Tuesday, February 9, 2010

black & white

the world is
black and white
with shades of grey
where epitaphs are chiseled
to remember the day
you last brought
color to my
life.

i miss
your plum lips
breathing rainbows
across my horizons.

how much longer
will it be before
you are home
from the grocery store?

97 comments:

Her Majesty Lisa (LadyWanderlust) said...

I miss your plum lips breathing rainbows across my horizons....

I want someone to think that about me.

awesome. Lisa

Mama Wheaton said...

breathing rainbows across my horizons.... great line!

Susan said...

Breathless...just perfect. Your wife is so lucky *smile*

TechnoBabe said...

Way cool that you miss her when she is away for a short errand. This is loving and fun.

willow said...

This one struck home with me. Mine missed me so much at the grocery store, that he now goes with me, when he's in town.

Ronda Laveen said...

Oh, Brian, she may not be home for a long, long time. Shopping can somtimes be grueling. Maybe a foot rub upon her arrival...I mean for her:-)

5thsister said...

I think Mr. Sister might benefit from the school of WayStationOne! Love it!

secret agent woman said...

I get so hungry for time on my own that I think it would take me a lot longer to miss someone.

Titanium said...

So much chemistry, so much synergy...

Beautiful, Brian.

Corrie Howe said...

Is it romantic love or stress of being left alone with the kids?

Bonnie, Original Art Studio said...

Yes, Brian, how frustrated are you.....really?

Monkey Man said...

I miss my wife when we are apart, too. She is the blue in my partly cloudy sky.

Ms Hen said...

I love that line.. plum lips breathing rainbows across your horizons..

Lovely..

Totally absolutely lovely..

wow.. thank you for posting this for us to enjoy.

Poetikat said...

This is really good, Brian. The subtle rhymes and the use of colour are powerful. The last stanza is a surprise, but not a shock (coming from you). Lucky lady.

Kat

Wings said...

That was a bit dark, eh?

Brian Miller said...

just a little fun love note tonight. it got a smile...and that brightened the room.

Daniel said...

The way it should be ...

clean and crazy said...

you are too cute!! this makes me giggle!! i know my man hates it when i am gone, the kids drive him nuts!!!
great poem i just love it!!

the b in subtle said...

so. husbands like you DO exist, hey? s'nice to know. :) this was beautiful. she is one lucky gal. sounds like you're very lucky, too!

Felicitas said...

That was sweet. Hope she appreciates your beautiful poetry!

Mighty M said...

Very pretty.

Skip Simpson said...

And I hope she remembered the beer! ;)

Nessa said...

You want the chips, don't you?

You're such a sweetie.

Dismal

lakeviewer said...

OHHHHH! You're getting ready for Valentine.

Matty said...

All romantic and such, and then bam.....the grocery store. Good ending.

Cabo said...

I dig that. Very, very much. Awesome, Brother.

Everyday Goddess said...

brilliant and adorable!

tori said...

how I would love to get a note like this when I go to the grocery store. Instead, I get twenty texts "don't forget icecream" "can you buy this or that?" "when will you be home?" or my personal favorite while I'm driving home from the store "we just ran out of TP are you still there?"
so romantic...

The Retired One said...

Sooooo cute!!!

Jill said...

Well, I think YOU should have gone to the grocery WITH her!
Just sayin'!

Magpie said...

What a lucky lady...
This was great!

Pat said...

Wow - do you REALLY miss her THAT much when she runs to the store? You need to live in 400 square feet and be together 24/7 for just about 5 years. Then you will look forward to those little breaks! LOL!

Seriously, you are too cute and that was real sweet. :)

justsomethoughts... said...

this is the most incredible piece of writing i have read in a very very very long time
just absolutely floored

no words, brian

damn...

Bernie said...

You should of saved this for Valentine's Day....it is absolutely beautiful.....:-) Hugs

Prayer Girl said...

Sounds like love to me. This writing is beautiful. Thank you so much.

PG

Devika said...

Awesome poetry, Brian...but the last line made me laugh! :)

Tom said...

because that box of cookies is calling your name!

Maggie said...

Very sweet, Brian.

Mmm said...

Whoa, romantic. Love it!!!

Dianne said...

Ohh
too short and sweet.

but that is the sweetness
and the sentence period.

Ha!
fondly,
Dianne

Nancy said...

Wow - that's the perfect valentine.

gaelikaa said...

Leaves me wondering....

järnebrand said...

Beautiful. :) I wish I got love notes like this one... Or I wish I got any at all... ;) You and your wife are both lucky to have each other! Well done.

LadyFi said...

Just fantastic! And with such a twist at the end... fabulous description of rainbow kisses.

Sigh.

Protege said...

You are such a romantic, of the very rare kind as well.;)
xo
Zuzana

Mrsupole said...

Awww, you are so sweet to write this for your wife.

You should try to go to the grocery store with her sometime. My hubby used to never go with me and then about 5 years ago he started going and he has now discovered that he enjoys it. He talks to the employees at his favorite store and has them special order things for him. I never knew they would do that with the large chain grocery stores. He likes it when he finds things on sale and saves money. A lot of times he will stop on his way home from work and this now saves me trips whereas before he would never go.

Now it is a fun trip for us to take together. The only problem is that when we are together we do tend to spend more money then if only one of us goes to the store, especially if we go to Costco.

Plus it is a good way to teach the boys how to shop properly and save money. Maybe you could turn grocery shopping into a family night. The grandkids enjoy going with us when they are here.

God bless.

Sam!! said...

Beautiful!! well expressed emotions.. :))

Take care

the walking man said...

ha ha haha The question always arises...wouldn't you be better doing the grocery shopping which is the only way to ensure you get what you want?

tony said...

I bet she brought fresh colours back from the shops!

only a movie said...

Very sweet.

Valerie said...

Gee, this was fun... smiles. It's a good job romance keeps... nevertheless I hope she wasn't too long at the grocery store.

slommler said...

So romantic! I loved it!
Hugs
SueAnn

Kim A. said...

...with a bag of Double-Stuffed Oreos.

Loved it.

namaste

Goofball said...

if she is in Belguim at the moment at the grocery store....euh lots longer. We have just a little bit of traffic chaos due to one inch of snow.

Until we learn to drive through a tiny bit of snow, you'll have to wait. Sorry

Randomization said...

That is so adorable!

otin said...

the real question is....
do you miss the rainbows, or the snacks and beverages that she will be bringing home? hahaha!

Stacy (the Random Cool Chick) said...

Awwww! You are such a sweet romantic! Your wife is one lucky woman! ;)

buffalodick said...

With the weather, all trips become dicey ones...

William Manson © 2010 said...

very nice Brian, great post, have a wonderful Monday and thanks for ALL your support :)

Enchanted Oak said...

As you like to say in comments, Brian: smiles....

jingle said...

I would like to think that u said:

I miss my wife's plum lips breathing rainbows across my horizons...

but that way, it is less interesting!

very impressive writing,
romantic and creative,
beautiful post!

jingle said...

Wow,
U True
And
Cool,
I am glad that u decide to visit Amy,
some of our Rally members get 3-7 awards, but refused to say hello to her...Well, It does not cost anyone anything, but it shows your inner beauty when u show love or care to those who has given love and care in the first place.

beautiful blog,
outstanding brian!

Lou said...

Chill, dude, most women do not want to be ravished the minute they walk in the door!

LadyCat said...

Sweet and adorable...a winning combination!

Meeko Fabulous said...

I don't think this is about a woman at all. Well it might be. But it seems like someone was lost to death and before they left they said they were leaving to the grocery store and never came back. Am I hot or cold here?

Jaime said...

so sweet.

staceyjwarner said...

ah yes, I sometimes wonder - is something wrong with me? i love solitude.

much love

Vodka Mom said...

xxxxxxxx

Baino said...

Such a romantic, you stay home and write poetry while she goes and lugs a shopping cart around ...in the wind, and the snow, and the sleet. There'll be a few 'plum' words issued from those lips I'll bet!

Mama Zen said...

I love that last line!

goatgirlbookworm said...

Wow. Just wow.

The girl with the flour in her hair said...

Love it. Like always. Your wife is a lucky lady. Everyone should be loved like that!

markwilliamjackson said...

A fantastic tale of longing, the twist in the last line really emphasizes the love you have for your wife. Great work.

markwilliamjackson said...

P.S. I read the comments saying that your wife is a lucky lady, may I add that you sound like a lucky man to have a wife who elicits these words.

Brian Miller said...

i am very lucky indeed!

Candie Bracci said...

Aw that is so cute!She's lucky!Enjoy the return from the grocery store ;)

Tracie said...

You guys are just too in love. :)

CottageGirl said...

I love how your words bring me in and then at the very end ... surprise me!!!!!!!!!

Breathing rainbows across my horizons? OMG! I'd like to get into your mind to see just how you come up with such wonderful images!

blueviolet said...

You're in love, love, love! Very sweet!

Ms Hen said...

I had to read this one again........ I love this one too. I'm glad you wife smiled when she read it.

You don't have an Uncle or a big brother that is single around 47 to 52... do you?? who can write like this.. ?? lol...and living in nyc..??

JML said...

I've got plumb lips breathing rainbows across my horizons right now, and I love it. She's more than incredible and definitely a literature person, I bet she'd love that. Again, wonderful piece!!!!!

SamSilva said...

Wonderful ending! Your good!

Who Is Tim Burton? said...

Hi! Brian,
All I can actually say is...Wow!
I wonder what your thought would be when she (your wife) return from a trip visiting her family?
;-O

@Willow...LOL!!!!
Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-D

Suldog said...

I miss your plum lips breathing rainbows across my horizons...

Tremendous line. One of the best I've ever seen, actually.

Jen Chandler said...

I finally made it over. Hooray!

Brian, this is wonderful! You're wife is very blessed :) And the line about the plum lips? Exquisite!

Happy Thursday,
Jen

jaymiethorne said...

The way it is supposed to work.

sam silva said...

I have an award for you in my blog.

http://sweiv.wordpress.com/2010/02/11/sunshine-award/

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The Girl From Cherry Blossom Street said...

Love the irony in this!

Your world is not so black & white after all!

FiveMinutes said...

this is very powerful stuff.

faery of the wilds said...

haha really cute... the ending was great...

Alicia said...

Thanks for visiting and commenting and thus allowing me to discover and visit you! Love the last line!

Amy said...

Wow Brian this is amazing.. I love how you write. Thanks for linking this one up to the Round Robin. It was great to have you stop by and link this one up too. Thanks..

Yvonne said...

Like
This very much.
And great last line.

jingle said...

http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/02/13/happy-award/


help me,
I need a break!
I am addicted!

becky said...

This was sweet.I loved it!