those days, I had the crazy habit of seeing first show on the first day of release.

Best wishes Brian:)
Joseph

C.M. Jackson said...

yep--she'll be calling you--that's why you are such a good dad--you've done it all before! Great 55!

Matthew said...

I have always felt that I should have hitchiked - but I always felt I was in the wrong country to do it. Still do, for what little sense it may make...

You tell such vivid tales in so few words. I am always floored by 55, then floored by how easy you make them look.

Alice Audrey said...

You're scaring the mom in me.

Jannie Funster said...

Great chilling little heart tug there at the end!

Well done, compact, each word working well.

This will stay with me!

xo

Pseudonymous High School Teacher said...

I survived the hitchhiking. Acted cool but I was scared.

Train jumping! Never.

Buzzard said...

I agree, this is the beginning of some good campfire stories.

Oh, and by the way, Moms don't have statute's of limitations.

much ado about nothing... said...

oh, brian...you caused the 'mom' in me to cringe!! i totally understand the blissful ignorance of youth but your 55 chilled me to the bone nevertheless!
you'll have to let us know what your mom has to say...maybe she even has a few stories to tell you :)

Maha said...

I'm having a hard tim trying to imagine you a naughty kid!

Maha said...

I'm having a hard tim trying to imagine you a naughty kid!

THE BEATY said...

so cool though in thios overprotective age it may be hard to do

5thsister said...

oh the idiotic things i did in my youth as well! great 55!

Pat said...

Yes, you leave us wanting more...more info that is! It's a wonder how we survived, right?

Ronda Laveen said...

I'd like to see her try and lay you over her knee and spank you now. Yes, I'm sure the statute has expired but not the lip service.

Daniel said...

Maybe someday I'll tell you about the time I spent 6 months in a Chilean prison on suspicion of espionage. I'm quite sure the sand will never pour out of that hourglass.

Bernie said...

What was once a common mode of transportation is no longer safe, sad really.......:-) Hugs

Kathy's Klothesline said...

There is no statute where moms are concerned!! I prefer not to know some things they did, I need my sleep!!

Drahdrah said...

I hitchhiked too, almost 20 years ago, all the way across Canada, and my mom didn't know !!! This brought back alot of memories Brian. Thanks :)

clean and crazy said...

great 55 how nostalgic you and the g-man are being. mine is up too but like i told the g-man and using the words of the late great dr. john, it's a groaner!!

Prayer Girl said...

I love this 55. I can so relate.

I remember the confession of a high school skipping school day. They never found out at the time. I waited till I was safely and honorably graduated college to reveal it. I am positive that their reaction was quite different than had they known about it when it happened.

PG

Peter Stone said...

Brian, you simply, utterly can't stop it there!
And don't let your mum read this post...
Great 55 :)

My 55 is Molten Words

Tracy said...

I could never get enough of your writing, Brian! I daresay there are stories our parents haven't told us yet, too. :-)

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

Ha ha ha... she will love you all the same.
Excellent 55, Brian.
I really enjoy reading it especially about your childhood.
You seem to have a great and truly interesting one!
Mine is up too. Hope you like it.
hugs
shakira

Matty said...

Yeah, my parents still don't know some of the things I did, as I'm sure my kids did behind my back.

jaymiethorne said...

I bet your mom still calls...mine would. LOL

Yvonne Osborne said...

Oh, I love the ending. And of course....it begs for more.

Great 55 story, Brian.

Mine is up.

AngelMay said...

See to it that you never do that again -- or I will have to come up there and whup up on you! OK?

Gerardine Baugh said...

My grandfather use to ride the trains. I would thumb it, (dangerous) both are not safe, then or now. Great poem in 55 words
Gerardine

Leslie said...

Brian - I'm amazed - way to go with only 55 words. Seems like more. Great story - that's why moms don't ask

Alan Burnett said...

We used to hitch all over Europe. I would throw a fit if my 20 year old suggested he did it these days. Is it the world that has changed, or me?

anthonynorth said...

Are the risks we take - and the things we don't tell. Great words.

ithoughtitup said...

Loved this, esp the ending.

~warriorpoetess

Zuzana said...

In some way, this short story (teaser) have a "Stand By Me" feel to it.;) Looking forward to the extended version.
Always a joy to visit here, have a lovely Friday Brian,
xo

Andy Sewina said...

Great memories, if you don't do these things you can't recall them. On the other hand - glad you survived to tell the tale!

Book Dilettante said...

I hope your mom liked this poem. I did.

Harvee
Book Dilettante

järnebrand said...

Maybe your Mom knows more than you think. Moms usually do... :)
Nice 55. More details next time, please. :)
My 55 is up...
Hugs/ Jo.

sheila said...

I remember doing crazy CRAZY stuff too as a teen that my mom knows nothing about - still. lol. But, never jumped a train. :o)

Baino said...

Never underestimate the power of the 'mother'. We know you do it!

Goofball said...

your mom is damn right to freak about that :p

Shrinky said...

Oh, the innocence of youth, eh? So beautifully encapsulated. I am amazed at the adventures I survived.. and dread to think of the ones my brood shall undoubtablly have (cringe)!

slommler said...

In our youth, we are super heroes. Nothing can hurt us. We are invincible. I am just now hearing what my son has done...and he is 42 now. LOL! Unlike me, who has never told my mom things that I did. She has enough gray hair.
Hugs
SueAnn

SandyCarlson said...

Wow. When we survive, the scrapes are small, innocent. This brought back memories of my hitchhiking days. I had some wonderful encounters, and I scared the heck out of mom and dad.

On another note, I read a story this a.m. about a 3-year-old who was hit by a car and killed as he ran from mom to dad, who had just bought some candy. An innocent moment; a tragedy. Your 55 captures the space between the two so well.

Hootin' Anni said...

Excellent once again Brian. This makes me think of the movie "The Hitcher"....scary stuff.

Loved your 55.

Sunrise in the City ---as always, scroll down below my Show n Tell. Hope you're having a terrific Friday!!!

Mojo said...

Yeah, moms do that. Even after the statute of limitations expires.

But the stories... ahh, the stories.

Jana said...

Hi Brian, your post took me straight to my childhood where we kept so many things secret from our parents so that we would be scolded…
Have a wonderful weekend!

CatLadyLarew said...

I was always too much of a wuss to hitchhike... too many tales of abductions by evil truck drivers!

Lorraine said...

Wonderful to know you made it safely, lovely way to put it, as always ;)

the walking man said...

Don't count on that statute of limitations thing dude. To your mom your childhood was only yesterday.

Wordwand said...

a well delivered stroy in great verses.I appreciate the good use of aliteration in your poem, well done Brian

suryagni said...

hitchhiking scares me too. its unsafe for both- the one who offers the lift and the one who takes it.

suryagni said...

hitchhiking scares me too. its unsafe for both- the one who offers the lift and the one who takes it.

Akelamalu said...

Oh you made me think of all the things I did that my parents didn't know about that would have made them go ape! LOL

Mine's up too.

JennyMac said...

Oh, hitchhiking was a big NO in our family. But we did equally as perilous things..Lol. How did we survive?

Travel & Dive Girl said...

Ahhh, so many things my parents still do not know about...or maybe they do...

Tracie said...

My mom would still give me Hell. That's why I can't out my blog to her. I think you should do longer posts on your teasers.

Betsy said...

had to laugh...I know in 20 years Taylor will be doing the same thing! I think I'd rather not know now. ha.

John's comments said...

My son has just come back from hitching across Europe to Morocco. I suspect what we got told and the what happened were different stories.
My 55 here

Kat_RN said...

Part of me says cool, sounds like fun. The Mom in me says AHHHHHHHHH! You do have a very good way with words.
Kat

Anya said...

I think your childhood was very special ;-)
You can give your good feelings to your kids !!!!
Fantastic " 55 "

Have a wonderful weekend :))

Jingle said...

http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/04/16/you-are-perfect-poet-at-week-14-award-announcement/

Happy Thursday!

Jingle said...

Dear Brian:

I meant Happy Friday.
I am in a hurry.
As for your post,
thank God that you are okay, it is very dangerous risk and

Keep shining!
Have A Fun-For-Family Friday!

Laura said...

Fun the little bits we learn about each other in just 55 words.

I take it mom reads your blog?

My 55 are up

Valerie said...

Moms ALWAYS know... I think! Good work, Brian.

JStar said...

Oh the life dangering situations we put ourselves into....Luckily we are still here to talk about it :) Loved your 55 Brian!

AmyLK said...

But your Mom still has the right to yell at you. At least she can't ground you. lol

happy weekend!

buffalodick said...

If parents knew half of what kids do...

Ekanthapadhikan said...

Been a long time since I went through your brilliant 55's. Really good one, here!

sakhii•• said...

i wonder how ur each poem is such short yet they convey d most beautiful meanings!!
gud 1..!!

Jen said...

Me and my siblings built a fire in the backyard and threw my father's bullets on it se we could hear them go "bang". How did any of us survive our childhoods?

deb said...

as a mom, don't tell me.
as a reader ~~ write away.

VE said...

Nice job, Brian. In 55 words you've opened the blinds and let us peek into not one but several different stories you could tell there...

Barry said...

Neat twist at he end. I did a lot of hitchiking in my youth without ever feeling I was at risk.

I wonder now if I ever was.

Ji said...

http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/04/16/finally-poetry-awards-for-poets-rally-week-14/

how are you?
Grandest wishes for YOU and YOUR family!
Enjoy The Moment!

Luisa Doraz said...

Relax and have a great day and weekend with your family! :)

PattiKen said...

You actually jumped a train??? Wow, what a devil you were! I love this 55. I really like first-person childhood memories, and you write them so well.

Dulce said...

Oh those were other times... and so risky... Thank God they never knew!

greatly stated dear Brian... You are so good at this!

thanks for coming by!
xo

Crazyasa said...

haha That's a good one Brian, mother's might forgive, but they never forget.:) Thanks for visiting my crazy blog!

Kimi@SoManyKids said...

That is crazy!!! I was never brave enough to do anything like that!

william said...

dangerous thing to do today man, great 55, happy weekend :)

chitowngreg said...

You're only past the statute of limitation if your Mom doesn't know my Mom! My first attempt at a 55 is up as well. Have a good one!

Dakota Bear said...

With mother there is never a statue of limitations. But love the story. It was wonderful to grow up with all the adventures we use to have as kids. Too bad kids don't have these experiences now.

Mom said...

There is NO statue of limitations on hitch hiking and jumping trains. We will talk!!! Love you son.

Shona Cole said...

wow, that gave me chills

Thom said...

Oh the joys of youth and what our parents didn't know. It's sad that today you have to be so careful about hitch hiking. We never thought twice about it. Well done my friend :) Have a great weekend :)

Ji said...

You eventually got your MOM here,
She wants to talk to you, what a grownup boy you are, what fun to think about it.

It seems like men wanted to be babied
from time to time, either by their wives or by their aged mothers.

You Are Naughty and Funny Like A
Kong Fu Movie Star in this case, I got to go.

See you later.
have a good time with your Mom!
She began to worry about you as if you are a school age kiddo!

Lulda Casadaga said...

Boy if I don't get here early..fogett about it! :)
Nice 55 lookin back on our foolish youth!

Ediomo said...

Hahaha....nice one. confessing small wrongs leaves pple with the impression that there are large ones..lol.....


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Magpie said...

Brian, do you read all your comments? Another awesome post. Thank heavens most of us survived our thoughtless youth.

Brian Miller said...

every one of them magpie....smiles.

TALON said...

Really enjoyed this. Not sure your Mom would feel the same way! ;)

Just Be Real/God Whispers In The Wind said...

Wow, great 55 thank you for sharing dear.

Workforced said...

To tell a story in only 55 words would be a challenge indeed. My only fear is that I would get to the end of the story long before I reached the prerequisite number of words. In this particular case though I have taken all 55 words and failed to even start! See! That's 55!

Magpie said...

So glad to hear it...and you are so blessed - deservingly so.

hope said...

You're braver than me! Then again, the world is a different place now.

Nice one!

Little Ms Blogger said...

Okay, I love the fact that after 20 years you're still not ready to fess up to mom.

Hey, are you trying the twitter poetry thing?

Donnetta Lee said...

Yes, this could be developed into more. But I also like it on its own. Yes, some didn't make it. Scary and sad. D

Mrsupole said...

For some things there is no statue of limitations. You are in so much trouble. Glad you were safe though.

Did your mom call you?

God bless.

Green-Eyed Momster said...

Thank God you survived! I sure hope you don't get grounded by your mom!

:)

LadyFi said...

I was just talking about this the other day.. I hitch-hiked, went to strangers' houses while travelling and all sorts of things I would never ever allow my own kids to do!

How did we survive?

Anonymous said...

55 words or less, well done. I need to work on short and sweet.

I use to hitchhike in Hawaii. Some
people use to stop and say, they stopped because I looked so innocent and they were worried. I'm glad they stopped.

I don't hitchhike any more I consider myself very lucky. ;+)

Starla

Shadow said...

aaaah, some things mom's just don't need to know...

Ocean Girl said...

Your note makes me smile. Sometimes I really feel that you were a very different person then.

evalinn said...

Uh, the end has a very serious twist!

Jingle said...

Sweet Dream!
I am going to rest,
Since I don't drink coffee,
I may get up early, may not,
it depends.
Thank you for all you do.

xo

RNSANE said...

I am just hearing now of some of the things that my adult sons did that I would have gone insane over had I know at the time. Sometimes, I wonder how they survived to become adults...great 55.

Larry said...

Brian I think were all ready to play eh ?


Flash 55's


Thanks for dropping by
Larry

Jill said...

Oh, I don't know Brian...after twenty years of silence I may be tempted to keep some of those adventures under your hat and allow your Momma some peace.

Mighty M said...

I think there are LOTS of things my MIL doesn't know her son did! I don't know if my hubby ever hitchhiked but I know he used to pick them up!

KB said...

I've never hitchiked...my imagination would get the better of me. Nice job.

JML said...

I think some moms don't have a statue of limitations. At least mine doesn't. Perhaps I'm still young enough to get yelled at though. . .I miss acting like this!!!!!