Friday, November 27, 2009

Subject 243

Consciousness floats out of the ether, my moment of awakening to the world around me, framed in misty clouds, pulling me back toward.... I can't really remember. Men in white coats. Cold shiny metal, slick beneath my fingers. Numb pressure above my eyes where I can not see. I try to speak, only my mouth flops open, wet drool leaking down my cheek.

Subject 243 seems to be coming around, increase the...

Through a glass wall, I watch as they watch, taking notes on tacky cornered pages of their notebooks. My fingers probe the seam that now runs around my head, stopping at the protrusion in the back, round and hard with a long finger extending from inside. This was not here before. Who am I? What are they doing to me?

Thwack! Pain, in my arm...

Shaved. Every hair is now gone, down to those that resided on my toes. I am truly naked before them now as they take notes. Their questions are simple, yet I can not force the words from my lips beyond garbled grunts. I see the words like a picture show across my brain, though my lens is cracked. Excitement registers on their faces as little red lights blink across machines that lead back to the thick cable now attached to my head. If only my fingers could reach the clasp on the leather straps before they...

shock me...

Toys. Maybe once I played with these. Now in the recess of night, I ponder how to manipulate them into a viable means of escape. The trick is not to leave any of them obviously damaged when the shade rises in the morning and the note taking begins. My skin feel like waves of ants marching across, sampling my flesh with their mandibles. They smear lotion with their blue gloved hands each day, watching red continents develop across the map of my body. Ah, an axle from a toy car pries loose, tucking it firmly in my cheek as the day begins. Strange, the vents seem to be leaking some sort of smoke...

I am sorry sir, but due to lack of cognitive results we will be terminating all subjects assigned to this project. Burn all the carcasses, we will be confiscating all files to be put on record at the secure facility in Arizona. Have all your staff prepare to be thoroughly examined prior to closure of the laboratory. They will be re-signing non-disclosure agreements and any communication considered hostile to continued profitability of the company will be aggressively pursued with force.

This is the last voice I hear as they roll me across the sterile expanse of their workspace, if only I could speak...would they consider me such an animal...



So, this one is fiction, maybe. I don't often go there, but had a little fun just free writing over the holiday. I blame it on the meds and the Stephen King book I am reading. Hope you enjoy.

Have a great weekend everyone!

57 comments:

otin said...

Awesome stuff! You know I am all about fiction!

You never know about stories like this? A little reality may not be a stretch!

I need to know which King book you are reading! LOL

Wings said...

Great stuff. Fiction can be freeing, too. :)

Monkey Man said...

Brian,
Great story. All area 51 ish.

Daniel said...

Hmmm, this one bothers me. The cognitive functions are working, but the communication center is down. Kind of like the recent story about the man in a supposed coma for 20+ years who was awake the whole time but couldn't communicate. Skin crawling ... mouth drying ... need water ...

Captain Dumbass said...

Good story. Keep it up.

Brian Miller said...

beyond just the wicked fun of playing with fiction, it does go deeper to the respect we have or do not have for those living creatures that do not communicate, in our language...or maybe even other cultures...hmmm....

Jen of A2eatwrite said...

Yeah, I kept thinking of animals in science experiments and this one freaked me out a little too much. OTOH, I guess you brought it to life, then.

Donnetta Lee said...

Wow. I enjoyed it, Brian. Thinking stream. Also enjoyed the 55er. How true. How true. D

Brian Miller said...

jen, my wife had the same response...actually she said she liked the romantic guy better than the creepy guy...lucky i am not on the couch tonight. lol.

Alicia @ boylerpf said...

So the poor guy had a lobotomy...always wondered what that would be like! I just read some of your last posts...sorry about the poison oak, although I am secretly giggling. Sometimes we get our just desserts for having fun!
Happy weekend, Brian!

Ronda Laveen said...

Yes, if only...

Sometimes we are so arrogant that there are beings whose communication skills are far greater than ours. We think we have that market cornered. Sadly, we are mistaken.

Great non-fiction fiction.

AngelMay said...

Very interesting, Brian. Animal lover here... so a little unnerved - but then, that was the point, no?

A.Decker said...

You may give them a little credit, not blame! ;-)

This is good, and I wouldn't have thought that you were simply having "... a little fun just free writing."
You may have made contact with someone from a parallel dimension. ;-D

enchantedoak said...

This one was really wacky and I wanted it to go on.

Bubbie said...

Wow - you kept me wanting to read on. . from the first line. Good storytelling. (Thanks for your comment on mine. Wish I could just 'message' that to you like on FB. Anyway, appreciated the empathy.)

Ekanthapadhikan said...

That was an amazing read. Fiction needs craft and you have just that and enough!

Candie Bracci said...

Meds and Stephen King what a great combination!;)I did enjoy it!

Lorraine said...

Macabre Much, you scared me and made me feel so lonely...You're AWEsome, more Dean Koontz than Stephen King, why, well they're both really awesome writers, but Dean Koontz makes you really care about the characters, much more so than Stephen King...you get not only scared but very sad too...

Tom said...

nice...i was just thinking of spending time free writing this weekend, or putting up the Christmas lights (ugh). Some of the best stuff comes out from the ends of our fingers...i think they know the way!

Helen McGinn said...

X-files meets Toy Story moment for me there....trust me, that's a good thing...*L*
Nice to meet you.

Protege said...

I find that it is very difficult to write fiction; to describe ones own experience and real events in life is so much easier.
You did this one very well - again!
Have a great Saturday.
:)

the walking man said...

I have been terminated as a test subject, I didn't mind though. now that they think I am gone, they simply leave me the hell alone.

Bachelor said...

Brian,
Great creative writing here. You made me want to hear what else happened! I would think thought processes would still continue.
Hey! Happy Thanksgiving Weekend!
The Bach

Kimi@SoManyKidsSoLittleTime said...

Impressive. I got chills just like when I'm reading a King book.

Madame DeFarge said...

Great read. Like your experiments in fiction.

Kathy's Klothesline said...

You are too young to remember The Twilight Zone.......

TechnoBabe said...

Is the Stephen King book you read his latest one, "Under The Dome"? Hubby just read that one, checked it out from the library. We own all the other Stephen King books. His is truly the KING, good name for him to have isn't it?

Betsy said...

Ack!

slouchy said...

Creepy, and compelling.

Pseudonymous High School Teacher said...

Scary stuff Brian. maybe scarier as I have been in and out of migraine mode all weekend.

your writing always amazes me.

Green-Eyed Momster said...

Hope you'll be done with your meds soon. This one is scary!
Smiles!!

Auntie, aka Coco's Mom said...

Good Lord Brian,
It's been a long time since I stopped by your blog. I always knew you to be sensitive soul, but your writing just blew me away.
*applause*

Thom said...

Thank you for your great comment again. I responded this way in case you don't see it:

Thank you my friend. I would include you in the congratulations for finding it on my post going up later tonight, but I don’t think that would be fair since I had to bring it up. But I really do appreciate your comment

Tall Kay said...

Reading Stephen King always leaves me with dark imaginative thoughts for days. I think I will carry this one too. Scary stuff Brian.

Pat said...

Wow - freakish! With a Twilight Zonish/Stephen Kingish touch! Enjoyed it!

The Retired One said...

Pretty scary, Brian...but it was fun peeking into that sci-fi creative side of your brain for a change. ha

Beth said...

Oh, this was good! As always, your descriptives are amazing.

tori said...

I do likie...tempted to tell you to take some more meds and read some more King...

Lisa (aka LadyWanderlust) said...

Oh, this sounds like it could be a book. You grabbed me and reeled me in. Great job. :) Lisa

Jasmine said...

Such powerful imagery conjurring so many different vivid images.

At first i thought a trip to the dentist, then alien aduction, then, 'oh, he'll swim faster now', then electro shock therapy and maybe one flew over the cuckoo's nest before resting with vivisection. eatly asking the question 'does the end justify the means?'. Humas often lack humanity.

Joanna Jenkins said...

You are really good at this Brian. More please!

jj

lettuce said...

fiction and probably science fiction?

good stuff

Life with Kaishon said...

I kind of like your fiction : ) Stephen King will totally make you change your style! Even if it is just for the weekend! : )

Valerie said...

Brian, I really enjoyed that. You're a real craftsman and you can't blame Stephen King for that. Well done!

buffalodick said...

As I age, I tend to prefer fiction in movies, and non-fiction in writings...go figure!

Stacy (the Random Cool Chick) said...

Brilliant, Brian! I was secretly hoping it wasn't based on real life! ;)

Rain said...

LOL, I often write some very intense and creedy stuff after I've read some scary books or taken meds, lol....seriously though, that's quite a setting you created. Disturbing, very good writing Brian!
:)

Brian Miller said...

sorry been awol traveling over the last day...catching up today! thanks for the love all!

...mmm... said...

You knpw what this actauyl makes me think of, Brian, beyond just animals? My mind goes to that poor soul who was diagnosed as a vegetable for 23 years when in fact he was fully conscious but completely paralyzed. thanks god they didn't pull a Terry Shiavo court order on him! how awful indeed.

I do hope you had a brill Thanksgiving. Get ready to make room for the Tea coming up. Will you be wearing bow tie and tails or what?

Cinnamon said...

Stephen King is dark- a great writer though.
This is excellent. Points to the abuse of power towards those with mental health problems. Reminded me of witnessing ECT.

Rose Marie Raccioppi said...

"I blame it on the meds and the Stephen King book I am reading. Hope you enjoy."

"enjoy" defined as: "take delight or pleasure in" - no "moved" as: "change or cause to change from one state, opinion, sphere, or activity to another." Yes, Brian a moving piece...

kys said...

This one freaked me out a little bit. It's good though.

Kulio said...

Super cool and creepy! Have you read Stephen Kin's "On Writing"? you must!

Calli said...

Free writing in a wonderful way!
...Very creative, Brian!

Have a great week also~
Calli

JML said...

BRIAN! I really enjoyed this one. A lot. What Stephen King book are you reading?

Liza said...

"if only I could speak...would they consider me such an animal..."
That, is AWESOME.
Great piece.
Thanks for sharing.

rxBambi said...

I totally agree with the other comments but that was really good. As a scientist we, of course, had to sacrifice (pc way of saying 'kill') many animals. It's very sad, you just hope that something to benefit mankind results.
Great story, and I kinda like creepy guy...