Wednesday, February 10, 2010

Theme Thursday: Mirror

i watch as she
pulls a silver backed brush
through the knots in her hair
making them smooth,
like her mother taught her,
wishing she could do the same
with her life,
filled with knots
slipping tighter
each time she pulls
and while she talks
i do not speak, only listen
because i have seen
all she has to share
and can only reflect,
on her, truth as i see it,
no matter how much
she wishes to break me.

if i could talk
it would only be
superficial anyway,
but what do expect
when you talk to mirrors?

For more take on the theme, go see my friends at Theme Thursday.

117 comments:

Just Be Real said...

Brian, wonderful post. Thank you for sharing. Blessings.

Captain Dumbass said...

Nice. If I didn't shave my head I could use that knot analogy.

CottageGirl said...

Honestly ...
Your writing takes my breath away!

Leah said...

Really well-written, Brian.

William Manson © 2010 said...

excellent again Brian wow 2 posts in the one day cant keep up with you lol, good signs of a great writer :)

Wings said...

Many ways to take this one. At least, to me.

Ms Hen said...

You are on a roll... another spectacular one...

This was very very unique.. I'm totally totally impressed.

(but don't get conceited... ) In Al-anon we have to work on our Egos.. lol.

I don't get conceited..but thank god for your talents.. you are a true writer.

(hugs)

willow said...

If only we could untangle the knots in our lives with a hair brush.

Kris said...

I try not to talk to mirrors. They get lippy.

Beth said...

I wish sorting out lives could be so easy. Great writing here!

TechnoBabe said...

I was not able to look at myself in a mirror until this past year. To be free now to see myself and to be content with myself is true freedom. I think I could even speak to the person in the mirror now. This is a quiet writing with an undercurrent of much depth.

Cabo said...

All those knots. Indeed. Nice, Chivato. :)

5thsister said...

Why aren't you published?

mama-face said...

Seems very romantic...

Susan said...
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Susan said...

Brian, can I please have your permission to post this on my page? I know someone who needs to see this. Let me know. Thanks! (Of course, I'll give appropriate credit to you with a link back to your blog).

This was a fantastic piece. You blow me away every time.

Ronda Laveen said...

Great reversal! Only have to be worried when the mirror talks back.

Poetikat said...

The use of the tangled hair as a metaphor is a fine one, Brian.
I really enjoyed this.

Jaime said...

that was great. don't think anyone will be having any nightmares looking into YOUR mirror here...

secret agent woman said...

Nice. Reminds me of a line from an Indigo Girls song: "Like brushing cloth, I smooth the wrinkles for an answer."

tori said...

very good Brian!

Alix said...

Lovely Brian. Knots made smooth. Gotta love when it works that way.

By the way... when I talk to mirrors I want to know who's the fairest of them - knots and all.

Marla said...

How do you do it Brian? Hit a grand slam every time? This one read my mind.

Monkey Man said...

Masterful. You are a joy to read, my friend.

The Retired One said...

Mirror, mirror...
on the wall.
Who's the KNOTTIEST of them all?

Devika said...

Sounds the hard life of an young girl lost in herself....nicely written, Brian :)

wishes,
devika

Bernie said...

We all have knots and some of them just need a hairbrush but others really needs to be understood...Hugs

e said...

Wonderful, Brian...As someone who has a few knots herself, this really hit home. Happy TT!

Matty said...

"I can only reflect on her"..... perfect for the theme.

lakeviewer said...

You watch and you reflect her needs. It's enough. Words are not necessary.

Beautiful writing here.

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Mama Wheaton said...

Another great read! Wonderfully written.

Magpie said...

What a wonderful viewpoint...the mirror itself. You have such a unique way of looking at life and expressing yourself. Another beautiful post.

Christina said...

With so many hairbrushes in my house, you'd think I'd have less knots.

Love this one, Brian!

Jill said...

A knot or two left behind after brushing is not all bad...builds character.

Eternally Distracted said...

Stop writing so often Mister - I can't keep up and you are too bloody clever!! Great :)

Little Ms Blogger said...

Nice twist having the mirror as the narrator of the story.

JML said...

I'm convinced that you're a bloody genius.

"wishing she could do the same
with her life,
filled with knots"

Who can't relate to that?

Mr. Stupid said...

That was a wonderful post. Very well written...
Smiles...:)

Kim A. said...

I like the picture I see when I read this one.

Namaste

Alan Burnett said...

That is good
In fact, Brian, it is very good.
Well written, well said, well posted.

Protege said...

I really loved this one. But then I always love your analogies.
Great take on a theme.;)
xo
Zuzana

Tom said...

ha ha! Great hook. I never liked the funny looks I get from my mirror.

tony said...

Ah ,Silent Mirrors Are Something We Should Reflect Upon.Great Writing Brian.

imbeingheldhostage said...

Wonderful. Love this!

Who Is Tim Burton? said...

Hi! Brian,
Nice "reflective" post...which is very well
written. Once again...Thanks,
for sharing and Happy TT...
DeeDee ;-D

Peter Stone said...

Loved it, especially how the mirror has seen all she has to share, can only reflect the truth as the mirror sees it. And how she wants to break the mirror for what she sees in it.

Valerie said...

Heehee my mirror talks back, only trouble is it never says anything I want to hear. Great piece of writing, Brian.

anthonynorth said...

Wonderfully done. I'm told my mirror lies, but if I look in another, it says the same.

slommler said...

Beautifully written Brian!! Very moving!
Hugs
SueAnn

Datsme said...

This was wonderful indeed. I especially liked the ending.
Thanks for sharing :)

LadyFi said...

Wonderful - with a twist that made me smile.

otin said...

had me captivated to the point that I forgot the theme was mirror until the end!

Daniel said...

I sometimes think it should be easy to convince the reflection of my plans, to get him to look past my faults and shortcomings. I am proven wrong, time and again.

Goofball said...

I love that knot analogy. did you ever have long hair that was tangled badly?

Monica said...

Oh I really liked this one. Good stuff.

Jasmine said...

Another powerful poem. You need to collate your work into a book Brian :)

Harnett-Hargrove said...

Interesting, thoughtful, visual analogy. -Jayne

the walking man said...

It is a well thing I learned early on that my image cracks mirrors and now I seek the eyes of another to reflect back to me what i need to hear.

Corrie Howe said...

Once again, you throw in a twist. I tried my hand at 55 on my Thursday Tackle posting later today.

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

Wonderful wonderful post! I love this theme!

Amy said...

wonderful post. Have a great day. Thanks for stopping by I hope you come again. If you want to write a love poem tomorrow I am host my Round Robin..

Sam!! said...

Lovely post Brian.. :)

Take care

jingle said...

This is the way a good man shall treat a good woman, he adores her, but writes something poetic for her instead of talking to her directly and loudly, wow,
beautiful love or passion!

a classical from a talented writer.

Barbara said...

If only brushing could take care of all the knots in our lives....

Travel & Dive Girl said...

Very nice post. What else is there to say? Have a great day!

Susan said...

Brian -It goes up at 11:oo A.M. Thank you for allowing me to post it. Let me know what you think of what I wrote up above it when it posts. You rock man!

She Writes said...

Brian, nice take on this theme.

croneandbearit said...

simply lovely.

Rebecca said...

You never cease to amaze me with your talent! This is so clever and poignant on many levels. Wow! I loved it! :)

Happy TT

järnebrand said...

Many levels there. Nice one! :)

Dreamhaven said...

Once upon a mirror bright,
I came upon a scary sight.
The image that I'd thought I'd see
Wasn't there, it was just me.

Kat said...

oh so wonderful!! Great take on the theme this week. :)

Stephanie said...

Brian, that's beautiful!

Nanc Twop said...

You're very observant.
Thanks for writing it. :)

VE said...

Whew...I cracked the top 100 comments...

Another sublime imagery with the knot analogy...

Meeko Fabulous said...

Such an interesting perspective on what we each truly see in the mirror when we look at ourselves! :)

Jen Chandler said...

I like this. Mirrors have always enchanted me :)

Jen

Scobberlotcher said...

Vary nice! I didn't know about Theme Thursday. I might have to join in. Thanks for commenting on my blog!

California Girl said...

you do not disappoint.

Green-Eyed Momster said...

I love this post! I have thought about getting rid of all the mirrors in my house because the older I get the more important I think it is to pay attention to how I feel and not so much how I look.

Sometimes I wish my mirrors would lie to me though...(joking!)

Smiles!

studioJudith said...

Memories of "silver backed brushes" and
dressing tables
and
ladies who seemingly have
no issues.

Merci,
Judith

Deb said...

As always, your words have caused me to stop and 'reflect'. And I will echo the comments of others ~ why aren't you published ? Take care.

Janice said...

Since I have had many conversations with my mirror, I really related to this one and liked it very much.

LadyCat said...

Knots in hair hurt to untangle. Life's knots can be the same. Great job, Brian!

JennyMac said...

Gorgeous writing Brian!

blueviolet said...

Loved your take on the theme, Brian!

subby said...

Oh that was just too good!

Baino said...

Lovely as usual. I've given up brushing my hair . . perhaps thats why my life is so 'knotty'. Great imagery as always.

jaymiethorne said...

An aha moment!

Sassy Chica said...

Wow, that was beautiful!

Smooches,
Sassy Chica

sunshineontheseweretop said...

Love the hidden metaphors. I can see her.
Thanks for sharing.

doubtfulpoet said...

Amazing, I'm learning but have a way to go! Thanks Brian, for sharing and teaching and being generally supportive of newbiesxx

Betsy said...

Brian, how did you become so wise at such a young age? :)

ShAKirA CHOONG said...

Dearest Brian,
I love this, as usual .
This is so funny and wonderful to read.
Congratulations!
love it!
hugs
shakira

sam said...

I like the post. Our hearts could be like a mirror, reflecting the reality outside

sam said...

Our mind could be like a mirror too, reflecting our view of reality

buffalodick said...

I liked this one a lot..

Terrace Crawford said...

You certainly have a knack for this... great writing!

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PropellerHeadMom said...

Very nice! I don't like knots.

Gerardine Baugh said...

Brian,
How smooth this flowed, I could see the "silver backed brush"
Beautiful!
Gerardine

Kelsey said...

Sweet! I love the zinger at the end.

Mighty M said...

Wonderful read.

Nancy said...

Good one!

Titanium said...

Flat-out knock out.

Thank you.

rxBambi said...

very nice take on it. No one even died :)

Lou said...

This was poignant. Don't we all just wish the mirror would lie sometimes.

Mrsupole said...

I think this goes into the category of "If these walls could talk.", only it is the mirror. This is a great switcheroo and possibly better because people probably pay more attention to mirrors than to walls. Well at least they pay more attention to what they see in a mirror.

Great job as usual.

God bless.

C.M. Jackson said...

Brian--talking to mirrors--an image lost in time--a woman sitting before a mirror brushing her hair talking as she brushes--looking into the mirror looking at you..conversations a mother had with her son? poignant. very well done. Happy TT-c

Alix said...

Whoopsies. I see the doghouse in some poor guy's future.

Pat said...

Wow - I totally wasn't expecting you to personify the mirror. Great job with this one!

JeffScape said...

I expect my mirror to agree with me... only backwards.

Nessa said...

A bit of fairy tale reality.

Flash 55 - Priorities

Flash 55 - So Sorry

Tammy said...

I like very much.

Candie Bracci said...

WOW!That was a long time I didn't say that word to you!;)

Ariel said...

'Wish she could smoothen her entangled life' so true and how well you've related it?Enjoyed reading this.
Thank you for visiting ariel.

Kiera said...

Brilliant writing. can't wait to read more!