Sunday, December 27, 2009

Bright Horizons

Another twisting tale of fiction brought to you from the warped minds of Otin and Brian. This is part 2 of a 2 part story. If you have not read part 1, please go here.

Dead air still makes a sound...

Silence screams from the black eye of the television in front of me, the same empty silence that leaks from our phones, computers, nearly all the communication we had come to depend on prior to the event. Nothing worked afterward. Cars sit by the side of the road, slowly succumbing to rust to be blown on the wind, few dare to walk among them out of fear for their lives.

Memories of my eldest boy drip down my tired cheeks, he can't be dead...

Nomads fleeing across the country in search of food or shelter carry news of a smooth walled miles -long crater where Washington, DC once stood. We don't allow them to stick around long, only offering scant food, lest they turn on us, taking what little remains of the meager garden we were able to grow this last year.

Five years, three months, fifteen days...and I still leave the television on, fearing if I turn it off will signal the end of my hope...

Tight weave upholstery gnaws my backside, nerve endings becoming comfortably numb in my sitting, waiting...until a bright light blossoms, spreading across the television showing the face of a gaunt man, I might once have known...

Greetings, this is Paul Maloney, former President of the United States. Over five years ago, all world leaders and their respective capitals were torn from the very Earth, and transported to a patchwork planet made up of that which had been taken. We were given one directive, 'when there is only one, you will be returned.' Today 198 of us return, out of the nearly one million people...our folly was great in thinking the only way to accomplish that goal was through aggression. Too late we learned it could be achieved by coming together. Today marks a bold new direction in World history...

How do you think they will feel when they find the depths of depravity and degradation the world they left behind has sunk to?, sneers a voice from the door frame, spoiling the room with sour tobacco breath.

There is always hope, my mind clings by fingertips to the notion my boy is still alive and the world can be different.

Says the man duct taped to his recliner...to the man about to take his very life. We have loaded up all the food we could find and will be on our way soon.

Where is my family?

Your wife is coming with us, your boy was no longer needed...just like you, he smiles, bringing his gun level to my face, the abyss of the barrel sucking my will to continue...

BLAM!
__________

Somewhere west of the Blue Ridge mountains, a television drones deep into the night...

...World Congress allocated undisclosed funds for the War for Peace...world leaders vowed to eradicate all opposition, chasing them to the ends of the earth...in other news, the New York Yankees opened the gates today for the first baseball season in nearly six years...

Dad, when we returned...when I found those men here...it was never supposed to turn out this way. We had such hope for peace. I thought it would be so different after what we went through...

I know Tom, patting his hand, my eyes trace across the front yard, passed the white markers where my wife and youngest son are buried, to the mountains beyond, but there is always hope...somewhere just over the horizon.

49 comments:

otin said...

Holy crap! You turned that into something way deep! I read it twice! I loved it!

Jill said...

Okay Brian, (and Otin) that was FREAKY...another world domination plan gone sour.
Your imaginations/creativity amaze me!!!!

Cinnamon said...

Brotin rules!

I had trouble loading Otin's, so i will have to come back and try again later:)

smiles4u said...

Wow! Once again you and Otin did a great job! I loved all of it! Both of you amaze me with your writing. Bravo!!!

Beth said...

Wow! I could totally feel that. I really am loving this collaborative writing venture!

Ocean Girl said...

Miller is now Otin?

Enjoying this Miller/Otin series. Great job guys.

Jen of A2eatwrite said...

Extremely disturbing... but powerful, nevertheless.

TechnoBabe said...

Dang, good collaboration. I know you are both having fun with this. So am I reading it. Thanks.

Felicitas said...

A terrific collaboration and a very interesting read!

JML said...

For some reason, the story feels vaguely familiar, but it seems as though there are tons of people willing to wage some sort of war for peace, not understanding how ridiculous their approach is! Wonderful visuals and a great story!

Betsy said...

Brotin...haha...love that! Nice job, guys!

Joanna Jenkins said...

You guys are a great team!

I'm going to have to sleep with the lights on tonight.

jj

Dianne said...

I am glad I am NOT living inside your head Brian. thanks for helping to make this blog world a reality these past 2 months.

Ronda Laveen said...

We always pick the hard way. But, you are right, hope is always over the horizon.

ivan@creativewritingt.ca said...

This is terrific, and even, hey, AMAZEing.

Through a strange synchronicity, it harkens to my childhood in Europe during the Second World War.
It was exactly as you guys portraty this particula post-bellum dystopia.
...Maybe the great DeePAKI knows something.

Fragrant Liar said...

Crazy! You guys are cybertaling each other.

Fun stuff.

Liza said...

I like the way this piece opens Brian.
"all world leaders and their respective capitals were torn from the very Earth"
very interesting
"War for Peace" ha!
Great collaboration Brian.
Hope your holidays have been wonderful thus far.

gayle said...

going to read part one..now

gayle said...

Great job guys!!!

Lizzie said...

You and Otin make an incredible team for writing. I am quite impressed. Dude! :)

AngelMay said...

The War for Peace. I'm constantly in awe (and consternation) at man's folly. Nice collaboration you two.

Susan Anderson said...

That was great! I can't wait to read more of your writing.

Pat said...

Great collaborative writing! You did a good job stepping outside your box with this genre, Brian.

books,coffee,etc.... said...

Hi! Brian,
That was an interesting and very intriguing piece...what a very interesting...twist on the story.
I must admit that this is my first time reading your continuation tale(s) of fiction.
Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-D

Eternally Distracted said...

You guys!! Fab, the pair of you :0)

Alix said...

Okay. Now I'm totally freaked out.

Your two writing styles are very different, and yet somehow you and Otin make this seamless transition from his part of the story to yours. How do you do that?

I always enjoy your collaborations very much and just wonder where you find the time to write all you write, visit blogs, comment and still have quality time for your family. Maybe you are a real-life Doug like in Multiplicity? Remember him? if not, follow this url... it's hilarious!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pRtVMLwh6mY

♥ Casa Hice

slommler said...

Seamless is right....well done!!
Happy New Year
Hugs
SueAnn

Brian Miller said...

thanks for the love...i really do love doing this with otin...he has a great way of shaking up my creativity in new ways.

Shadow said...

you are a weaver of note! what a story. and what can i say, but i love love love the last line...

sheila said...

Oh good gravy! Great story! But why the Yankee's at the end? They always get everything. Damned Yankees.

Brian Miller said...

lol sheila, that was intentional...figured if anyone was playing baseball in the face of a global war it would be the yanks...gotta make their pay roll right? smiles.

cherie said...

you are a brilliant writer - please let me know as soon as you find a cure for this wretched throat. thanks! (pardon the adjective.)

Barry said...

Well that was disturbing and imaginative and quite a trip. Thanks guys, you've got me thinking after way too much slumber inducing Christmas food.

Stacy (the Random Cool Chick) said...

Brotin! Love it! And love the newest collaboration between the two of you - like Pat said, you did a great job stepping out of the box, Brian! :) Nicely done! :)

buffalodick said...

Otin didn't leave you a story to finish- he left you to write the sequel...

Jessie said...

Wow Brian! you and Otin should collaborate more!!! although, you both are wonderful stand-alone writers.

i'm waiting for the sequel...

i hope you had a fabo Christmas with your familly!

warm smiles,

Mom said...

Wow...really enjoyed the read. Want to know more. Keep up the great work.

Mama Zen said...

Wow!

JennyMac said...

Brian, this is amazing.

Memories of my eldest boy drip down my tired cheeks, he can't be dead..

this alone gave me chills.

Tom said...

Brotin...that is great.

Dismal thoughts, eh...let's hope the coming decade will be brighter than the last, and the Cubs beat the Yankees in the World series!

Dot-Com said...

Wow, that was really freaky! What a fab piece :) Hope you enjoyed Christmas. Best wishes for the new year.

Green-Eyed Momster said...

You're a great team! I think his style is rubbing off on you or yours is rubbing off on him. Either way, it's a great story!
Smiles!

Corrie Howe said...

I love the way that the voice changed from third person to first person. Very interesting teamwork you've got going.

otin said...

Brotin!!! HAHAHAHA!!!!!!

Brian Miller said...

sounds better than Otian, i guess...lol.

kys said...

Very disturbing. Good writing though. I love the Brotin stories.

Unknown Mami said...

Holy crapoli! I'm all stressed out now. In a good way. Well done.

The Retired One said...

Terrific job, you two...
and now I am going to hope for a safe and peaceful 2010 for the world.
Hmmm..wonder what our chances are?

Kim A. said...

Part 3 please???

Namaste