Sunday, February 14, 2010

160 - isolation ward

fingers probe
the lock, learning
its contours
here in this
cold concrete room
wondering if i locked
everyone out or
myself in?

alone

scared

angry

then you
walk in.


What can you say in 160 characters (spaces included). Go see Monkey Man.

Happy Valentine's Day everyone! Love met me when I least expected it. May it find you today.

94 comments:

ShAKirA CHOONG said...

Dearest Brian,

I really like this, happy ending!
Love the scenario.

LOVE found me too when I least expected it.
Isn't that WONDROUS !

Again, HAPPY VALENTINE'S DAY!
Both of you are so blessed to have each other.

hugs
shakira

Candie Bracci said...

Wonderful Brian!Happy Valentine's Day to you both!:)

buffalodick said...

Very good! Enjoy V-day!

Ms Hen said...

Beautiful. I love the Ending..

Happiest Valentine to you and the Mrs.

But I have a feeling every day is Valentine day in your home.. (hugs).

You know I had Four Men in my life 13-15 months since I was separated/divorced. I never felt Loved by any of them.. even if they proclaimed it and did many many many things for me..

I did not feel they truly loved themselves either.

I spent the last year mainly solo.. and fell in LOVE with me.

It is better to first be Complete/Whole.. before you can find Romantic love. I don't feel alone without a Valentine.. I feel Happy that I'm still becoming more and more whole each through Al-Anon.. and God.

Mama Wheaton said...

That is the best way to experience love when you least expect it.

Devika said...

Isolation brings no solace, yet many choose to isolate themselves--don't know why,

Anyway...nice poem, Brian...and wish you a Happy Valentines' Day :)

wishes,
devika

becky said...

Lovely ending Brian.To you and your wife a very Happy Valentines Day!~~Becky

Tom said...

Happy V day; glad you're happy, I'm happy too.

Mighty M said...

Wonderful poem - I know the feeling well. Happy Valentine's Day to you too!

Mr. Stupid said...

Great poem. Loved the ending.
A Happy Valentine's day to you. Have fun...:)

Kim A. said...

Open doors and open hearts....

Happy Valentine's Day, friend.

namaste

Tracie said...

That was was really good!

I hope you have a wonderful day. (I know that you will.)

William Manson © 2010 said...

BEAUTIFUL, its great when that happens and u deserve it mate, have a great day :)

Bee said...

Working on Valentine's Day trying to sell risqué nighties and trying hard to keep the images out of my head. Pork chops!

Bee said...

Oh and happy V-Day!

Magpie said...

Such a testiment to the depth of your feelings. Happy Valentine's Day!

Nessa said...

Unexpected true love is the best.

Happy Valentine's Day!

Rosemary and Reflections

Valerie said...

Neither locked out nor in, not then, not ever...
Great Brian.

the b in subtle said...

what can i say in ONE word? perfect. happy Love day Brian to you and the love of your life.

Lorraine said...

How perfectly written, Happy Valentines' Day to you and your wife :)

TechnoBabe said...

We all have our ways of locking ourselves away and sometimes we believe it is they who have locked us out! The change in a life when someone reaches out and we allow the connection is amazing. Some things are so astounding I cannot put into words. I only know the end result is absolute and joyous. Happy Valentines Day to you and your beautiful wife.

subby said...

Wish I could shut out half of what goes on around me...I find the Haiku and Tanka much easier but applaud your efforts, sir ;)

RNSANE said...

Excellent job, Brian, and nice sweet sentiment at the end.

Susan said...

160 characters spaces included? Wow. You did it beautifully. Very nice job Brian!

Captain Dumbass said...

Nice work in a 160 characters.

sam silva said...

Commend you on technique. Building up panic to its resolution. Its superb!

Madame DeFarge said...

Happy valentine's to you and yours too.

lakeviewer said...

How many words? This day should be called the 'writers' day' since writers can conjure up words that do the trick of connecting the universe.

And you are one of them.

Felicitas said...

Love is the key to everything, isn't it?! A wonderful 160, Brian.

Diana (Diane) Maria said...

Hi!

Very nice writing.
I just found your blog.
This 160 concept is interesting. I would like to try it on my own blog.

Good stuff here.
I'll be back.

~ Tabitha ~ said...

That was short and simple..yet powerful and true!!! Nicely written and Happy V-Day to you!

otin said...

Seems like you were saved by her. That is a wonderful Valentines present!

Monkey Man said...

Great 160. Love opens doors. Clears skies. Lifts fog. Thanks for playing and Happy V-Day to you and yours.

Mama Zen said...

This is very cool!

Happy Valentine's Day!

Bernie said...

these 160 say so much....great poem Brian.......:-) Hugs

AmyLK said...

Happy Valentines Day!

Baino said...

Happy Valentines day to you two lovebirds as well.

Matty said...

What a mind you have. Nice.

CottageGirl said...

I LOVE your writing!
Hope that love surrounds you today, Brian.

Daniel said...

Hey, I know this, ..., too well.

Pearl said...

That's a lovely VD poem!

Pearl

Joanna Jenkins said...

Hey Brian, Just a fast stop to wish you and yours a very Happy Valentine's Day. I'll be back soon to catch up on your posts.

jj

Rain said...

Great story! Have a happy Valentine's Day! :)

Prayer Girl said...

Ditto! Real love found me unexpectedly. There was a tiny part of me that knew "he" was the one for me from the first time I heard him speak. Married 18 1/2 years so far. :)

PG

rxBambi said...

I love the line about locking everyone out or yourself in. it says a lot about love (or lack of).

glad she found you.

Betsy said...

Happy V Day, Brian.

I love your love story. Sweet indeed. :)

CatLadyLarew said...

Great 160, Brian... love usually does come when you least expect it.

Vodka Logic said...

The metaphorical lock? I've got a couple of them too. x

slommler said...

It has been finding me all week in unexpected ways. What a wonderful journey I have been on.
Happy V-Day
Hugs
SueAnn

She Writes said...

Happy Valentine's Day to you and your wife, Brian!

♥ Braja said...

It always does....

Cabo said...

Kiss Me, you fool.

Jeanne said...

I'm so glad you found your way out of that room!

secret agent woman said...

Great metaphor.

Unknown Mami said...

Your pieces often remind me of songs I love. This one reminds me of...

Then all at once, he was standing there,
so sure of himself, his head in the air.
My heart was breaking, which one would it be?
You turned around and walked away with me.

I know they are not really the same, but it's the emotion that they evoke in me, this uncertainty and tightening in the chest followed by a very satisfying relief.

Ronda Laveen said...

Love is best when not expected.

Lovely piece, about a lovely love, on a lovely day!

gayle said...

True love!

jingle said...

Have A Sweet Evening!
U R A Sweet Valentine today,

;)
;)

jingle said...

I appreciate your kind words,
I know many people dislike Asian,
Well,
I am glad to get to know u,
handsome man
with awesome heart!

smiles, ;)

The Retired One said...

Ooooo,very introspective and haunting....so glad love arrived!!

Jaime said...

happy valentines day.

jaymiethorne said...

This reminds me of my spouse asking me if it gets scary in there when I get stuck in my head. ;-)

Ocean Girl said...

I'm here to try again. I prayed it will work because it worked at lakeviewer's that has the same comment format as you.

1,2,3.

Christina said...

Awesome!

I hope you've enjoyed your Valentine's Day!

Mmm said...

Well I am quite sure oyu ahd a most lovely Vlanetine;s Day adn her;s wishing that for your entire weekend in fact. Enjoy.

Alan Burnett said...

You old romantic you. Not many people can do so much with so few characters as you.

Protege said...

...then you walk in...
I LOVE that.;) There is so much power in those few words.
Hope you had a great Valentines Day, but knowing how infinitely romantic you are, I am sure it was heavenly.;)
xo
Zuzana

Ekanthapadhikan said...

Wish someone walked into my old dingy room too. And I'm sure I locked myself in it.

Shadow said...

so chilly... 'til i reached the end. loooovely!

JStar said...

Isnt that the way it works out Brian...Great poem :)

Harnett-Hargrove said...

Surprising who can walk through those thick hard walls, real or imagined.... -J

the walking man said...

I wonder what the ending would be if you had twice the amount o...never mind you don't think like Otin.


Good one again Brian.

blueviolet said...

I'm glad the right person walked in. :)

Gaston Studio said...

What a scary scenario, but at least the right person walked in.

5thsister said...

I find your poetry beautiful. I figure you don't "do awards" but I gave you a shout out on my blog today. Come by and take a peek.

William Manson © 2010 said...

CONGRATULATIONS BRIAN, you have a special award waiting for you, yes another one lol..

http://williamm49.blogspot.com/p/awards.html

Terrace Crawford said...

Great one. Happy V-Day... or post V-Day.

--Terrace Crawford
www.terracecrawford.com
www.twitter.com/terracecrawford

nohaemile said...

Wow Brian,,
You sure could say something so deep and profound in 160!!

I loved it and loved how it ended :)
You guys keep surprising me WOW

corvedacosta said...

Hope your day went well

Little Ms Blogger said...

Nice comparison to the isolation ward being your heart until your wife came along.

Stacy (the Random Cool Chick) said...

You never disappoint with your prose! :) I especially love that last sentence - I'm betting you had a wonderful Valentine's Day! :)

Cat said...

Wonderful job!

LMJ said...

aaaww...! this is cool!

Love met me too!! I am loving being in love.

Kay said...

sweep me into those powerful words and just whisk me away...! amazing the power

Goofball said...

that felt so claustrophobic! glad she walked in

sheila said...

Is this a continuation 160 again? Cuz I gotta know...in...or out?

sheila said...

Cuz it could go either way you know.

dopey said...

Brian,
Happy Valentines Day Big Brother! Kiss the boys and T for me! This moved me alot! You know where I was when I found S and you nailed it here! I didn't get online until today otherwise I would have shared your words with him when he was here because he doesn't have access. I will definitely soon.
With Love

The Brightly Colored Misfit said...

I really enjoyed this!

KL said...
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I.S. said...

love met me when i decided to give up on the idea. it seems it likes to do that...tricky lil' devil.

~IS

Meeko Fabulous said...

OMG . . . Isn't that always the way?! Just when you say you're done with love and not looking for it anymore . . . It falls in your lap like a ton of bricks. :)

MomsJournal said...

Very impressive for 160 characters! :)

Kris said...

wow!