one
by one
they slid into
his plush red lap
all trimmed in white
begging and pleading
that they had been nice
sent of with hope an a ho-ho-ho
until she asksfor peace on earth so
daddy can come home, leaving hot
tears trickling into
his beard, as he
thinks of
Afghan
Christmas
skies.
Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see g-man. It just happens to be his birthday today too.
Hug your family an extra time this holiday, for those that can't, so that you can.
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How utterly sweet... and so true.. World's Peace would be the ultimate gift to all.
Be nice if people learned to look INWARD instead of OUTWARD and realize we hurt only ourselves with War; etc.
We'll all Children of this World.
I haven't the words.
Thank You.
Wonderful piece Brian.
I like the link a whole bunch.
Thanks for sharing.
Santa isn't the only one with tears...a wonderful piece again, Brian...so wonderful.
ah yes...peace would be nice...i love the words shaped as a tree, nice touch. very fancy!
much love
Perfect in shape, content and intent.
Car Goes Boom
Very nice Brian! Nothing similar to what I was cooking up, like we talked about! I did a 55, also.
wow that brings out emotions. great writing. Love the tree.
Oh man Brian, that is real.
The PERFECT seasonal 55 Brian.
Great job, great message!
Thanks for helping out The G-Man every Friday...You Are One Great Gentleman!!
Have a Fantastic Week-End...Galen
What a tender and sweet piece. :)
it started as a tree, and ended up more like an ornament...i feel for all the men and women who are away this holiday defending us...thank you!
Those words. . . . lovely Brian. . . and that you created a Christmas tree with it. . . nice.
I really like it! Awesome subject matter, awesome construction. I've never tried to do anything like this with poetry before. Now I'm inspired :)
Brian I love this and in the shape of a tree....pretty creative, pretty powerful. Sarah
Awwh, Brian, it's beautiful.
;-)
♥
S
We have a lot of kids at my school with deployed parents. This one really hits home!
I love the story almost as much as the shape of the words.
Way to make me cry.... Oh gosh, I can't even think about those who are without their loved ones right now. Ugh, it breaks my heart.
Hi! Brian,
I like reading the message in your post..."55-afghan skies and the way you made a Christmas tree shape from your words.
Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-D
You really rock with this one! Creative with a great heart.
Brian.....This beautiful piece reflects the true spirit of Christmas in every way. Powerful in its simplicity and generosity.
Nicely put. May they all return home soon. Wherever that might be.
World Peace is a worthy 55, my friend. Love the added artistry! Thanks for stopping by!
SO good!
Thanks for your comment on my Fl
PILLOW STEALERS – STRANGE BEDFELLOWS ash 55 too. ;-)
Wow!
Very powerful.
And you even made it tree-shaped. :)
Nice 55.
Mine's ready too... right here.
beautiful one, Brian. and i love the way it actually _looks_ like a christmas tree....
touched my heart..
so real!
Brian,
I am going to continue at my blog and hope you will still read.
This was a moving piece, especially to the mother of one who has been deployed (safe now).
WOW! That was great and loved the Christmas tree too. Very cool!
jeNN
Timely, we must remember those who are serving.
mine is up!
Beautiful sentiment. I love that your 55's always have such an inspiring message. You ROCK Brian!
that was deep and touching leave it to you we already knew this 55 would be a great one. mine is posted just follow the link below.
Happy Birthday Galen
Woo hoo!
Just awesome... love it!!! You are one of such imagination, creativity and a beautiful, loving heart! Thanks for the great 55!
you seriously have some talent! AND to shape it as a tree....? the creativity blinding! :)
Nicely done. With family in the forces, this subject is close to my heart.
The words, the sentiment, the shape .... and all in just 55 words. Excellent.
Beautifully written and I think everything should take on a diamond formation because it's pretty.
Loved the tree.
But sadly it does not seem to be in our nature to live in peace. It is amazing to see any spieces living in total peace and harmony. It would be so wonderful to see this someday, but their are forces not in our power that never want "total peace" in the world. Unfortunately, I think that "governments" are the main culprit. For if mankind lived in total peace and harmony then we would no longer have a need for the majority of our government entities. And the next largest culprit, are the different types of religious fanatics. I think this group needs no explanation.
What drives their need for control is just one thing "Greed". And I am not talking about greed for money, I am talking about greed for control, which then usually leads to control of money.
Hopefully someday soon the "meek" shall inherit the world. Only then will there be Peace and love among all the people of the world.
Okay, I need to go back and just focus on the tree.....and peace on earth, goodwill to man.
What a beautiful tree!!!! My heart goes out to all the children of the world who's parents are not with them during any holiday time.
God bless.
Whoops, meant "there" are forces. Sorry.
I love that you made it into a shape of a tree! Very inventive both visually and literally.
:)
Zuzana
Well said.
This is just too sobering...tho, I must say I loved it!! AND the fact that your words written make a 'Christmas Tree'
My 55 is all the "F WORDS" this week. Here it is...don't be alarmed tho...trust me
A Tear Is Falling From The Sky...........
YOu always amaze me how well you do these...this is just wonderful :)
poignant
That was beautiful. Children more times then not ask for the most unselfish requests. Thanks for sharing.
I'm up too.
http://inappropriatesue.blogspot.com/2009/12/55-flash-fiction-friday-mercury-and.html
beautiful...such lovely sentiments
Nice Brian, as always. Amazing what you can do with 55 words.
Tears, Brian, tears. Beautiful 55; I can just see those little children missing their fathers and mothers who are away protecting our country.
From negativity to hope, verbally and pictorially. Wonderful. 'A propos for the season!
Hugs to you Brian. Thanks for the reminder, it was beautifully done. I really liked how you shaped the poem like a Christmas tree.
Being away from your loved ones brings a hurt that stains a heart blue. Nice post my friend.
That gave me goosebumps, Brian. Chilling and so real and true. Love the tree shape...
Hugs for all!
and smiles too!
Have a great weekend~
Calli
I've read through your last 6 posts, you are wonderfully poetic. I talent I lack. I love how you were able to fit Afgan skies into 55 words.
I've left something for you at my place if you are interested.
wow er..WOW!Bravo you never ceased to impress me and I'm not talking about your talent at playing guitar here!
Have a nice day ;)
you've outdone yourself on this one Brian! sweet, touching, warm ... extremely well done!
Once in a while a 55 just blows away all the rest: this is it! Holy wow; what a sweet and heartbreaking thing to ask of Santa.
I just love it. The Christmas tree shape is a perfect crowning touch. Thanks for sharing this Brian!
I love the tree shape and the meaning. Most excellent. Plus...I have a new word..."askfor" ;)
Such a sweet poetry.. thanks for sharing Brian.. :)
Prayers for peace on this planet earth..
Take care
always out doing yourself...beautiful!
Amazing the poignancy that can be packed into so few words.
Brian for your comment to me ~THANK YOU!
Not only are you a talented writer, but creative too! Love it...as always.
The world makes things so complicated, we forget most good answers are simple ones..
Wow. Perfect Brian. Amazingly said. Gave me goose bumps and brought tears to my eyes. I have sure missed visiting you here this week. Thankful for this time to catch up. XX Lori
Loved the 'shape' of your story Brian. Let's all pray for World Peace.
So very sad and so very true. Brought a tear to my eye. Thanks for reminding us to be thankful for what we're able to have this holiday season.
Seriously, we need more peace on Earth.
Beautiful and poignant.
A.M.A.Z.I.N.G. 55!
Very poignant and I love the way you shaped it into a Christmas tree.
Very nice, very sweet.
Amen!
Amazing! I love it!
What a lovely piece of work and so cool to have it in a tree form. Let's send out our thoughts and prayers to all the little children that are awaiting a parents return.
Is it just me, or does the silhouette of your poem look almost like Santa's Christmas capped head?
I bowed my head and sent up a quick little prayer for all our service men and women abroad and at home. They sacrifice so much.
Peace on Earth. What a concept.
Profoundly beautiful...(wiping my eyes). Thanks!
Beautiful, beautiful piece. Thanks.
Perfection. I have a loved one looking at those Afghan skies. This is wonderful.
jj
True, we forget all those families who won't have someone special with them at Christmas.
Oh, my goodness. Nice 55!
What a really great 55 and what a great response.
Absolutely beautiful... thank you
best wishes
Ribbon x
We dragons think this was a wonderful 55.
Way to bring it home, Brian.
Very beautifully done. I wish we could grant World Peace for all it would be a wonderful thing. I hope you have a terrific weekend. My 55 is up
Very true - Great post yet again! Yet again I don't have the words to be so clever :0)
What a beautiful 55, Brian. Just wonderful!
The Christmas tree rocks! And as usual you pull us in, shake us up, and let us go.
Nice.
Great story and great shape! Very cool.
Oh, a soldier Santa, with recurring nightmares, now stuck with whiny children for hours.
Visually appealing & heart tugging. You are truly an artist. :) Kudos to you.
clever and moving
Extreme, cutting truth.
Beautiful sentiment and so creatively trimmed.
That's beautiful, Brian.
Best Christmas one yet!
Have a great weekend!
Absolutely brilliant Brian. You even put it in the shape of a tree! this is very sobering and i've never thought of a Santa having to hear such heart felt please. ugh.
this is a great dedication to our service wo/men.
So beautiful. In context and in appearance. I should be thankful that I'm with my wild ones all the time instead of half a world away.
Awwwwww! Absolute perfection. And very very true.
Love the words in the shape of a tree - genius. :)
What a thought-provoking piece. While throwing ourselves into celebrating the season, it's so important not to forget about those who are in pain.
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