Sunday, February 28, 2010

160 - kiss off wedding crasher

my lips caress
pink puckered flesh,
a line across her neck.
where they took the lump
the week before our wedding,
whispering breathless
thanksgivings
it is gone.

What can you say in 160 character? (spaces included) Go see Monkey Man.

Just in case you thought it was only my boys and I in our family who wear our scars proudly. T had surgery the week before our wedding to take out a cyst on her thyroid. Nothing to mar her beauty though. Smiles.

78 comments:

Tina said...

I'm glad you added the little note at the end.

Gillian said...

good stuff.

sheila said...

I'm glad you put that in at the end too Brian. Glad she's ok! That SO would be scary, especially right before the wedding. Wow!

CottageGirl said...

What a worry that must have been right before the wedding.
Wonderful tender words!

the walking man said...

Then who know no scar on their flesh are fresh from the womb.

Bonnie, Original Art Studio said...

T is a very lucky lady - in so many ways.

Lorenzo said...

Wearing scars proudly and beautifully. Some scars only add to the beauty we see in loved ones. My wife is, understandably, horrified by the long jagged overlapping scars left by her two C-sections. If I had such mystical power, I would gladly wipe it away from the mirror in which she sees herself, but I don't know if I could bring myself to make them vanish from her soft belly.

Susan said...

The scare, I'm sure, reminded you of just how precious she was and is to you. What a beautiful piece. I'm glad you included the explanation.

shakira choong said...

We all wear our SCARS proud ,
do we not?
I am so glad she is fine.

hugs
shakira

mine is called

WE ARE INCORRIGIBLE!

Tamarind~ said...

Hey hey.. this is your style, poet! Cool one :)

Tamarind~ said...

Yea.. got to know from Braja. There was some starting hitch with my comment option & its working fine now. Thanks, friend.

becky said...

Very nice! T was very lucky, I had Thyroid surgery to remove the whole gland.It was cancer but that was 7 years ago now Im cancer free!

Have a greeat weekend the both of you!~~Becky

Lisa said...

I am still in awe just how much you love your wife and how proudly you wear it and deeply you feel it, as your poems reveal. I think a bit of you might be rubbing off on me...I mean my other blog Jaded Heart is started to give me away.

Nicely done.

Lisa said...

I am still in awe just how much you love your wife and how proudly you wear it and deeply you feel it, as your poems reveal. I think a bit of you might be rubbing off on me...I mean my other blog Jaded Heart is started to give me away.

Nicely done.

Ariel said...

I felt really bad as I was reading the little poem. Then I read the small pararaph at the end and was relieved.

Stacy (the Random Cool Chick) said...

Beautiful, Brian, just beautiful! :)

otin said...

I actually got it without the note at the end! LOL! Glad it was benign!

Protege said...

What a very personal story, which was probably much more grave when it took place, then you let on.
Lovely sentiments as always Brian,
xo
Zuzana

TechnoBabe said...

Looking at T through your eyes, a scar would be all the more to love. The reminder that she endured the operation to be whole and healthy. She sounds like a wonderful and lovely woman. Not putting her up on a pedestal. Just admiring her for being a wife and mother with substance.

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

sweet!

tony said...

Brian.I hope You&T & Family Are Having A Fine Weekend.

Valerie said...

This could have been heartbreaking, Brian, instead it was uplifting. Good work.

Tom said...

scars aren't ugly, they are a page out of our own historys. I wish I had more of 'em...more stories.

Tracy said...

Oh, I'm glad she is okay, Brian. I bet she's lovely - inside and out. Enjoy your Sunday.

Marla said...

Lovely 160 in every sense, Brian. Just lovely.

suryagni said...

cute one. i think its quite tough to write a poetry that short. :)

Alix said...

Being a Thyroid Queen myself, I can appreciate how scary (not scarry) that must have been for you both. So happy you see the beauty in things like solved problems and so happy you have each other.

I like you lots.

Mrs4444 said...

This is brilliant; I love it. Not sure I could do so well with limits :) I talk a LOT!haha

e said...

Lovely, Brian! So glad everything turned out well. I've some as yet unresolved issues `with that gland myself...

Kim A. said...

gratitude is such a healing balm...and love reflects only beauty. Lovely...

namaste

slommler said...

Whew! What a relief...such joyful bliss and such a special day!!
Good one Brian
Hugs
SueAnn

Felicitas said...

A wonderful 160 Brian! I love how you share these little intimate details about your life and family through your poetry.

She Writes said...

Ah, I wondered what was removed. I don't mind scars--on other people!

Kay said...

only you could make a poetic beauty of it :) hope she read it

buffalodick said...

When I was going with my wife to be, she had a lump removed- benign..Not fun while you're waiting the results..

Magpie said...

What a lovely gift you have and what an awesome love you have for your wife and family. Inspirational, truly.

Realliveman said...

Looks are fleeting anyway!

"Chicks dig scars" - from some movie I can't remember lol

Ms Hen said...

what a great 160

Megz said...

wwwoooww...good one Brian..

wear ur scars proud...theres nothing tht can change the essence of you... the beauty of u is skin deep :)

Monkey Man said...

Great story in 160....as usual. I like the back stories that come with these as well.

Mama Zen said...

Lovely!

melancholymoon said...

what a beautiful post! I'm happy she is fine now :) Thank you for sharing this with us.

Prairiemaid said...

I love happy endings! Or happy new beginnings ~ glad your was happy.

Thanks for stopping by.

Ronda Laveen said...

I have one of those scars too. They fade quite nicely in time.

JennyMac said...

Loved the note at the end.

Mighty M said...

You make something like thyroid surgery sound so pretty and beautiful! :)

Vodka Logic said...

Glad to hear she is healthy.. must have made a lovely time harder..
x

William Manson © 2010 said...

its really scary when your loved one develops a lump mate and I am also pleased it did not mar your time, great poem, and thank you for the birthday wishes means a lot :)

Bridgette said...

How sweet. That kinda goes with my photo. Ha Ha...just kidding. This was sweet NOT embarrassing. :)

Enchanted Oak said...

Beautiful moment captured in this 160.

Tabor said...

Lovely and touching and honest.

Green-Eyed Momster said...

It's so awesome that it was removed. I think it's so sweet the way you describe her. I picture her as a Goddess.

Larry said...

But even if her beauty was mared you'd still love her wouldn't you.
my wife had polio when she was a child she has a foot smaller than the other and walks with a limp but I still love her though.
You'll find my Sunday–160 with the link provided below.


Recycle–Reuse–Reduce


Thanks Larry

secret agent woman said...

I have always thought scars just make you more interesting.

Lizzie said...

Wow, Brian. What a beautifully written piece. Your wife is blessed to have you. Hope you had a good weekend.

Betsy said...

I bet it did make the day more special...nothing like gratefulness!

Daniel said...

Cool memory and lovely thought, ..., as always.

The Retired One said...

This brought tears to my eyes. It really did.

damselwithoutdistress said...

My beloved and slightly wacky husband has a scar from a chemo port. I look at it so differently than he does. He thinks of it as a fault. I think of it as a little spot that saved his life and gives me another day with him.

As for wedding crashers, our was an airplane, droning on endlessly over the sounds of the judge. We still giggle about that to this day.

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

Darling, I really want to thank you ,
from the very bottom of my heart,
for coming over to wish William for his birthday tribute.

He was so thrilled and this cannot be done without YOU!

You ROCK!

Have you a great week.

hugs
shakira

Eternally Distracted said...

Sounds like nothing spoiled a fabulous day :0)

järnebrand said...

Beautiful poem about a scar. I guess we all have them, either on the outside or on the inside.
Nice one. :)

ishabelle said...

oohhh.... yes, it is indeed fortunate that the lump is gone... :)

Nancy said...

So glad it was not something terribly serious.

Jingle said...

fantastic story,
especially when one does it in 160 words.
I marvel at your talent on this,
keep shining!

Jingle said...

The imperfect is perfect,
She wins more love or sympathy this way because people tend to care the weak, the disabled, or the disadvantaged.
U plotted the story brightly,
Brilliant drama!

Jingle said...

Thank U for heading over to soul dose's place...u has a big heart nobody else has, I feel most comfortable with u and your comments or words, because it is always gentle like spring breeze, warm like fresh bread, and comfortable like home.

keep up your admirable job,
Be proud of yourself for being available touching so many people's lives.

U R The King og the Blogging world!

blueviolet said...

I'm just glad it was nothing serious!

Crystal Jigsaw said...

Smiles indeed xx

Gaston Studio said...

Brave thing to do before your wedding... and I, too, am glad you left an explanation.

Kathy's Klothesline said...

You are the word master.....I could never confine my thoughts to few words. Just ask love of my life, he will tell you!

Cop Mama said...

Oh, your last comment is the sweetest thing ever!

Nessa said...

You say so much in so few words.

RnPB: Ch 013 - Clean Up

Unknown Mami said...

Thanksgivings!

AmyLK said...

I agree with Bonnie, T is very lucky!

bonjourpoetry said...

"whispering breathless" Now that's a great line.

great way to capture the wedding day moment as well.

Jingle said...

Brian:

Glad to see you back, safe and sound,
I read your new post, but will comment on it later...

you truly draw me into your story, I am very cold person, love life is almost linear, but your writing make me feel something...

I will have to drive somewhere tomorrow, I will visit your blog after I came back...

I shall be back tomorrow afternoon
by 1pm.

Please don't ask me for details...I won't be able to tell...

see you then,
have a good rest tonight.

Jingle said...

Brian:

Thank YOU for the instant feedback.
I am not sure how to do it at 1pm,
I stayed away from the computer and thought about what's really in my mind, relating to writer and life...
well, it is done with 30 minutes after I decide to say what's reoccurring inside my head, yes, it may be about love as well, it is a combination of feelings and everything.

Sorry for keeping you so busy ...
thank you for the nomination of moondustwriter...

See you after you post yours!

with lots of respect, admirations,
and gratitude.

xoxo