Monday, March 15, 2010

Magpie Tales: Marionette

there is a certain comfort that comes when you pull my strings,
knowing that you are in control, that I don't have to worry about
what i need to do.

if i need to talk, you speak for me.

if i need to move, you move me.

if i need to feel, well i don't...

you are in control and i mindlessly wander to the whims of your
hands, following you here are there. dancing for your friends,
their smiles are courteous, hiding their pity. at the end of the
night, you will drop me back in box, close the lid and forget me.
it is dark in here, and quiet...i like it.

in these shadows, i dream of what life would be like without the
pinch and pull. blasphemous dreams, their freedom smells so
alluring, yet scare mes. i have never been on my own and would
not know where to begin. you have assured that.

one day, when i wear and splinter, you will grow tired of me,
much like the others that used to inhabit this box. maybe
then i will understand, why their smiles don't need to be
painted on, any more.

This story was written for the prompt at Magpie Tales.

101 comments:

järnebrand said...

At first I thought this one was about a guitar. How he got put away in his case at night... I didn't read the title and hadn't seen the picture yet obviously... :) I feel sorry for the marionettes. There are a lot of them out there...
Take care. Peace and love/ Jo.

järnebrand said...

Also I feel proud to be the first one to comment on this! Quite the achievement, huh!? Ha! /Jo.

Maha said...

it's so beautiful, how you'd bring a marionette to life and force it to talk, maybe even scream. There are a million person like marionettes, waiting to be moved, spoken about, mere shadows of others' words. And then, they are left alone. Again, that was beautiful.

Jen Chandler said...

Sad and very moving. I've known people like that ...

Well done!

Vodka Logic said...

Unfortunately I know people who treat people like that.

xx

willow said...

Ooo, lots of codependency here. Gosh, Brian, you've been saving your very best pieces for Magpie!

SUSAN SONNEN said...

I absolutely love the way that you ended this! :D

SUN DANCE HILL said...

So sad, the emotion pours through in every line. Love this Brian!

Ronda Laveen said...

Life, in a nutshell, for many. Perfectly articulated.

You tugged my heart strings.

Travel & Dive Girl said...

Well done...

"if i need to feel, well i don't..." Sometimes, I wish it were that easy.

buffalodick said...

We've all gotten to be the puppet, and the puppet master...

Bonnie, Original Art Studio said...

Okay - I'm running out of superlatives - your work never disappoints!

I wonder how many of us have been both puppet and puppeteer? Interesting.

joanny said...

Interesting! A Mysterious life of a puppet with a Psychological Twist!

Joanny

Daniel said...

Some sinister and freeing thoughts here. I like this one.

Monkey Man said...

Great post. "if i need to feel, well i don't" Wow. We do need to dream to be unshackled. To smile with faces no longer painted on. Thanks.

Liza said...

i so love the pic that accompanies your words - a perfect choice!
i had thought of mr. marbles from Seinfeld...pre-Chucky mr. marbles.
i can't explain my thought process sometimes.

chuckles aside (oops!), this is a very powerful piece.
thanks for sharing.

Iddy Albatross said...

Brought two things to mind. The first one was Jeff Dunham and his band of puppets, and the second is a story I began quite a while back. Now I'm feeling inspired to go finish that. Thanks for that push there.

Lovely story this one...

william said...

I have never been a person who can be manipulated ,quite strong headed, although I do know people who are like puppets, good food for thought and a great story :)

Tracy said...

"in these shadows, i dream of what life would be like without the
pinch and pull."

Love that line.

lakeviewer said...

It reminds me of Pinocchio who wanted to be a real boy, living a different life, a free life, to err and to explore in.

A wonderful take on that wooden hand.

Tabor said...

Kind of sad and angry. Makes me worry about how I used to treat my toys.

Magpie said...

This is beautifully sad, Brian.

Susan said...

I never pull strings. The real joy is in seeing someone move joyously all on their own because you helped them to see they could do it. Great post. I like what it made me think about. I have yet another poem going up at 6. I think I've been bitten. I hope it turns out well :)

Maggie said...

We make ourselves become puppets of others.

Enchanted Oak said...

I love the idea that the marionettes smile when nobody manipulates them anymore. Sweet.

otin said...

Actually, if you really wanted to interpret this in a different way, you could say that it was about God and someones loss of faith.

Ariel said...

Very interesting Brian.So many women- wives and daughters,endure a puppet like existence.No,I'm no feminist but it's a fact. A sad poem, and something that I could relate to so many around.

Cop Mama said...

It's never ceases to amaze me how versatile your writing is! You could write about almost anything!

Wonderfully sad yet very imaginative!

staceyjwarner said...

wonderful, excellent writing as always...

much love

Jaime said...

nicely done. i really like the play between control and freedom.

tori said...

gosh, I've missed reading you! great take on the pic!

R. Burnett Baker said...

Brian, I absolutely LOVED this piece! What a voice for thousands of people without their own voices and lives; without the freedom to speak with those voices or fully live those lives!

Wonderful!!

blueviolet said...

I know someone who is a marionette for her husband and she's miserable. That's what it made me think of.

Matty said...

It's as if you got inside the mind and heart of a marionette. And sadly, many real people are marionettes being controlled by others.

Tracie said...

In high school and college I had a friend like this. She was a marionette for whoever she was dating at the time. Always had to have a boyfriend. It ended very tragically for her. I have been wanting to blog about her story for months. Very sad.

CottageGirl said...

I always have a sort of sad feelings when I see a marionette. Your beautiful words have identified those feelings!

Ms Hen said...

very very nice. (hugs)

Kat_RN said...

This could easily be about a certain type of relationship. I know couples like that.
Kat

LadyCat said...

Some people need to control and some need to be controlled...sadly enough. They each fill the others need. You just want to cut the strings and set them free. But sometimes they don't want to be free...even sadder.

steviewren said...

I like this line especially "you are in control and i mindlessly wander to the whims of your hands". Excellent description of a puppet's so-called life.

Bachelor said...

Brian, You have outdone yourself on this one. Very creative and yet so very true in some true to life relationships. I have seen couples that operate this way. The "marionette" sometimes holds the key and doesn't even know it.

Harnett-Hargrove said...

Lost and found, very moving. Ouch. -J

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

You tell it like it is, it is like
you are an actor taking on a role
but instead of acting , you write!

Brian , ever think of writing a screenplay?

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Have you a WONDROUS WEEK!

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Cabo said...

I totally dug that, bro. Absolutely grand.

The Retired One said...

I shudder to think how long in my life that I let others pull my strings...it took me a while to learn that if I tugged back, just a little....it woke up the Marionette player.......

tattytiara said...

A very well fitted analogy.

Mighty M said...

Very impressed with what you can do with "marionette". Nice work!

Pat transplanted to MN said...

An excellent way about pulling strings....this presents ever so many under the current meanings faith, love, life, Very well done! Great writing.

Mama Zen said...

Amazing writing, as always.

Teri said...

Brian--I agree with Willow. Your Magpie tales are really great. I guess I kind of live on the dark side myself so for me, I can feel the pain, the loneliness that this "marionette" feels. Some days I AM that marionette. I keep struggling with trying to be let out of the box. Please????

tera said...

Very nice. You are really good at the subtle little tugs and nudges. :)

Queenmothermamaw said...

Many puppets are not made out of wood and that is so truly sad. Fear, doubt apathy what cause that? That was a beautifully written piece. Congrats.
QMM

She Writes said...

I like your take on this, Brian!

Also, thank you for your kind words at my recent post. you are one of the bloggers I know that has followed me a long time and saw the shift in my journey. Thank you. Truly.

Nancy said...

Reminds me of Pinocchio!

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Katherine said...

A lot of people look for their gifted pen, I know that I am! But you, you, have already found yours. Beautiful writer!!!

JOHN said...

Brian.
I just read your comment. It has been awhile. I had to move out of my parents home after all.They fore closed on my home. I dont understand.I had the full amount from day one. Anyways I work 75 hours a week now since Oct 11th. And I had to move 22 truck loads. Thank God My Pastor/Best friend He just so happened to have a house for rent. He handed me the keys No deposit and said stay here as long as you need. Its a three bedroom two bath one car garage.My room mate came along to.We were one step away from being homeless. God is still with me.And Im waiting to see his plan for me.They say I will get the house back in four months after escrow closes.We will see.Thank you for your prayers.I really do need them.I hope your doing well.God Bless You
john

Rinkly Rimes said...

When we ALL 'wear and splinter'! Oh dear. Great story.

evalinn said...

Nice post! :-)

Shadow said...

superb! but you know, it flashed through my mind that there are people, actual people, who do think kind of thing too...

♥ Braja said...

The possibilities were endless...well done Brian....I joined Magpie Tales too :)

Ribbon said...

i like this a lot

best wishes
Ribbon

little hat said...

Brian, are all puppeteers heartless? I think not. But how is one (marionette) to know?
How tragic that this one languishes in darkness, unappreciated.
Viva the marionette liberation!!

christine said...

Omgosh I wrote as though the hand had puppet connections!!
Sad ending and the inference to us so poignant.

Christine

slommler said...

I love this one. I root for the "rest" of the marionette!
Hugs
SueAnn

JStar said...

Beautifully written Brian...

spacedlaw said...

So sad...

the walking man said...

Carved with a blade. The same blade that cuts the strings and sets one free. I will no more dance to a tune I can not hear, nay, never heard than I would tumble to a blow so weakly struck as a puppet master whose strength goes no further than his fingertips.

Goofball said...

now you got me wondering: would I be able to accept someone else pulling all the strings? Or do I dare the responsibility of my own actions? Which do I prefer


...honestly, I don't know. Both options are creepy in their own way

Valerie said...

I shudder at the thought of having my strings pulled.... that was a real thought provoking piece, Brian, you're good at making us think about your words.

Jingle said...

what short, intense, but moving story!
there are magic in your writing!
thank you for the brilliant treat!

Jingle said...

Happy Tuesday!
You scored A+++ with me all the way!

Jingle said...

I will be leaving in an hour,
see you later!
take good care and enjoy yourself!

Lyn said...

Very insightful..Being a puppet always ends in a pile of splinters..Freedom is scary, revolutionary, the only option.. Thank you...

Vicki Lane said...

Marionettes are inherently creepy -- nice take and excellent close!

LadyFi said...

Poor marionette - never free - but sometimes maybe loved.

Jessie said...

this was really good (duh)...i feel a twinge of reality to it.

Mama Wheaton said...

I know people who could describe their relationships like this.

Kim A. said...

Very nice. The picture was perfect. You are in the flow today!

♥namaste♥

TechnoBabe said...

Makes me think of a puppet from a different aspect. I know there are puppets in real life who are led around and miserable. The spirit within is what makes the difference in being real or fantasy. You sure do have the capacity to move people with your words.

amy said...

Oh my ...so poignant and could be applicable to different types of relationships. I think of children foremost, whose parents will not allow them individuality, much less give them wings to soar.

Excellent Brian, as always!

Suldog said...

I rather like this. I've always been something of an animist, imagining souls and whatnot where they may not be, so of course this speaks to me.

Jill said...

Great Tale Brian, my thoughts are that even the MOST dependent would fly if only they could muster the strength to cut the strings.

Grand Pooba said...

Pinnochio definitely entired my brain. A very sad pinnochio.

JennyMac said...

Sad but beautifully written.

Baino said...

I've always found marionettes a little spooky.I have one that was a gift from many years ago, he's well stashed in a big red suitcase! Feel like a marionette myself these days!

Peter Goulding said...

Beautifully written Brian. A couple of typos - here are there, back in box - but life from a puppet's point of view shows great imagination!

souldose said...

I never thought I'd feel so sorry for a marionette but buddy you just made me

martha said...

That is so incredibly sad and yet so true - in a metaphorical sense........

Nessa said...

very well put.

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Alan Burnett said...

"one day, when i wear and splinter, you will grow tired of me". Lovely sentence, I am going to include it on the birthday card to the Good Lady Wife in a few weeks time.

Fragrant Liar said...

Poor little marionette, and any human being who feels the same.

secret agent woman said...

Yaaah. That one gave me the heebies!

CatLadyLarew said...

Great piece of writing, Brian, as usual! I always enjoy seeing what you come up with for these prompts!

Free the marionettes!

Uma Gowrishankar said...

The mind and heart of a puppet - I liked your piece very much, Brian

Ben said...

Conjures up quite the metaphor for life. I hate the feeling of not being in control and acting in ways that don't do justice to who you really are.

Lisa said...

many have assumed you mean marionette's literally. I took it another way. I think this is from a person who is being controlled by personal despot, someone with a history of using and controlling women. I see it from the point of view from an obedient child whose dreams are squelched by a controlling father.

gayle said...

I love you take on this!! Wonderful!

The Muse said...

Please forgive my tardiness...I have been on two trips and my son was just married :)Delighted, Brian to be able to visit and to read your work.

Ok ... I will indeed "blow that horn/trumpet" and announce the creation of this work...for there is so much beyond the actual marionette...in my mind...

In reading this aloud...I cannot help but think of my time in the military...
Take that as you will...but there were days I was indeed the puppet...awaiting the day to be put away...no longer NEEDING that painted smile!
Bravo

Kimberly said...

Very real to life..which seems a strange thing to say given the circumstances! Well done.

suryagni said...

fabulous. you painted the picture so vividly.