little tufts of grey
and amber fur
twitch...twitch...
eyes wide, in shock
stare into blue sky,
gasping lungs fill
with frigid air
twitch...twitch...
each heartbeat paints
the white blanket of snow
a brilliant crimson
twitch...twitch...
paws soiled brown
scramble for freedom
from the cold steel teeth
gnawing at his leg
twitch...
slow grey fog creeps
from the edge of sight
offering warm release
twitch...
little rabbit
do i free you
from the trap
or let you sleep?
twitch...
are you more afraid
of dying or being freed
and the pain
it would take to heal?
am i?
twitch...
fear in shattered color.
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Oh, I am definitely more afraid of the dying! (Poor wittle wabbit) uh uh uh uh uh!!
this could have been posted on the trapped theme as well. Your spare exposition suits the solitary scene of stark reality, excellent as usual.
otin...uh, uh, uh? are you imitating elmer fud again?
This is no wascuwee wabbet story. Let sleep come and the silence with it.
Poor bunny. I hope this is 100% made up. What a dilemma....
Please tell me the bunny was set free and lived.
Smiles!
A nightmare obviously due, poor little rabbit, I shall cry for him in my sleep.... how influencing the power the words... grins
Oh..I so dislike rabbits in my yard..eating my flowers and bushes...but I don't want to know how they die or see them die. I just want them to leave my yard (or die without me knowing/seeing :-)
poor rabbit..but oh, you tell it well.
I'm not sure what I would do in this situation. Seems like either way the little guy doesn't make it.
Sad little tale. :(
'am I?' - great question.
poor little rabbit! I would so be the one to free it, take it to the vet, spend $350 trying to save it, and then end up having to put it to sleep. But I could not just stand by and watch one of God's creatures die!
Sad story. Good writing.
Now that's a good question! For me personally I would take dying because I know what comes next. I am not afraid of dying. If it is a loved one, I would battle wanting to hang on to them for selfish reasons. Yet, I would not want to see them in such pain. I know this is how my children see me sometimes. In my situation,(of living with my injury and pain) I struggle with wishing that she had killed me and being thankful for just being alive even if it means living in pain just for my children and grandchildren. When it comes to animals like a rabbit I feel much the same. I do NOT like to see anyone suffer in pain. You really do have a way of making us think don't you?!
It is sometimes hard to know what would be a relief. -Jayne
Oh no! No! I don't want these choices. Stop, wake up.
Can we just have a do-over? If so, then the little rabbit could just miss the trap. There.
please dont ask that question
it's too close to home
but what a piece of writing
really quite amazing
ah, but if i had never been caught in the trap, would i be who i am today? or if i had never stumbled upon him in the woods, would i ever have realised it?
That is so why I hate trapping. It would be okay, I guess, if it was a clean kill every time. But when it's not...
Great piece, Brian.
What is 10DOM?
An animal lover, I have a very hard time with stories like this.
I don't know what 10dom means. Perhaps I should find out some other time...
bunny killer!
beautifully written
Ohhhhh. Can you see me? I'm making my "poor little thing" face.
Ack...not good timing while my pet rabbit is laying under my chair!
Ack! Poor Bambi!!!!
jj
Awesome. THIS is one of your best.
Being freed. Things are too different after you've been bitten, maybe uncomfortable. Just stick a fork in me!
Good question. We don't always get what we want, and the instinct for survival is a strong one.....
As much as I love animals, those cute little rabbits are a garden nuisance and they multiply so fast. So I suppose that is why I applauded the efforts of my tiny dachshund when she found a nest of baby rabbits and proceeded to kill them one by one. We call her Emmy, the Rabbit Slayer.....all 6 lbs of her!
It's sad that things die. It's wonderful that they get a response. Thanks for bringing some color into my white hell- not a fan of winter. Great post!!!
I'm just gonna say it...
Rabbit is good eatin'.
I read Watership Down..it's a happy ending!! :-D
Very touching in a somber way.
Namaste
Poor bunny. Afterwards, though, sauteed in a nice creamy mustard sauce... mmm, mmm.
Fear in shattered color - that is so very true. Fear is never colorless.
I hope you are having a nice Wednesday.;)
Zuzana
as usual, starts off in a shadow and ends in the full light of day...nice writing.
Where's Disney when you need them? I think Beth has the right, in-denial idea.
Truly the thought of these poor tortured critters and minds makes my insides churn.
no! how sad! and so real. but that's how you write... the words seem to sink right through...
oh gosh what did you do?
whew you evicerate with words! I feel these words in my soul!
Well done!!!
oh that hurts Brian, I'm hoping it will reach the right eyes...do they not know the pain they inflict...your writing hurts and I'm glad...
I'm not afraid of death, just dying x
A sad tale, but sometimes life is like that...
Alas poor rabbit, there is likely no good answer to this dilemma. How sad.
We've had rabbits living in our yard for years.. I'm OK with that- traps aren't sporting..
Fear is the driver regardless if set free to see if he can heal or not. Twitch...twitch. Good writing.
Again you paint a vivid picture with your words. You never cease to amaze me. Merry Christmas my friend. :)
time heals all wounds. i'd rather have the time to heal. wounds in our lives bring us wisdom (hopefully) and give us character. the feeling of having been trapped and being free again teaches an invaluable lesson. and makes us relish life all the more, i think. beautifully written. at first i thought it might be a fox and i was reminded of that kate bush tune, runnin up that hill. (or else i just feel like that fox with its heart beating too quickly these days.)
Lovely, terrible images, I will be back to read more. Hope you and your family have a very merry Christmas.
Yet another beautiful piece of work! There is always something deeper that what is on the surface of your writing. I think that is what I like the most.
Sounds like hearts are beating faster and faster over here... poor rabbit....
The Bach
oh gosh how sad....
Stop it! You know how I am about suffering animals!
This reminds me of Ginny's blog...she recently had a little fox that visited her yard daily and she saw that it had 1/2 of its leg chewed off....the little fella must have either been shot or caught in a trap and chewed it off...he is doing well now walking on only 3 legs.
Life finds a way..................
Poor lil sad littl rabbit. . . . those traps are mean!!!!
HO HO HO! Merry Christmas from me and Otin!
Oh, God. I think the people who set those steel traps are sadistic.
What a dilemma! Well written and any way you look at it, that poor little rabbit will twitch!
Wishing you and your family a wonderful Merry Christmas!
Yikes. Poor rabbit.
I must have missed this in my blog switching! here reading old 10th Daughter's.
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