Wednesday, March 3, 2010

green

fog,
thick tendrils,
slither between mountains
choking trees until color drains
from their outstretched limbs,
leaving them grey,
lifeless,
cold.

birds
cry within
but are lost to
my eyes.

water
spills heartily
along rocks laid in the
dawn of creation, burbling between
banks, carved smooth
in its passing,
lively,
cold.

breath
seizes tight,
pores contracting, toes
curling around pebbles, as the
current scrubs clean
my naked body,
tingling,
cold.

sun,
warm kisses,
dries me gently,
returning green to the valley,
my own personal Spring,
nature's
coffee.

Think Green, before it becomes a fairy tale we tell our grandchildren to remind them.

For other takes on the theme, visit my friends at Theme Thursday.

Thanks to my friends at the Poets Rally for another Poet Award.

109 comments:

Meeko Fabulous said...

That was awesome! Indeed, we do need to preserve this Earth for our kids and their kids, etc. :) I need to plan a trip to the mountains. I miss nature.

becky said...

I loved this,somehow I thought you were going to St. Paddys day with it, but it was good.lol

Tom said...

thank heavens for the parks dpts for saving many edens, and to private orgs doing their part.

More people should get out into the green places to get that feeling you describe.

Ronda Laveen said...

I hoped the current remembered to scrub behind your ears too!

Mighty M said...

You are such a great writer! I could totally visualize and practically smell this setting!!

Titanium said...

What a fantastic reminder of the frailty of the earth we enjoy.

william said...

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Magpie said...

Painting pictures in my mind again. Lovely, but because you were naked - I didn't peek. :)

Paul Benjamin said...

Yes! I completely agree with this message. One day, we may wake up to a world that's a little less vibrant...

TechnoBabe said...

For now, this scene is still possible. What will happen when there is not so much water or green?

clean and crazy said...

mmm that sounds like heaven!! it took me back to my grandmas house in washington, she had a creek running through it that was icy cold and just like you described.

Matty said...

Ah, the good ole days. Skinny dipping, sun dried skin.

Tabor said...

I'll be honest I didn't feel the green thing going here. But I did enjoy the writing.

Mama Zen said...

This made me shiver!

otin said...

Just think, there are some people who feel that mankind is having no negative effect on the environment.

It just seems logical to me that we must be causing some harm!

Bonnie, Original Art Studio said...

Such a good reminder to not squander the resources, beauty, magnificence of the Earth for future generations.

Susan said...

What a fantastic reminder of how important nature is. Ahh, naked dips in cold waters ...memories! *smiles*
My Theme Thursday is up too!

The Retired One said...

What marvelous imagery....and I so, so agree with you!

staceyjwarner said...

fabu! I think green...the earth is fighting back. we will cease to exist before the earth does...

much love

Pearl said...

I always get such great images in my head when I read your stuff.

Pearl

SUSAN SONNEN said...

I've been away from the blog scene for several days. We've had company. What a joy to find this gem on my first day back! :D

Monkey Man said...

Ack! My Sunday 160 jumped the gun on Green Theme Thursday. Maybe I'll repost it. Great visual, Brian.

Cabo said...

Ah, well said Brother. Well said, indeed.

LadyCat said...

Nature's coffee opens the eyes of spring. It always helps me, too : )

jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com said...

sun,
warm kisses,
dries me gently,
returning green to the valley,
my own personal Spring,
nature's
coffee

u have precious imaginations!
this poem trly rocks!
enjoy a smiling evening!
thank u for the beautiful job done for Rally Thursday!

jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com said...

Plus, Brian:
as a participant, u r given an award from my Rally post, please feel free to take one of your choice, u can keep it on your own, or take it and post it by or on Friday and pass it to 12 poets from our Rally lists.
It is an opportunity to make new friends, new and worthy friend such as Jannie, and more, u never know. I tell u this so that u make a decision and get one of the awards u deserve!

Happy Thursday Ahead!

Travel & Dive Girl said...

Great post - "toes curling around pebbles" takes me back to swimming in the river during many summer days...

Peter Stone said...

Wonderful descriptions, Brian. Liked the visual format of the text too.

The photo of the ducks reminds me of ducks we saw in Marysville in 2008, before a bushfire destroyed the entire town...

Tracy said...

Love this, Brian! I can always count on you for a unique TT take. :-)

Bernie said...

Awesome imagination you have my friend.....love this....:-) Hugs

fiveloaf said...

yes, our earth is one fraile place that needs to be nourished- nice job!

Mama Wheaton said...

I would rather live in the mountains than any other place. I can't wait for some warmer weather to get back up there!

Ribbon said...

That was an absolutely beautiful read... thank you for sharing this.

be well
best wishes
Ribbon

Brian Miller said...

i love the mountains, the woods...i was trying to capture the feeling and mixing in a time we actually bathed in the mountain stream, while freezing, there was just something about it that is so refreshing...as far as the GREEN message...i would hate to lose this and have future generations only read about it...

slommler said...

So true Brian...in fact it is almost a myth now!! I sure felt the cold water! Brrrrr!!! But you are so right. It is so refreshing!
Hugs
SueAnn

She Writes said...

God knows miss the water. This reminded me.

♥ Braja said...

Everyone's talkin' 'bout the weather....

Tamarind~ said...

This is a pain, a concern.. so poignantly painted.. as you always do! I always wonder about the valley you walk through..! Go on, friend!

JeffScape said...

Green, gray. What's the difference?

;)

C.M. Jackson said...

nature's coffee indeed! I am refreshed and ready to go!! happy tt!

Felicitas said...

Absolutely wonderful! And you've inspired me... I may have to play now, too!

Dreamhaven said...

Thinking green will hopefully be taught in the youngest grades.

Joanna Jenkins said...

Green is good. I wish more people gave the planet a second thought.

Wonderful job on this poem Brian.

More, more, more please.

jj

Admin said...

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takemeoutindonesia said...

Great poem,....love and like this....
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Chhaya said...

A Beautiful poem with a Beautiful message behind it..

:)

ishabellemanalo said...

, another amazing poem, brian... :) this is the reason why i am a loyal fan... :) this one's for you: http://ishabellemanalo.wordpress.com/2010/03/04/high-altitudes

Kris said...

Lorne Greene?

Shadow said...

truly lovely..... and you deserve every award that you get!

subby said...

I really do like your free verse, Brian...such imagery! Well deserved award; congrats :)

anthonynorth said...

I felt that scene. Excellent. And the ending was awesome.

järnebrand said...

Loved it. Loved it. Loved it. Loved the structure (fog, birds, water, breath and sun), loved the phrase "nature's coffee". I could feel the green return. I love green. I am thinking green. Always have. Always will. :)

faery of the wilds said...

nice poem... life n death reflections...

yeah we have to save greeness befor its a faerytale...

Protege said...

This post speaks volumes to a nature lover such as me. Well put Brian.;)
xo
Zuzana

Sam!! said...

Lovely post.. Thanks Brian :)

Take care

ladyfi said...

Beautiful indeed! WHat would life be without nature's balm to soothe our souls?

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

You painted NATURE at its best.
I can feel your LOVE.
Well done, Brian.

Happy THURSDAY!
Happy MARCH!

hugs
shakira

SHE IS NO LONGER ALONE!

tony said...

Well To Remember what the alternative to Green Might be. Splendid Words Brian.

the walking man said...

I must be dense in that I see no environmental conservation statement here. I do see a cyclical bath happening as the seasons turn and replenish the spring. I see the many mountain streams that did more than make my toes curl. I remember many rock lounges I used to dry on in uninhabited places, just no conservation statement.

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Realliveman said...

Brain, this is such great stuff. Are you published anywhere (I mean other then here)?

Nessa said...

I am fascinated by your varied structure and wonder how you decide.

Sean the Vampire

blueviolet said...

I wish everyone would realize what a gift God gave us in nature and do what they can to preserve it. It's extraordinary outside our doors, isn't it?

Jessie said...

this one really spoke to me. i was so there. i wonder if i could pitch a tent?

fabo dear Brian!

warm smiles,

Mrsupole said...

Preserving the green is important. I bug the grandkids all the time about recycling. They may not like it but I think they should learn to do it. Although I do think there are some who are too extreme, but then to each their own.

Great green TT. I really enjoyed it.

God bless.

Daniel said...

I love the painted picture here. I have known this place and quickly found my way in your words. Blessings to you.

JGH said...

Wait! I thought coffee was MY own personal spring!
Great poem - great images. Perfect for the days before spring.

Betsy said...

nice, green poem! :)

And congrats on the award...very well deserved!

Life with Kaishon said...

Oh. I love this!
Thanks for reminding me.

Ziva said...

What a wonderful poem. And I really hope the message reaches as many as possible. We only have this one earth. Let's keep it green.

Corrie Howe said...

Reminds me of some of the places we visited growing up and my parents "dragged" us hiking.

Thanks for the memories.

JStar said...

I love what you did with this theme

Valerie said...

Nice one, Brian. Green is one of my favourite colours, it goes with everything, let's not lose it. Ever!

Rajlakshmi said...

brilliant write on mother nature... we definately need to preserve it in all possible ways we can...

loved the imagery ... the beauty is so wonderfully picturised by your words :)

award for you at my blog :)

Holly said...

WOW...wonderful writing! ! !

Jasmine said...

Natures Coffee - Love it.

Little Ms Blogger said...

Initially, I thought you were writing about a child's stuffy nose and the 'green' was snot.

I think I need to get out and about.

Yankee Girl said...

What a great poem and message. Just reading it made me warm inside.

The pic at the end was too cute for words. Gooslings are ridiculously adorable.

Cop Mama said...

This made me long for spring and a nice long hike!

Mona said...

Excellent imagery. Specially the fog is so aptly described!

buffalodick said...

Good observations, served up with wonderful description!

Eberle said...

I love the image of the birds lost to your eyes. And yes for not letting green become only a reality in fairy tale.

Kulio said...

That post made me want to go take a walk and soak up the sun and nature :-) nice!

SuziCate said...

What a great message. Made me want to go on a hike and enjoy the day. I have a jingle jangle award for you if you want to grab it from my blog.

Baino said...

Lovely a nice environmental twist without the preachiness.

Arizona Mamma said...

You really are a gifted writer. Have you ever had anything published?

willow said...

Skinny dipping with a cuppa nature. That's as good as it gets.

Brian Miller said...

dont you know it willow...it is indeed

AmyLK said...

Congrats on the award! Youdeserve it! So talented.

maureen115 said...

So amazingly beautiful! Thanks for granting such lush images and reminding me of the importance of cherishing this earth.

I have an award for you :)

Ariel said...

That was a great message you gave there. Your poem took me to summer.Beautiful images of nature.

Bridgette said...

Love it!!!

jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com said...

incredible job!

an award in my blog, see u later!

Shas said...

Lovely. I could visualize what ur words tried to portray.
Thanks for raising environmental concerns.

Janice said...

What a great way to deliver a very serious message. This was so powerful. I loved the sun being called "nature's coffee". Of your writings that I have been privileged to read, this is my favorite.

tattytiara said...

What a beautiful scene.

Adam said...

"My own personal Spring" and "nature's coffee"—clever ending to a cool poem. Thanks

okigetit said...

thanks for this, brian! because of the poem's visual form i felt like i was hiking up and down the lines... a perfect match for the content. and "nature's coffee" did a lot for me. i think i'm going to take my laptop and schoolwork outside until the sun goes down. thanks for the inspiration!

Green-Eyed Momster said...

You should be getting paid for your writing. Oh Brian, this is one of my favorites! The list of my favorite posts of your is growing! It's no wonder you have almost 100 comments on this post and you have almost 400 followers.

Thank you!

Lisa said...

within the first few words I was on a family vacation in the Smoky Mountains. I could feel the frigid waters and cool air and it was such a happy memory.

BenjiMester said...

I definitely want to go there. There's nothing like a mist covered landscape. And the sound of a babbling brook is something I haven't heard in a long time.

Rita said...

People with your talent just blow me away. I could not write a poem if my life depended on just finding two rhyming words.

Great stuff.

Thanks for visiting and the nice comment also.

Mmm said...

If I think green I miss greener places than her and this world of brown! nice take for TT, btw, Brian. Great job.

secret agent woman said...

I worry that if we don't do better, there be none of us left to remind or be reminded.

lettuce said...

nature's coffee

:-)

(tho i'd prefer nature's tea)

gayle said...

Awesome!! I really liked this one!!

JML said...

The girl would love this. She's learning how to be environmentally friendly. Recently became a vegetarian as well. . . . . good piece though.

Goofball said...

brrrr
beautiful imagery but so chilly

SuziCate said...

I will have an award for you on my post in the morning.