through glass
darkly,
his eyes
gleem,
rekindling spirits,
older
than time,
as
he slogs
through
amber seas
one
more time
seeking...
numb solace
and
easy burn
of
liquid grace
washing
his pain
away,
falling for
lies
he told
himself
too many
times...
broken shards
leak
yellow-brown
tears
as he
takes
two steps
on
bended knees.
Tell a story in 55 words. Want to give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.
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As for myself, I love Killian's Red.
Beautiful. And meaningful.
*hic*
alix, all i can do is smile.
Yeah, another that I can resonate with. Now on bend on two knees for a different reason ~ much healthier and far more spiritual. Loved it as always.
Mine is up.
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You always use your 55 words so powerfully. I'm in awe.
-smarmoofus
chef, right there with you...and that is the image i was going for in the last lines...
smarmoofus, ty.
That is obviously a hard place to be. I give anyone my full respect who has been able to overcome situations like this, and anyone who is fighting through it, my full support!
Oh boy. I've had alcoholic friends; how you managed all this in just 55 words amazes me!
Beautiful and difficult too.
i love the way you weave a tale with your incredible use of words.
it's a talent........that we all get to enjoy...
Oh Brian - what you can accomplish with a mere 55 words. Moving.
numb solace...beautiful...just beautiful. Are you sure you aren't Irish? LOL Happy 55!
I'll be up at midnight.
*sigh* What a tale you tell in only 55 words. This was some strong STUFF. :-)
Kind of been there, though I didn't hit the bottom. Dry for more than 1 year. The Lord caught me before I fell too far.
Well written 55 words. Sad.
numb solace
and
easy burn
of
liquid grace
washing
his pain
away,
"numb solace and easy burn of liquid grace washing his pain
away.." Brian, you tell the story so well. You amaze me with your way with words.
A tough place to be staring at that cool amber liquid..and the last few words on bended knees is more likely where the answer will be. Always a great 55!
The whole thing was very powerful. And I TOO loved the numb solace. I don't even drink - never have. . .but the burning of the drink washing his pain away.. I felt it.
The last sentence startled me and once again, painted a picture.
Thank you for inspiring.
Your poetry is always soulful. It's a pleasure to come visit...and dinner is at 1:45 on Thursday...don't be late.
Sandi
Well...That was brilliant!
Great imagry...Perfect 55!
Thank You Brian for adding such a touch of class to the Friday Funfest. Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G
I think I like these 55's the best!
Painfully vivid. Excellent.
Been there and done that.
Just like Chef Kar, I'm now on bended knees too, but in prayer.
Loved your 55.
PG
Those days are long behind me. :)
Not much of a drinker any more. (Thank goodness.) Back in the day my bended knees were in front of the toilet I was heaving in. (Thank goodness I didn't find a snake then!)
Great 55...looking forward to next week.
Amber seas and numb solace really paint the picture. Great 55!
Woah. That hurt.
Again a great 55, love the play on words. So vivid felt like I was sitting at the bar, and the knee thing, yep, been doing a lot of praying lately. Have a great weekend.
Mine is up.
So much meaning in so few words. Excellently done.
I admire those who can write poetry... And you do it so very well with only 55 words.
You should be published.
:))
nice brian always nice and always so many commenters which means good reads.
Mine is up also.
Kingfisher
I pity the person in your post, I feel sorry for his broken life and hope he can pick himself up again
Whatever gets you through the night, will kill you in the morning...well said Brian :)
Moving piece, Brian. Liquid grace...so sad and true.
That, my fellow fiction 55'r, is ever so powerful.
Mine's posted HERE if you'd like to visit. Just scroll down below my Friday's Show n Tell.
Happy weekend to you and yours.
A fine choice of 55 words. Far better than some people do with 10 times as many.
You did it again Brian!
brian, this is gripping. harsh. and terrifyingly true. thank goodness for the end...
"falling for the lies he told himself one more time"...I can sooo relate! You described the pain very well. Thank God there is a way out through A.A! :o)
beautiful.
Leaving the security of the lies and giving it up to face truth is so hard. You write about such a harsh reality in such few words. My hat is off to you!
WoW
That's a prayer.
Beautifully written in just 55. As alwyas!
WEll done!
You mean after all these years I could just be washing pain away? Damn...learned something new again today.
Excellent 55 as always, Brian
vivid -- strong -- extremely well done!
smiles,
What a poet in 55 words.
This week I abandon poetry for sex. My 55 is up.
Falling for lies he told himself to many times...how often we do that!
Great thought provoking poem!
Your words are hauntingly beautiful. Yet wierdly make me wht a scotch neat.
Great imagery, Brian, makes me both want and fear a drink....
Beautiful ending!
Surrender. Yup. Great 55. My 55 is HERE.
Nicely done!
I followed you from VE's place.
Do you also have gnomes?
*smile*
A message 55. Well done.
Very good 55. You conjure up amazing pictures.
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This is my first visit Brian. I found you through Bonnie's blog.
Your 55 is a winner. I really liked it!
Thanks for a great visit~
Calli
Brian you are indeed an artist! Wonderful!
I'm afraid that I'm SO not a "drinker" that I didn't even get it at all until I read the comments. This is not to say that I don't take a social drink once in a while... I do. I have just never thought much about "drink" in that fashion. I guess I'm lucky. Very nice, Brian... Now that I know what was going on. ;o)
sorry i have not been around much today, something bit me on the eye brow last night and the right side of my face is very reminiscent of quasimoto! better now...off to read!
WOW...what a powerful 55. Very well done and in only 55 words. Fantastic :) Have a great Friday and weekend ahead :)
Great 55. I have 10 years sobriety.
That's one powerful 55, Brian! Killer words.
Smiles!
way to go ofira!
green eyed, nice story today yourself!
Powerful!
This is an incredible piece Brian.
Brian,
How you manage to convey so much thought and feeling in a mere 55 words just boggles my mind. Wow! Bravo!
Powerful and beautiful, Brian. I liked the image of "slogging though amber seas"
you make me question my writing capabilities,lol...no i'm being serious.
much love
Just loved the flow...amber seas...numb solace...liquid grace..made me read this couple of times.Great 55.
A very powerful piece. You always paint such incredible imagery with your words.
god you are so talented. when you're rich and famous will you still be my bloggy buddy?
never at a lose for words... always captivating!
very romantic, i think. a sailor and his love for the sea. great 55, mine is up too.
Wow, nicely done. I could identify.
Superb!
Such a cunning and baffling disease . . .
Well done, Obi-One
You are amazing and that was just very well done. I hope you have a fantastic Thanksgiving. I am four days late at posting but its up
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