cold steel cranks around my wrist, pinching at the hinge and i can't help but smile. i always wondered what this was like, as the blue man group leads me away.
brushed concrete floors clap to the tune of steel toed boots as we march back and forth, truck to shelf, unloading the cargo. furniture. baby seats. clothes. box after box. after box.
jewelry and electronics go into lock-up, up the freight elevator, clang, clang, clanging as it rises into the darkness between floors. little white button on the wire mesh cage...buzzzzzzz...i have today's shipment to unload.
this is where he makes the deal, in hushed voices, out of sight of preying rotating eyes mounted high in the corner. they will never know what hit them. his eyes hit me with the left hook of seriousness.
how did he come up with the idea? are you sure you did not just get cold feet? what do you hope to get out of telling us this? white walls seem so cliche, like they watched one too many cop shows, before they decorated the interrogation room. shiny gold badges delight in my confessions.
here is how it will go down...stale coffee breath lays out his plan.
rubbing red ringed wrists, i watch him lay out the story in his own little white room, pushing stick pins through my wings like a butterfly for his transgressions. little does he know, they heard me story last week, before he ever hatched his plan.
i was the inside man.
Monday, February 1, 2010
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I knew it was you....
Guilty!
ah ha! Brian, that stale coffee breath line caught me. Ew, hate the smell!
Sneaky!
I thought it was YOU ..............
LOL
Ah yes the inside man. But he better beware the fleeting glances and oh so subtle spies who were previously just co-workers.
Rabbit, Rabbit
Oh, no a double agent. Or is it triple?
The minute you 'can't help by smile' gave us the line to hang on, connect with the 'inside man'.
Good story, all around, layered like a box on a box.
I don't like the sound of this stale coffee breath.
Ahhhh . . . The plot thickens . . . LoL! :)
hahha good one Brian, had me there mate, great story..well written as always..
Preying eyes...great imagery. No pun intended.
Tricky...
um? Your writing is always mysterious for me.
Chivato!
I'm a little lost on this one (shamefully hanging my head). Are you the good guy or the bad guy? Help a girl out...
Sounds shifty to me?! I don't think things will work out well.
Hugs
SueAnn
bambi - i made it a bit twisty. i was actually around 17 when another dock worker approached me about joining his theft ring. i became the inside man that led to the eventual bust.
cabo - like the rat that runs across the screen at the end of the movie...i was a good guy a couple times in my teens, right?
Very cool.
Now this was an experience, a real inside job.....well done..:-) Hugs
"rubbing red ringed wrists, i watch him lay out the story in his own little white room, pushing stick pins through my wings like a butterfly for his transgressions. little does he know, they heard me story last week, before he ever hatched his plan.
i was the inside man."
Quite honestly this is my favorite piece by you yet. That line "pushing stick pins through my wings for his transgressions" is so powerful. Wow. You blew me away with this! I only wish it had come from my imagination. Stunning. Just stunning!
thanks susan...blushing now. lol.
just an fyi (totally unrelated)...mom had to go back to the hospital for her leg. tingling, they had to remove the cast and put a larger brace on. will know more soon, but thanks for the thoughts!
Devious.....
suprises with each post. Good job.
I was a little bit lost also but I read the comments and I get it now. Yay for catching bad guys!
Yay for you!
Big hugs for your mom!
Had to read the comments to get it. I'm a little bleary-eyed this evening.
Will be thinking of your mom. Keep us posted.
Oh Snap. . . no one would have ever guessed!
Brian ~ You are an amazing writer. I believe this comes from being an amazing human being. Well done!
I thought stale coffee breath was a nice touch too.
Guilty, Guilty, Guilty!!
... and stale coffee breath reminds me of teachers!
To bad for the sucka face!
The inside man.
It reminds me of "The Inside Job". But out of context here.;)
I love the way you use words, it is very inspirational.
xo
Zuzana
Funny! When my uncle worked for the DEA, he wanted to set me up as the decoy. I just couldn't do it.
As always....great twisty post!
ooo good one Brian...love coffee breath, well as long as it's mine ;)
Just when I thought I knew you:)
"his eyes hit me with the left hook of seriousness" that line hit me! good stuff.
I knew that.Well written as usual.Have a nice day :)
Always check for wires. Read the news of Detroit for the past year, the pols are all starting to feel the fed heat and the inside man is my personal hero.
I like :) Great concept!
"To thine own self be true." You snuck in a little lesson there, I believe, Brian.
Wonder what the real story is being this post. Every time you open up another chapter from your past, I shake my head. You have lived so much more than I have and I am much older than you.
Is this law and order?? LOL
I love the little sneaky thing!
You have been all about variety lately. I was on my way here last night and then my phone kept ringing!
Wonderful imagery and great twist.
thanks for the warning, heee heee heee
I wonder what you've not yet experience in your life!?
All best wishes for your mom!
Interesting way of writing. :) Enjoyed reading it. :)
"His eyes hit me with the left hook of seriousness."
That is seriously cool.
I agree with mama zen. The left hook of seriousness was an awesome line. It sounds so much more eloquent than the stink eye.
This was captivating! Thanks for sharing.
I have to admit...of all the crazy things I've done and gotten away with (and there are many) I haven't been in jail. You got me there...
do U have fun sharing a piece of your
past?
it is hard to be perfect for good,
it is easy to be perfect once in a while, you are perfect comedy writer when you write your blog...
have an awesome day.
Nice...insider story :)
xoxo
Inside is a powerful place to be...
That was remarkable!
Hey - I really like this. Short and not sweet. Very well done.
Good grief, Brian, how do you do this? When all the pieces fell into place, especially the butterfly analogy and the last line - well, it's simply fantastic.
Lol hello inside man! Loved it!
Wow. Thrilling read. Thanks for stopping by my blog.
Snnneeeeeaky.
Hope your mom is ok.
After I read your poems like this one I love to read the comments and see what others think it means or to have you shed some light on it. Then go back and savor it again. thanks Brian!
Your writing is fantastic i must say !! Your words are really nice to read !!
You string words together like a beautiful necklace.
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