spring makes me think of daffodils, tree houses and crazy people.
on the corner of my parents yard, where the gravel road turns to make its loop back toward the grave yard, there sat a pile of large random stones. one was a concrete ball with about 3 inches of rebar sticking out of it that i imagine adorned a wall at some point. green moss filled in the spaces on its rough skin; rust giving character as it spread into the stone from the base of the rebar.
it was beside this pile of stone that we built our tree house.
our dad did most of the work, building the deck, attaching the walls, even shingling the roof. but we got to paint it, using cans of left over paint from the corner of the garage and old soft bristle paint brushes. white was what we had most of and so white became our tree house, slowly between stoppages to rinse paint out of our eyes, from our haphazard painting.
as we painted, my sister sat on the stones, playing dolls in the dirt.
my heart, backfiring like a rusty muffler, sent goose flesh in waves to the shores of my arms, when i heard her scream. eyes rolling back into her head, spittle stretching in rivulets from her mouth, my sister flailed around the yard...screaming...hitting herself...throwing herself on the ground. it was the most peculiar thing we had ever seen, of course this was before we saw brad pitt in 12 monkeys.
gesticulating like a puppet whose stings had become tangled, she pirouetted in the green grass.
grabbing her, my parents whisked her into the house, away from prying eyes. we heard their taught voices through the wood of the bathroom door, then water gushing into the tub drowned out her keening. paint dried tight on our fingertips, as we sat in the hall, our backs pressed against the wall, waiting.
the door opened, eyes swollen, her body still shaking, wrapped in a green towel, my sister made her way to the couch, leaving hundreds of twitching ants drifting toward the metal drain.
the tree house is long gone now, the stones haunt some rubbish pile, and in their place grow yellow daffodils. the warmth of my coffee cup leaks into my fingers as i watch spring unfold, knowing the ants find each of us at times and at first glance we may seem crazy, until someone stops to care.
this is a Theme Thursday post and a much belated Magpie.
Wednesday, March 31, 2010
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Oh my God, this scared me! Ridiculously perfect. The end gave me goosebumps of the 'that's so good' kind.
The Clean White Page
Best opening line ever!
-Corrie
Hi! Brian,
I must admit I thought that your sister suffered with epilepsy,but after reading this sentence from your post this quote explained it all...
"The door opened, eyes swollen, her body still shaking, wrapped in a green towel, my sister made her way to the couch, leaving hundreds of twitching ants drifting toward the metal drain."
Great descriptive piece~Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-D
Well, I don't blame her. My reaction would be exactly the same and I SHUDDER to think what my daughter would do. She wouldn't go to sleep last night because of a fly. They don't even bite!
Gosh, I wish I'd left it until tomorrow to read this.........
Reminds me of a yellow dress covered, COVERED, in black flies.... fortunately not ants but devastating nevertheless since I was wearing the dress at the time.
Fire ants? Those little critters are fast and painful! Poor Sis!
I'm glad there are yellow daffodils to cheer things up over there.
wow that was creepy lol, welcome back mate hope u had a good rest and well done guessing my movie poem, lol clever man, regards.:)
I love the story Brian, you paint a vivid picture. And you brought me back to springime in my own backyard. In our back corner there was a yellow forsythia.
(I was hoping it was ants, and not a siezure or something!)
Gosh, I thought your sister must have epilepsy, but than goodness it was only ants.
Hey, Magpie's still open until tomorrow, if you want to jump in with this one, Brian.
I, like a few of your other readers, thought that your sister must have been having some kind of seizure. That was good Brian..not for your sister though.
I have an ant story too...it involves my great uncle, up a ladder, collecting mangoes off a mango tree. Whilst up the ladder a nest of green ants falls on him. Let me put it this way...I have never heard so many expletives come from a gentleman's mouth before, I didn't even think he would know of such words. He also did a striptease on my Grandmothers lawn...that was rather scary too!
Welcome back Brian. I hate them ants too.
OMG! At first I started to think about how much I wanted a tree house when I was little, but then I could only think about how traumatized you must have all been by this experience! Gives me goosebumps just thinking about it!
oh its so good to be back! this was the first thing that popped in my mind seeing both the magpie and theme thursday prompt this week. popping around catching up!
I KNEW that was what you were going to say!!! ANTS!!!
Hello,
I am glad that you spring back to blogging with a tale of spring memory. I can picture you sitting on the floor with your back against the wall, and after your sister came out,
leaving hundreds of twitching ants drifting toward the metal drain...
beautiful spring story with theme yellow!
"my heart, backfiring like a rusty muffler, sent goose flesh in waves to the shores of my arms, when i heard her scream.."
that's exactly how I would feel when I hear someone screaming while running...
you have a rich childhood
and that is a blessing!
Happy Thursday Ahead!
the imagery of a boys waiting outside the door with paint drying on their hands...ahhh. You are so gifted.
:)
This reminds me of the first summer we moved to South Carolina and we didn't know about red fire ants. My son built a fort in the woods. The ants crawled in his shorts and bit him everywhere...and I mean EVERYWHERE! It was awful.
I can't even imagine how that must have felt. The daffodils were an interesting trigger for this memory. How scared everyone must have been.
Our yard is a sea of cheerful yellow daffodils and forsythia.No ants just bumblebees celebrating this sunny spring day with me.
vivid, loved it.
Jim
Wow Brian,
Gives new meaning to "ants in your pants". Odd how certain images lead us back to strong images in our subconcious. Lilacs do that for me.
So, how is your sister doing today?
rel
Scary, Brian. I, too, thought first of epilepsy. But those ants are even more chilling!
I felt for her having been attacked by fire ants in the tropics...I really enjoy your writing.
A wonderful ending, Brian. The story was captivating, but with the last lines you gave us much to consider about our sometimes insular lives, and much to be grateful about upon reflection.
Rick
Man, talk about britches giving you twitches! Poor thing. That must have been terrible for her!
Wow, Brad Pitt and 12 Monkeys don't have anything on that! Have a good one!!
Brain,
it was the most peculiar thing we had ever seen, of course this was before we saw brad pitt in 12 monkeys.
Too funny! Loved this :)! Nice to see you back.
I too thought seizure, but understand her screaming if red ants. Those little creatures really sting when they bite.
Those were some nasty ants. I can picture you looking and not knowing what was wrong or what to do.
There's always a reason for insanity if we look for it, huh? Great story. Makes Spring a bit sinister too.
This brought back a horrifying memory of fire ants swarming my legs when I was a kid in Mississipi. I can fully appreciate sister's reaction.
Laughed as you sent me back in time with your imagery. At the time we were so busy getting the ants off of Sissy that we couldn't stand back and see the big picture. Thirty years later the picture is delightful as told through your big brother eyes.
12 Monkeys is actually one of my favorite movies!
I hate ants, especially fire ants!
Funny how reality can be so frightening!
Welcome back my friend to the show that never ends!
Great story, I enjoyed it!
12 monkeys. what a strange movie. i'm still struggling with this week's theme. yellow just makes me think of "don't eat the yellow snow"
otin, it was my wife's choice to go see 12 monkeys when we went in college...i don't let her live it down...and all of her movie choices must be approved first...lol.
I live in Texas and those Fire Ants are horrific....just as bad as scorpions and bees. I HATE ants, God's creatures or not. Them is mean.
most peculiar thing we had ever seen, of course this was before we saw brad pitt in 12 monkeys...
Your prose and that movie are now both seared together in my memory!
I wish I had control over the ants that invade my life. beautiful story. I'm glad your sis is okay1
Your recreation of the whole event makes it seem much more comical then it was and from the outside looking in I'm sure I looked very silly...wonder why I wasn't painting too though? You probably banished me from the project!
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i tried Theme Thursday today,
hope that you like it!
You sure had us frozen in place. Beautiful imagery.
Profound words Brian: "at first glance we may seem crazy, until someone stops to care". True of many of us struggling with inner demons.
Love the way you serve up the lessons out of everyday life!
So nice to see you back online, Brian. {{hugs}}
I thought it was epilepsy you were describing too...
glad she was okay but I am sure still traumatized from the experience!
There are always twists and turns in your stories...I love it.
Welcome back!
Oh, I so hope this isn't a true story! And here I was, looking forward to a good night's sleep. Thanks a lot!
Love the opening line, though. Most everything makes me think of crazy people.
Wonderful post!
Aloha from Hawaii my Friend
Comfort Spiral
Oh my - how terrifying! Such a great description... Were they fire ants?
I hate ants, I have some every Spring and Summer on my driveway and I'm always frighten they will make their way to my house....Hugs
OMG.. your poor sister, Brian.
She must have hurt. Poor girl.
I hate ants.. especially red ones, fire ants.
I love how you compared Brad Pitt ,
12 monkey and your sister's reaction.
Brian... you have such a fun childhood.
Thank you for sharing.
Happy Easter Sunday!
hugs
shakira
well, i love yellow... but i don't like ants... i don't like a lot of insects... :) glad to be reading from your blog again... :)
This so happened to my granddaughter and I put her in the bathtub as well. Very well written Brian. And so vivid.
Hugs
SueAnn
Ants... OK... Good one. Poor girl. And imagine you got Brad Pitt in there too, funny, he never seems to end up in any of my blog posts... I guess I just have to try harder. :) Well done. /Jo.
Brilliant and visual (have I said that before?)
I love your mom's comment. What is your sisters memory.
Well done xx
That's a scary experience - and excellently told.
oops! luckily we don't have fire ants this far north...yet, but I hear they're on the move, them and armadillos.
I have had a similar experience and it is very painful. Those little critters can really bite. Glad your sister was OK.
frightning!
So Much Going On At The Same Time.It's Good To Know When A Lifeguard Is Watching.
Nice memory piece with lots of energy. Great descriptions and details.
Oh, my how traumatic for everyone and I love the lesson that you have now read into it for there is no life without friends.
CC
i like the story telling style here
you have a knack for building suspense and then releasing it in a most startling way. reading here is always a treat!
Welcome back my friend. Nice re-entry. Funny and scary story with a nice message.
Having nine brothers I'm surprised there was never a treehouse in our past. But, I do recall one episode when a group of them got into a patch of fire ants while on vacation one summer.
Your story certainly brought that event back to life in vivid color.
Brian, you certainly have the gift of storytelling. I always enjoy my visits to your site.
Thanks for the vote on my yellow door.
Oh to have the skin thick enough where even the ants break their pincers on it. That is my goal, to sit in with the fire ants and see who can hurt the other the most.
Wow, such a horrible memory. So well visualized, and so, well described. Yikes. -J
Poor thing....how traumatic!! You paint a very clear picture of the incident...but I think I'll try to focus on the daffodils....wow!
So well told ... I hope your sister has other - fonder - memories of the treehouse =-)
yikes....
'backfiring like a rusty muffler' - priceless turn of phrase
happy TT
that is a horrible story. your poor sister. ugh, ants, ugh.
Oh My!!
You got me, first I thought she fell on the rebar and then I thought she was having a seizure, I was greatly relieved it was ants! My daughter sat on a pile on ants once, not a pretty sight.
Yikes! I was really worried for your poor little sister.
My aunt came over once and I had the same reaction...
I've been through this with my own little girl!
Good heavens you are such a great writer. LOVE this!
what i love about your writing Brian is the way you weave a story. small details painted vividly, an occurance that sends your heart pounding, then the conclusion--awhhhh, but it doesn't end there. you've tucked inside your weave something much deeper, this time you disclosed it, sometimes you don't. i have no doubt you are one of the special ones who cares enough to dig a little deeper for the true discovery.
happy Easter,
Happy Thursday. Happy April!
beautiful story from a beautiful writer!
cheers!
Very cool post. The message is clear to me, wish it was to most folk!
:)
gah! I was bit by ONE ant once, I can't imagine hundreds. I would be scared to step outside every again! Great job creating an emotional response from all your readers.
I really enjoyed this, although, I was a bit scared for your sister at first! Well done1
I really enjoyed this, although, I was a bit scared for your sister at first! Well done1
That was so wonderfully written. I love the last line. Perfect.
I thought it was going to be bees!
This was perfect. You write wonderfully.
Oh yeah! You're back and better than ever!
I was attacked by ants when I was very little. I used to dream that a man would come into my room with a basket of red ants and he'd try to put them in my ears at night so all of my childhood I slept with the covers over my ears.
I told my mom about the dreams when I was about 21 and she told me about the ant attack when I was a toddler and I never had the dreams again.
I'm glad you're back. I missed your posts!
Wonderful. What great ebb and flow to a story.
Love your story telling. Working with children I can't tell you how many times I have heard that shame shriek
GEM...now that is creepy...i think i will lock the deadbolt tonight...lol. yeah its great to be back!
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I found you listed on Jingle's page. We have never met, but I am here to congratulate you and to say that I your blog here is awesome. Well done indeed. I also write a few things and if you get time I invite you to read my page. Best wishes, Brian. I would like to add you to my blogroll but want to know if this is ok with you? :)
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That was good and creepy! I must be the only one who didn't think of epilepsy, though.
now I'm itching...great read!
This was scary. I love your anecdotes that even evolve as poetry. It must have been very painful to your sister. Good that your parents were there at that time.
Good to see you back with your great stories and verses.
Scary stuff as a kid to watch that kind of thing happen. And so reasuring to know parents know just what to do.
what a great childhood memory (well for you, not for your sister).
Reminds me of my neighbour's treehouse...inspiration for a post maybe ;)
Poor kid. I thought for a moment she'd fallen or had an epileptic fit or something. Nicely written Brian.
Poor little one...that happened to my niece at the beach when she was around 3. It's terrible!
Oh man, now I feel slightly itchy.
jj
eeek, what a vivid scary memory, yes poor kid - and poor you too waiting and wondering.
What a horrible situation that must have been for all of you but what a fine message.
Hi, Brian:
how is your evening?
letting you know that you can nominate up to 15 poets, I said once, referring to 15 different poets, you know what I mean...
thank you for the patience and attention.
hope that you have a relaxing evening,
tired, but happy, which is cool.
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