Thursday, April 1, 2010

55 - single mom

gravelly,
her voice
perfumes the air,
strong with stale cigarette,
chattering,
between
bites of
McDonald's pancake.
with her two year old,
at a wooden corner table
in the back of starbucks
spreading their
happiness
to all those
waiting in line.

she's lonely
at times
but she's alright,
making the most
of time with
her daughter.

Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.

just a lady i saw in the coffee shop the weekend i was in maryland. made me think of the single moms i know that are still making a life for their kids. have a great weekend everyone!

Brotin Tales is back tomorrow!

112 comments:

TechnoBabe said...

Lots of single moms out there. I was one. Hard work but precious nevertheless. Nice writing and I like how you find scenes in your surroundings as you are out and about to write stories that grab our interest.

william said...

fabulous descrition of what seems to be the norm these days, single parents, well written in digression as always :) Happy Easter mate.

Jingle said...

it is always an enjoyable read!
single moms have to think and work as both a man and a woman, which makes it difficult at times.
I am glad that you give it a high light.

Ronda Laveen said...

How nice of you to acknowledge the lone mothers of the world. And to notice how their happiness was contagious.

Eva Gallant said...

I was a single mom for about 4 years...kudos to them. It's not an easy ride.

Robin said...

Terrific...Im not single but I think Ive been there too..we all feel alone somtimes..!...Ive been told my energy and joy are contagious as well..I loved your poem..!

Brian Miller said...

eva, you got that so right...

Tom said...

can't imagine how difficult it must be...my kids are lucky, oh boy are they ever.

looking forward to the brotin!

Titanium said...

Oh, man. Been there, gettin' down with my single-mom-ness. No gravelly voice, but totally secure in having everything I could possibly need, in that moment.

Mine is a juicy combo-pack this week- it is here and also, just because I couldn’t stop myself… also, here.

cinner said...

Have a happy Easter Brian, It amazes me when you can describe such a setting in 55 words. I loved it. Take care.

Sherry said...

I love how her voice perfumes the air! I was a single mom for a few years - it's tough. Mine's up here - hopefully.

Magpie said...

Being a single parent is hard...being any kind of parent is hard. Great job on your 55.

G-Man said...

421 FOLLOWERS???? WTF?

Well I can understand why, you are one uplifting, positive, and caring Human Being Brian...

Excellent 55 My Friend, there is great inspiration in observation.
Have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Peter Stone said...

Wonderful tribute to single moms, Brian, and you've yet again managed to put so much detail in so few words.

Mama Wheaton said...

Been there, done that! Some great memories and life lessons.

Tracy said...

Wow, once again you describe something so ordinary wonderfully.

tori said...

I was a single mom for 2 years and did my best during that time. I have some sweet memories from that time. :)
Glad to see your muse is refreshed and back at work again.

Me said...

You say *so* much with those 55 words...and make it look easy. I know it's not. Well, not for me anyway! :)
-Corrie

Bryan Borland said...

The poetry of the seemingly mundane moment - which at closer glance becomes anything but mundane. I once saw a mother buy one small burger and split it between two children. The mother didn't eat. I often wondered about that scene. What did I witness?

Mojo said...

Brilliant study in humanity. Too bad she doesn't know about this. Might be nice to know someone noticed. Nice job.

Jingle said...

http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/04/02/55-single-dad/

I have written a single Dad for 55,
hope that you like it.
thank you for the beautiful inspiration, this is my first time writing a fiction or story in 55 words...without reading yours, I have No clue how to start...

thank you,
have a nice Friday ahead!

Alice Audrey said...

Such excellent imagery. I was looking forward to yours.

McGillicutty said...

one doesn't always have to be unmarried to be a single mom. love your observations. ;0)

The Retired One said...

I can just picture them, Brian...thanks for the glimpse into that family.....

Alix said...

I almost saw myself, except I don't smoke, and my kids are grown. But still...

secret agent woman said...

I'm thankful I wasn't a single mom while the kids were that young. There are things about being a single mother that are hard, but also great joys involved in keeping their lives good.

Changnoi said...

I hope this doesn't happen for me and my mum.

Stan Ski said...

A life sure, but perhaps not as we know it...

Green-Eyed Momster said...

I got a taste of how hard it would be when Hubby was sick. I thought things were hard before.... Boy did I miss him.

Hope you have a wonderful weekend with your lovely family.

Lisa said...

from a single mom, thanks for writing such a simple and honest piece. :)

Prayer Girl said...

This could have been me if there had been Starbucks 25 years ago. This played out in my life at that time in McDonald's.

I love the memories this 55 brings.

PG

5thsister said...

nicely done. I look forward to the brotin tale tomorrow!

LadyCat said...

Everyday heros...there are so many in all differnet walks of life. Their strength is amazing.

Donnetta Lee said...

Brian: Reminds me of many, many young moms of kids at the school where I work. Many not more than little kids themselves. Came from nowhere and going nowhere. But most love their kids. D

Luisa Doraz said...

I take my hat off to single parents. Such a dedication. Such love and determination. :)

darsden said...

That is Great and So true! Master of 55 :-)

Alyssa said...

Love the idea of telling story in 55 words. Yeah don't think I could do it, well maybe I could not sure if anyone would understand. Great blog btw

THE BEATY said...

awsome loved it. one of my favorite Brian miller poems

Felicitas said...

A slice of life in 55 thoughtful words, Brian! It can't be easy for single parents - it's not even with two!

I hope you have a wonderful holiday weekend with your family!

Yvonne said...

Yup, you did it again. Pulled me in.

I love the last stanza.

jaymiethorne said...

Vivid capture on this one. Blessings out to all those single parents. Thank you for shaping our future.

Bernie said...

Okay you lived this, I mean watched this right?.....:-) Hugs

Janice said...

You hit the nail on the head once again. You could have been writing about me.

Cloudia said...

Well observed and written!


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Kay said...

the observant eye speaks again! sigh....makes me want to go people watch, yip, going to dedicate some time for that tomorrow... thanks!

Maggie said...

Definetly major props to all the single mother's out there.

quilly said...

Excellent encapsulation of everyday life. What we overlook as mundane is really quite extraordinary.

Eternally Distracted said...

YAY for single Mums...

anthonynorth said...

Again you paint a wonderful picture with your words.

jinksy said...

Seems a bit lonely in the crowd to me...as well as naughty for smoking!

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

a rather familiar scene
and you tell it so well!
Well done, Brian!
Happy Easter!
Mine is here
hugs
shakira

RNSANE said...

Very nice, Brian. As a mother who raised three sons alone, I had to grab brief moments with them whenever I could. Shawn was an only child until he was eleven but he helped raise his other two brothers from the time they were one and three.

Jingle said...

This post reminds your lovely wife how lucky she is and how important you are to her, being a caring, thoughtful, and intelligent husband.
Without you, life is totally different, I hope that while we enjoy this writing and give single mom the attention they deserve, we are also reminding ourselves (who have happy marriages) non-single moms are lucky, their husbands make life whole...

magical writing,
magical touches!

Jingle said...

Happy Friday,
Enjoy A Smiling Weekend with the ones you love.
cheers!
;)

John's comments said...

Tight poem, well phrased.

I looked at why she may have been a single mom My story is here

slommler said...

I was a single mom too for awhile...spent a lot of time at McDonald's...loved those Happy Meals. Great poem!
Hugs
SueAnn

souldose said...

You've given all single moms a fitting tribute, it made me think of all that I know... You're such a great writer

only a movie said...

Lovely observation, as always. Happy that you have such a strong voice and see everyone in a positive light. (Wish everyone could).
(As a single parent for all of my child's life, I occasionally am stunned by the negative judgment out there.)
Anyway - thanks Brian.

the walking man said...

I wish the single mothers I knew had a clue as to how decent a life they could have if they would simply change the perspective off themselves to their kids.

Jana said...

Very nice, simple and touching. It must be tough indeed raising a kid on one’s own! Kudos to these brave women and men who do this.

otin said...

Kind of makes me think of what it was like for my Mother.

Get in touch with me when you can sometime today.

Katherine said...

I have never been a single mum but my mother was. She raised me, my sister & my brother all on her own. She worked as a teacher aid during the week & for many years as a nurse on the weekends up until just recently when she retired. She did a fabulous job raising us on her own. She is my hero.
Great 55 Brian...a single parents job..is not an easy one!

Cop Mama said...

Wonderful observation. You captured the moment well.

I'm curious...do you carry a note pad around and jot things down as they come to you? How do your remember all these things that inspire your writing???

Stacy (the Random Cool Chick) said...

Once again your use of only 55 words to tell a complete and compelling story was perfection. ;) Looking forward to the Brotin tale! :)

Life with Kaishon said...

I really like this. Very nice. I was a single mom for a while until Gary. It was fun. A little stressful, but very fun. I love my kid so much. Just in case you ever wondered... : )

natalee said...

Found you through blue violet at nutshell..love your blog following now..

Hootin' Anni said...

My daughter is a single parent...this really hit home with me.

Mine is posted HERE. As always, scroll down below my Friday Show n Tell to find my 55.

Have a great holiday weekend.

Ariel said...

After I started reading your poems now even I've started observing things more closely and yes, if we keep our eyes open we see so many things around. I should Thank you for the good read and showing me the power of keen observation.

C said...

Beautiful Brian, I love it. :)

I hope though, that this isn't from your observance of someone, because for all you know, she's not a single mom at all! hahahahahaha! :D

CatLadyLarew said...

As a single mom, I still enjoy times with my college-aged son... and I'm glad he still wants to spend time with me.

Akelamalu said...

I was a single mum a long time ago so this struck a chord Brian, thankyou. x

Happy Easter to you and your family.

My 55 is up too.

Goofball said...

nice

Mr. Stupid said...

Awesome 55. Very well written...:)

Mighty M said...

Great job! Amazing what you can say in 55. :)

Vodka Logic said...

nice image. hail all single parents. Never been one but feels like it sometimes.

My 55 is up

Jessie said...

an excellent portrait. i'm glad you only took a couple of days off.

happy Easter to you and your family!

Kathy said...

How serene. Painted an awesome picture!

Mama Zen said...

Excellent, Brian!

hope said...

And I bet her child will remember having fun with Mom, who spoke kindly to others...and have no clue about a bank account or lack of one. Well said! Happy Easter!

Valerie said...

Togetherness, that's what counts. I was a single Mom for a good many years but the times spent with my boy were like gold dust in my heart.
Happy Easter to you and yours.

Anya said...

Amazing Brain
My compliment .....
you are a great writer :-)

Have a

H_A_P_P_Y

E_A_S_T_E_R

(@^.^@)

Daniel said...

Don't forget the single dads making the most of what they can with their little ones.

I like the vibe of this one. Nice observation.

Greg said...

Well written and a nice story of single moms in the world. Happy Easter to you!

My 55 is here if you'd like to read.

Aoife.Troxel said...

Great imagery, and you captured the feelings well to; determination, perseverance, as well as living life for the moment, and enjoying the time they have now.

Pravin Nair said...

Salutations to the single mom!

great stuff..keep writing pls

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Maggie May said...

That is good.

Nuts in May

Eddie Bluelights said...

Great poem, Brian

Susan said...

I love how you people watch. Great piece. Although I would like it better if the setting was Dunkin Donuts. Smiles.
I’m up right HERE

lime said...

and i see it through the child's eyes. well done.

Wings said...

My wife was a single mom for almost 11 years before we met. I have one great son thanks to her (never easy) efforts.

Great post.

buffalodick said...

Good imagery... I think we have all seen a version of that, and it makes me grateful I had a mom and a dad all my life..

Kitty Moore said...

As a single mum - thank you!

Monkey Man said...

Her voice perfumes the air strong with stale cigarette - quite a picture.

Vince Farrell said...

nice!

how did it go speaking at the youth retreat?

Kathryn Stripling Byer said...

Thanks, Brian, for your comment on my blog. I hope you and your family have a lovely Easter.

utopianfragments said...

'her voice
perfumes the air,
strong with stale cigarette,
chattering,
between
bites of
McDonald's pancake'

love this bit very much

good work..

Thom said...

Well done my friend. I like the "making the most of time" All parents should do that regardless if they are together or apart. Happy Easter to you and your family :)

Lulda Casadaga said...

the plight of a single mom! Now it is almost the norm. :(

Have a great weekend and stay out of Maryland! :D

dustus said...

This is a great poem. Thanks

Six Feet Under Blog said...

I can picture that description in my head. Very nice! Have a Happy Easter!

Unknown Mami said...

Bitter sweet portrait.

Honest and touching.

blueviolet said...

It's both sad and happy at the same time.

E said...

the story of my life... except i don't smoke (anymore) and i've never taken the tike to mcd's

ciao brian, this made me smile, bittlersweetly.

ciao, lola in her treehouse (come up if you like)

Larry said...

wow io6 posts how sweeeeeeeeeeet is that great feeling to be so well loved eh ?. If I could only imagine. Thanks Brian for stopping by and reading Zephyrs Revenge part 6 think that one was great ? wait til next week. All six posts are below in case you missed one or two... just follow the link below.


Zephyr's Revenge part 6

Ocean Girl said...

I like that you are writing real life observations. They give deeper meanings.

SandyCarlson said...

The Starbucks and McDonald's together struck me. Different tastes from commercial kitchens, not home. Powerful and touching.

Mitr Friend - Bhushavali said...

Broken marriages are not common here in my part of the world. But one of my very close friend's mom is a single mom. I've seen her pain. I've seen my friend's pain more, with a single parent. Its really so dis-heartening.

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sheila said...

My mom was a single mom for a while and it was very tough. They say you don't remember much of your childhood when you get older. YOu do. And a lot of it is either really good or really bad.

PattiKen said...

Thanks, Brian. I spent 16 years as a single mom. and there were times my kids were my only joy. Those little moments were so precious. You described it well.

Buzzard said...

You paint such strong pictures with your words.

Michele said...

That was great! In my humble single mom opinion, thank you for such a brilliant post! ;)

Joanna Jenkins said...

Nice 55. This is a scene I've seen many times in various coffee shops-- Well said and perfectly captured.

jj