breathe
a blank mind,
pushing back
all that clutters
a blank page,
until slow strokes
spring from my
soft bristle brush,
bringing forth
tension that hides
beneath the surface,
releasing shadows from
the recesses of my heart,
eyes open now
it slowly fades
evaporating,
only water on
a blank page
breathed by
a blank mind.
tell a story in 55 words. want to give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.
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I'm still taking this in. I feel like I'll read it at different times and get another feeling from it depending on where my thoughts are. A very nice piece!
I'm up too
http://inappropriatesue.blogspot.com/2010/01/55-flash-fiction-friday-ugly-succubus.html
I've read this through several times...eyes wide open. Wouldn't it be great to all work on a blank canvas..from scratch?
Ooooh, I like it.
Like Susan said, I get a different feel every time I read it.
So far it seems to be about
(1) Fighting against the painter's version of writer's block
(2) Clearing the mind of all distractions before beginning a new project
(3) Beginning a new project without any preconceived notions about where it will lead.
I really like this.
Great 55! :)
Mine is posted HERE.
for me it was a meditation...so many distractions, sometimes it is hard to get to that blank canvas. it becomes an exercise in releasing. painting in water and letting it evaporate is kinda symbolic of that. i dunno.
very serene, i love ti, mine is up too
Cleanse and then create. Very good.
This speaks to me of meditation. And a really good metaphor for me. I like the blank page and evaporation. Awesome!!
Namaste
Sounds like you had Writers Block.
But obviously you didn't!
Excellent 55 Brian.
No wayward haphazard writing from you son, thats for DAMN sure.!!
Thanks for this wonderful contribution, and have a Great Week-End...G
Regardless of our individual craft, we all begin with a blank page, don't we? Beautiful work, Brian.
Reminds me of the fact that I can start my day over any time I want or need to.
Great 55, IMHO! :)
PG
I read this and wonder if I ever start with a blank canvas. Too much clutter in my brain.
awesome! I love when I finally make my way over... you are very gifted
I love the way the brush and the canvas interact, taking on the life of the artist. Beautiful.
This feels so zen.....I also imagined a Japanese artist with his brush creating a single beautiful stroke.
That seems to suit this time of year. Nice.
This is nice. Must be hard to have to count to make sure not over 55 and still flow so beautiful.
Very nice.
Dr. Wayne Dyer writes about emptying your mind to meditate. He says when you can do that totally .. it is the closest you are with God.
I do meditate each day but not a true true meditation. Too many distractions.. but than I'll be out walking and suddenly my mind empties and I feel this beautiful calm.
The crazy thing it happens when I'm in the most crowded borough of NYC.. Manhattan. I live in Staten Island. The hustle and bustle of all the people and beautiful buildings make me feel so Peaceful ..
The churches there lull me into them to pray too. So strong and massive and people from all over the world... makes me feel so in ONE with The Universe and God.
I have tried meditation, and gawldangit I have a hard time every time trying to get to a blank canvas.
Life thoughts just creep in and I can't ignore them.
Sigh.
Meditation! That's exactly the read I got. Well done. I've never tried it, but there were times in my life that it's exactly what I needed... if only I'd known. Lately, though, my life is one long vacation, so I'm doing just fine. *bliss*
I'm up, too!
-smarmoofus
Bravo, Brian!
I got a different take on this ..made me feel!!
a moment in 55 words--very cool--c
Like the blank canvas created by the snow.....
Funny how we interpret works different. I saw a blank page, and you having thoughts in your head that you could not put on to the canvas, and the frustration led to tears, which was the water. See why I don't like speculating! LOL!
hmmm, I wish I could get a blank canvas. I'm all hubbub and noise. I can't think to save myself.
WOW.....beautiful, how well you used your alloted words.
It describes how I feel trying to quiet the chatter in my mind before I meditate.
Great job.....:-) Hugs
There is no way I can tell a story in 55 words. I can't usually leave a comment in 55 words. I wish I had your talent.
I'm glad you explained your thoughts. I can be so poetically challenged. To get to the blank page.......not an easy task.
That is EXACTLY right, grasshopper. Like painting with water, oh yeah!
Perhaps I shouild have left this comment as a blank canvas, but I just can't leave well enough alone. Great 55, Mine will be up midnight Pacific time.
Perhaps I shouild have left this comment as a blank canvas, but I just can't leave well enough alone. Great 55, Mine will be up midnight Pacific time.
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Oh, another one that I need to read again and again...I want to be clever enough to 'get it'!!
Thats what I love about your poetry.. it makes you think
thanks xx
Ommmmmm . . .Ommmmmmm
Nice, Brian!
I've never allowed myself to buy the tools for artful evaporation. Silly me!
Here's mine:
http://inlindenhills.blogspot.com/2010/01/flash-fiction-friday-first-encounter.html
Beautiful. You are a poet. Love the last verse...
Have a great Friday,
xo
Zuzana
This has so many interpretations - excellently done.
as always you write so well look forward to reading you again Brian I'd love to write as you do. I'm up to just follow3 the link below.
West Side Gangta's
It is best to write tension on the heart in disappearing ink.
Blank page,blank mind..I know that!:)
Have a nice(not blank) day!;)
I read it at least 3 times and each time it brought different thoughts to my mind.
You are getting pretty darn good at these 55 posts.
Great job.
God bless.
i wish i could paint. water is so freeing in many ways. thanks for this 'water'colour, Brian. neat to know you not only paint with words... i've been MIA for a few days, trying to backtrack in case i've missed anything.
I saw a blank canvas and the artist's first approach to it. Well written Brian!
Hugs
SueAnn
Dear Brian, you always write so very well
This is so full of wise metaphor... beginning from a blank mind.
I suppose the new year is like a blank canvas.
Sometimes it is difficult to make the first stroke and creat a picture.
I see you were meditating. It was a good piece of writing, as always.
Nuts in May
We dragons love blank anything.
Well done.
VERY well done Brian. I envisioned a mind wandering beyond any concept...leaving his thoughts blank as he ponders so many pieces of life. I'm wondering just what others interpreted in this beautiful 55.
HERE is mine --scroll down below my show n tell as always. Happy Friday.
are you crying?
how perfect is this?!?! amazing what a blank page can achieve...
I love this poem the best,
easy flow,
beautiful poem.
Very nice! funny, I thought I scheduled a 55 to post this week. Maybe it's next week. MUST check! lol
art is a great stress reliever even as a blank page, well put Brian :)
You paint such a beautiful picture with your words...
I've felt that when I sit down to write....great 55. Sarah
Kind of feels like a painting that we develop only in our minds, shaded with nuance and experience, meant only for our own internal gallery. Blessings my friend.
These 55s amaze me. They seem to be a beautiful paradox. The freedom and creativity of your craft under the rigid restraints of a number restriction. And yet you do it every time - seemingly with ease.. certainly with beauty.
I think of new beginnings here. A good read.
I love the idea of just being so clear, starting from scratch.
What a great 55. Love the idea and off to read more.
Beautiful!
Wow! I am impressed. I'll mull it over. I tend to be overly wordy. It would build good discipline.
Even water will leave some trace.
I can see the literal interpretation of this of course, but my initial response was the painting -- and painter -- as a metaphor. Clearing out the shadows and junk and baggage and damage to give a chance to something truly new, truly unblemished by the model of What Was.
Then again, I'm seeing it through the prism of my own experience, so what do I know?
i like your interpretation mojo...that is the hting with writing...you release it to the reader to view and decipher...it adds so many layer...
alice, nice. so true.
hilary, it feel that way at times, which adds another element of fun...what to leave and what to take away...
hello Brian..
wow you painted a beautiful picture with this poem naturally what you intended or perhaps had the vision to do, the imagery was superb.. great poem, thanks for visiting my blog.I have now added this to my blogroll..take care..
Have you ever read any of Billy Collins work? If not, you would dig it. This poem reminds me of his, "Lines Lost Among the Trees".
I am working towards that center of emptiness. Hard to get to.
Oh how I love your words! I read this and it's meaning can vary in so many ways. Not sure if that's what you meant to do with this...? Anyways...I love it. I sure have missed visiting you here. Happy weekend to you and yours Brian. XX Lori
for good?
or for bad?
or do we not get to choose....
A blank mind, there's something I can understand.
I love this, Brian. Such imagry from so few words. Great job!
Happy weekend,
Jen
I love this piece on meditation. I think they should teach meditation in school at a young age, our society would be profoundly changed if people would practice it more. Mine is up.
Little deep for me...but it was wonderful prose.
I Agree With Kathy (above) It reminded Me Of Snow & Stillness & Silence.Nice One!
This is a beautiful 55 my friend. You write so well. The last verse is just spectacular :) Well done :)
Nice 55, Brian! You have such a way with words.
softly beautiful...
HUGE warm smiles,
There are so many different ways of interpreting this. I keep fighting with myself on where I want to take it.
Wow very nicely done Brian. Thanks for visiting my page as well
What a lovely one; it's such a nice one to read out loud too. I love the moment you captured: a wonderful 55 words!
wonderful. a nice meditative piece.
Wow. The things you do with those 55 words is amazing!
I hope the blank canvas of your weekend gets filled with many beautiful things!
Oh to be able to let go and start from scratch.
Great 55 Brian.
jj
Wow! 84 comments. You don't need a blank sheet. Your the best.
This reminds me of the beginning of a new day. One where we can start all over again by looking it like a blank page...Or, maybe we can look at it like our life is that blank page we start working on one day by changing whatever it was that was wrong with our life..You really could look at it so many different ways. I like it.
As long as it is recycled paper...I'm ok with it! Nice...
Hi Brian:)
A mighty effort in writing a story in 55 words. Each line selected for great impact and thought. Mind blowing compostion.
Best wishes:)
Joseph
VE...always recycled, when i can help it. smiles.
been offline most of the day so will catch up with all...have a great weekend everyone!
This reminds me of my meditation practice. Beautifully done, Brian!
I could read so much into your words - and probably will each time I read it! Great stuff.
Brian, I think this one is my favorite, yet. It speaks to me personally, deep within. I'm sure there can be (and are) different interpretations, but I'll take mine in knowing you planted a GOOD seed. Thanks!
Just...wow! Amazing how 55 words can be so stunning. Well done. Have a wonderful weekend.
Very interesting. I'm intrigued by the relationship between the heart and mind in your poem. I really like the descriptions of the shadows in the recesses coming forth and entering the mind, only to slowly fade again. Very cool imagery.
Seemed very meditative.
I wish it were so easy to clear one's mind like a blank canvas just by breathing.
This is so picturesque. You're words are strung together like pearls on a string.
Being far too verbose, I woudl have such a hard time writing this in 55, let alone but such topics as this.
your words are so very emotive.
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