Thursday, April 8, 2010

55 - at the park (PG-13)

little pink panties
sit beneath bushes
soiled & dirty
and i pray...

she had an accident
and just
tried to hide
her shame
but...

torn butterflies
on the seam
make my heart seethe...

take this anger
and the stories
they whisper to me
...

my knuckles are bloody
and there is a tree
that cries with me.

Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.

was at the park the other day and saw these in the bushes. could have been completely innocent, but it made me sick to my stomach. child sexual abuse is the most abominable thing i can think of. there are many times as i work with kids i have to keep my anger in check, and trust the system, but it still hurts.

...until no child is harmed...



and i am not advocating hitting trees...they are our friends too.

113 comments:

Green-Eyed Momster said...

I completely understand your anger, my friend. The tree is your friend. I hope your knuckles heal quickly.

...until no child is harmed...

:(

Bonnie, Original Art Studio said...

Thank you for the work you do Brian. I know how hard it is and I so admire people like you - out in the field - seeing firsthand the devastating effects of abuse.

The Retired One said...

Yes, when I read your piece it definitely made my stomach turn...we can pray it was innocent.
We are so glad you do the work you do, Brian...many people could never handle it and you are the perfect person with heart to help these children.

Maggie said...

It's such a shame that these things happen on a daily basis; It really breaks my heart. You're a very strong person for writing this and for doing what you do Brian. *hugs*

Rich Grasso said...

I love the imagery you use, fantastic!

ModernMom said...

Oh this is very very powerful...

Titanium said...

The things that trees bear witness to. Brian, this is fierce.

5thsister said...

Terribly tragic how prolific this is. Thank you for the awareness in a form of your prose.

Eva Gallant said...

Wow! It's amazing what you have the ability to achieve in so few words. I'm humbled everytime I read something you've written!

Susan said...

This 55 will haunt me. To many have suffered like this.

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cinner said...

You are a special person, I don't believe I could do what you do. It saddens me that there is so much abuse, and I pray always for no harm to come to anyone. Thank you for your strength.

....until no child is harmed....

Ronda Laveen said...

I always wonder the same thing when I see the panties left like that. Yes, until no child is unharmed. For every innocent story, there is one that isn't.

g-man said...

Brian...?
Wow brother, very powerful!
One of your best 55's..
Thanks for this great short story, and please have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Tracie said...

Like you, I hope there is an innocent reason. Makes me sick to think about people harming children. Bless you for what you do.

PS My friend read the link and said it made her cry. That's a compliment. :)

Tracie said...

Not this link - Star Falling. This would make her cry, too but for other reasons.

Matty said...

As I was reading this, I was afraid that was what you were talking about. The penalty for being convicted of child abuse should be much higher than it is.

Mojo said...

Very powerful Brian.

I'm sure the tree understands.

fancypants said...

The thought of someone harming a child that (or any) way brings out violent impulses for a lot of us I think. I wish we could protect all of our children from this. Your post brought tears to me eyes.

joanny said...

Oh so sad -- we have a long way to go in protecting our young-- mankind is the worse predator of all the animals.

Joanny

william said...

very sad post brian, makes u really angry people like this are on this planet :(

SandyCarlson said...

The thought of it. That the thought comes so readily speaks to the times. Damn. I imagine the tree took the blow with understanding.

Jaime said...

tree beating? that's a new one.

much ado about nothing... said...

wow, that really got my attention! your skill is amazing...how you could evoke so much emotion within me in just those 55 words is beyond me.

Bernie said...

So glad you do what you do....Hugs

Me said...

Oh my gosh. That ripped out a little piece of my heart...

Cop Mama said...

I was a sex crime investigator for three years. I had to keep my anger in check many times when interviewing suspects. I just hope there's another explanation for what you saw.

Pat said...

This was hard to read, my friend. Thanks for doing what you do.

Thom said...

Wow Brian. This is fantastic. So powerful and it just disgusts me as well. What possess people to do that. I'll never know and if anyone did they would win a Noble Prize I'm sure. Excellent my friend. You are such a gifted writer :)

Subby said...

Anyone ever does anything to the Princess...well let's just say I believe in "justfiable homicide"...go rent the movie "An Eye for an Eye"...or maybe not...

Beth said...

I agree with you! Too many children are hurt each day.

Allisonian said...

Hello, Very vERy right 55! That gave me quite an interesting emotional rush. I was really going out on a limb with mine, thank you for your compliment. I haven't wrote like that before, EVER, so...
I really like your take and then your added 'moral' so to speak, very rich!
Ciao!

clean and crazy said...

truly riveting, and it is so very sad. very well written 55

Monkey Man said...

I have a daughter and this would make me very angry as well. My 55 will be HERE after midnight Pacific time.

Dianne said...

Yes, and you have written a potent 55.
I heard a poem today in my writer's workshop about the women in Haiti who are abused before they can receive their "card" for food aid. True, from a nurse who came back from a relief team.

so Bri, after reading my post and Otin's, I am glad you write, and respond. someday tell me about your legs. you were supportive when I wrote about my mom's death. I honor the 2 year anniversary of that and my start with poetry. You've mentioned the skiing you did, prior to your accident. I send you support in my heart.

Yvonne Osborne said...

I pray she had an accident yet know it isn't so.

Oh, not what I wanted to have in my head when I go to bed.

Yes, trees are our friends. I seem to be stuck on them of late.

Brilliant you are with words.
Mine will be up in the morning. I just can't decide...

jaymiethorne said...

Powerful capture as always. Kudos.

LadyFi said...

So very very sad indeed.

Tracy said...

That's beautiful and sad writing. I know that things like this happen but I will never understand why.

Joseph Pulikotil said...

Hi Brian:)

55 words and they have formed heart breaking pictures. Butterfly,tree, injured person,anger all put together make a sorrowful, shocking, chilling post. A clever play of words by a master craftsman.

My old blog LIFE IN MOTION has been blocked by the administrator only for me. Others can access it but I cannot open it. So I have started a new blog under the heading A MAN ON THE MOVE with the url--pulikotilthomasjoseph.blogspot.com

Have a nice day Brian:)
Joseph

ilovepink1078 said...

very powerful and intriguing!

Love it...

Cabo said...

I am against the death penalty and opposed to the choice of abortion, but I can tell you one honest thing... were my daughter to ever encounter such a fate... I would become a Murderer. A slow, brutal one.

PattiKen said...

You never fail to reach inside of me and give my heart a huge wrench. That you can produce such a visceral response in only 55 words is testament to what a fine writer you are.

I am so hopeful that you were wrong.

Felicitas said...

Brian, this is so sad. But writing about it in the way that you have here is powerful!

ds said...

Devastating. The proof of your talent is that you wrote so beautifully about something so horrible. The proof of your heart is in the work you do--and the anger that can only be taken out on trees.

Buzzard said...

Everyone has said it, Powerful prose Brian. A Standing "O"

Jingle said...

Good evening:

I am cooking my 55,
it will not be well done until later, maybe tomorrow morning...
yours will be my sample,
see you tomorrow.
I am kind of busy today.
10Q for the supporting gesture.

Best!

Maha said...

it makes me sick to my stomach how some people are so devoid of humanity to do such horrible things. You are a quite sensitive person, I see, and it must be so hard not to get angry over the whole thing. Absolutely great 55! Mine is up too.

Mrsupole said...

I do want to ease your pain a little and let you know that I have seen parents rip the pants off their child because it makes less of a mess then pulling them down and getting it all over the child's legs and shoes. They should have thrown them into the trash, but some parents are not too bright and are embarressed by their child having an accident.

I truly hope this was the case here, but maybe you should check with the local authorities about if something like this is found again, should it be turned in as possible evidence. If blood is ever found on them, then they probably are evidence, and the authorities should be called to process the scene.

All these sick individuals should be locked up forever because they do it again and again. We need to pray for the victims, sadly many times they turn into the predator due to becoming mentally unbalanced and being unable to process what happened to them. A sad situation for all.

God bless.

Bridgette said...

Oh I pray it was completely innocent. It's sad that we live in a world where adults prey on children! God help them!!!

Terresa said...

Striking post. As a mother of young children, this grips me in it's jaws, the anger, the hope...

bliss said...

Lord.

my words clinch their fists
my stomach jolts and lurches
please be innocent...

Well, You certainly did tell an entire story in 55 words. It was one of the best kinds, if One can overlook the content. You didn't wrap it up in a shiny bow. You just told it and let it lay there....which is brilliant. Thank You and Namaste.

järnebrand said...

Very painfully powerful. Well done. You have a way of painting a picture with your words - only 55 of them, in this poem.

Also, I think the tree probably will forgive you. In time. Even though she might suggest you hit something else next time, like a brick maybe...?

Hug a tree, hit a brick/ Jo.


My 55 this week is about enjoying being a follower.

John's comments said...

Sounds more like lazy parents as sexual abuse is less likely in public places. Emotional poemMy 55 is here

Rosidah Abidin said...

Very deep words. I hope there will come a time where no child and tree will ever be hurt again...

anthonynorth said...

This was very powerful. So much in what is not said.

Protege said...

Very thought provoking and moving. I am so in awe of your courage to bring up these grave issues.
Beautiful writing as always...
Have a lovely Friday,
xo
Zuzana

Jana said...

That you can come up with such a poignant piece in 55 words s truly laudable…wish this world was a safer place atleast for innocent children…

Brian Miller said...

heading to DC today....will be offline most of the day...catch up with everyone tonight!

otin said...

It really is unimaginable how someone could do such a thing to a child. You have such a big heart. I hope that your hand heals fast!

slommler said...

Powerful post Brian!! It causes my heart to break just thinking of this. I would have a hard time keeping my anger in check working in this area. I applaud you dear friend.
Hugs
SueAnn

Hootin' Anni said...

Oh Brian, you tore us all up on this one. Wow...poignant, powerful and makes all insane with anger of the insanity of this world today.

the walking man said...

If you can't find the one who ripped the panties from the girl hit the tree. It doesn't mind and understands because it had to witness what happened.

Katherine said...

Cold!
I feel cold!
I pray that this 'innocent heart'
is safe & that what you saw was not a sign of something much, much more!
My heart sinks to darkened depths when I think of children suffering from abuse. Through my work I have seen the long term effects of such abuse. It is devastating. Some victims can go on & live a life of some kind of normal but they are the fortunate ones!
For the others ( and there are so many of them)...their lives were taken away the first day their innocence was callously stolen.
My eyes are now wet!
A seriously haunting 55!
I am not sure what it is that you do for a living Brian but from what a few of your bloggers have written I would surmise that it is a job that shows you truths that most people will only ever read about!

lime said...

heartbreaking and i quite agree, nothing seems so heinous.

Daniel said...

Just imagining these situations sometimes makes my ache. I think about this type of thing much more differently now that I am a dad. Our little ones are too precious to allow them to hurt or be hurt.

Ariel said...

Very sad...I wish the truth is something different behind what you witnessed.

Enchanted Oak said...

I once left mine behin a shed in complete innocence because having had an "accident" they felt uncomfortagle. Not all things are rotten in Denmark.
FLASH!

SUN DANCE HILL said...

Oh so powerful and moving, and sadly a truth all too often. God Bless you Brian, you are an Earth Angel.

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

whooooo boy that does bring up lots of emotions.

God help the ones who cannot help themselves and protect the little ones!!!

TechnoBabe said...

Great 55 my dear. Your caring heart is shining through your writing. I for one do not understand the mind that could look upon children in any way than they are innocents who depend on adults for their safety. My childhood was altered with regular visits of an uncle. So I was unusually protective of my own children. Keep up your wonderful writing and helping get the honest word out to as many people as possible.

sheila said...

Uhhhh that's terrible. THere are some sick people out there. That would be one impression that would stay with me forever. Poor kid, I hope she's all right.

anupama said...

Dear Brian,
NAMASTE!
Good Evening1
I'm disturbed.it's painful.
Sasneham,
Anu

Magpie said...

It's hard to see the world as a nice place sometimes. I hope all was innocent. Powerful expression of your feelings though. Have a great weekend!

Jingle said...

http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/04/09/55-her-name-is-kate-pg-13/

posted, I feel uncertain about it.
next time, I will do it independently...

your 55 is the best!

Alice Audrey said...

The abuse is all too common, but I suspect the pink panties were lost some other way. Could have fallen out of an overnight case or been snatched by a brother's friend as a joke or anything.

JennyMac said...

WOW......you are SO gifted. This was brilliantly written.

Midlife Jobhunter said...

That sight would leave one to wonder not good things. Child abuse much more predominant than we imagine, I fear. I wonder what makes it that way. So unfair.

Lulda Casadaga said...

You need to go back and give that tree a hug! :D Seriously, it saddens me too to think of an innocent being harmed...I pray for them! :/

Eaton Bennett said...

It seems that these things are never too far away from us.
It scares me to think people are so directed by such evil. Excellently written 55. :))

suryagni said...

the most repulsive and evil creatures can think of doing any thing like that.

Nessa said...

The tree understands, too. The things stolen with child sexual abuse can never be returned.

Ana_treek said...

U are right, its awful:(

suzicate said...

You just tore my heart in half...the image is haunting and unfortunately happens more than we'd care to think.This is the second blog I've read today talking about pink panties, someone else found a pair in her front yard!

Hilary said...

This made my heart lurch as if I was there. I'm sure that tree would far rather absorb the blow of your fist than what it may have witnessed.

Thank you for the work you do.

Kathy's Klothesline said...

Brought to mind a song I saw Amy Grant sing in concert about the same subject....the title escapes me at the moment, but it was very moving. Have you ever considered collaborating with a musician and writing song lyrics? I see a romantic ballard in you........

buffalodick said...

What kind of monsters are out there that look like people?

Akelamalu said...

OMG my heart cried out reading this Brian, having been a victim.

I am so with you on this. :(

Ji said...

http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/04/09/week-121-are-you-the-perfect-poet/

week 12+1, you are perfect again.
Jamie nominated you.
Happy 4 u.

smooth sailings to DC,
drive with care!

Unknown Mami said...

It was so hard for me to decide to have a child because I was so terrified of all the harm that can come. I feel scarred and I never want my daughter to feel that way.

Vodka Logic said...

wow, so glad you explained was thinking could be your own children.

yes it is a disgrace.

My 55 is up

much ado about nothing... said...

brian, i was surprise and glad to see a note from you but i can't find it!! i'll betcha that you were sent to my woodworks blog but you can find me at livinitupinky.blogspot.com if you want to take the time to say hi again.
i can promise you that i'm going to take the time to read through your older posts...maybe i'll find something there that would give me an indication as to how you have become a person of such depth and insight. i have truly enjoyed the few blogs of late...

Goofball said...

your knuckles hurt, my eyes tear

Mama Zen said...

This is so incredibly powerful.

secret agent woman said...

I always jump to the same worries when I see sights like that.

Baino said...

Ah perhaps you're jumping to conclusions but the point is well made. Sadly children aren't abused in parks but in the safety of their own homes much of the time. Don't get angry, get even!

Nancy said...

Ohhhh :-(

KB said...

In this day and age, it is so easy to imagine the worst.Sad but very true.

Prayer Girl said...

You are a very talented writer. You handled this most heinous kind of crime against the innocent in a powerful and sensitive way. I think it is so very well done, Brian.

PG

Marla said...

We were foster parents for six years. I understand. We didn't always do so well trusting the system. It was often hard to not be bitterly angry at life.

I am so thankful for men like you, Brian. Thank you for caring.

Lorraine said...

Oh Brian, that hurts in so so many ways, and I'm with you there, gosh that hurts....I hope and pray that it was although painful, perfectly accidental like a fall from a bike x

Lorraine said...

forgot to say that you're right about trees, they hold us up, they endured with us, and they love hugs and take the hits for us, out of Love...

hope said...

I'm sure the tree sympathized with you...and bet it could've told the tale.

Well said...sad, but necessary to remind people to watch over children..ALL children.

laurenmichelleotheim said...

an incredibly emotional piece. I really appreciate the rawness of this one.

Gary said...

wow. You stopped me cold. How can anyone be so horrible to another person, especially a child.

C said...

"...until no child is harmed..."

That is a beautiful last line.

evalinn said...

Wow, what a story in 55 words!

Tamarind~ said...

So powerful, Brian.

Mighty M said...

Powerful stuff.

California Girl said...

well put Brian. you put into poetry what so many of us feel.

Whitesnake said...

Pass the tissues please!

aspiemom said...

This took my breath away. I cannot imagine coming across something like that. As a mom in a close community, I would feel sick.

Let's hope it was something that got dirty and not something else.

Anonymous said...

That is quite an incredible poem.

Jingle said...

Do you believe it,
despite the situation of some kids,
amazing grace is within every child,
it is up to U to discover it, encourage it, and highlight it...

I believe that you are doing your share, you touch so many people's lives with your good willed comments,
recall, in the past 14 weeks, 90% of fresh poets do NOT comment back, and you whine nothing, continue doing that, THIS IS THE REASON I WANT TO EMBRACE YOU AS WHO YOU ARE...