Tuesday, February 2, 2010

end of the road

from the dark shadows
living in basement corners
at the edge of light
the tattered map finds us,
breathing new life
into the afternoon sun.

clomp.
clomp.
clomp.

up the step we fly
before our new wings
collect the weight of dust,
slowing us down, nor
dashing our dreams
into the afternoon sun.

hiss.
hiss.
hiss.

down forgotten roads
rising to kiss wetly
black rubber bike tires
we follow our finger
along drawn dotted lines
into the afternoon sun.

huff.
puff.
huff.

at the end of the map
dangling our legs over
the edge of the world
we look down on the clouds
on their way to tomorrow
into the afternoon sun.

i dare you to jump.

and so we do,
before we get to old
to wonder.

75 comments:

Drahdrah said...

Thank you :)

Brian Miller said...

wicked fast reply there drah drah...lol.

so freezing rain and sleet are driving me home now...so if i am off the grid again for a day...i'll catch back up with you tomorrow.

have a great evening everyone!

Tina said...

'Before we get too old to wonder.' Lovely, just lovely. I haven't been around much myself, my friend. My mother is very ill. I still love your writing and thank you for it.

Cabo said...

Ooooh, that was very cool. :)

Tom said...

sounds like a lot of fun. Jumping is good for you.

Tabor said...

I guess I kind of get this. Whatever it paints a wonderful picture of throwing caution to the wind.

Titanium said...

...over the edge of the world...

May we ALWAYS find courage to do just that.

~ Tabitha ~ said...

Love it !!!

Thanks for sharing :)

Daniel said...

What an awesome adventure. I was right there with you my friend.

TechnoBabe said...

Sounds like hubby and me huffing and puffing on our bikes. Not the jumping off though. I always like your sounds.

Madame DeFarge said...

I like the contrast between the elegance of the lines and the starkness of the single words. Very good as always.

Rain said...

Always dare! Never settle! Wonderful, I would jump too.
:) Be safe on the roads!

Ms Hen said...

You'll never be Old. :)

Gingeyginge said...

Thank you for stopping by

Ronda Laveen said...

Sometimes you just have to jump!

Susan said...

Life is for jumping right in. Love the idea of our "wings" getting weighed down by the dust that life kicks up. Great piece.

CottageGirl said...

My take ...
Sounds exactly like my hubby and me planning a trip to somewhere wonderful! We him-haw around the idea for a while, but then make that final decision and commit to it!
Have fun!
Love your contrasts!

Bonnie, Original Art Studio said...

Each time we start to feel 'too old to wonder' children, or grandchildren pull us back...if we let them.

Yousei Hime said...

Hey! It's great!!!! Don't forget to check back at Harrison's site. Other people will leave comments, including me! :D

KJ said...

I always get so scared when I see kids jump over bridges into rivers/lakes or when others go cliff jumping. What can I say I am a bit of a scaredy cat...although, nothing a couple of beers won't take care of.

HA!

Nessa said...

I don't want to be too old to wonder...

Poor Tuesday

slommler said...

Me either Nessa...me either!! I want to fly and to jump..now...no wondering. No doubt!
Hugs
SueAnn

Wings said...

Very nice, Brian!

Betsy said...

Love this one. One of my favorite memories as a kids was making treasure maps. We'd age them with tea and burn the edges and crinkle them up....we thought they really looked like antiques. :)

Travel & Dive Girl said...

Very cool imagery...

jaymiethorne said...

Sometimes jumping is the only answer. Glad I stopped by.

Bernie said...

Brian, your writing just appears to get better each day....I truly loved this......:-) Hugs

Green-Eyed Momster said...

I'll take your dare.

Great post!

Kat_RN said...

This is my second favorite so far! Something about it reminds me of Bilbos song about the road that goes ever on.
Kat

Beth said...

I'll jump!

Jaime said...

that definitely makes me want to jump.

of course, i get to jump every day. in heels. pretending to be bunny rabbits. it's the only way to get my son into the house...

tori said...

this one makes me want to sit and day dream.

mama-face said...

oh, the inner child. I wish I still had my old sting ray bike; purple banana seat, streamers. (I'm just enjoying my interpretation.)

The Retired One said...

"before we get too old to wonder".
Wow.
That is all I have to say.

LOVED this one,Brian!

JeffScape said...

This is cool. I read it twice... once with the onomatopoeia and once without. The former creates a mood of naive innocence, the latter creates a mood of somber wonder.

Pretty tight.

Dianne said...

dreamlike and flowing so smoothly, so smoothly. I love these poems of yours the best. Although I don't know how you produce so much EVERY DAY. Insomnia? or a job stuck at a keyboard, or very very quiet kids.
Ha!

mo.stoneskin said...

I've always wanted to get to the end of the map. Never quite happened.

Protege said...

... before we get to old to wonder...
Ah yes, I hope this will never happen to me.;)
Beautiful as always. I love my morning visits here, as this is where I get my dose of daily contemplation.;)
xoxo
Zuzana

Goofball said...

whaaa a map hidden in the basement...so cool

aren't you too much snowed in to go treasure hunting ?

Mrsupole said...

Take the plunge, avoid the fear. Easier said than done. But life is too short to wonder about "what ifs".

So many times the fear of the unknown holds us back, but when we are young we have less fear.

Really cool.

God bless.

only a movie said...

Cool!!

LadyFi said...

I love the sense of adventure, surprise and wonder... Hope we never lose it as we grow older!

Shadow said...

i totally adore the 2nd verse. (i say, giving myself a shake to get rid of that dust)

JStar said...

Sounds like an adventure here :)

otin said...

Ahhh, back to that age when a leap did not take so much thought!!!

Kim A. said...

I would jump too. I could never let a dare go unanswered....

Love it.

namaste

Ocean Girl said...

According to Mraz, leap in and the net will appear.

I could feel the huffing and puffing.

Brian Miller, I'm not sure if you know yorksnbeans at Elemental, my dear. She's doing what love is challenge. I know you have written about your love, but I would really like to hear how you would describe what Love is..

I would have written her link but I do not know how to link in comments.

the walking man said...

Never saw much sense in getting so aged in the mind that jumping became not an option.

Barry said...

Every now and then, where the sidewalk ends, yu just have to jump.

Ok, lets all hold hands now, 1-2-3

JUMP!

Chhaya said...

Ahhhhhh!!

after reading this - i am so tempted to pick up a backpack and leave home.. to wander and wonder :)

u are awesome Brian...

Lorraine said...

love this...I'd love to fall...:)

jingle said...

you are hopping and wondering about everything along the way,
it has a jingly spirit,
you are young at heart.

handsome post, ;)

Sam!! said...

Nice one Brian.. thanks for sharing :))

Take care

William Manson © 2010 said...

very very nice imagery in this mate, ur poetry is really good, have a blogtastic day :)

Magpie said...

I love this one! Very descriptive...you have a beautiful gift. Thank you for sharing.

sheila said...

Definitely! JUMP!

willow said...

The world is flat?

Yaya said...

I LOVE this!

Jessie said...

looking back with a smile --

loved it!

buffalodick said...

Quality of Life should always be chosen over quantity of Life...

Yousei Hime said...

brian,
Thanks for stopping by. I actually wish we were getting a bit more snow . . . one final dump before the end. Of course, it's a bit too early to consider February the end. We've had snow as late as April here. 8O Stay warm!

Yousei Hime said...

brian,
Thanks for stopping by. I actually wish we were getting a bit more snow . . . one final dump before the end. Of course, it's a bit too early to consider February the end. We've had snow as late as April here. 8O Stay warm!

CatLadyLarew said...

I think I have to get out my old maps and start planning a getaway before I get too old to wonder!

Mama Zen said...

I love the images this evoked.

Christina said...

Terrific... and I think most of us can relate too.

Eleonora said...

Thank you my friend for reminding me to stop, dangle legs and then JUMP!!

Your pen always jolts me back to life, real life.

Ciao

yorksnbeans said...

This is beautiful. I am thankful that Ocean Girl sent me your way!

Calli said...

This is so damn good, Brian.
Certain lines speak to me, this is one of them: "at the edge of light
the tattered map finds us,"...

the tattered map finds us? love that!

She Writes said...

I liked this, and especially the way you ended it:

i dare you to jump.


and so we do,
before we get
too old to wonder

blueviolet said...

I love those impulsive times. Now everything is always analyzed first!

secret agent woman said...

That brings back some good childhood memories.

Candie Bracci said...

BEAUTIFUL :))

Corrie Howe said...

huff.
puff.
huff.

at the end of the map
dangling our legs over
the edge of the world
we look down on the clouds
on their way to tomorrow
into the afternoon sun.

Reminds me of riding bikes to top of mountains and looking down at the clouds. No jumping for me.

Ben said...

Very introspective of you. I like the end a lot. Reminds me of Walt Whitman. "Long have you timidly waded, holding a plank by the shore. Now I will you to be a bold swimmer."

Pat said...

Lovely - and left me yearning for my youth.