Saturday, March 6, 2010

10DOM: Corruption of Evidence

drip
drip
she lets it slip
around the edge
of her coffee cup
to trickle in his ear
and fill him with fear
of the greatest monster of all,
dad.

drip
drip
it slowly takes grip
hatching maggots
in all of his stories
of times they shared
that he never even cared
until no hope at all has
dad.

relationship busted
all evidence corrupted
around the edge
of her coffee cup
it slips,
her wicked smile drips
drip
drip...

This was written for the Tenth Daughter of Memory. A true tale of the slow poisoning of a little boys mind.

76 comments:

Bonnie, Original Art Studio said...

Oooooh - creepy, terrifying what parents can do to an innocent child.

Tom said...

yikes, Bri. Creepy is right.

Titanium said...

Parents who destroy instead of nurturing are the essence of Evil.

Lisa said...

It truly is sad that adults can be so insecure as to destroy love and relationships of others, based solely on fear or self-loathing.

I cannot stand my X but I lie, lie, lie like the dickens to my Macs about how I feel for him. Just because he is an asshat to me, I won't be the one to destroy a connection between father and son.

Very sad....

Ronda Laveen said...

Very well portrayed...and scary insight.

Ronda Laveen said...

@Lisa: I love the word "asshat." Don't the say to take a new word and use it as often and as in an ways as you can? My new word for the week.

Poetikat said...

This is one of your best, Brian. It really tells it like it is. I love that "lets it slip around the edge of her coffee cup..." Really well done.

Kat

Poetikat said...

I just got a pop=up notifying me you're on MY blog!

Kat

secret agent woman said...

Chilling.

Tabor said...

This is such a significant post and should be a poetry example in junior high school!

Bernie said...

Sad and yes creepy at the same time. Never ceases to amaze me how some parents are so loving and others are so cruel.....:-) Hugs

william said...

yes this ran shivers down my spine, but as always u painted a very real picture, well done Brian a great post :)

She Writes said...

Brian,

Have I mentioned you rock! You did it :). And I'm glad you did. I think we need to see a darker side in your writing. I'm with Tom, this has an edge of creepy to it!

jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com said...

it looks like there are two distinct takes among your accidence, it depends on how people feel at the moment!

energy, action, power are full of your page...very stunning poem!

jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com said...

I hope that you have a great evening, Brian.
your positive attitude, kind comments, multi-talented writing skills, and open mindedness to embrace people of all races and colors are priceless to me and to your followers...keep up your excellence in blogging and touching lives...
You Are The Greatest!

jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com said...

Happy Weekend!
The sun is shining,
The air is fresh,
Best regards.

Little Ms Blogger said...

This was incredibly sad because I can imagine the damage would get worse as the years went on.

Daniel said...

I do my best to stay clear of this from the other side of the cup, if you know what I mean. Hope you had an awesome day brother. Blessings to you.

Susan said...

Very well written piece about a very terrible topic. Is this a new meme? And how do I get a ride on this gravy train? :)

Green-Eyed Momster said...

How sad. I had no idea.

Who could do that?

5thsister said...

unfortunately this happens way too often. very sad. very well written, too!

masterymistery said...

Disturbing and thought provoking. Rings true with some aspects of my personal experience

masterymistery at cosmic rapture

dusty said...

this one sounds like it would be the chalkboard skreeech to somebody out there, but it was your previous post that gave me that feelin.

both nice posts though, you should hear some of the music released by the band Assembly of Dust. It's stuff like that that makes me ponder whether y not I'm nuts.

Magpie said...

It's scary and obviously sometimes sad how much power parents can have in a child's life.

Cop Mama said...

One word stands out - maggots. Strong connotation, powerful hatred is what I hear.

Can I ask...memoir? If so, that sucks...either way, I feel sorry for that little boy.

Tracy said...

Whoa, Brian. Very dark. Doesn't mean it isn't good though! Beautiful.

Dorraine said...

Slipping and dripping-the words just sound sinister, especially the way you used them to tell the story. Well done!

slommler said...

Totally creepy and evil!! Ack!!
Hugs
SueAnn

Vodka Logic said...

Not sure I get this one.

Felicitas said...

How terribly sad that any parent would deliberately wreak such devastation on a child they supposedly love. (But you wrote it brilliantly!)

Ocean Girl said...

No.

JeffScape said...

Hmm...

jaymiethorne said...

dripping into my thoughts and difficult to shake...

ladyfi said...

OH no... that's terrible!

Valerie said...

Very well done. My goodness, Brian, I went creepily cold reading this. How different are parents!

Betty Manousos:cutand-dry.blogspot.com said...

It 's so sad, oh, I can imagine how terrifying is what parents/parent can do to a child. How could we stop this? I wonder..
First time here. I am now following you.
I love the honesty of your site.
Hope you have a great Sunday! :)

Dot-Com said...

Scary stuff, how the power of parents can destroy. Loved the style!

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

Very smart, Brian.
Very frightening too.

Have you a great Sunday.

hugs
shakira

Brian Miller said...

this one was a bit creepy. easy for me to go there when i am describing the work that i do. figured this would not be a popular one as it strikes a nerve. easy to go there. for more info, you can look up parental alienation...

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

Brian,

Something is wrong with your link
at Theme Thursday, just to let you know.

hugs
shakira

Adoption of Jane said...

Great Sad Poem!

Vodka Logic said...

I have something for you on my blog. :)

BLOGitse said...

slow poisoning...cruel.
But have a good week ahead anyway!

BLOGitsePHOTOS

Alix said...

Reminds me of some folks I know very well. Sad, really.

otin said...

I can relate to this. My Mother would always trash my father when I was a kid. I don't think that she did it on purpose, or maybe she did. I never really let it get to me, though.

The Retired One said...

This is sooooo delightfully dark.

Protege said...

It was sad and unsettling.
I always admire the fact that you touch upon all aspects of life; both the good and the bad.
Have a lovely Sunday,
xo
Zuzana

lakeviewer said...

Ugh! Ugly deed!

buffalodick said...

A lot of people never should have had children...

THE BEATY said...

wow gave me chills... awsome

TechnoBabe said...

Adults use children in all sorts of ways. Mind control is one way. This happens very often unfortunately. You did a nice job writing about it and getting people to discuss it. We need more people to be aware of all the horrible things happening to children.

Kim A. said...

I have two boys..this one hit home...

namaste

ilovepink1078 said...

Terrible!

I really appreciate your work and please understand. I'm still learning and period of adjustment to get acquainted with this kind of tasks.

Hope you can spend time with me.

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Mama Wheaton said...

I forget how much power I have with my words, thank you for the reminder.

Jannie Funster said...

Whoa, powerful. This one will for sure stay with me.

subby said...

Dang! Was that eeeeeeeerie!

Maggie May said...

That is creepy. Hope it isn't true.

Nuts in May

Christina said...

hey there!
amazing, amazing words. deep and haunting.
: )

Ariel said...

This is very sad. Even I've heard similar stories. Does this come out of possessiveness or sheer wickedness?

Marla said...

Well done, Brian

Baino said...

Hmm I've tried the 'drip drip' thing to try to get my own son to keep his room tidy . . .didn't work. I was lucky . . only good things were ever whispered in my ear!

Madame DeFarge said...

Very Shakespearean. And very unnerving.

Mrs4444 said...

Wow. That's powerful. What a gift, the ability to say so much in so few words.

blueviolet said...

That was just downright depressing. :(

Unknown Mami said...

Oh, no! That's so upsetting. I did not grow up with my father and do not really know him. My mother has many faults, but she never said anything bad about him to me. She says, "Why would I speak poorly of him, I'm the one who chose him."

JML said...

That is creepy and well done. I'm looking at the link to figure the rest out in a minute. . . .

sheila said...

Oooo, that's good. But the mere mention of maggots makes me feel like vomiting.

Goofball said...

:(

PattiKen said...

Very creepy, and so sad. Parents who put their own need to be "right" above their childrens well-being are so not qualified to be parents.

Who Is Afraid of Tim Burton? Two?... said...

Hi! Brian,
Wow...that is very sad the "poisoning" of a small child mind.
Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-(

The girl with the flour in her hair said...

Disturbing.

hvninhell said...

Unfortunate commentary on today's society and the people's inability to think beyond their own ego's. Nice!

C said...

Again... very eerie...

Corrie Howe said...

This kind of poison always breaks my heart. We have two separations in our church right now. One is doing the best not to talk negatively about spouse. Kids turned against this parent, even though it was the poisoning one who started an adulterous affair. And the other one seems to be the innocent party, but in reality probably drove the other away and will possibly drive children away if poison doesn't stop.

Sad.

Nessa said...

The little bit of rhyme adds such a sinister edge.

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