Monday, February 1, 2010

inside man

cold steel cranks around my wrist, pinching at the hinge and i can't help but smile. i always wondered what this was like, as the blue man group leads me away.

brushed concrete floors clap to the tune of steel toed boots as we march back and forth, truck to shelf, unloading the cargo. furniture. baby seats. clothes. box after box. after box.

jewelry and electronics go into lock-up, up the freight elevator, clang, clang, clanging as it rises into the darkness between floors. little white button on the wire mesh cage...buzzzzzzz...i have today's shipment to unload.

this is where he makes the deal, in hushed voices, out of sight of preying rotating eyes mounted high in the corner. they will never know what hit them. his eyes hit me with the left hook of seriousness.

how did he come up with the idea? are you sure you did not just get cold feet? what do you hope to get out of telling us this? white walls seem so cliche, like they watched one too many cop shows, before they decorated the interrogation room. shiny gold badges delight in my confessions.

here is how it will go down...stale coffee breath lays out his plan.

rubbing red ringed wrists, i watch him lay out the story in his own little white room, pushing stick pins through my wings like a butterfly for his transgressions. little does he know, they heard me story last week, before he ever hatched his plan.

i was the inside man.

65 comments:

♥ Braja said...

I knew it was you....

Grand Pooba said...

Guilty!

She Writes said...

ah ha! Brian, that stale coffee breath line caught me. Ew, hate the smell!

AmyLK said...

Sneaky!

Anya said...

I thought it was YOU ..............
LOL

TechnoBabe said...

Ah yes the inside man. But he better beware the fleeting glances and oh so subtle spies who were previously just co-workers.

Nessa said...

Rabbit, Rabbit

Oh, no a double agent. Or is it triple?

lakeviewer said...

The minute you 'can't help by smile' gave us the line to hang on, connect with the 'inside man'.

Good story, all around, layered like a box on a box.

willow said...

I don't like the sound of this stale coffee breath.

Meeko Fabulous said...

Ahhhh . . . The plot thickens . . . LoL! :)

William Manson © 2010 said...

hahha good one Brian, had me there mate, great story..well written as always..

mama-face said...

Preying eyes...great imagery. No pun intended.

Wings said...

Tricky...

Corrie Howe said...

um? Your writing is always mysterious for me.

Cabo said...

Chivato!

rxBambi said...

I'm a little lost on this one (shamefully hanging my head). Are you the good guy or the bad guy? Help a girl out...

slommler said...

Sounds shifty to me?! I don't think things will work out well.
Hugs
SueAnn

Brian Miller said...

bambi - i made it a bit twisty. i was actually around 17 when another dock worker approached me about joining his theft ring. i became the inside man that led to the eventual bust.

Brian Miller said...

cabo - like the rat that runs across the screen at the end of the movie...i was a good guy a couple times in my teens, right?

Nancy said...

Very cool.

Bernie said...

Now this was an experience, a real inside job.....well done..:-) Hugs

Susan said...

"rubbing red ringed wrists, i watch him lay out the story in his own little white room, pushing stick pins through my wings like a butterfly for his transgressions. little does he know, they heard me story last week, before he ever hatched his plan.

i was the inside man."

Quite honestly this is my favorite piece by you yet. That line "pushing stick pins through my wings for his transgressions" is so powerful. Wow. You blew me away with this! I only wish it had come from my imagination. Stunning. Just stunning!

Brian Miller said...

thanks susan...blushing now. lol.

just an fyi (totally unrelated)...mom had to go back to the hospital for her leg. tingling, they had to remove the cast and put a larger brace on. will know more soon, but thanks for the thoughts!

Kathy's Klothesline said...

Devious.....

Her Majesty Lisa (LadyWanderlust) said...

suprises with each post. Good job.

Green-Eyed Momster said...

I was a little bit lost also but I read the comments and I get it now. Yay for catching bad guys!

Yay for you!

Green-Eyed Momster said...

Big hugs for your mom!

Tracie said...

Had to read the comments to get it. I'm a little bleary-eyed this evening.

Will be thinking of your mom. Keep us posted.

Pastor Sharon said...

Oh Snap. . . no one would have ever guessed!

Marla said...

Brian ~ You are an amazing writer. I believe this comes from being an amazing human being. Well done!

tattytiara said...

I thought stale coffee breath was a nice touch too.

Eternally Distracted said...

Guilty, Guilty, Guilty!!

... and stale coffee breath reminds me of teachers!

Ronda Laveen said...

To bad for the sucka face!

Protege said...

The inside man.
It reminds me of "The Inside Job". But out of context here.;)
I love the way you use words, it is very inspirational.
xo
Zuzana

Beth said...

Funny! When my uncle worked for the DEA, he wanted to set me up as the decoy. I just couldn't do it.

sheila said...

As always....great twisty post!

Lorraine said...

ooo good one Brian...love coffee breath, well as long as it's mine ;)

Ocean Girl said...

Just when I thought I knew you:)

Tabor said...

"his eyes hit me with the left hook of seriousness" that line hit me! good stuff.

Candie Bracci said...

I knew that.Well written as usual.Have a nice day :)

the walking man said...

Always check for wires. Read the news of Detroit for the past year, the pols are all starting to feel the fed heat and the inside man is my personal hero.

JStar said...

I like :) Great concept!

Lou said...

"To thine own self be true." You snuck in a little lesson there, I believe, Brian.

Daniel said...

Wonder what the real story is being this post. Every time you open up another chapter from your past, I shake my head. You have lived so much more than I have and I am much older than you.

otin said...

Is this law and order?? LOL

I love the little sneaky thing!

You have been all about variety lately. I was on my way here last night and then my phone kept ringing!

jaymiethorne said...

Wonderful imagery and great twist.

Shadow said...

thanks for the warning, heee heee heee

Goofball said...

I wonder what you've not yet experience in your life!?


All best wishes for your mom!

Chandrika Shubham said...

Interesting way of writing. :) Enjoyed reading it. :)

Mama Zen said...

"His eyes hit me with the left hook of seriousness."

That is seriously cool.

Otter Thomas said...

I agree with mama zen. The left hook of seriousness was an awesome line. It sounds so much more eloquent than the stink eye.

Elana Johnson said...

This was captivating! Thanks for sharing.

VE said...

I have to admit...of all the crazy things I've done and gotten away with (and there are many) I haven't been in jail. You got me there...

jingle said...

do U have fun sharing a piece of your
past?

it is hard to be perfect for good,
it is easy to be perfect once in a while, you are perfect comedy writer when you write your blog...

have an awesome day.

Marianna said...

Nice...insider story :)

xoxo

buffalodick said...

Inside is a powerful place to be...

Maha said...

That was remarkable!

Medora said...

Hey - I really like this. Short and not sweet. Very well done.

Peter Stone said...

Good grief, Brian, how do you do this? When all the pieces fell into place, especially the butterfly analogy and the last line - well, it's simply fantastic.

Bethan said...

Lol hello inside man! Loved it!

Yousei Hime said...

Wow. Thrilling read. Thanks for stopping by my blog.

only a movie said...

Snnneeeeeaky.
Hope your mom is ok.

tori said...

After I read your poems like this one I love to read the comments and see what others think it means or to have you shed some light on it. Then go back and savor it again. thanks Brian!

Unseen Rajasthan said...

Your writing is fantastic i must say !! Your words are really nice to read !!

Pat said...

You string words together like a beautiful necklace.